Reviewer: PlanetMight88 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 29 2025 10:49 PM Title: PART 34

Looks like Donnica and the Sisterhood will have issues. I wonder how many people will shrink in the Final wave. 

Given how many Tinies we seen killed in the story and poor conditions they live in, it won’t surprise me if most or all are gone in a few years…

Author's Response:

Yeah, the tinies definitely live in rough conditions... at least outside The Kingdom.

That point about them all disappearing is really interesting though. Makes me wonder what their fate is going to be.

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 28 2025 7:02 PM Title: PART 33

What an incredible chapter, and this final segment is the perfect culmination! It’s time for the dinner between Celine and Helena, teased in the second segment, and it delivers in every way.

It starts with a Cinderella-like setup, but instead of a fairy godmother, we have five tiny women supervised by Lorelei, tasked with making Celine absolutely flawless for the dinner. She has to be pristine from head to toe, and they ensure no detail is overlooked, Lorelei won’t let anything slip. When Lorelei is satisfied with the result, Celine is placed inside the globe.

This part is so much fun; I love the military vibe, with Lorelei’s cold, calm demeanor, a mix of an army general and a surgeon. Another small detail I enjoy is Celine recognizing Lorelei’s origin just by her accent, showcasing her vast knowledge. This preparation scene reminds me of Rebecca’s for the princess pageant, with Lorelei acting like Scarlett but without our favorite redhead’s warmth.

The attention to detail is phenomenal, you think of everything, helping us visualize it all, from the poor Celine being treated like a living doll to the five tiny women working under Lorelei’s watchful eye, to the dress and jewelry. It’s absolutely perfect. But a dinner needs two people, and now it’s time for Helena. While we don’t see her preparation, her arrival is breathtaking, you nailed the royal vibe.

Before the guest of honor appears, we get an intriguing and chilling description of the dinner bowl. Though we don’t yet know its contents, we can guess it’s tiny people, offered as sacrifice for the perfect body of Helena. And then she arrives. Everything around Helena feels so staged, so artificial she’s playing the role she was born to embody: a queen.

Even at dinner, she isn’t hungry; she eats the tiny people because protocol demands it, not out of desire. The dinner scene is fascinating because every Vore moment in this story is unique. If Victoria’s was about revenge and Annie’s was to prove something to Trevor, this one is cold and detached, it’s just food to Helena, a meal she doesn’t even consider. I love how you kept it minimal, giving just enough detail for us to savor it. But this dinner isn’t about the “food”; it’s about Helena’s guest, the perfect Celine.

No matter how hard Helena tries, she can control Celine’s body but not her soul, Celine is far from broken, and Helena can’t accept that. She tries to dominate her by demanding a dance performance, but Celine’s perfection backfires on her. Celine’s flawless dance stirs Helena’s insecurities, reminding her that Celine has always been better. Helena, meant to be a goddess, is reduced to a mere spectator. I loved the moment where Helena eats the tiny people with her wine, lacking any class, it’s a rare glimpse of her natural self, unpolished by the act she puts on for everyone.

This crack in Helena’s armor doesn’t go unnoticed by Celine. Though she planned to play the good girl tonight, she can’t resist exploiting the opportunity to strike at Helena. I absolutely loved this part, Celine targets Helena’s vulnerabilities with precision, and Helena struggles to maintain her facade but fails.

You can feel the shift in their dynamic: Helena, introduced as an unstoppable goddess, becomes the insecure little girl again, while Celine emerges as the stronger one. It reminds me of the early chapters’ dynamic between Amber and Rebecca, where Rebecca’s experience as an adult gave her an edge despite the size difference. Here, though, both are grown women, and Helena is outwardly successful, but deep down, she’s still a lonely, scared little girl Who don’t know what love is (maybe she should spend time with Annie listening to Foreigner!).

 Celine knows this and expertly targets Helena’s imposter syndrome. Despite her outward success, Helena feels inadequate, and Celine exposes that. At this moment, Celine wins. Helena isn’t the goddess, she pretends to be, she’s the sad, lonely girl, who need to be shielded by Celine’s strength like before. Finally, Helena drops the act, revealing her true self, and I loved that so much. I really like Helena and hope she’ll find happiness in the future, stop pretending, and discover real love.

Her confession, “That’s because I’m all alone…” the trembling colossus whimpered, almost inaudibly, broke my heart.

Celine’s reaction reminds me of Rebecca’s refusal to deliver the final blow to Amber. Instead of destroying Helena, Celine sees the young, vulnerable friend she once knew and shows kindness. But Helena, true to form, puts her mask back on, too late, though, because Celine has already won. In true Helena fashion, she resorts to what she can control: the weak, the tiny people meant to be eaten. I loved how the poor lady becomes collateral damage in the tension between these two women,it’s perfect, and that moment is hot, lol.

The dinner ends with Helena ordering one of her girls to take Celine to her bedroom for punishment, showing her desperation to use her only leverage, her size, since she can’t win with words she have to rely on her size. With a broken glass of wine, this amazing chapter concludes.

What a phenomenal chapter, and this final segment completes it perfectly. I love the parallels with Amber and Rebecca, and as I said in my review of the second segment, Amber and Helena are so similar. I hope Amber chooses Rebecca over Donnica and doesn’t end up like Helena, forced to live a lie her whole life. Celine remains an incredible character, I’d love for her to meet Rebecca, though I’m not sure if it’d end in a bloodbath or a fast friendship. Finally, I adore Helena in this chapter. Seeing her true face behind the mask and armor she always wears is amazing.

Author's Response:

"It starts with a Cinderella-like setup, but instead of a fairy godmother, we have five tiny women supervised by Lorelei, tasked with making Celine absolutely flawless for the dinner. She has to be pristine from head to toe, and they ensure no detail is overlooked, Lorelei won’t let anything slip. When Lorelei is satisfied with the result, Celine is placed inside the globe."

I absolutely love you calling it an inverse Cinderella setup! Instead of a fairy godmother and her helpers, it’s five tiny slaves doing the prep… such a great comparison, and it really captures the strange, twisted magic of that scene. It was so much fun to write it that way!

 

"This part is so much fun; I love the military vibe, with Lorelei’s cold, calm demeanor, a mix of an army general and a surgeon. Another small detail I enjoy is Celine recognizing Lorelei’s origin just by her accent, showcasing her vast knowledge. This preparation scene reminds me of Rebecca’s for the princess pageant, with Lorelei acting like Scarlett but without our favorite redhead’s warmth."

I was hoping people would catch that! Celine is so sharp, she picks out exactly where in Germany Lorelei is from just by her English accent… she misses nothing. And I love that you caught the callback to the princess pageant prep with Scarlett and Rebecca, except now it’s this dark, inverted version. Celine isn’t getting dressed up for fun or glory, she’s being made perfect for Helena’s pleasure.

 

"Before the guest of honor appears, we get an intriguing and chilling description of the dinner bowl. Though we don’t yet know its contents, we can guess it’s tiny people, offered as sacrifice for the perfect body of Helena. And then she arrives. Everything around Helena feels so staged, so artificial she’s playing the role she was born to embody: a queen."

Yeah, preparing Celine was just one side of the setup… the other was Helena’s arrival, her grand entrance that shifts the whole mood. It wouldn’t have landed right if I hadn’t focused on both sides of the scene. From your description, I think the contrast between Celine’s meticulous prep and Helena’s effortless dominance worked just the way I wanted.

 

"Even at dinner, she isn’t hungry; she eats the tiny people because protocol demands it, not out of desire. The dinner scene is fascinating because every Vore moment in this story is unique. If Victoria’s was about revenge and Annie’s was to prove something to Trevor, this one is cold and detached, it’s just food to Helena, a meal she doesn’t even consider. I love how you kept it minimal, giving just enough detail for us to savor it. But this dinner isn’t about the “food”; it’s about Helena’s guest, the perfect Celine."

I honestly hadn’t noticed that pattern until you pointed it out, but you’re absolutely right! Every vore scene so far has had its own distinct flavor… revenge for Victoria, a lashing out for Annie, and here with Helena it’s just cold, clinical ritual. She doesn’t even care about the act; it’s just something she’s expected to do. I’m glad you appreciated the more restrained detail, letting the atmosphere and the focus on Celine take center stage. Vore isn’t usually my main thing, but I’m having more and more fun with it as the story goes on, especially when it lets me dig into these shifting dynamics. Thanks so much for noticing!

 

"No matter how hard Helena tries, she can control Celine’s body but not her soul, Celine is far from broken, and Helena can’t accept that. She tries to dominate her by demanding a dance performance, but Celine’s perfection backfires on her. Celine’s flawless dance stirs Helena’s insecurities, reminding her that Celine has always been better. Helena, meant to be a goddess, is reduced to a mere spectator. I loved the moment where Helena eats the tiny people with her wine, lacking any class, it’s a rare glimpse of her natural self, unpolished by the act she puts on for everyone."

That’s exactly what I wanted! I needed a moment where Celine, forced to submit, could actually flip the power dynamic. The idea of her dancing and entrancing Helena (making the goddess lose her composure) was the perfect pivot. And Helena eating the tiny “just to chew on something” really drove home how unpolished and rattled she became. I’m so glad that resonated.

 

"You can feel the shift in their dynamic: Helena, introduced as an unstoppable goddess, becomes the insecure little girl again, while Celine emerges as the stronger one. It reminds me of the early chapters’ dynamic between Amber and Rebecca, where Rebecca’s experience as an adult gave her an edge despite the size difference. Here, though, both are grown women, and Helena is outwardly successful, but deep down, she’s still a lonely, scared little girl Who don’t know what love is (maybe she should spend time with Annie listening to Foreigner!)."

That Foreigner line killed me haha! You’re right… maybe she should listen to ‘I Want To Know What Love is’! And you’re dead-on with the comparison to Amber and Rebecca’s early dynamic. There’s that same subversion of who really holds the power, except Celine and Helena have a much longer, sharper history as rivals and, maybe, something more. The “hate” here is deeply lived-in and complicated. And as you said, there’s that sense Helena still doesn’t know what love really is, for all her power.

 

"Celine knows this and expertly targets Helena’s imposter syndrome. Despite her outward success, Helena feels inadequate, and Celine exposes that. At this moment, Celine wins. Helena isn’t the goddess, she pretends to be, she’s the sad, lonely girl, who need to be shielded by Celine’s strength like before. Finally, Helena drops the act, revealing her true self, and I loved that so much. I really like Helena and hope she’ll find happiness in the future, stop pretending, and discover real love. Her confession, “That’s because I’m all alone…” the trembling colossus whimpered, almost inaudibly, broke my heart."

That was such a big moment for Helena… seeing her let the mask drop, even just for a second. Up to now she’s mostly been this force of nature, but here you see the heartbreak, the isolation underneath. I really wanted to write her as someone deeply vulnerable, and I’m glad it came through so strongly.

 

"Celine’s reaction reminds me of Rebecca’s refusal to deliver the final blow to Amber. Instead of destroying Helena, Celine sees the young, vulnerable friend she once knew and shows kindness. But Helena, true to form, puts her mask back on, too late, though, because Celine has already won. In true Helena fashion, she resorts to what she can control: the weak, the tiny people meant to be eaten. I loved how the poor lady becomes collateral damage in the tension between these two women,it’s perfect, and that moment is hot, lol."

I love that you remember those earlier moments… like Rebecca refusing to twist the knife into Amber when she could have. It’s different here, but the principle is the same: Celine sees through the hate and dominance, finds the scared girl she used to care about, and offers real empathy. But Helena can’t accept it, not for long anyway, so she lashes out at the only thing she can still control. Her eating the tiny at the end was her desperate attempt to reassert her power. I’m glad it came off as both brutal and hot!

 

"What a phenomenal chapter, and this final segment completes it perfectly. I love the parallels with Amber and Rebecca, and as I said in my review of the second segment, Amber and Helena are so similar. I hope Amber chooses Rebecca over Donnica and doesn’t end up like Helena, forced to live a lie her whole life. Celine remains an incredible character, I’d love for her to meet Rebecca, though I’m not sure if it’d end in a bloodbath or a fast friendship. Finally, I adore Helena in this chapter. Seeing her true face behind the mask and armor she always wears is amazing."

Celine and Rebecca meeting would be incredible… and it could go any way! They’d probably get along until Celine started teasing Trevor, and then all bets are off.

I’m also thrilled with how Helena came out in this chapter. So thanks for pointing that out! She started monstrous in the second segment, but by the end of the third we saw something vulnerable, complicated, almost relatable. It’s a fetish piece at the end of the day, so cruelty rules, but it’s those flashes of something real underneath that make it all so much more satisfying to write.

Thanks so much for the review, as always… I loved this one!

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: September 27 2025 7:31 AM Title: PART 33

Oh fuck.

Even before I read those last few lines of S3, from the moment Annabel made it back to her desk, I was worried about Rebecca. With that line about "an outside force," any doubt I had that Annie and Rebecca's paths were destined to cross melted away.

I now have zero doubt that Annie is going to find out about Rebecca and very little doubt that Annie is going to take Rebecca. Annabel is just too thorough, too competent not to figure this out, and once she does, so many interesting possibilities open up.

With so many new characters entering the fold, including several tinies, is a shock death coming? Or might Annabel find a reason to take Rebecca back to her workshop? And maybe most importantly, how would Naomi feel about all this if she saw Rebecca in one of those cages (because I have no doubt that she'd recognize Rebecca right away)?

I won't dig too deep into speculation about how this arc merger might go down (although I do have my theories and suspicions), but the possibility of the Amber/Rebecca and Annie/Naomi arcs merging is as exciting as it is nerve-wracking .

I'm not surprised that Annabel has taken it upon herself to solve Donnica's "Amber problem," though. I've always felt that Annie wasn't just some devoted stooge but rather someone willing to do whatever it takes to make her master (or Trevor, for that matter) happy, even if they didn't ask her to do it. Even if they didn't want her to do it. Even if they told her not to do it. If she thinks it's in the best interest of the two most important people in her life (although I'm guessing that Naomi is worming her way up that list as well, especially if she's willing to let Naomi get away with killing expendables like that), she's going to do it. She's going to become whatever it is that they need her to be.

And we saw that in the middle of the segment. Annabel started off professional, something Donnica took as her demanding forgiveness, when really I think she was just respecting what Donnica wanted from her. Then, after being invited to the family dinner (which should be fun!), she slipped into her routine of worshipping her goddess-mother. She allowed herself to ask Donnica what was wrong, something I'm sure she noticed as soon as she set foot into Donnica's office.

And then, when Donnica needed her to, Annabel took charge of the conversation.

Annie calling her Donnica instead of goddss-mother or Ms. Cernovich was her talking to Donnica as an equal, as her true self just wanting to help someone she cares about. I thought that was such a cool moment. We hadn't seen that out of Annie before, and it fit my theory that Annabel would do whatever is required of her to make Donnica (and, again, I believe this applies to Trevor as well) happy. Their happiness is her happiness. 

Now, unfortunately, she gave Donnica some really, really bad advice. She just can't accept the possibility that Donnica might actually be at fault here, so she assumes that the problem lies with Amber (as we saw at the end of the segment). This is particularly frustrating for two reasons:

1. Donnica was actually starting to figure it out on her own. She at least knew that she fucked up when she argued with Amber about her major and future as a whole in front of the dean and company. That was her getting on the right track for once.

2. Annie knows this is Donnica's fault (knowing and accepting are two separate things, so I don't think I contradicted myself here). She stated in the narrative outright that she knew that Donnica was keeping Amber at arms length (I'm not 100 percent sure that Donnica ever realized this), yet she's still looking to "fix" Amber rather than help Donnica face some hard truths about herself. She truly wants to help her master, but she's too devoted to do what actually needs to be done.

Back to Donnica being on the right track for a moment. She was really having a profound thought; she finally noticed that Amber felt about her the way Donnica felt about her own parents. The cold look, the distance, the rebellious spirit and wanting to take time before (maybe) going to college (I was surprised to hear that Donnica went through the same thing, but it makes sense, given how she was raised).

Donnica tried so hard to escape her parents' legacy, but she couldn't do it. She was too beholden to the lessons they taught her. She understood why Amber wanted to take time after high school, but she felt her dismissing that idea was her passing on a lesson she "learned" (I don't think she actually took that time herself) to save her daughter from making a mistake. The logic makes sense, but the execution makes her exactly like her parents. It actually felt as though Donnica was on the cusp of fully realizing this and maybe salvaging her relationship with Amber.

Then Annie showed up and assured Donnica that everything she was doing with Amber was just fine, that the college tours trip  (that Amber doesn't want to go on) was a good idea. That Donnica was a good mother when, in many ways, she hasn't been.

I love Annie, but this was tough to see her do! I'm now left wondering how far Donnica would have gotten on her own without that misguided reassurance.

Oh, and since we've circled back to Annie, I absolutely loved that she thought of Amber as Donnica's biological daughter. Because, as I think I've said before, the irony of this situation is that, if Donnica just treated Amber the way she treats Annabel, everything would be good between them. Donnica puts too much pressure on herself to guide Amber in the right direction, to protect her, even from herself. With Annabel, she just sees someone who loves her. Someone who has some issues with which Donnica can relate and wants to help her with. Someone that she can trust and confide in, show her true self to, like she does with Trevor (as we saw here, although I still say the way she does it for Annie is different than the way she does it for Trevor).

But yeah, it was really heartwarming to see Donnica open up to Annie like that. When she called Annie "sweetheart" my heart melted a little bit!

Going back to the beginning of the segment, it was interesting to see how Donnica's trip to the Kingdom has affected her. I was delighted to see John Turner again, and it was so lovely meeting his wife! I'm curious if we'll see the end result of Donnica's little imprinting experiment, as well as what she plans to do with the "data" she gathers from it once it (surely) succeeds.

And again, we see the difference between Helena and Donnica here. In S2, Helena reveled in making her former rivals and enemies suffer. But even though it's made clear that Donnica bares a grudge against the Turners, she seemed much more clinical about what she was doing. She wasn't reveling in making them suffer now. That was only a means to an end. She wanted those two to worship her with reverence rather than fear, and while the way they treated her before made the thought of that sweeter, it didn't really seem to draw out the same sense of sadism that it did for Helena.

Of course, there's also the fact that Donnica wants her hated tinies be imprinted, while Helena wants them to remain uninitiated and fully able to suffer her wrath under the guise of ritual.

Then there were her thoughts on the Kingdom and Helena. I love how suspicious she is of Helena, knowing that Helena didn't show Donnica that stuff for her benefit but for Helena's own. Donnica is quite clever (when her emotions haven't gotten the best of her), and it's awesome to see her actively trying to figure out what Helena isn't telling her. This could also be a cool test of the Sisterhood's reach; will they be tipped off that Donnica is calling in favors trying to find out about them (even if she doesn't know that's what she's doing)? Or will Donnica get the inside scoop without them knowing?

Finally, it was great to see Donnica's thought process about Annabel before calling her in. Deep down, she knew Trevor's situation wasn't Annie's fault, and she even assigned a little blame to herself for the argument they had possibly distracting Annie. But mostly, Donnica blamed Penelope, which I think she's right about. There's plenty of blame that could be spread, but ultimately, the actual perpetrator is a great person to blame for their own actions!

But I thought it was really cool that she was hoping that Annie would forgive her rather than telling Annie that she's forgiven. Donnica got to the point where she didn't even want to pretend that any of this was Annie's fault, and she wouldn't have minded if Annie hadn't forgiven her right away. She was holding herself accountable in a way Annie never even considered. I thought that was a really sweet moment from Donnica, and I continue to love when she bubbles to the surface in times like these!

Another great segment here, and it felt so short compared to the first two! Yet it was no less impactful, possibly leading us toward a major plot development and arc merger down the line (or really soon, possibly; the "down the line" is really more me just trying to protect my precious Rebecca!).

Author's Response:

"I now have zero doubt that Annie is going to find out about Rebecca and very little doubt that Annie is going to take Rebecca. Annabel is just too thorough, too competent not to figure this out, and once she does, so many interesting possibilities open up."

I love that this is your take! It means Annabel is coming across exactly how I want her here… intelligent, dangerous, and just a little bit volatile beneath the surface. She’s still sweet Annie, of course, but you can’t really blame her for her more ruthless tendencies when it comes to protecting her goddess-mother. Get ready for a lot more Annabel in the coming chapters!

 

"I'm not surprised that Annabel has taken it upon herself to solve Donnica's "Amber problem," though. I've always felt that Annie wasn't just some devoted stooge but rather someone willing to do whatever it takes to make her master (or Trevor, for that matter) happy, even if they didn't ask her to do it. Even if they didn't want her to do it. Even if they told her not to do it. If she thinks it's in the best interest of the two most important people in her life (although I'm guessing that Naomi is worming her way up that list as well, especially if she's willing to let Naomi get away with killing expendables like that), she's going to do it. She's going to become whatever it is that they need her to be."

You’ve nailed what makes Annabel so compelling for me. I love how you keep picking up on this contradiction in her: she’s both the most fanatical and the most likely to go rogue if she thinks it’ll help her beloveds. She’s definitely not just a yes-woman… she’ll act on her own, sometimes against direct orders, all out of devoted loyalty. And yes, she absolutely would do what’s needed to make Trevor happy, too!

 

"She allowed herself to ask Donnica what was wrong, something I'm sure she noticed as soon as she set foot into Donnica's office."

This was honestly my favorite moment in the segment… Annabel skipping past her own forgiveness because her worry for Donnica overruled everything else. She put herself aside to soothe her goddess-mother, and that selfless focus felt so completely, unmistakably Annabel. I loved writing it.

 

"Now, unfortunately, she gave Donnica some really, really bad advice. She just can't accept the possibility that Donnica might actually be at fault here, so she assumes that the problem lies with Amber (as we saw at the end of the segment). This is particularly frustrating for two reasons:"

Right? I was actually wondering if anyone would catch just how misguided Annabel’s advice was! It feels so heartfelt and comforting in the moment that you could almost mistake it for good advice. But yeah, she’s basically absolving Donnica of all responsibility and telling her to just let things blow over. Still, there’s something so genuine about her attempt to comfort Donnica, even if it’s flawed. Her devotion is real… sometimes it works. (even when it kind of doesn’t!)

 

"Donnica tried so hard to escape her parents' legacy, but she couldn't do it. She was too beholden to the lessons they taught her. She understood why Amber wanted to take time after high school, but she felt her dismissing that idea was her passing on a lesson she "learned" (I don't think she actually took that time herself) to save her daughter from making a mistake. The logic makes sense, but the execution makes her exactly like her parents. It actually felt as though Donnica was on the cusp of fully realizing this and maybe salvaging her relationship with Amber."

Exactly, Donnica never got to take time off (her parents never would have allowed it), but she remembers what it was like to want to rebel, which I’m sure she did in her own small way. She’s drawing from that universal ache, even if she’s not consciously paralleling her childhood with Amber’s.

And honestly, could you even imagine Donnica just taking time off and doing nothing?

 

"Oh, and since we've circled back to Annie, I absolutely loved that she thought of Amber as Donnica's biological daughter. Because, as I think I've said before, the irony of this situation is that, if Donnica just treated Amber the way she treats Annabel, everything would be good between them. Donnica puts too much pressure on herself to guide Amber in the right direction, to protect her, even from herself. With Annabel, she just sees someone who loves her. Someone who has some issues with which Donnica can relate and wants to help her with. Someone that she can trust and confide in, show her true self to, like she does with Trevor (as we saw here, although I still say the way she does it for Annie is different than the way she does it for Trevor)."

I’m so glad you picked up on that! Annabel thinking of Amber as the “biological daughter” was something I planned from the start… just that phrase reveals a ton about how Annabel sees their family. And it’ll only get more pronounced as she gets deeper into Amber’s world.

 

You’re also right: Donnica has an easier time connecting with Annabel, and I’m fascinated to see how that evolving relationship might spill over and affect her dynamic with Amber going forward.

 

"And again, we see the difference between Helena and Donnica here. In S2, Helena reveled in making her former rivals and enemies suffer. But even though it's made clear that Donnica bares a grudge against the Turners, she seemed much more clinical about what she was doing. She wasn't reveling in making them suffer now. That was only a means to an end. She wanted those two to worship her with reverence rather than fear, and while the way they treated her before made the thought of that sweeter, it didn't really seem to draw out the same sense of sadism that it did for Helena."

I love hearing that this comes through! That’s the exact contrast I wanted. Donnica’s not getting off on the suffering… she just sees it as part of the natural order, proof of her divinity, a tool for establishing worship. Helena, meanwhile, actively delights in the pain and humiliation. Having both of these segments in the same chapter was meant to highlight those cross-segment differences. So glad you caught it.

 

"Of course, there's also the fact that Donnica wants her hated tinies be imprinted, while Helena wants them to remain uninitiated and fully able to suffer her wrath under the guise of ritual."

Great catch… I wondered if anyone would spot this!

 

"Finally, it was great to see Donnica's thought process about Annabel before calling her in. Deep down, she knew Trevor's situation wasn't Annie's fault, and she even assigned a little blame to herself for the argument they had possibly distracting Annie. But mostly, Donnica blamed Penelope, which I think she's right about. There's plenty of blame that could be spread, but ultimately, the actual perpetrator is a great person to blame for their own actions!"

What I loved most about this was how forgiveness came about… not because of anything Annabel did or some dramatic event, but because Donnica was wrestling with her own guilt about Amber. It made her stop and reconsider how she treats everyone in her life, especially her other “daughter” in Annabel. I’m always drawn to writing these moments where a character’s personal struggles bleed over and change how they interact with everyone else. That’s the kind of storytelling that keeps me coming back.

 

"Another great segment here, and it felt so short compared to the first two! Yet it was no less impactful, possibly leading us toward a major plot development and arc merger down the line (or really soon, possibly; the "down the line" is really more me just trying to protect my precious Rebecca!)."

Oh, Rebecca’s got a trial or two ahead… she wouldn’t be Rebecca if she didn’t! (Damn she would hate me in real life if she knew what I was doing to her!) And yeah, this segment was a little shorter (for me, anyway), but I hope the character work and the moment of forgiveness gave it the impact it needed.

Lovely review, as always. Thank you!

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: September 26 2025 10:28 AM Title: PART 33

She let the moment stretch, like taffy, until time itself bent beneath it.

This was an awesome line, maybe my favorite of S2! Not for anything it ties to or an action it's describing, but just the sheer poetry of it. I was just reading, and this line jumped off the screen! I just had to comment on how creative and unique it was, as well as such a beautiful combination of words could be used to describe the agony of two tinies suffering at Helena's bare feet. This just made the scene feel even bigger than it was!

But my first though as I was reading this segment was one I'd had before: that this perfectly illustrates the difference between Donnica and Helena. Thinking back to the previous segment, Donnica's reaction to seeing tinies running from the smell of her feet was anger that there were special accommodations for tinies on campus at all. It was rage that drove her. They didn't deserve that, in her mind. Things like this only kept them further from their true purpose: worshiping and serving at the feet of the giants. Even when they ran from her, Donnica telling them to smell her feet was more vindictive than it was joyful. As I've said before, Donnica isn't obsessed with the idea of tormenting tinies; she's upset that they don't understand their place in society (in her mind).

We saw something very different with Helena in S2. She worked out, jogged, just to get her feet extra smelly, reveling in the dankness when she'd normally want to just clean up (or at least most people would). Torturing tinies is a highlight for Helena, something to look forward to. Something to prepare for, to make as devastating to the tinies as possible. Where Donnica's cruelty toward tinies is based in rage, Helena's is based in joy, a happiness that she can only find in bullying those smaller than herself.

To be fair, this chapter didn't offer an apples to apples comparison between the two. Donnica gave tinies she'd never met a hard time, while Helena has a whole room filled with tiny enemies, people who used to think they were better than her (or at least good enough to stand against her). In a vacuum, it could be argued that this is what makes the difference, that vengeance rather than philosophy is what gives Helena her joy here.

But we're not in a vacuum. We've seen time and time again that Donnica never truly enjoys tormenting or killing tinies, not in the way that Helena does. At most (like at the restaurant for tinies that she crushed), it's a minor passing amusement for Donnica, one that doesn't last and often leaves her bored. And in the earlier chapters of the story, including that restaurant scene, there were plenty of instances of Donnica handling former rivals and people she felt had wronged her, and she never once acted the way Helena does here. Helena herself, on the other hand, I'd say that we've seen this in smaller doses before, like with the tiny butt slave she plucked from trash town (RIP) or the way she indulged in being worshiped on her throne in the Kingdom before speaking with Kassandra.

So yeah, once again, we have two women that, on the surface level, appear to be the same in their evil views about tinies but really couldn't be too much more different once you start digging into what makes them tick. I keep bringing this up when I see it because I love this level of nuance in characters that act similarly at first glance.

And while we're talking about Helena, I found that glimpse into her past through Marc and Nina to be pretty interesting. When we first met Helena, she was presented as the best of the best, an untouchable figure in the anit-tiny rights movement, someone on the level of Donnica herself. But when we first met Celine, before we even knew her name, we were told something different, that Helena had always come in second to this tiny rival, that it drove her crazy and made her feel like she wasn't good enough.

Now, with Marc and Nina, we see two people (although Nina more gets singled out) who thought themselves so far above Nina that they could put her down and even drive her out of the firm where they all worked at the time. Nina even felt comfortable telling Helena to kiss her feet in order for Helena to save her job. This is a much more vulnerable Helena than we've seen in the present, even in those moments where a defiant Celine has somehow beaten her at an inch tall, moral though those victories may have been.

It feels like, ever so gradually, Helena's origin story is unfolding, and we're getting to see how she came to be the monster that she is now. This has been a fun journey, and the way you're rolling it out, foot-by-foot and not even in each chapter, is such a clever pace. I really appreciate how you're taking your time with this!

The introduction of Lorelei was intriguing for a couple reasons.

The first thing that stuck out to me was where she was from: Germany. Penelope is from the UK, and her mother who still lives there now has been slightly hinted to be a powerful figure in the Sisterhood, one Helena feels indebted to or maybe even fears a little bit. I think it's interesting that these goddesses-in-waiting are being sent to Helena from Europe. It makes me speculate that the organization is maybe based across the Atlantic or at least has more pull there.

Given that it's been presented as unique how the United States has privatized registration for tinies, this potential development makes me quite curious how all of that works in Europe. Is there a policy shared among all EU members? If so, does the UK follow that policy too? Or does each country have their own rules regarding registration? And if they're stricter about it over there (which I feel like was kind of implied when Penelope was so excited to come to America), how does the Sisterhood operate so strongly over there?

And Helena herself was trained in the ways of being a "goddess" in Europe, in the UK (which, again, seems likely to be the connection between Helena and Penelope's mother, who I'm assuming trained Helena herself at this point). 

But then there's Lorelei herself. She's calm, composed, and fully respectful of the Sisterhood's rituals and ready to serve. She's the complete opposite of Penelope, who we were told is also a goddess-in-waiting. It really makes you wonder how two people trying to achieve the same rank can be so radically different, not only in their approach but in their very demeanor. Again, this, to me, hints at Penelope's mother being a key figure in the Sisterhood. I get the distinct impression that a brat like her would never even come close to consideration for such a rank if not for her bloodline.

Speaking of Penelope, her name did get dropped in this segment, so the posh princess is still around the estate apparently. That was pretty exciting to read! This dinner that she's supposed to be preparing for Helena grabbed my attention as well! Does that mean what I think it means?

And Celine's going to be there? Count me in!

Back to Lorelei, the fact that Helena compared Lorelei to her younger self again seems to feed into the idea that Helena was once very different from how she is now. Because, despite Lorelei's fanaticism toward the ways of the Sisterhood, her complete devotion to them, she doesn't strike as arrogant in the least. Certainly not in the way Helena does now. I'm really starting to think that Helena's current persona was more built or ingrained than it was naturally developed, which would be pretty intriguing if true.

And the way that Helena takes such an interest and such pride in Lorelei's "development" shows just how much reverence Helena has for the tradition, the ritual, the true purpose of the Sisterhood. Helena is happy to see that she "chose well" with Lorelei and even punished Marc and Nina despite them doing a good job to make sure Lorelei learned the supposed proper lesson from it all. Helena strikes me less as a superior or simple mentor here and almost more like a parental figure, getting excited at the thought of Lorelei's bright future as a "goddess."

"It is the process. Duality isn’t a feature. It is the nature. A goddess cannot rise through affection alone. She must be capable of wrath. Of cold, absolute judgment. Without it, there is no fear. Without fear, there is no reverence. And without reverence, there is no rule."

Well damn, now I feel like fucking Palpatine is going to end up being behind the Sisterhood with talk like that. It really is almost Sith-like.

But this stuff about duality is interesting! The Sisterhood teaches that its goddesses must be both kind and cruel. This sort of makes sense, since they seem to view themselves as rulers over the tinies. They want the love of their subject, but respect is more important. That "wrath" is the key to becoming a "goddess" from the sound of it. Like they can't be revered, properly honored, without showing a certain level of coldness to their people at times (or at least some of them, given that Helena has separated these tinies out from her subjects).

If you're nothing but nice, you run the risk of being taken advantage of, even by inch-high people. To act divine, you have to be capable of both mercy and absolute judgment. There's a certain logic to that. A certain balance. If I'm understanding Helena right here, she's more or less saying that certain tinies need to be punished, if for nothing else than to keep a goddess share in her divine judgment, to keep her from going soft. But only those that deserve it, that have earned their suffering through arrogance (which, for Helena, I take to mean tinies who expect/fight for equal rights in most cases!).

And then Helena says this:

She looked back at Lorelei, eyes narrowed just slightly. "You will understand this when your time here ends. When you rule a domain of your own. You must know who deserves adoration and who deserves only submission. Any woman who doesn't know the difference is bound to shrink eventually, understood?"

Now this was a significant passage. I could have easily led the review with it, honestly. Because it tells me one of two things:

1. The Sisterhood knows much more about the shrinking virus than the rest of the world and may even have had a hand in its creation. Shit, if this is true, the story might even dip its toes into the mystical world as well as the sci-fi one of the Kingdom. I mean, they are a very ritualistic organization.

2. They're a cult that thinks it knows the truth behind the virus and have developed a religion of sorts around it. If this is true, they really know nothing but speak as though they know everything, building rituals and a ruling class for a world that will never truly become what they expect.

For the sake of people like Scarlett, I really hope it's the second one. Because if the Sisterhood is right, then anyone that feels as though tinies are equal to giants, that they're still people and not slaves and subjects, is going to shrink eventually.

Of course, if the first one is true, it opens up a lot of questions and potentially gives this story a truly epic endgame scenario (not that it needs to be true for this to be the case, but seeing our "heroes" rush to stop or control such an event could be pretty fucking spectacular).

Oh, and then there was this:

Helena smiled. Not kindly. But knowingly. "When you hook a whale, you reel it in. We don’t know when the next viral wave will come... or if it will be the final one. The Inner Circle will rule what’s left. We need a seat. We need a Matriarch. We need Donnica."

This seems to heavily imply that the Sisterhood do, in fact, have inside knowledge of what is going on with the virus. Not perfect knowledge, as they seem unsure if the next one will be the "final one" (interesting that they seem to know that there will be a final wave and that it hasn't happened yet), but that's still a level of understanding that the world at large doesn't seem to have (again, unless they're cultist nuts who are wrong, which, while I'm not leaning toward, can't be ruled out yet).

Not only that, but now we know there's an Inner Circle within the Sisterhood, and that they are marked to be the true rulers (presumably of the world). It makes me wonder if those in the Sisterhood who aren't in the Inner Circle are destined to shrink as well or if they'll just be treated as "lesser goddesses," glorified full-sized servants to the true rulers.

But yeah, we got a huge lore dump during that Helena and Juliette conversation. The Table seems to be the ruling body within Helena's covenant, and Juliette and Vivara seem to be just beneath Helena herself, with the power to veto or approve new members Helena wants to bring in.

We now also have a semi-solid answer for why Helena wants Donnica involved in her plans so badly; she's a matriarch, which, at the very least, means she can imprint way faster than most, a skill I think the organization would value as it tries to gain more "subjects." But Donnica is Helena's political play, her ticket into the elite body that is supposed to control the world when all is said and done. I still think Helena has a personal affection for Donnica as well, romantic or otherwise, but Helena is hoping to use Donnica for personal gain (although it sounds like Donnica would gain something out of this as well; not that I expect Donnica would be satisfied sharing power with anyone!).

And now Helena has become a major threat to Trevor. Not directly, but it seems like Helena is going to push hard for Donnica to downgrade Trevor sooner rather than later. I don't think this will work, but I assume there will be a moment of doubt that'll make me second guess that before the "real" Donnica, the one buried beneath that armor I mentioned in my last review, wins out in the end. That'll be something Helena never understands, I think, which is why she'll lose.

To me, it's only a question of whether things end up back to the status quo for Donnica at the end of this or she has usurped Helena's covenant, if not the entire Sisterhood.

It was also cool to dig a little deeper into Juliette and Helena's relationship. Helena trained her and initiated her into being a "goddess," and Juliette's appreciation for that clearly runs deep. That Juliette views Helena as a maternal figure was something I didn't expect (I theorized that she was sent by the larger organization to keep an eye on Helena; fuck was I wrong!).

Helena seems to hold Juliette in high regard, too. I don't recall Helena calling Vivara sister (although she may have just avoided that in front of Donnica). But Juliette seems to get more slack in arguing her points against Helena's. Helena holds back her annoyance and explains herself to Juliette, something I would never expect Helena to do for a subordinate. I think she knows that Juliette is just looking out for her, and she actually appreciates it.

I came away from that interaction with an even higher opinion of Juliette, even if she is on the "wrong" side of things. Her loyalty is admirable, and the fact that it isn't an overly devotional loyalty, one that would lead to her blindly agreeing with Donnica about everything, says a lot about her strength of character and personality. I find myself really hoping she ends up flipping on Helena and working more with the main cast as the story progresses.

We even got the names of two "high-goddesses," higher-ups in the Sisterhood: Marion and Yuriko. I've got Marion clocked as potentially being Penelope's mother already. No evidence, just a gut feeling.

It also sounds like we'll meet these two fairly soon. That should tell us a lot more about this organization.

She was moving now toward the rear of the chamber, where a different kind of altar awaited... one designed not for feet, but for her other, perhaps greater, throne. Her ass.

The ass worshipping chair.

I'm stunned that you inserted an ass worshipping chair into this chapter. Stunned, I say!

Awesome segment! You worked in a ton of smuttiness, yet a ton of lore and background information as well! This was masterfully done, weaving the action and the details you want us to know so seamlessly with each other. Very well done!

Author's Response:

"This was an awesome line, maybe my favorite of S2! Not for anything it ties to or an action it's describing, but just the sheer poetry of it. I was just reading, and this line jumped off the screen! I just had to comment on how creative and unique it was, as well as such a beautiful combination of words could be used to describe the agony of two tinies suffering at Helena's bare feet. This just made the scene feel even bigger than it was!"

Haha, I will never turn down a prose compliment. Thanks for singling out that line… those little fuckers take forever to get right, and it’s awesome to hear when one really pops.

 

"So yeah, once again, we have two women that, on the surface level, appear to be the same in their evil views about tinies but really couldn't be too much more different once you start digging into what makes them tick. I keep bringing this up when I see it because I love this level of nuance in characters that act similarly at first glance."

I love that you keep singling this out. I’ve worked hard to make Helena and Donnica look alike (tall, blonde, commanding, even the same shoe size) while running on totally different engines. Those differences power so much of their conflict (well, that and Trevor being smooshed under Helena’s ass). As we move forward, those cracks should widen… or close, depending on how the pieces fall.

 

"It feels like, ever so gradually, Helena's origin story is unfolding, and we're getting to see how she came to be the monster that she is now. This has been a fun journey, and the way you're rolling it out, foot-by-foot and not even in each chapter, is such a clever pace. I really appreciate how you're taking your time with this!"

Oh yes! we’re only just starting to peel back Helena’s past, and there are some big reveals coming (maybe even sooner than you think!). I’ve always believed that backstory, if handled right, is the story… you don’t need endless subplots or filler if all the current conflicts are rooted in history. All you have to do is roll that history out piece by piece, at the right moments, and let each revelation sharpen the conflict in the present. Do that, and you don’t just get exposition, you get story!

 

"Given that it's been presented as unique how the United States has privatized registration for tinies, this potential development makes me quite curious how all of that works in Europe. Is there a policy shared among all EU members? If so, does the UK follow that policy too? Or does each country have their own rules regarding registration? And if they're stricter about it over there (which I feel like was kind of implied when Penelope was so excited to come to America), how does the Sisterhood operate so strongly over there?"

Great points! And yeah, there’s probably a reason Helena’s estate is pulling in so many Euro-goddesses. But we might only be seeing the tip of the iceberg... between her firm and all the girls doing their fellowships at the estate, there’s a lot moving under the surface. So maybe there are more girls coming from other places. Europe definitely has more protective laws for tinies, but that makes me wonder what kind of shape the Sisterhood takes over there... and like you said, Penelope’s excitement about America hinted at that contrast. And don’t forget, Asia (which we touched on earlier in the story) has almost no protections at all. So why not just send the girls there? Why doesn’t the Sisterhood run everything out of Asia instead? So many interesting questions to ponder!

 

"But then there's Lorelei herself. She's calm, composed, and fully respectful of the Sisterhood's rituals and ready to serve. She's the complete opposite of Penelope, who we were told is also a goddess-in-waiting. It really makes you wonder how two people trying to achieve the same rank can be so radically different, not only in their approach but in their very demeanor. Again, this, to me, hints at Penelope's mother being a key figure in the Sisterhood. I get the distinct impression that a brat like her would never even come close to consideration for such a rank if not for her bloodline."

I love that you bring them up together, because that was exactly the point: showing the contrast inside the Sisterhood itself. On one hand you’ve got devotees like Lorelei who are disciplined and devout, and on the other, you’ve got Penelope, who’s probably only in the running because of her family name. We’re just starting to dig into the Sisterhood, and I’m excited to show off more of its politics, traditions, and hidden history. It would’ve been boring if the group was painted as flawless and all-powerful, so having initiates as different as Lorelei and Penelope really opens the door for tension and conflict.

 

"That was pretty exciting to read! This dinner that she's supposed to be preparing for Helena grabbed my attention as well! Does that mean what I think it means?"

…yeah, it probably means exactly what you think it means ;)

 

"Back to Lorelei, the fact that Helena compared Lorelei to her younger self again seems to feed into the idea that Helena was once very different from how she is now. Because, despite Lorelei's fanaticism toward the ways of the Sisterhood, her complete devotion to them, she doesn't strike as arrogant in the least. Certainly not in the way Helena does now. I'm really starting to think that Helena's current persona was more built or ingrained than it was naturally developed, which would be pretty intriguing if true."

I love that you picked up on this about Helena! Because yeah, let’s just say she’s changed a lot over the years… and maybe not in the most natural way. As you’ll see (perhaps even later in this chapter!) there are some big pieces of her history that shaped her into what she is now.

 

"If you're nothing but nice, you run the risk of being taken advantage of, even by inch-high people. To act divine, you have to be capable of both mercy and absolute judgment. There's a certain logic to that. A certain balance. If I'm understanding Helena right here, she's more or less saying that certain tinies need to be punished, if for nothing else than to keep a goddess share in her divine judgment, to keep her from going soft. But only those that deserve it, that have earned their suffering through arrogance (which, for Helena, I take to mean tinies who expect/fight for equal rights in most cases!)."

Great points here! The takeaway really is that a goddess has to embody both mercy and wrath, and the natural order will provide the opportunities for each. Punishment isn’t something Helena sees as exceptional… it’s as normal to her as breathing.

 

"Of course, if the first one is true, it opens up a lot of questions and potentially gives this story a truly epic endgame scenario (not that it needs to be true for this to be the case, but seeing our "heroes" rush to stop or control such an event could be pretty fucking spectacular)."

I usually stay away from speculating in these replies, but I’ll say this: of the two options you suggested, it might be one, it might be the other… or maybe even a mix of both ;)

(classic me response!)

 

"But yeah, we got a huge lore dump during that Helena and Juliette conversation. The Table seems to be the ruling body within Helena's covenant, and Juliette and Vivara seem to be just beneath Helena herself, with the power to veto or approve new members Helena wants to bring in."

That’s right! The Table is in charge. But remember… Helena mentioned she’d need both Juliette and Vivara’s support to push Donnica’s initiation through. That raises the question: are there others at the Table who could block it? And if so, will we meet them…

(okay fine, the answer is yes lol)

 

"And now Helena has become a major threat to Trevor. Not directly, but it seems like Helena is going to push hard for Donnica to downgrade Trevor sooner rather than later. I don't think this will work, but I assume there will be a moment of doubt that'll make me second guess that before the "real" Donnica, the one buried beneath that armor I mentioned in my last review, wins out in the end. That'll be something Helena never understands, I think, which is why she'll lose."

Ahhh yes, Trevor… the thorn in Helena’s side. If it weren’t for him, she’d probably have Donnica all tied up already… or would she? When she said you reel in a whale when you hook one, maybe she should’ve said a bull, probably closer to Donnica’s energy. Either way, you’re absolutely right that the Donnica/Trevor relationship sits at the heart of the story and will keep being tested as the Kingdom and Sisterhood drama ramps up.

 

"I came away from that interaction with an even higher opinion of Juliette, even if she is on the "wrong" side of things. Her loyalty is admirable, and the fact that it isn't an overly devotional loyalty, one that would lead to her blindly agreeing with Donnica about everything, says a lot about her strength of character and personality. I find myself really hoping she ends up flipping on Helena and working more with the main cast as the story progresses."

I love that you got this from Juliette! I wanted that dynamic between her and Helena to shine through; that mutual respect that lets Juliette challenge Helena without fear. Writing characters with their own motives and agency is one of my favorite things, and even someone like Annabel, fanatical as she is, still acts on her own terms at times. Juliette is going to get more time in the spotlight soon, and I’m glad you’re already connecting with her.

 

"We even got the names of two "high-goddesses," higher-ups in the Sisterhood: Marion and Yuriko. I've got Marion clocked as potentially being Penelope's mother already. No evidence, just a gut feeling.

It also sounds like we'll meet these two fairly soon. That should tell us a lot more about this organization."

Oh yes… we’ll be meeting them sooner than you think. And I think you’ll like that encounter ;)

 

"I'm stunned that you inserted an ass worshipping chair into this chapter. Stunned, I say!"

What can I say… if Helena’s in a SMUT scene, you bring out her magnificent ass. It might not quite as good as Donnica’s, but it’s damn close.

I know smell isn’t your thing, but hopefully there was still some fun to be had in the fetish side of this segment!

 

"Awesome segment! You worked in a ton of smuttiness, yet a ton of lore and background information as well! This was masterfully done, weaving the action and the details you want us to know so seamlessly with each other. Very well done!"

Thank you, man! That’s one of my golden rules… that a chapter/segment must be doing at least two things at once. So, if I’m dropping lore and worldbuilding (barf), I’m damn sure also going to have some smut to keep things flowing.

Amazing review again, I loved reading every word of it!

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Date: September 22 2025 2:18 AM Title: PART 33

Trevor caught the sparkle in her eyes and pounced on it gently, "So how are things going with you guys anyway?"

The joy faltered, a flicker of hesitation disrupting her features. She shifted in her seat, her skirt rustling softly against her thighs, the air around her suddenly tighter. "Things are... going good," she said, and there was a subtle tension to the way her shoulders rolled forward.

Trevor didn’t miss it. His brow arched as he studied her, tilting his head like a curious cat, gentle and direct. "You sure about that? Everything okay?"

Amber cast a slow glance down at him, guilt and confusion swirling in her gaze, like storm clouds pulling in from the horizon. Her lips parted and closed again before she finally sighed and said, "I don’t like talking about Rebecca with you sometimes..."

The admission was thick and difficult, each word a stone pulled from deep water. "You saw me do all that awful stuff to her."

She turned away.

But Trevor didn’t waver. He remained where he stood on the tiny platform, his voice as steady as it was soft. "Amber..." he called, just once. When she didn’t turn, he said it again, slower, fuller.

And then she looked back. Her eyes were wet.

"I’ve forgiven you for that stuff. Okay?" His smile was kind, but not indulgent.

This is one of the more poignant, profound moments in the whole story. It's so easy to forget the way Amber treated Trevor during the early chapters, especially since we've seen steady progress between the two of them scattered throughout. So for Amber to admit her guilt over that so indirectly, only mentioning what Trevor had "seen" her do (to Rebecca), too ashamed to mention that she had done the same shit to him as well during that time, this hit me deep.

And then Trevor saw right through it. He recognized that "guilt and confusion swirling in her gaze" (incredibly worded, by the way) for what it really was. And then he accepted an apology she didn't even realize she was giving. Of course, right after this, he ties it back to Rebecca, but it's obvious that it's not his place to forgive Amber for the things she did to Rebecca. He can only do that for the things she did to him.

This story has had it's share of heartwarming moments, but, for me at least, this was easily the best one!

Just a little further down, Amber actually acknowledges that Trevor is different from the other boyfriends her mother has had. She doesn't even mention the abuse, just that the other ones only pretended to care while Trevor actually does, something that was highlighted beautifully earlier in the segment when he kept glancing back at her, checking on her while everyone else was too wrapped up in themselves to really make Amber a part of her own college tour.

And then she noted that he's the closest thing to a father figure she's ever had, and I couldn't stop smiling!

I've been waiting for this moment for so long! Now that it's happened, I can honestly say that it didn't disappoint in the least. Shit, it exceeded expectations! The moment just felt so meaningful to me, not only because of the long-term buildup but because of Amber's own anguish at being cast aside by her mother in matters regarding her own future. To Amber, Donnica only views her as an accessary, an extension of herself. That pain and anger she felt set the perfect stage for Trevor to show how much he cared and for Amber to see it plainly.

And the concern she shows for him as she thinks back on this Status-C stuff was so, so touching. From scooping him up in her hand, showing her personal and real her feelings about it were and that she wasn't just making conversation to the fact that she had done her own research even before this scene, worrying about him even before realizing that he was someone she could lean on: That whole scene was so great! It helped set up that "info swap" paragraph where they had light conversation about their arcs up to this point, with him detailing the Status-C problem (minus the rape) and her cluing Trevor in on Scarlett.

Oh, and I loved how Trevor went out of his way to include Amber in his statements about handling the situation. He wants to help her, not decide for her, and he made that perfectly clear. Him saying that he would take care of her mom, only to stop and say that they both would, giving Amber a wink, just showed how well Trevor understands the problem, understands Amber, really. Again, I never imagined these two getting to this point back in chapter one (let alone chapter three!), and it's so satisfying now that we've gotten here!

This whole exchange was just so ... so good!

It was also the perfect contrast with Donnica throughout the segment. I was really bummed when she hushed Trevor as he was trying to help her understand her daughter. At this point, I feel like he's her only shot at saving her relationship with Amber, even if she doesn't realize that relationship is in danger of dissolving altogether.

But that's the thing, isn't it? That was my biggest takeaway in the whole chapter. I've been calling out aspects of it throughout the story and attributing them to very particular things, but the whole picture came together for me here:

Donnica is self-destructive.

She has convinced herself that she's happy with where she is in life, but she's really mostly miserable and doesn't even know it! She's always so annoyed, so frustrated, so upset over the smallest things .. literally! Like in the courtyard, she allowed herself to get worked up, indignant almost, over the simple fact that tinies accessibility at her alma mater. This didn't actually affect her at all, but because of her beliefs and her insecurities (more on that in a second), she let it upset her.

Donnica has created pretty much all of her own problems and misery throughout the story. This is because she's had a hard life, clawing and scratching for everything she's ever had. Unlike pretty much every other giant in this story (at least the mean ones), Donnica isn't pathetic at all; she's earned everything she has: the power, the wealth, the prestige, and the ability to choose.

But because she's come from nothing, she's desperate to defend it all. To never again feel the way she did growing up. To let her daughter to feel the way she once did. So she's taken all of her vulnerability, all her insecurities, who she really is, and buried them under an almost impenetrable armor of cold, dominant hotness.

The problem is that this armor doesn't just protect her from anything that would threaten the fruits of her labor; it also "protects" her from the things that she truly wants in life, isolating her from them. As we've talked about before, that's what makes Trevor so special: He's the only one (except for Annie, but she does so in a completely different way) to break through and let her inner self, the thing she's protecting, poke its head out and truly enjoy an aspect of her life.

Why am I bringing all this up now? Because the first portion of S1, in my mind at least, pretty well confirmed all of this by showing us more of Donnica's past and her motivation to guide Amber's future.

It starts with how easily, naturally even, Donnica is able to put herself back together after her fun with Trevor during the previous chapter. Everything has to be just right with her, and she's well-versed in the art of making sure that happens every time. That's impressive, but it's also a subtle sign of insecurity. Right down to adjusting her blazer sleeve after getting out of the car. Anything to feel in control.

But then we get a glimpse into why control is so important for Donnica. We had already heard about how cold and distance her parents seemed to her. Now we find out that law school "was never a question" for her. Her parents had saved up the money and just sent her there, which is ironically sad given how she's approaching Amber's college choice.

Not only that, though, but while Amber has a degree of freedom as a teen, it sounds like Donnica's parents kept her nose to the grindstone constantly. From what we see here, I really think her parents' hearts were in the right place, but ceasing control of Donnica's life and making all these decisions for her has fucked her up in ways they could have never foreseen.

And I honestly have to wonder if it would've made a difference. Would they see Donnica's success and simply decide that they did right by her, dismissing her insecurity and brash behavior as nothing serious, despite the fact that they're costing her in so many ways? How would Donnica feel if she realized that she was trying to do the same thing to Amber?

Because that's what it boils down to: Donnica, despite being desperate to be different from her parents with Amber, is being exactly like them. She just can't see that she's poisoning the well the same way they did with her. She's too afraid that Amber will end up with nothing because she's afraid she'll go back to having nothing. She's worked too hard to let her daughter suffer like that.

That's the tragedy of all this. Everything Donnica is doing is honestly and purely for Amber. Amber is convinced that Donnica is too wrapped up in herself to care about her, but Donnica is only wrapped up in most things because she's trying to secure Amber's future. She's just so insecure, so desperate to get things squared away for her daughter that she can't even take a second to really listen to Amber and what she actually wants.

And Amber has no way of knowing that. Not that this would make what Donnica's doing okay. It would just let Amber know that her mom actually cares about and loves her, which is all Amber really wants!

But instead, Donnica almost always has her guard up, instinctively so, and Amber feels like Donnica doesn't actually care about her at all. Donnica is making her feel this way, and she can't see it! Her need to meddle and make sure Amber is "protected" is the very thing driving Amber away from her!

We did see them enjoy a sincere moment, which was really sweet (for those of not in the courtyard or without clothespins!). In that moment, when they were walking barefoot through the grass (you always amaze me with your ability to get these women barefoot in pretty much every situation!). Donnica just stopped trying to be in control and let her hair down for a second. Amber got to see the girl that went to school at that campus, not the perfect goddess Donnica projects to the world and has convinced even herself that she is. And the results? Amber felt close to her, and she was actually way more receptive to what Donnica was telling her.

It couldn't last, though, and Donnica lost any good will she brought up when she tried to "nudge" Amber into declaring that she was going into law right then and there. Donnica stopped short of deciding for Amber, and I really think this was sincere rather than wanting to avoid embarrassment (I don't think Donnica much cares about that; her doing "embarrassing things are really everybody else's problem, and she's not going to change who she is for them). She pushed for Amber to become a law student because Donnica was convinced that was the best path (as her parents did with her), but when Amber stood her ground, she shifted to trying to make sure Amber had some path already set. Because uncertainty feels insecure, and insecurity is Donnica's biggest fear, the thing that can cost you everything, in her mind.

Of course, we've seen Donnica self-sabotage before. I mean, fuck, look at everything she'd done to Trevor: threaten to squish him for being tiny during Amber's legal scare, veto that job he was so desperate to get, ignoring him until Naomi almost killed him, fucking with his registration constantly, setting up that "therapist" to try to brainwash him into her way of thinking, and, of course, volunteering him for breaking with Annie. Most of these were actually done because she was afraid of losing him, yet each one on its own would have driven almost anyone else away. She's damned lucky Trevor understands her in a way no one else does, because he's put up with a lot of her shit and loves her all the same.

Unlike Trevor, however, Amber doesn't understand. At all. It was a cool moment when Amber agreed to thank Donnica for setting up the visit not for Donnica but for him. Because she still didn't believe him when he said Donnica loved her. She just trusted him.

And Donnica was blindsided by being rejected by her daughter through those "dinner plans" she had in mind back at the beginning of the segment, mainly because she's just so oblivious to all this. It's so fucking sad! I really hope Trevor can get Donnica on the right track, but that's going to be a huge uphill battle.

Okay, enough of that rant. I hope at least some of it made sense and wasn't completely redundant!

I was not a fan of Dean Nolan. He seemed nice on the surface and I think he really does like Donnica, but there was just this aura of fakeness surrounding him. His jokes, his anecdotes, his willingness to cast aside campus rules for Donnica's sake: It all struck me more as him seeing Donnica as a checkbook rather than a beloved former student. Between that and Sabrina's "professionalism," the whole tour had a disingenuous vibe to it, which really matched what Amber was feeling most of the time.

Speaking of which, it was really cool to see her find legitimate things to like about the school, the students in particular. Once she didn't have to live in her mom's shadow and got to talk to people around her own age, she really seemed to like things. That might be more college stuff in general than Crownridge in particular, but seeing her engaged for a minute was awesome!

I feel like Quinn is likely to be a character we see again. Maybe Nolan and Sabrina (or maybe not; I could see them being one-offs), but Quinn seemed like she as being set up for something. Maybe she'll end up interning for Donnica's firm? Her being familiar with Donnica's work and wanting to shake her hand is a pretty big clue as to where she stands on the "tiny issue" too, as Trevor seemed to notice as well.

We also saw Amber think back to Rebecca a lot throughout the segment. She found strength in Rebecca's words and fantasized about what life on campus might be like for the two of them if she didn't have to hide her little girlfriend. All of this played off the end of the previous chapter brilliantly! Because while I love seeing this side of Amber, now I know what's brewing at the park between Scarlett and Rebecca! It's getting hard to see this not leading to heartbreak for Amber (I hope I'm as wrong about this as I was about Trevor's "breaking"). And I'm left wondering how Amber will respond if she's suddenly without the person that's helped her grow so much.

One last thing I noticed was that when Donnica gave Trevor to Amber (which I was super excited to read as it was happening!), she said that Nolan and her were going have a "big person conversation," which Amber took as a slight against her. But, to me, it sounded more like Donnica was unwittingly putting down Trevor, which surprised me a bit. She normally values his opinions and considers him above other giants (even her friends). But here she seems to imply that Trevor is simply too tiny to be a part of this conversation. I have to wonder if this was a reaction to him trying to get Donnica to listen to Amber before he was hushed. Maybe that insecurity led her to loose some trust in the man she loves, if only is a small way. If so, that kind of plays into a lot of that shit I said above!

But yeah, awesome opening segment to this chapter! I'm so glad we got to see this visit, and I feel so bad for Amber and Donnica right now! I'm curious if we see any aftermath from this later in the chapter.

Author's Response:

"This is one of the more poignant, profound moments in the whole story. It's so easy to forget the way Amber treated Trevor during the early chapters, especially since we've seen steady progress between the two of them scattered throughout. So for Amber to admit her guilt over that so indirectly, only mentioning what Trevor had "seen" her do (to Rebecca), too ashamed to mention that she had done the same shit to him as well during that time, this hit me deep."

Yes! Great catch. This moment was just as much about Trevor forgiving Amber for what she’d done to him as it was about what she’d done to Rebecca (at least in his eyes) maybe even more so. I’ve been wanting to reconcile those two for a while, but I knew I needed the right moment: Amber isolated, vulnerable… at a real low point in that chair. This was it.

 

"Just a little further down, Amber actually acknowledges that Trevor is different from the other boyfriends her mother has had. She doesn't even mention the abuse, just that the other ones only pretended to care while Trevor actually does, something that was highlighted beautifully earlier in the segment when he kept glancing back at her, checking on her while everyone else was too wrapped up in themselves to really make Amber a part of her own college tour."

You know, I added those little moments of Trevor checking in on Amber way back in my rough draft, and I almost cut them on revision, I worried they weren’t pulling their weight or that they slowed the pacing of the tour. But I’m so glad I left them in. They not only set up that later scene but made Trevor’s compassion feel grounded and genuine. Now, it’s crazy to think I almost got rid of them!

 

"I've been waiting for this moment for so long! Now that it's happened, I can honestly say that it didn't disappoint in the least. Shit, it exceeded expectations!"

That makes me so happy to hear! I know you’ve been itching for this payoff, and I was just as eager to finally deliver it… I just had to wait for the right opening in the story (pantser problems!). I’ve got more in store for their relationship too, and I can’t wait to roll that out.

 

"And the concern she shows for him as she thinks back on this Status-C stuff was so, so touching. From scooping him up in her hand, showing her personal and real her feelings about it were and that she wasn't just making conversation to the fact that she had done her own research even before this scene, worrying about him even before realizing that he was someone she could lean on: That whole scene was so great!"

Exactly! This was about giving Amber’s love back to Trevor, not just in reaction to what he’d said in that moment, but showing that she’d genuinely been worrying about him all along. It all culminated in her realizing that he’s someone she can lean on, someone she can actually depend on. That clarity made the scene land for me. (and I hope others!)

 

"It was also the perfect contrast with Donnica throughout the segment. I was really bummed when she hushed Trevor as he was trying to help her understand her daughter. At this point, I feel like he's her only shot at saving her relationship with Amber, even if she doesn't realize that relationship is in danger of dissolving altogether."

Yeah, I agree it sucked that she shut him down… he probably could’ve defused that fight. But I’ve gotta admit, there’s something hot about the way she hushed him too, haha.

 

"Donnica is self-destructive."

I’d say that’s true, at least in a lot of ways. She’s self-destructive, but she’s also giant, powerful, and unstoppable among her peers… which makes her such a heavy force to drop into the narrative. (and hot as well… did I mention that?)

 

"The problem is that this armor doesn't just protect her from anything that would threaten the fruits of her labor; it also "protects" her from the things that she truly wants in life, isolating her from them. As we've talked about before, that's what makes Trevor so special: He's the only one (except for Annie, but she does so in a completely different way) to break through and let her inner self, the thing she's protecting, poke its head out and truly enjoy an aspect of her life."

Very well put. That hard shell doesn’t just guard Donnica, it isolates her. Trevor is the rare exception, the one person who can actually break through it. But now she’s brushing up against this organization that practically promotes that same kind of isolation through their belief in their own divinity. Will it pull her further into herself, or force her to see things differently? Or maybe she’ll just go full Donnica and crush it all...

 

"But instead, Donnica almost always has her guard up, instinctively so, and Amber feels like Donnica doesn't actually care about her at all. Donnica is making her feel this way, and she can't see it! Her need to meddle and make sure Amber is "protected" is the very thing driving Amber away from her!"

Perfectly said. It’s that invisible rift… neither of them can really see it, but it’s tearing them apart anyway. Both love each other, but both keep fumbling into tragedy. It’s easy to write conflict when one side is clearly wrong, but I think the real weight comes when both sides want the same thing and still can’t connect. That’s where the drama really turns tragic.

And with everything else pulling at them (Helena for Donnica, Scarlett and Rebecca for Amber) it’s going to be fascinating to see if they can resolve things… or if they even can.

 

"We did see them enjoy a sincere moment, which was really sweet (for those of not in the courtyard or without clothespins!). In that moment, when they were walking barefoot through the grass (you always amaze me with your ability to get these women barefoot in pretty much every situation!). Donnica just stopped trying to be in control and let her hair down for a second. Amber got to see the girl that went to school at that campus, not the perfect goddess Donnica projects to the world and has convinced even herself that she is. And the results? Amber felt close to her, and she was actually way more receptive to what Donnica was telling her."

Hey, this is a fetish piece… getting these women barefoot is my specialty ;)

But yeah, I loved writing that moment. Just Donnica as a mom, a woman, stripped of all that armor, raw in front of her daughter. It was one of the warmest moments between them to date, even if it was there to mainly set up the fall right after.

 

"Of course, we've seen Donnica self-sabotage before. I mean, fuck, look at everything she'd done to Trevor: threaten to squish him for being tiny during Amber's legal scare, veto that job he was so desperate to get, ignoring him until Naomi almost killed him, fucking with his registration constantly, setting up that "therapist" to try to brainwash him into her way of thinking, and, of course, volunteering him for breaking with Annie. Most of these were actually done because she was afraid of losing him, yet each one on its own would have driven almost anyone else away. She's damned lucky Trevor understands her in a way no one else does, because he's put up with a lot of her shit and loves her all the same."

Damn, when you lay it all out like that, she sounds completely unhinged!

…which is totally hot.

But seriously, her immense power and volatility have always been a key part of the story. Trevor being able to see through all of that, and, even love her for it (he’s a little crazy too), is one of my favorite dynamics to write.

 

"Unlike Trevor, however, Amber doesn't understand. At all. It was a cool moment when Amber agreed to thank Donnica for setting up the visit not for Donnica but for him. Because she still didn't believe him when he said Donnica loved her. She just trusted him."

Very true. Amber is still young, still her mother’s daughter, and still working through her own trauma. She doesn’t understand Donnica the way Trevor does… but hopefully, someday, she will. Hopefully they both will.

 

"I was not a fan of Dean Nolan. He seemed nice on the surface and I think he really does like Donnica, but there was just this aura of fakeness surrounding him. His jokes, his anecdotes, his willingness to cast aside campus rules for Donnica's sake: It all struck me more as him seeing Donnica as a checkbook rather than a beloved former student. Between that and Sabrina's "professionalism," the whole tour had a disingenuous vibe to it, which really matched what Amber was feeling most of the time."

I get that. I was a little apprehensive writing Nolan since he’s the first male giant to take up any real space in the story. He wasn’t meant to be more than a momentary presence, but I did enjoy how he came off on the page. I agree, though, there’s definitely a layer of ulterior motives under the surface. He and Sabrina played their parts though, and who knows, maybe there could be more of them if any of the characters end up attending Crownridge!

 

"I feel like Quinn is likely to be a character we see again. Maybe Nolan and Sabrina (or maybe not; I could see them being one-offs), but Quinn seemed like she as being set up for something. Maybe she'll end up interning for Donnica's firm? Her being familiar with Donnica's work and wanting to shake her hand is a pretty big clue as to where she stands on the "tiny issue" too, as Trevor seemed to notice as well."

You’re not alone… others have said the same! Quinn really did jump off the page. Maybe it’s just our cruel little brains hoping for another anti-tiny leaning character, but the opening is definitely there. And Donnica’s firm is always ripe for women like Quinn...

 

"We also saw Amber think back to Rebecca a lot throughout the segment. She found strength in Rebecca's words and fantasized about what life on campus might be like for the two of them if she didn't have to hide her little girlfriend. All of this played off the end of the previous chapter brilliantly! Because while I love seeing this side of Amber, now I know what's brewing at the park between Scarlett and Rebecca! It's getting hard to see this not leading to heartbreak for Amber (I hope I'm as wrong about this as I was about Trevor's "breaking"). And I'm left wondering how Amber will respond if she's suddenly without the person that's helped her grow so much."

Yeah, Rebecca’s fingerprints were all over this segment, even without her being there. Amber has been so centered by her tiny girlfriend. Just think back to chapter 15, lounging in the sun… Rebecca telling her it was okay not to rush into college, Amber scoffing and calling her a little worm. And now? She’s standing up to her mother in public, carrying Rebecca’s words with her. She’s meant the world to Amber. She really, really has.

She really, really, reallllyyyyyyyyy has……

 

"But yeah, awesome opening segment to this chapter! I'm so glad we got to see this visit, and I feel so bad for Amber and Donnica right now! I'm curious if we see any aftermath from this later in the chapter."

Haha, we just might see a little aftermath later on in the chapter ;)

I was really excited for you to read this one since you’d been wanting the college tour and to see Trevor take on a more paternal role with Amber. I’m glad it landed for you the way it did.

Thank you as always!

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2025 9:17 PM Title: PART 33

What an incredible first segment, one of, if not my favorite, in the entire story. Everything is perfect.First, I really enjoy how you describe Donnica’s transformation from a pure mess after her time with Trevor to an elegant and beautiful woman again. But I kind of feel bad for the company’s drivers who have to clean the cars and get new ones to satisfy Donnica.

Let’s dive into the core of the chapter: the college visit. What a great surprise, it’s Donnica’s old school! I’m thrilled to get some insight into her past, first with Trevor in chapter 32 and now Donnica in chapter 33. I also really enjoyed how you showed Donnica’s evolution through this school, it’s brilliantly done. When she was a student, she saw the school as something incredible, but now she notices all its flaws, even questioning if it’s good enough for Amber.

An interesting character is Sabrina. I enjoy how she handles Donnica, telling her Amber arrived early when, in fact, Donnica is the one who’s late. I love that everyone is so careful when addressing Donnica, except Trevor, it’s a detail that always puts a smile on my face.

But now, it’s time for the visit, and soon a new character appears: Dean Nolan. At this moment, Amber is cast aside during her own visit, which is supposed to be about her. It’s really sad, and it gets worse as the visit becomes a tour of Donnica’s past, at least the glorified version. Even in the way Amber is introduced, everything revolves around Donnica. It’s almost as if Amber is just there to make Donnica look even better than she is or was in her past.

“And this is my little legacy” she said with glowing pride, casting a glance down at her daughter.Dean Nolan gave a big, bright smile. “I can already tell she’s as sharp as her mother!”

She’s her legacy, not her daughter, it’s as if Donnica owns Amber. This is even more evident in how Trevor is introduced:
“My other little bundle of joy,” she said, the smile never leaving her lips. “My tiny partner. Trevor.

It’s as if Amber isn’t supposed to be herself but a copy of her mom. Everything centers on Donnica, not Amber. Amber’s voice doesn’t even matter, her questions are ignored, her discomfort neglected.This alone shows how difficult Amber’s life has been but today is different because she has someone who cares about her: Trevor, quietly watching over her. It’s a beautiful image, especially since, sadly, Amber has never had a good father figure in her life. Someone watches over her, oppose Donnica when she does wrong, or give her a compassionate look when she needs it the most like today.

But it’s not all bad for Amber during this visit, at least for a moment outside. She can rest her feet and, even better, remove her shoes. Sabrina doesn’t approve, as the tiny people around would suffer, but Donnica doesn’t care, and neither does the hypocritical Dean Nolan who only want to flatter Donnica so she can give money to the school. So Amber removes her shoes, letting her feet breathe, to the despair of the tiny people and even some normal-sized people. The description of the odor of her feet and the reactions of those around it is amazing, it’s almost like we can smell it through the description alone. But the best part is that Amber gets to spend time with her mother, and for once, Donnica acts like a mother, not just the powerful woman who can destroy you with a single sentence.

They walk barefoot in the grass, allowing Donnica to recall a moment when Amber was a child, and they walked together in a similar park. The best part is when they talk about Donnica’s past, the real one, not the idealized version Dean Nolan presented. This allows Amber to realize her mom was once like her, spending time on the grass, relaxing with a smoothie, enjoying her teenage life.

I have to say, I loved this part. It’s the first time we see Donnica acting like a mom toward Amber, and it’s perfect. We can feel Amber lowering her guard a little, letting Donnica in, though it’s too little and perhaps too late.
After this heartwarming moment outside, the visit takes on a new vibe. Even though it’s still largely about Donnica, Amber feels better after her time with her mother. She even starts to enjoy the visit more when she sees other students, talking to them and being herself, not just Donnica’s daughter. For once, she can be Amber, the teenager with dreams. She even sees students with tinies, allowing her to imagine herself with Rebecca at this school, thinking about her future.

But sadly, another student joins the visit, Quinn, a younger version of Donnica who seems like her biggest fan. She asks the question Amber dreads: what will she choose for college? With that question, Donnica is back in control. There’s no more room for discussions, she has a plan for Amber, and Amber must follow it, even if she doesn’t want to. This reminds me of what Rebecca told Amber on Azurea Island:

Rebecca chuckled again. “Oh, Amber,” she said, her tone dripping with sarcasm, “let me tell you how your life is going to go. First, you’ll go to some pretentious college, where you won’t make any real friends because you’re too stuck up. Then, you’ll end up marrying some guy you don’t really love, probably the son of one of your mom’s friends, because you’ll be scared of ending up alone in your twenties. Then you’ll settle into the same boring life, have a kid because ‘that’s what you’re supposed to do,’ and end up coming on these stupid trips with your husband’s friends’ wives, getting drunk to numb the feeling that this is all your life will ever be. And that’s it,” she finished, a smirk on her face. “That’s your future, Amber.”

It’s exactly like that in Donnica’s mind. But thanks to Rebecca’s influence, Amber speaks up, saying she wants time to think about her future. This is a great evolution of Amber’s character. Even though it angers Donnica, we see Amber is ready to fight for what she wants, not just accept her mother’s plans.But it’s hard to face Donnica when she’s set on something, even Trevor can’t say anything to her. Just like that, she shuts down the conversation and returns to her usual self, casually talking with Dean Nolan as if it were a minor issue to deal with later.

Worse still, Donnica leaves with Dean Nolan and Sabrina, once again excluding Amber from discussions about her own future. Amber is left with Trevor, waiting for her mother. Trevor, however, recalls earlier in the day when he helped Clara. It’s interesting. I wonder if that experience opened Trevor’s eyes, much like Donnica’s first taste of power with Trevor and the second one when she walk in the Kingdom.Now comes my favorite part of the chapter, and I have to say it’s absolutely perfect in every detail. I love how Trevor acts like a good father figure, one who knows when to listen and when to offer advice. The fact that Amber listens to him and doesn’t reject him, as she did at the start of the story is amazing. This conversation alone showcases Amber’s growth.
The talk itself is incredible. Trevor knows exactly what to say and how to act to connect with Amber, explaining both sides to help her understand Donnica better. I also loved how Amber opens up to Trevor, sharing her feelings about her future and even her guilt toward Rebecca. Trevor, once again, reassures her that he forgives her, it’s a powerful moment.

I also really enjoy how Amber worries about Trevor and his status C. It’s such a touching detail, and as you know, slice-of-life moments are my favorite parts of the story, and this one is perfect. At the end, Trevor asks Amber to thank Donnica for this moment to make her happy and help mend their relationship, and Amber agrees.
Finally, the visit ends, and it’s time for Amber to reach out to her mother. But Donnica, acting like the lawyer rather than a mom, brings all the bad moments of the visit flooding back into Amber’s mind. Her armor goes back up, and the door closes again.

In conclusion, this chapter is perfect. The structure is flawless, mirroring Amber’s feelings toward Donnica: it starts bad, gets better, dips again, and ultimately falls apart, perhaps leaving things worse than before. The moments between Amber and Donnica, and Amber and Trevor, are perfectly written, hitting exactly where they should. You truly connect with Amber, and throughout nearly the entire segment, I wanted to tell Donnica, “For once in your life, please stop being Donnica. Just listen. Let go of your need to control everything and hear your daughter, it’s all she wants.”

My favorite moments, of course, are the Trevor and Amber scenes. They highlight the evolution of their relationship, which was complicated at first, to say the least. Now, you can feel a connection, maybe even a father-daughter bond, which I really hope for. Amber deserves a good man in her life, even if he’s a tiny one who, when he speaks, often feels like the giant while others seem small.

To end this review, I want to say how incredible the work on Trevor and Amber is. I also feel like Trevor’s ability to help people, discovered in the Kingdom, may be useful in the future with the messed-up giantesses in his life (hello, Helena) and even the tinies in the Kingdom now.

Author's Response:

"Let’s dive into the core of the chapter: the college visit. What a great surprise, it’s Donnica’s old school! I’m thrilled to get some insight into her past, first with Trevor in chapter 32 and now Donnica in chapter 33. I also really enjoyed how you showed Donnica’s evolution through this school, it’s brilliantly done. When she was a student, she saw the school as something incredible, but now she notices all its flaws, even questioning if it’s good enough for Amber."

Yes! It was important to show that evolution in Donnica, not just to give her more depth, but also to set up the meeting with the dean. She’s changed. The school hasn’t. That shift creates some natural ambiguity going into their conversation… Donnica doesn’t just represent power anymore, she represents progress. And now, oddly enough, the university needs her.

 

"An interesting character is Sabrina. I enjoy how she handles Donnica, telling her Amber arrived early when, in fact, Donnica is the one who’s late. I love that everyone is so careful when addressing Donnica, except Trevor, it’s a detail that always puts a smile on my face."

Haha I knew you’d pick up on this! You always love Donnica’s favoritism when it comes to Trevor, and yeah, it’s always funny to watch everyone else tiptoe around her while Trevor just... doesn’t. He gets away with things no one else would dare.

 

"But now, it’s time for the visit, and soon a new character appears: Dean Nolan. At this moment, Amber is cast aside during her own visit, which is supposed to be about her. It’s really sad, and it gets worse as the visit becomes a tour of Donnica’s past, at least the glorified version. Even in the way Amber is introduced, everything revolves around Donnica. It’s almost as if Amber is just there to make Donnica look even better than she is or was in her past."

Yes, poor Amber. This visit was supposed to be hers, but the spotlight ends up right back on Donnica. I think it really highlights how powerful Donnica’s presence is… and how suffocating that power can be when you’re the daughter living in its shadow.

 

"It’s as if Amber isn’t supposed to be herself but a copy of her mom. Everything centers on Donnica, not Amber. Amber’s voice doesn’t even matter, her questions are ignored, her discomfort neglected. This alone shows how difficult Amber’s life has been but today is different because she has someone who cares about her: Trevor, quietly watching over her. It’s a beautiful image, especially since, sadly, Amber has never had a good father figure in her life. Someone watches over her, oppose Donnica when she does wrong, or give her a compassionate look when she needs it the most like today."

I'm so glad you saw that! Trevor’s presence there was meant to be a kind of quiet support, something Amber’s never really had. I wanted it to feel subtle but meaningful… him just noticing her, offering small, gentle reassurances. It was one of my favorite emotional touches to write in this chapter.

 

"They walk barefoot in the grass, allowing Donnica to recall a moment when Amber was a child, and they walked together in a similar park. The best part is when they talk about Donnica’s past, the real one, not the idealized version Dean Nolan presented. This allows Amber to realize her mom was once like her, spending time on the grass, relaxing with a smoothie, enjoying her teenage life."

Yes, exactly! That was such a joy to write. At first, I actually worried the drama might smother the footplay, but once I had it down on the page, I realized how powerful the emotional moment was… and then I started worrying the kink would undercut it. In the end though, I think the two ended up serving each other, creating something that was both tactile and tender.

 

"But sadly, another student joins the visit, Quinn, a younger version of Donnica who seems like her biggest fan. She asks the question Amber dreads: what will she choose for college? With that question, Donnica is back in control. There’s no more room for discussions, she has a plan for Amber, and Amber must follow it, even if she doesn’t want to. This reminds me of what Rebecca told Amber on Azurea Island:"

I love, LOVE that you tied this moment back to that old chapter… I actually did the same while writing it! And you picked such a perfect passage to reference. I even went back and reread the beach scene in chapter 15 where Rebecca told Amber it was okay not to go to college. She may be tiny, but her influence on Amber has been massive.

 

"It’s exactly like that in Donnica’s mind. But thanks to Rebecca’s influence, Amber speaks up, saying she wants time to think about her future. This is a great evolution of Amber’s character. Even though it angers Donnica, we see Amber is ready to fight for what she wants, not just accept her mother’s plans. But it’s hard to face Donnica when she’s set on something, even Trevor can’t say anything to her. Just like that, she shuts down the conversation and returns to her usual self, casually talking with Dean Nolan as if it were a minor issue to deal with later."

Exactly. This is a real step forward for Amber. She pushes back, but yeah, Donnica's not exactly someone who takes rejection well. I loved writing the moment where Trevor tries to step in and Donnica just goes, “HUSH.” Like she’s telling a child to be quiet. It’s brutal, but very her.

 

"Worse still, Donnica leaves with Dean Nolan and Sabrina, once again excluding Amber from discussions about her own future. Amber is left with Trevor, waiting for her mother. Trevor, however, recalls earlier in the day when he helped Clara. It’s interesting. I wonder if that experience opened Trevor’s eyes, much like Donnica’s first taste of power with Trevor and the second one when she walk in the Kingdom. Now comes my favorite part of the chapter, and I have to say it’s absolutely perfect in every detail. I love how Trevor acts like a good father figure, one who knows when to listen and when to offer advice. The fact that Amber listens to him and doesn’t reject him, as she did at the start of the story is amazing. This conversation alone showcases Amber’s growth.
The talk itself is incredible. Trevor knows exactly what to say and how to act to connect with Amber, explaining both sides to help her understand Donnica better. I also loved how Amber opens up to Trevor, sharing her feelings about her future and even her guilt toward Rebecca. Trevor, once again, reassures her that he forgives her, it’s a powerful moment."

Yes! This was the core of the chapter for me. As I was writing it, I genuinely thought the Donnica/Amber material in the courtyard would be the emotional highlight… but this scene just clicked. It had to thread a very tricky needle: Trevor and Amber have a rocky past, so I couldn’t jump straight to warm-and-fuzzy. I needed Trevor to find just the right entry point (gentle, honest, steady) and Amber to meet him there. And the fact that they both show care for each other in this scene? That’s the win. That’s the growth.

I also love that you picked up on Trevor’s earlier moment with Clara influencing this. You're absolutely right… every character moment should ripple forward. And here, Trevor’s recent experience gave him just enough clarity and confidence to know how to step into that father-figure role.

 

"Finally, the visit ends, and it’s time for Amber to reach out to her mother. But Donnica, acting like the lawyer rather than a mom, brings all the bad moments of the visit flooding back into Amber’s mind. Her armor goes back up, and the door closes again."

Yes, the tragic end. And what’s so heartbreaking is that Donnica isn’t even trying to hurt her. It’s not cruelty. It’s just who she is. She slips back into lawyer-mode like it’s muscle memory, and in doing so, she slams the emotional door shut. It’s not villainy, it’s life. And life is so often made of these quiet tragedies between people who do love each other but don’t know how to be with each other.

 

"In conclusion, this chapter is perfect. The structure is flawless, mirroring Amber’s feelings toward Donnica: it starts bad, gets better, dips again, and ultimately falls apart, perhaps leaving things worse than before. The moments between Amber and Donnica, and Amber and Trevor, are perfectly written, hitting exactly where they should. You truly connect with Amber, and throughout nearly the entire segment, I wanted to tell Donnica, “For once in your life, please stop being Donnica. Just listen. Let go of your need to control everything and hear your daughter, it’s all she wants.”

Yeah, that push and pull between the positive and negative really gives a chapter its shape, it creates contrast and makes it feel like it’s actually moving. I’m so glad you noticed that, because it’s not easy to pull off in the writing. And I love that you felt so strongly you wanted to shout at Donnica… as a writer, that kind of reaction is amazing to hear. To me, it shows how these characters aren’t just villains or heroes, but people caught in their own fates, sometimes hurting each other without meaning to. That’s what keeps them relatable even when they’re at their worst.

 

"My favorite moments, of course, are the Trevor and Amber scenes. They highlight the evolution of their relationship, which was complicated at first, to say the least. Now, you can feel a connection, maybe even a father-daughter bond, which I really hope for. Amber deserves a good man in her life, even if he’s a tiny one who, when he speaks, often feels like the giant while others seem small."

Beautifully said. Trevor may be small, but when he speaks, he fills a room. That quiet dignity, that calm steadiness... it’s exactly what Amber needs. And I’m right there with you hoping this father/daughter bond continues to grow. She needs that kind of love in her life.

 

"To end this review, I want to say how incredible the work on Trevor and Amber is. I also feel like Trevor’s ability to help people, discovered in the Kingdom, may be useful in the future with the messed-up giantesses in his life (hello, Helena) and even the tinies in the Kingdom now."

Thank you so much for this review. You said this might be my best segment… but I KNOW this is your best review! I’ve read it half a dozen times already and it still hits just as hard. And yes, Trevor’s time in the Kingdom might’ve been the beginning of something bigger. These giantesses need help… and who better to give it than the tiny man who somehow always sees through them?

Thanks again, truly. I loved every word of this!

Reviewer: PlanetMight88 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2025 10:52 PM Title: PART 33

Great chapter.

It looks like a conflict is brewing between Donnica and Helena.

Author's Response:

It really does feel like our two titans are on a collision course… though since Helena set them on this path herself, maybe she’s anticipating a very different outcome.

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2025 3:33 AM Title: PART 32

Damn, S5 was just fucking adorable! I love seeing Scarlett and Rebecca together!

But first, you teased me a bit by tying Amber and the college visit into this segment. I mean, I knew we weren't following Amber because we started with Scarlett and Rebecca at Blended Bliss (glad to see Scarlett see the light and dump Pulse & Peel, only going to that shithole to get rejected; thanks Amber!), but for a second I thought we might split things up somehow and see both things, as unlikely as it would be to pull that off without starting a new segment. I'm still hopeful that next chapter might give us a glimpse of that family college visit, though, especially given what we learned about the visit (and the other ones scheduled after it) here.

It's a very Donnica thing to do to schedule all of these visits to all of these elite schools without consulting Amber to see if she even wanted to go to any of them, let alone if those dates and times worked for her. Going into this arc, Amber was starting to feel closer to Donnica and Donnica had a real desire to try to become a bigger part of her daughter's life. Between the Naomi visit and this, though, it seems like things are back to the way they were. Again, it's really, really sad to see Donnica trying to handle her daughter like she does everything else (besides Trevor and Annabel, when she's not mad at sweet, sweet Annie).

Donnica really wants to connect with Amber, but she doesn't know how, even though she was doing just that with Annabel before the Status-C incident. But Donnica is so busy trying to plan Amber's future and set her up for life that she hasn't stopped to get to know her daughter and see what she wants. As we saw in this segment, that's only pushing Amber further away.

If only there were some tiny, brilliant father figure-type hanging around that could help bridge this gap between mother and daughter ...

As for Scarlett and Rebecca, this was yet another great example of you using real, serious problems people have as a basis for bonding your characters. This was kind of like a much softer Trevor/Annie/empathy moment from when Trevor started working at the firm. Scarlett's fear of failure is a very real thing, and unlike some corny sitcom, it was really well portrayed here. I loved Scarlett's initial defenses, even as she started to doubt them, because those are real reactions.

"I'm not afraid of failing. I do new stuff sometimes."

Yeah, it's not the failing that you're really afraid of; it's the letting people down. The judgment. Looking stupid. You can try and fail new things on your own and be totally fine. Great fucking work on illustrating this point!

But yeah, Rebecca clocking this in Scarlett because she went through it herself checks out. And like with Amber, we're seeing Rebecca's relationship with Scarlett building off of things they have in common, only Rebecca seems to have more in common with Scarlett than she does with Amber. So I appreciate the consistency in the builds, as well as showing us how this one is different from Rebecca and Amber's.

Shit, even them geeking out over old soccer film was as deep as it was cute!

The retail rejection therapy was fucking great! I love that it made Scarlett "make a fool of herself"  to other people, only to realize that it's no big deal. Those scenarios were pretty funny, too. I like how they were all either met with indifference or fun (rather than cruel) laughter. It was a really great way for her to start learning to handle that feeling in the pit of her stomach over small things like that (the fear, not Rebecca!).

And Rebecca transitioning it to something actually matters, getting Scarlett to approach the "rouge" group like that was perfect! After all that fun and calming Scarlett's nerves on the smaller stuff, a real test presented itself. And Scarlett expected to get rejected, and that made them actually accepting her into the group even sweeter, both for her and for us!

But the real highlight of that part was Scarlett finding the strength to do that in Rebecca. Ironically, it seems like the fear of letting Rebecca down significantly outweighed the fear of making a fool out of herself. This is fast becoming a theme with Scarlett. Rebecca has very quickly become extremely important to her, and this scene made that very clear!

And Scarlett feeling that love for Rebecca, even stronger than those feelings hit her the last time they were together, was such a powerful moment! And this time, even Rebecca couldn't deny it! These two have very deep, very real feelings for each other, and I both love it and feel bad for Amber.

But yeah, both of them feeling completely seen makes a lot of sense, given how this relationship has developed. Scarlett saw Rebecca, really saw her, after the pageant, when she realized what Rebecca did for her. And she saw her again when she realized everything she went through with Rebecca here. And Rebecca has always seen Scarlett, always diagnosing her problems and going out of her way to help. These two know each other so well already, and it's hard not to root for that, even with poor Amber looking like she might get stuck with the short end here.

Oh, and the dog scene was really sweet! Seeing Scarlett being so overprotective and knowing that the dog was a service animal and probably no real threat only made it even more adorable.

But yeah, I had two big takeaways from this segment.

First, I think helping Scarlett learn to manage her fear of failure is going to backfire on Rebecca. Because when Scarlett can't contain these feelings anymore, she's going to realize  that she's "worth it" and "deserves to be happy," so she'll get over her fear of rejection and possibly losing her friendship with Amber and actually ask Rebecca out. That would be an impossible position for Rebecca to be in, and I'm really curious how she'll handle it if it happens.

Second, as far as we know, there has been no imprinting involved between Scarlett and Rebecca. What they're feeling is unquestionably all them. As I said before (and we learned more about back in S1), imprinting can change the way a tiny feels about a giant, and we know that Amber accidentally imprinted Rebecca, even if we don't know how much that has affected their relationship (because, again, there are legitimate reasons for them to love each other, too).

So now we're potentially heading to a point where Rebecca might have to choose between sincere, natural love or maybe at least partial "artificial" love from being imprinted. I asked several reviews back if imprinted love being real or fake made a difference if the two people were happy, and now it looks like we might actually find out!

Of course, my fingers are still crossed for that three-way relationship (it's the happy endings guy in me), but the way this is shaping up, I'm thinking that Rebecca might need to make a choice at some point. And if she does, I might agonize over it as much as she does!

But man, what a great way to end the chapter! This was a gentler one overall, so I'm assuming you're going to really darken our souls with the next one!

Author's Response:

"It's a very Donnica thing to do to schedule all of these visits to all of these elite schools without consulting Amber to see if she even wanted to go to any of them, let alone if those dates and times worked for her. Going into this arc, Amber was starting to feel closer to Donnica and Donnica had a real desire to try to become a bigger part of her daughter's life. Between the Naomi visit and this, though, it seems like things are back to the way they were. Again, it's really, really sad to see Donnica trying to handle her daughter like she does everything else (besides Trevor and Annabel, when she's not mad at sweet, sweet Annie)."

That is SUCH a Donnica move, haha. I love writing that dynamic… this clash between her rigid, structured upbringing and Amber’s more modern, emotionally fluent world. It’s easy to write conflicts where people are on opposite sides of some moral line, but this kind of intergenerational misunderstanding has a quieter tragedy to it. And the best part is Donnica isn’t doing it on purpose. She’s not trying to control Amber maliciously… she’s just being Donnica. I’m really excited to bring their relationship into sharper focus as the story moves forward.

 

"If only there were some tiny, brilliant father figure-type hanging around that could help bridge this gap between mother and daughter ..."

If only...

 

"As for Scarlett and Rebecca, this was yet another great example of you using real, serious problems people have as a basis for bonding your characters. This was kind of like a much softer Trevor/Annie/empathy moment from when Trevor started working at the firm. Scarlett's fear of failure is a very real thing, and unlike some corny sitcom, it was really well portrayed here. I loved Scarlett's initial defenses, even as she started to doubt them, because those are real reactions."

Thank you for that! Fear of failure is something I think everyone deals with to some degree, and I wanted it to feel real for Scarlett, especially because she’s an overachiever. I was a little worried people might think someone like her wouldn’t have that kind of fear, but it’s often because of that pressure to perform that people like Scarlett struggle the most. It’s not just a teen thing… it’s a human thing.

 

"But yeah, Rebecca clocking this in Scarlett because she went through it herself checks out. And like with Amber, we're seeing Rebecca's relationship with Scarlett building off of things they have in common, only Rebecca seems to have more in common with Scarlett than she does with Amber. So I appreciate the consistency in the builds, as well as showing us how this one is different from Rebecca and Amber's."

Totally agreed. For any relationship to feel authentic, there has to be something shared at the core. Even when characters seem like opposites on the surface, there’s usually some hidden thread (shared experiences, similar worldviews, emotional patterns, etc.) With Scarlett and Rebecca, it’s starting to show verrrry obviously, and yeah… they’re more alike than Amber and Rebecca in some very fundamental ways.

 

"The retail rejection therapy was fucking great! I love that it made Scarlett "make a fool of herself" to other people, only to realize that it's no big deal. Those scenarios were pretty funny, too. I like how they were all either met with indifference or fun (rather than cruel) laughter. It was a really great way for her to start learning to handle that feeling in the pit of her stomach over small things like that (the fear, not Rebecca!)."

Haha thank you! I needed a way to explore Scarlett’s fear of failure in a way that felt both grounded and entertaining, and the impromptu rejection therapy setup gave me the perfect excuse. I’m so glad the reactions stood out to you, I had a blast putting those scenarios together. That smoothie challenge Scarlett did to kick things off (ordering the rival drink)  was my fav to write.  I loved how utterly devastated she was as she scurried back to the table where Rebecca was waiting haha

 

"But the real highlight of that part was Scarlett finding the strength to do that in Rebecca. Ironically, it seems like the fear of letting Rebecca down significantly outweighed the fear of making a fool out of herself. This is fast becoming a theme with Scarlett. Rebecca has very quickly become extremely important to her, and this scene made that very clear!"

Yes! That actually started as a throwaway line in early drafts, but when I came back to it weeks later, I realized that it might be the most important moment of the segment… the hinge. It’s where Scarlett’s willingness to face rejection and her growing feelings for Rebecca collide. She doesn’t just care what Rebecca thinks, she’s starting to hold how Rebecca sees her in high regard. That’s big. And it’s only growing.

 

"But yeah, both of them feeling completely seen makes a lot of sense, given how this relationship has developed. Scarlett saw Rebecca, really saw her, after the pageant, when she realized what Rebecca did for her. And she saw her again when she realized everything she went through with Rebecca here. And Rebecca has always seen Scarlett, always diagnosing her problems and going out of her way to help. These two know each other so well already, and it's hard not to root for that, even with poor Amber looking like she might get stuck with the short end here."

Exactly, there’s something deeply honest about both of them. Neither of them is particularly good at hiding how they feel, even when they want to. And now, after everything they’ve shared, they’ve reached this level of mutual vulnerability that just clicks. They've bared their souls to each other and how could it not start to turn into something more?

 

"Oh, and the dog scene was really sweet! Seeing Scarlett being so overprotective and knowing that the dog was a service animal and probably no real threat only made it even more adorable."

Yes! I love playing with that size contrast. After a whole segment of Rebecca feeling “big,” guiding and encouraging Scarlett, we suddenly remember just how small she really is, and how massive Scarlett can be when she chooses to protect someone. It reasserts their dynamic in a really emotionally charged way, and even makes their connection feel a little sensual.

 

"But yeah, I had two big takeaways from this segment."

No spoilers from me, of course, so I wont go into those takeaways, but I think it’s safe to say that all three girls are influencing each other now. That’s how real relationships work, right? We take in pieces of the people we love (or desire, or envy), and it changes us. And those changes are coming. As for imprinting… well. Let’s just say that topic will matter.

 

"But man, what a great way to end the chapter! This was a gentler one overall, so I'm assuming you're going to really darken our souls with the next one!"

Haha, yes! I guess I am the anti-commercial writer because I like ending chapters on softer beats! That’s why these Rebecca/Amber/Scarlett segments often land at the end: they’re emotional, reflective, and intimate.

...although I just might be opening with the girls next chapter, we shall see! (or rather… you shall see lol)

 

Thank you so much for this review, seriously! Your thoughts are always a highlight and I'm always excited to get your feedback on my gentle scenes! (well, I'm excited for feedback on all my scenes, but as you can tell we are getting more and more gentle segments by the chapter...

...it might soon time to darken things up!)

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 05 2025 10:10 PM Title: PART 32

The final segment of the incredible Chapter 32 and it’s the perfect way to close it out. It’s much lighter than the previous four segments, offering a slice-of-life moment with Scarlett and Rebecca, exactly what we needed to catch our breath after the intense action in Segment 4.

First, I really enjoyed the contrast between Donnica and Amber regarding the college visit. Donnica is genuinely excited about it, treating it as a significant event, even leaving the kingdom and Trevor behind (despite some changes to the initial plan who make him stay for the visit). Meanwhile, Amber would rather do anything else than spend time with her mom at some fancy college she has no interest in attending.

Still, I hope things go smoothly for both and that they have meaningful mother-daughter time.

Another interesting detail is that Annie was the one who told Amber about the meeting with Donnica. This might suggest that Donnica has forgiven Annie’s mistake with Trevor, at least, I hope so, because I love their trio.

The heart of this segment, though, is clearly Scarlett and Rebecca’s time together, and it was fantastic. I loved learning more about Scarlett, she’s such a compelling character. It’s fascinating to see her vulnerability in this segment, especially since she was introduced as a strong, determined character striving to be even better. Here, we see she’s like Amber: she wears an armor, but without it, she’s just a normal teenager with lot of fears.

Rebecca steps in to help her through Rejection Therapy, which I think was a brilliant idea. As someone who relates to Scarlett’s fears, I found this approach amazing.

The execution was perfect, starting with silly tasks like asking for a rival company’s product or a free item, and building up to the final challenge, the one that made her uncomfortable from the start: talking to the girls on her soccer team to hang out and train with them to improve her skills. And it works! I loved how the thing that scared her most turned out to be no big deal; it just took the courage to talk to others.

The chapter ends with a pivotal moment: the realization that Scarlett has feelings for Rebecca. Before that can go further, a dog appears, prompting Scarlett to protect Rebecca. I really liked this imagery because, throughout the segment, it feels like Rebecca is the giantess, leading Scarlett with advice and direction while Scarlett follows. But at the end, the balance of power is restored; Scarlett is the strong one, protecting Rebecca, who appears more vulnerable.

In conclusion, this was an amazing segment. It resonated with me deeply because I saw myself in Scarlett. It also raises intriguing questions: How will Amber’s meeting with her mom go? Has Annie truly regained Donnica’s favor? And how will the relationships between Amber, Scarlett, and Rebecca evolve, especially with Scarlett’s growing feelings for Rebecca becoming clearer?

Author's Response:

"The final segment of the incredible Chapter 32 and it’s the perfect way to close it out. It’s much lighter than the previous four segments, offering a slice-of-life moment with Scarlett and Rebecca, exactly what we needed to catch our breath after the intense action in Segment 4."

Thank you for saying so! I was a little worried the first part of the chapter might’ve been too heavy and that this last segment wouldn’t quite land in the same way, but after hearing your thoughts (and a few others), I’m really happy with how it turned out :)

 

"First, I really enjoyed the contrast between Donnica and Amber regarding the college visit. Donnica is genuinely excited about it, treating it as a significant event, even leaving the kingdom and Trevor behind (despite some changes to the initial plan who make him stay for the visit). Meanwhile, Amber would rather do anything else than spend time with her mom at some fancy college she has no interest in attending."

Good catch! They totally fell into the classic mother/teenage-daughter dynamic here, Donnica eager to spend time with Amber and Amber just wanting to be anywhere else. That said, I do love Donnica’s effort in this moment to connect with her daughter. Fingers crossed it ends up being a good memory for them both :)

 

"Another interesting detail is that Annie was the one who told Amber about the meeting with Donnica. This might suggest that Donnica has forgiven Annie’s mistake with Trevor, at least, I hope so, because I love their trio."

You might be onto something there, and we just might be checking back in on Donnica & Annabel very soon… maybe even next chapter ;)

 

"The heart of this segment, though, is clearly Scarlett and Rebecca’s time together, and it was fantastic. I loved learning more about Scarlett, she’s such a compelling character. It’s fascinating to see her vulnerability in this segment, especially since she was introduced as a strong, determined character striving to be even better. Here, we see she’s like Amber: she wears an armor, but without it, she’s just a normal teenager with lot of fears."

Totally agree, there’s nothing better than pulling back the curtain on a character like that, and with Scarlett, we finally get to see that beneath all her strength and drive, she’s still just a teenage girl figuring it all out, much like Amber. I’m really glad you found her compelling… it’s always a challenge juggling this many characters, so it means a lot to hear she’s standing out.

 

"Rebecca steps in to help her through Rejection Therapy, which I think was a brilliant idea. As someone who relates to Scarlett’s fears, I found this approach amazing."

Thank you so much! I remember reading about rejection therapy years ago and really connecting with it myself… it stuck with me. I think everyone carries some level of fear around being rejected, and I was hoping this scene might nudge a few readers to be a little braver in their own lives :)

 

"The chapter ends with a pivotal moment: the realization that Scarlett has feelings for Rebecca. Before that can go further, a dog appears, prompting Scarlett to protect Rebecca. I really liked this imagery because, throughout the segment, it feels like Rebecca is the giantess, leading Scarlett with advice and direction while Scarlett follows. But at the end, the balance of power is restored; Scarlett is the strong one, protecting Rebecca, who appears more vulnerable."

Yes! You totally got what I was trying to do there. Rebecca definitely steps into a bigger role in this chapter (guiding, supporting, even “leading” Scarlett) but that final moment was about snapping the physical power dynamic back into place, and letting Scarlett own her size again. And it hits harder, I think, because of how grateful she is to Rebecca. That shift really charges the energy between them. It supercharges the moment!

 

"In conclusion, this was an amazing segment. It resonated with me deeply because I saw myself in Scarlett. It also raises intriguing questions: How will Amber’s meeting with her mom go? Has Annie truly regained Donnica’s favor? And how will the relationships between Amber, Scarlett, and Rebecca evolve, especially with Scarlett’s growing feelings for Rebecca becoming clearer?"

Thank you so much for this review, it was amazing as always.

And I can happily confirm: we’ll be seeing Amber and Donnica’s college tour very soon, and we’ll also check in on where things stand between Donnica and Annabel shortly as well. As for the evolving dynamic between the teenagers and Rebecca… that’s absolutely going to be a major thread going forward. Can’t wait to show you where it all leads.

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 03 2025 10:06 PM Title: PART 32

I absolutely love the introduction of the third segment—it’s captivating! In the second segment’s introduction, Trevor feels uncomfortable with Juliette’s presence in the kingdom, but in the third, he admires her. It feels like helping Clara and seeing Juliette’s vulnerability changed him. Perhaps he’s starting to feel like he belongs in the kingdom, not just an outsider.

I know I say this a lot, but the descriptive work amazes me every time. It’s pristine, we can visualize everything perfectly because of it.

What I really enjoy in this chapter, and particularly in this segment, is the connection between Trevor and Kassandra. Sometimes, it feels like they’re two sides of the same coin. Their bond strengthens throughout the chapter. At first, Kassandra was just a beautiful lady, then a respectable figure, then a guide and friend, and now, maybe a lover soon? Who knows what might happen in the kingdom!

I also loved the moment in the cabin when Trevor opens up to Kassandra. Their conversation is engaging, and Kassandra’s actions toward Trevor are perfect. Her calm, subtle approach shows she wants to get closer to him in her own way. You portrayed it so well—we can feel how hard it is for Trevor to resist her, unlike with Vivara or Clara, where he seems awkward and uninterested. With Kassandra, it’s different. Fortunately for him, and unfortunately for her, he hears and feels the footsteps of two giantesses, especially Donnica.

I feel sad for Kassandra, though—she gets completely ignored the moment Trevor sees Donnica. Before we get to the moment with Trevor and Donnica, we see Donnica discovering the kingdom, and it’s clear she loves this place. It’s interesting how she completely ignores Helena’s explanations and just revels in the feeling of power.

The best part of this segment is when Trevor and Donnica see each other. Donnica also notices Kassandra leaving the cabin after Trevor, and being Donnica, she immediately feels jealousy and anger before even considering why they were together. As she’s about to confront Kassandra, Helena stops her, it’s amusing how Helena already knows what Donnica will do. Even though Helena tries to calm the situation, it’s too late. Donnica is already recalling the scars of her past, and trying to soothe her is pointless.

Trevor, however, confronts her, and this passage is absolutely perfect. Donnica’s wrath, Helena’s cold anger, and Kassandra’s calm attempts to pacify Donnica create a fantastic dynamic. Helena’s claim that Kassandra and Trevor being together is “impossible” made me laugh so much—she’s so blind, it’s hilarious!

Another intriguing aspect of this segment is the power of Donnica and Trevor. Even in the kingdom, a place where they don’t belong, they’re at the center of everything. Even Helena, who owns the place and has authority over Trevor, doesn’t challenge him when he disregards the rules. The fact that Trevor, a tiny man, is the only one in the world who dares challenge Donnica is priceless. It’s like he’s a giant among men. Perhaps it’s because Trevor and Donnica are so similar—they both need someone to put them in their place, not with strength but with something more powerful.

Sadly, Donnica’s exploration of the kingdom ends here because she has a meeting with Amber to visit colleges across the country.

Segment four is also incredible, even though it focuses more on action. I love the beginning, with Donnica wanting to own the kingdom and not just be Helena’s guest. This segment really hints at tension brewing between these two powerful giantesses. The way Donnica controls her pleasure while in the kingdom reminds me of chapter two, when she first craved fun with Trevor. It’s the same intense feeling—she couldn’t focus and became overwhelmed with desire. That was also when she realized she’s a goddess, so maybe this new experience will make her even more divine.

I truly feel like this is Donnica’s third birth: her natural one, the one in chapter two when she discovered her power, and now this moment when she aspires to rule the kingdom. This is sealed when the tiny woman submits to Donnica and gets crushed—she’s the true queen.

But Trevor is still there, and wow, I love how he talks to Donnica! It’s so entertaining—he doesn’t care that she’s one of the most powerful giantesses. He speaks to her casually, something even the other giantesses never do. Finally, they can’t resist each other anymore, and their explosive, passionate encounter is wild and bestial. We can feel how much they missed each other.

In conclusion, these are two amazing segments. The fourth is packed with action, while the third has fascinating developments, especially Donnica’s feelings toward the kingdom and Kassandra growing closer to Trevor. These segments raise many questions, particularly about how Donnica will react to Helena when Trevor is with her again. Without this leverage, will Helena be able to stop Donnica?

Author's Response:

"I absolutely love the introduction of the third segment—it’s captivating! In the second segment’s introduction, Trevor feels uncomfortable with Juliette’s presence in the kingdom, but in the third, he admires her. It feels like helping Clara and seeing Juliette’s vulnerability changed him. Perhaps he’s starting to feel like he belongs in the kingdom, not just an outsider."

Great catch! He really does have two completely different reactions before and after the cabin scene… and it’s that glimpse of vulnerability that flips the switch for him. Funny how that works: we spend so much of our lives hiding the raw parts of ourselves, when in reality, it’s that exposure that makes us relatable and draws others in.

 

"What I really enjoy in this chapter, and particularly in this segment, is the connection between Trevor and Kassandra. Sometimes, it feels like they’re two sides of the same coin. Their bond strengthens throughout the chapter. At first, Kassandra was just a beautiful lady, then a respectable figure, then a guide and friend, and now, maybe a lover soon? Who knows what might happen in the kingdom!"

Yeah, there’s definitely something between them, even if it’s subtle right now. They just seem to move in step with each other, both carrying themselves well among giants, bouncing off each others energy. Where that spark goes in the future… well, that’s the fun part to find out.

 

"I feel sad for Kassandra, though—she gets completely ignored the moment Trevor sees Donnica. Before we get to the moment with Trevor and Donnica, we see Donnica discovering the kingdom, and it’s clear she loves this place. It’s interesting how she completely ignores Helena’s explanations and just revels in the feeling of power."

In all fairness, Trevor’s already taken, so if Kassandra feels a sting there, that heartbreak is her own to wrestle with. And yes, Donnica is absolutely swept away by the Kingdom… like, reallllly swept away by it. Hmmmmmmmm...

 

"Trevor, however, confronts her, and this passage is absolutely perfect. Donnica’s wrath, Helena’s cold anger, and Kassandra’s calm attempts to pacify Donnica create a fantastic dynamic. Helena’s claim that Kassandra and Trevor being together is “impossible” made me laugh so much—she’s so blind, it’s hilarious!"

I love this breakdown, you nail each energy in the room: the wrath, the cold, the calm. It’s a clash of archetypes. And you’re right, Trevor’s confrontational streak is exactly what makes Donnica burn hotter for him, it fuels their fire. And Helena’s blind spot when it comes to Kassandra is always fun to play with. She just can’t imagine her precious little tiny Kassandra smitten with a troublemaker like Trevor. What happens if she ever does see it though???

 

"Another intriguing aspect of this segment is the power of Donnica and Trevor. Even in the kingdom, a place where they don’t belong, they’re at the center of everything. Even Helena, who owns the place and has authority over Trevor, doesn’t challenge him when he disregards the rules. The fact that Trevor, a tiny man, is the only one in the world who dares challenge Donnica is priceless. It’s like he’s a giant among men. Perhaps it’s because Trevor and Donnica are so similar—they both need someone to put them in their place, not with strength but with something more powerful."

You hit it exactly. Donnica and Trevor are wildly different, yet they mirror each other in ways that matter most. Maybe that shared defiance is the only thing strong enough to balance them, or maybe it’s what will break them. And yes, it’s always amusing to watch Helena tiptoe around Trevor. She’s so determined to win Donnica over that even in her own dominion she lets him bend rules… at least for now.

 

"I truly feel like this is Donnica’s third birth: her natural one, the one in chapter two when she discovered her power, and now this moment when she aspires to rule the kingdom. This is sealed when the tiny woman submits to Donnica and gets crushed—she’s the true queen."

This is EXACTLY the effect I was going for, that the Kingdom’s awakening hit her almost as hard as that first night dominating Trevor back in chapter two. Seeing that connection land for you is incredibly rewarding. Now that she’s tasted this inner desire, the question becomes… what does she do with it?

 

"But Trevor is still there, and wow, I love how he talks to Donnica! It’s so entertaining—he doesn’t care that she’s one of the most powerful giantesses. He speaks to her casually, something even the other giantesses never do. Finally, they can’t resist each other anymore, and their explosive, passionate encounter is wild and bestial. We can feel how much they missed each other."

Yes! Trevor’s rebellion is the accelerant on Donnica’s fire, it’s what makes her hunger flare into full-blown lust. I’m so glad that came across. And you’re right, they did miss each other, that reunion was fun to see play out. But with Trevor about to face an even longer stay at the estate, the real question is… how will they cope when they’re pulled apart again for even more time?

 

"In conclusion, these are two amazing segments. The fourth is packed with action, while the third has fascinating developments, especially Donnica’s feelings toward the kingdom and Kassandra growing closer to Trevor. These segments raise many questions, particularly about how Donnica will react to Helena when Trevor is with her again. Without this leverage, will Helena be able to stop Donnica?"

Thank you so much, as always! You honed in on exactly the threads I wanted readers to notice, Donnica’s growing intoxication with the Kingdom, and Kassandra’s subtle pull toward Trevor. Both will play a big part moving forward.

And yes… Trevor’s next prolonged stay is going to test everyone involved. Everyone.

Thanks again!