Date: December 20 2024 1:57 AM Title: PART 12
This chapter was really nice; I love how the relationship between Amber and Rebecca starts to build. It's amazing to see their development chapter after chapter. Rebecca, who tries to be mean, ends up helping Amber, which was fantastic. The fact that Amber cannot stand people torturing Rebecca, even if they're unaware of her situation while she makes her life a living hell, is so well done. The football advice, as a fan of this sport, I really enjoyed that part. And Donnica I loved her two-faced nature; the fact she can be a great mother, nice to Trevor, yet such a bitch to the others tiny adds such humanity to her character. I love how you develop your characters; it makes following this story more interesting, even in chapters with less action. It something some story lake you don't connect with the character.
I really want to thanks for your amazing work. And a Merry Christmas and Happy New Year! It's going to be a nice year with your work.
Author's Response:
I was wondering if another soccer/football fan would enjoy this chapter. I'm a huge fan of the sport myself so it was cool to see someone point it out :)
Thanks for all your kind words, I love reading your analysis and I definitely looking forward to writing more in the new year.
Date: December 19 2024 11:59 PM Title: PART 1
So first off enjoy your break.
So I am in a quandary about this story. I love Amber and Rebecca,. and their relationship or lack there of. I like seeing Rebecca used by Amber,. i also love seeing Rebecca actually give helpful advice to Amber and give shit back to her. I love that jessica stands up to her as best she can.. I want them to come to some kind of real equilibrium. I want Rebecca to come to enjoy her life with Amber. Amber needs to learn to love and nto just possesses Jessica.
This isnt against you as a writer, but I dont usually care about guys in stories like these. I dont care for Trevor. That is a guy who is so far up a giantesses ass( to be fair I cant blame him) that he cant see the anything else but her shit.
As for the way the story goes that is your call. But the way I see it, A giantess needs a tiny, and a tiny needs a giantess. So I hope Jessica can come to some kind of life with Amber eventualy, one where one isnt dead, but some kind of mutual respect/
Author's Response:
I love seeing the love for the Amber/Rebecca relationship, most reviews seem to gravitate toward the Donnica/Trevor scenes and I love writing those passages but there something about Amber and Rebecca I'm really drawn to. Both of them are so passionate and filled with their own kinds of rage I love watching them collide. Sometimes even when I'm writing them I'm like "damnnnnn"
I wont spoil anything for you but I do have the ending to the story plotted out and I think you'll like how it finishes ;)
Date: December 18 2024 12:12 PM Title: PART 11
I love this one so much; there's less giantess action, but I really love the construction of the universe. It's so nice to see the 'giantess' in a bad situation to show at the end they are not as powerful. Do you do other stories than giantess? I would love to discover more of your work.
Author's Response:
yeah i was a little worried having less explicit material and more character development but it seems to have paid off, I'm getting great feedback on the chapter and I'm happy to announce there will be more to come. I have written other things (not giantess) in the past but they are not very good. In fact I'd pretty much given up as a writer until I tried my hand at writing giantess stuff which seems to be something I'm doing ok with (at least initially)
definitely excited to finish this story and begin another. There will be more to come from me for sure :)
Date: December 17 2024 8:27 PM Title: PART 11
I've been enjoying this story for a while, and I'm really loving the more emotional developments in these later chapters! At first I thought this was going to be a pretty straightforward story, but Donnica and Amber are evolving into quite complex characters and as such, the story is now becoming much harder to predict, which is pretty awesome!
But first, I have to say that I love the way you convey the difference of scale between the giants and tinies. You really hone in on minor details, such as the shockwaves and vibrations from footsteps at ground level for tinies and how powerful a giant's voice is to a tiny, for example.
You also really hit a place in terms of character mentalities that keeps drawing me back to this story, almost hypnotically so. For instance, the way Donnica walked as she went to dethrone the other head of the firm, imagining how powerful she must look to any tinies below who happened to be standing nearby (with the implication that she couldn't be bothered to look down and see if they were there) and how enthralled Rebecca was the first time she saw Donnica, falling into that trap of viewing a giant as something divine, were both extremely powerful passages. A lot of the language used throughout this story emphasizes these mentalities, and this has built up gradually since the very first chapter. Well done!
But what compelled me to write this review are the ways that Donnica and Amber were portrayed in this chapter (particularly in the back end) and how previous chapters have built to our girls' big moments here.
I'll start with Amber. Holy shit did I, despite everything she's done, feel so terrible for her by the end of the chapter. I've mostly thought of her as a simplistic bratty character throughout most of the story, but the last two chapters have shown her to be anything but simplistic (yeah, bratty still fits, thankfully!). I was a little surprised last chapter when she actually negotiated with Trevor. He stood up to her and called her bluff, and she surprisingly seemed to respect that. It was an eye-opening moment for me. Granted, I was sure part of this was her being afraid that Donnica wouldn't believe the doctored photo against Trevor's word, but honestly, after reading this chapter, I'm not even sure she was ever going to follow through with that threat. I now think it was seeing how serious Trevor was that got through to her in that moment, and she compromised with him as a result.
It was sad to see her freaking out when she realized how serious her legal troubles were. She really didn't comprehend how big a deal fucking with tinies like that is on the larger legal stage, and she was terrified not only that she would go to jail but that she may have fucked things up for her mom as well (which shows that her teasing that she didn't care that killing Trevor would get her mom in trouble, as she claimed back when she first started fucking with him). I think it says a lot that, despite Donnica feeling rage toward the tinies for this (more on that in a minute), Amber never once took out her feelings on either Trevor or Rebecca during the time her future was in doubt.
Then we have an elated Amber coming home after being cleared, looking to reward Trevor for saving her, almost assuredly by showing him up her ass. And I'm now convinced that, in her mind, that was exactly what that would have been for him, a reward. After seeing the emotional, frightening scene that started as soon as she saw that Rebecca had left her room, it's obvious that two things are true when it comes to Amber's views on tinies:
1. She tells herself that they're just bugs to justify what she does to them, but she clearly doesn't really believe this.
2. She had convinced herself that, deep down, all tinies loved the way she treated Trevor and Rebecca.
In short, I went from thinking that Amber was evil to realizing that she's just delusional, at least to a certain extent. The two points above were tools she used to keep herself from feeling any guilt from raping and otherwise fucking with the two tinies in the house. Because she would feel guilty. Part of her realizes that tinies are actually people just like her, only smaller. And that makes a lot of sense when you think about it: We already know from Donnica's anecdote earlier in the story that Amber is afraid of real bugs and certainly wouldn't enjoy playing with them. She loves that she can fuck with real people, especially ones older than herself, but she's not really as terrible a person as we first thought, so she would feel like shit if she allowed herself to accept the truth.
So she lies to herself, tells herself that their basically just bugs, not people like her, despite the fact that, if this were true, the appeal of what she did to them would be lost. It's a lot of mental gymnastics to go through, but, for her, the end result was worth it.
Then there's the other way she eased her conscience. She caught a glimpse of how much Trevor enjoyed being at her mother's feet. So she convinced herself that tinies secretly love being dominated. No matter how much they beg and plead, they actually want her to do what she's doing to them. And in her defense, she's not entirely wrong when it comes to Trevor specifically. So everybody wins, right?
Except that Rebecca's outburst shatters that narrative. Not only does Rebecca's hatred show that she wasn't secretly enjoying being Amber's pussy slave or the time spent up the giant's ass (which, from the negotiation with Trevor, she probably realized already), but Rebecca's constant insults and lack of fear at the prospect of being crushed is even more devastating. Rebecca would quite literally rather die than continue to go through with Amber's fun. There's no way to uphold the illusion that Rebecca actually wanted any of this at that point, which is what makes the tiny's words so powerful to Amber.
How do I know any of this is true? Because Rebecca isn't a stain somewhere. Amber threatened it multiple times, even mad movements to suggest she was actually going to do it. But she never did. Because she knows that would be murder, and I don't think she's a killer. She was only trying to scare Rebecca back into a state of mind that allow Amber to keep lying to herself. Rebecca told her to fuck off instead, and that's why the chapter ended with Rebecca unhurt and Amber crying into her pillow.
This is a really exciting development for me. I think/hope this might be the start of Amber turning things around, maybe even going on a redemption arc (one of my favorite things). It's certainly not assured that things will go in this direction for her, but the door is open if she wants to walk through, so I'm suddenly extremely interested to see where she goes from here.
Will she realize how fucked up the things she's done really are? Will Rebecca forgive her? Can Rebecca forgive her? If Rebecca can't, will she continue to push Amber, and, if so, will this cause Amber to snap? Am I wrong about all this and my rant above is just the raving of an idiot? These are fun questions to ask!
Then there's Donnica. I love the conflict at the center of her character throughout this story so far. She loves Trevor; he's special to her. But he's also a tiny, a group of people that she's sure is beneath her. Seeing her try to rectify this inherent contradiction throughout the story has been so much fun.
When she was away from Trevor early on, she still thought of him as a slave. A special slave, but still a slave, like any other tiny should be, in her eyes. But that wasn't quite what she thought when she was around him. Her love for him was more present within her in those moments, and she had a harder time thinking of him in those terms.
A perfect example of this is when Trevor was short with her and she punished him by shoving him up her ass (I'm noticing a theme here!). As soon as she had done this, unlike with other tinies who had to suffer this punishment, she immediately felt regret, to the point that this powerful, ruthless woman found herself in tears. While this was a satisfying act of dominance with every other tiny, she hated doing it to him.
And he showed her exactly why she loves him in that very scene. Hearing her cry, even while inside her ass, Trevor feels guilt and sympathy for her, trying to make her happy by licking her asshole. When she pulls him out in response, he apologizes, not out of fear or self-preservation, but because he hated that he made her feel that way. This is the reason that Donnica feels the way she feels about him: He's seen her at her worst and not only accepted her, but embraced her in those times.
There was Donnica's "awakening" when she finally gave in to those darker impulses and treated him like a slave for the first time. He loved it and made her feel loved as he followed her orders, giving her the confidence to take over her firm and try to change society as a whole.
Then there were Donnica's actions when her anger at tinies in general over Amber's legal troubles boiled over. She mocked Trevor, threatened him, kicked him out, and, in the spur of the moment, even considered actually stomping him (I'm convinced that she would have never forgiven herself once she calmed down) as he was leaving. Yet he still stayed, wanting to say goodbye and help her one last time before leaving, despite all that shit from the night before.
I loved the way she was portrayed at the start of that scene, both angry and relieved to see him, feeling like she had to follow through on her threat but struggling to find the will to actually do so. Her need to be a goddess to him and her actual feelings about him were in direct contradiction here. This was really important, I think, as it showed how much she cared about him even before he saved the day. This made her feelings after seeing the video feel more legitimate and less motivated by some temporary happiness and guilt. She's loved him this whole time because he understands who she is and accepts all of her, something no one else has ever done, if I'm reading between the lines correctly.
So all of this made the back end of that scene so much more satisfying. Donnica finally accepting that Trevor was her equal (something I think she quietly felt but suppressed until this moment) felt so good to read. He saved her family and gave her everything, not even being upset about the way she treated him in her anger the night before. He dismissed her guilt and apologies, saying he'd do anything for her and that he only wanted to help. Given her thoughts on every other partner she's ever had, this seems like the first time she's experienced real partnership in a relationship. So she could no longer put herself above him, no matter how small he was, instead looking to offer something to him as well in the way she held him so protectively.
I love the theme here, too. Donnica is a powerful, independent woman, but Trevor is her rock. He's the one that gives her the strength to become better, not the thing holding her back. Having someone like that in your life makes you stronger, not weaker. This is great stuff!
Of course, unlike Amber, I saw nothing here that would extrapolate her feelings for Trevor or the lessons learned from all this that could be extended to the rest of the tiny population. And despite how happy she is that Trevor saved her daughter, maybe even saved her, that anger she felt toward the other tinies surely hasn't diminished in the slightest. In fact, rather than taking the day to celebrate Amber's name being cleared, she dropped her daughter off at the house and went right back to the office. I can only imagine this decision was driven by revenge.
Before, Donnica's goal was to subjugate the tinies, show them their place beneath their betters. Now, however, I think she'll be out for blood. I couldn't help but notice that the crush tag for this story hasn't been utilized yet. I think this is going to change sooner rather than later, and I suspect Donnica will be the one to make use of it.
I'm a happy endings guy, and I hope these developments here have long-term effects that end up making both Donnica and Amber better people. But, at the same time, my horny brain is telling me that Donnica making good on her fantasy and storming the tiny area would be hot as fuck! So I guess I win either way?
As for Rebecca, I love that she's reached her breaking point. I can't tell you how many stories I've seen where I felt a tiny would act exactly like Rebecca is here, only to see them grovel and accept their situation instead. So this was a breath of fresh air for me! I loved how badass her not-give-a-fuck attitude was so much! That it's had such an effect on Amber is the proverbial icing on the cake!
And I understand why she's pissed at Trevor about the video evidence, but ultimately I agree with Trevor on this. I understand why she wants to see Amber suffer too, but this is the worst version of herself, and Trevor has a hard time recognizing his friend when he sees this. He's trying to save her soul, but she's too far gone to care. I'm so interested to see what happens with her moving forward, especially if Amber goes in the direction that I think she's going to go in.
Overall, this is a fantastic story that's developing into something more than I initially thought it would. I look forward to seeing where you take it from here!
Author's Response:
Hey,
I want to really thank you for writing this review. It has been incredible to read someone else look this deeply into my own work.
As of today I have well over 100k words written, maybe closer to 140K with my unedited stuff and I only started during the middle of last month. This project has consumed almost all my free time and all I want is to talk about it but no one in my real life knows about my fetish so I can't.
Getting a comment like yours, going into the meat of the characters and plot was so fun to read, you wrote a lot but I've read it like 5 times already.
I love that you pointed out the character mentalities as you called them, they are not there by accident nor did I write them off hand. Those passages, specifically the ones you referenced took a lot of rewriting. And you're right, I think they are very important to establishing atmosphere and setting. it's one thing to describe the sensory descriptions of being small, but describing things through the characters eyes really brings things to life, or at least I hope they would when i wrote them and I'm happy to see I was at least partially right.
Be on the lookout for more of those, I have a few chapters now I'm editing for release in the new year and I think you're going to dig the passages I have done.
I also love how you pointed out about how Amber didn't take her frustrations out on the tinies when she thought her world was coming apart. That is a point I wanted to drive home but i kind of forgot to add it when I was doing the writing and then I couldn't find a way to naturally insert it into prose after it was done (plus that was already the longest chapter I'd written)
So I just let it go but it's absolutely a point I was hoping people would pick up on and I loved reading about it in your comment. When it comes to erotica I try to focus less on plot and just have intense situations that force characters to reveal themselves and I thought that was a pretty telling action for Amber. But again, I didn't find a way to highlight it so i thought it would fall to the way side so I loved reading your comment on it.
You're also dead correct in reading between the lines in knowing that Donnica loves Trevor because he accepts her for who she is, despite her shortcomings. It's been a really fun love affair to explore and I look forward to taking it farther.
Unfortunately I cant comment on the rest of your points because I don't want to spoil anything but I will say that I do have the ending plotted out and I think you are going to like it ;)
I'm so pumped that you like the story so much that you are considering all these different outcomes for the characters and I'm excited for you to see what's coming.
Also, one last thing, you are absolutely correct in assuming that the crush tag is about to be utilized... very, very, VERY soon :D
the gloves (or rather, the shoes) are coming off.
Just want to give you another heartfelt thank you for the comment, it obviously took you a while to write and I really appreciate the insight you've given me into my own story. I would absolutely love to hear more as we move forward, and once it's all done I've love to finally get into where I am coming from with the character mentalities.
much love brother,
-WorshipFromBelow
Date: December 17 2024 4:38 PM Title: PART 11
Holy moly that was awesome!!!!!!! The emotion and story plot increasing the stakes !!!!! And finally a semi win for tinies that really adds to the story in my opinion just wow
great job and Rebeca is top character she deserves happiness lol
also is wrong that every time a tinies is in one of the asses of a giantess that I wish they fart on them to add to the humiliation lol I know it won’t happen but I honestly want to see
anyway great job!
Author's Response:
yesssss man Rebecca is sick, although she's getting thrown through the ringer, isn't she?
glad you enjoyed the chapter, it was fun escalating the emotional stakes, more of that to come!
I'm not into farts, howeveerrrrrrrrrrrrrrr I might have something planned for a later chapter, just a little something, you'll have to wait and see ;)
Date: December 17 2024 3:36 AM Title: PART 11
Well shit that was quite an impactful second half.
Perhaps things will get better for our tiny duo.
Author's Response:
perhaps... but also perhaps not ;)
Thanks for the comment as always brother, much appreciated
Date: December 17 2024 2:03 AM Title: PART 1
I dont understand Trevor, he cant have both. He needs to get his head out of the giant asses, and realize the truth, rebecca is right. They are both raped and treated like crap. He cant protect Rebecca and whats worse what ever he tells himself, he barely tries to protect her. Amber is a bitch who will kill her, and to be honest I am suprised Trevor hasnt been killed
Author's Response:
It's a hard knock life for the tinies, that's for sure!
Date: December 13 2024 11:22 AM Title: PART 10
Love it; it's nice to see Trevor stand against the giantess who owned him. And I really enjoy seeing Donnica in a more weak side when she speaks about her past. It's really good to have a bit of context about her. She is my favorite by far.
Author's Response:
I'm super happy to hear you enjoyed that part. We are nearing the middle bend of the story so I have a bunch vulnerable/character driven parts coming up, glad to hear they are already being received well... look out for more :)
Date: December 13 2024 6:14 AM Title: PART 10
At least common sense prevailed after Rebecca was talking all that nonsense.
Author's Response:
Donnica can be VERY persuasive
Date: December 10 2024 2:33 AM Title: PART 9
Another fantastic chapter! I really love the interaction with Jill and Alexa; the fact they use a tiny just for a dumb bet is so funny and shows how tinies are seen for normal people, not just the two powerful giantesses we know. The part when Jill uses Rebecca to have revenge on Haley, even if it's not her, is fantastic. And Donnica, the fact that she tortures Tiny without even knowing them is so hot. Hope to see some interaction with just one-time giantess; it's different than with Amber and Donnica.
Author's Response:
funny story, the bet between Jill and Alexa is based on a story of one of my ex-girlfriends, she used to work at a restaurant and after her shift she and a few other girls would take their shoes off and complain about who had the smelliest feet lol.
There are a few more one-time giantess interactions coming later in the story so look out for that for sure :)
thanks for the review!
Date: December 10 2024 1:43 AM Title: PART 9
Ungrateful Rebecca got to help too poor waitresses out and got back where she belonged!
Author's Response:
What a good tiny girl she is!
Date: December 07 2024 2:47 AM Title: PART 8
I really hope poor Amber gets her justice from that evil Rebecca trying to run from her.
Author's Response:
Justice might get served ;)
Date: December 07 2024 12:28 AM Title: PART 8
How did you manage to make each chapter even better than the last? You're so talented; it's incredible! I can't believe this is your first story.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the kind words, always love reading your reviews :)
Date: December 06 2024 1:55 PM Title: PART 8
As much as I think Amber's antics are very hot. I am really surprised Donnica hasn't figured anything out about what her daughter has been up to. I am wondering if and when such a thing might happen. Especially since she destroyed Trevor's home. You would think that Donnica would have been contacted about that.
Author's Response:
Amber is pretty sly ;)
guess you'll have to wait and see what happens :D
Date: December 03 2024 5:13 AM Title: PART 7
i love amber :) i hate amber :( hope our protag finds his way back to his safe haven mommy girlfriend!
Author's Response:
Amber is a wild character, filled with so much adolescent rage and lust. I love writing her.
Date: December 03 2024 4:13 AM Title: PART 7
Wow!!
Author's Response:
:)
Date: December 03 2024 2:58 AM Title: PART 7
Now Rebecca is living her best life.
Author's Response:
yes she's reallllllly loving it lol ;)
thanks for the review!
Date: December 03 2024 2:00 AM Title: PART 7
So good! I love when the giantess breaks the tiny; it is always so much fun. The amount of detail about Amber's feet is fantastic it's something that many stories don't focus on enough.
Author's Response:
Thanks for saying so. I thought it might be too much description because the section ended up being much longer than most. Glad to hear it is well received :)
Thanks as always!
Date: December 02 2024 2:33 AM Title: PART 6
Really enjoying so far, personally love the Donnica scenes but the Amber scenes are solid reads as well.
Author's Response:
yessss love writing Donnica, she's a supreme being!
thanks for the review :)
Date: December 02 2024 12:15 AM Title: PART 1
How did Amber find the house so quickly? At least she left the rest of the settlement for another visit. And maybe Trevors house can now fit gigantic people now that the roof is gone.
thank you for writing!
Author's Response:
Explanation in the next part how Amber found the house ;)
Thanks for the comments!