Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: February 23 2025 10:55 AM Title: PART 22

I wonder how long it'll take for Amber to realize she's destroying/has destroyed the most meaningful relationship in her life.

That whole segment was intense, and you did a masterful job of mixing smut and character development here! Amber not understanding why Rebecca was hesitant to go up her ass, that this was what she did to Rebecca at the most abusive point in their time together, makes a lot of sense to me. Amber vaguely thinks back on the bad times and fears that Rebecca will want to leave her because of them, but she doesn't actually comprehend what about them was so bad for Rebecca, even when Rebecca said something to that effect a couple chapters ago in the food court. Amber just can't see it, but she knows that she wants Rebecca up there.

There were some real signs of how far Amber had come in this segment. The voice in the back of her head telling her to challenge her mother's beliefs on tiny people, the one reprimanding herself for what she was doing, was what I think was Amber's logical side. Deep down, she knows this "tinies are meant to be ruled' stuff is bullshit. And the guilt she felt for a while about what was happening to Rebecca, the effort she went to in order to first let Rebecca out then make her more comfortable when she sat down was actually pretty sweet.

But then those sexual urges took over, and that master-slave stuff crossed over from the bedroom into daily life. She started spouting her mom's nonsense before Donnica could herself. That primal feeling inside her started calling the shots, and it may end up costing her everything.

When Amber finally took Rebecca out in the bathroom at the club and saw only devotion in her tiny girlfriend's eyes, she missed a lot, I think. Even backing up before that, we saw how long Rebecca hesitated before she finally started licking like Amber wanted. This wasn't a case of Rebecca finally getting the message; it was a case of Rebecca giving up. The slave inside her has taken over. That's why Rebecca was so mindless when she was finally freed. Rebecca's mind is gone, replaced by the desire to please her "master."

And Amber thinks this is a good thing. She was fighting with herself, trying to tell herself that she's the giant so she can do what she wants, but if Rebecca had come out with a "What the fuck?!" I have no doubt that façade would have crumbled in a minute. Amber doesn't realize yet. It turns out that she's a better breaker than Annabel. She built trust with Rebecca, only to unwittingly betray that trust, not totally unlike the mind game Annabel played with Rachel and Tega- er Lisa, although obviously not the same thing either.

But what happens when Amber wants the Rebecca who talked her through her abuse issues? Or was so eager to hear about how much she improved as a soccer player? Or that she wanted so much to make feel cherished? Or take to prom? That Rebecca isn't there right now. Hell, who knows if/when she'll be back.

Amber has Rebecca's complete and total devotion, her unwavering obedience, and nothing else. And whenever Amber realizes that, it'll kill her.

Or I've completely misread the situation and this is a case of the old "accidentally get stuck up the butt but it all works out" scenario. I doubt it though. It seemed pretty clear to me that the Rebecca that came out of Amber's ass wasn't the same one that went in.

Oh, and Donnica being insufferable by trying to "spend time" with her daughter by controlling and micromanaging her was fitting and paired incredibly well with the therapist segment. Donnica is so obsessed with control that she's pushing the people she loves further and further away from her, and she can't even see it. Yet another reason why Amber sharing her mom's philosophy on tinies is most definitely a bad thing!

Speaking of the therapy session, that certainly was filled with interesting tidbits. If I read correctly, it looks like my previous thought of Donnica having faith in Trevor to succeed as office manager was actually wrong. She actually set him up to fail, expecting him to learn that he doesn't have a place in the world giants, which she assumed would make him "understand" that he needs to give himself to her completely. It seems she's actually frustrated that he was determined and found a way to do the job and do it exceedingly well, actually.

I was actually a little disappointed in Donnica after reading that. She should have expected more from Trevor after everything he's managed to do for her, and she should be grateful that he's made things at work so much better rather than be bitter at her plan not working. But that's pretty consistent with how a true believer would interpret the situation, so maybe I should have seen this coming.

Trevor calling her out for the registration stuff was hilarious to me. I loved seeing her on the defensive throughout that exchange. She kept that air of authority in her voice, but it did jack shit to deter Trevor! I love that about him! He was in the right, and he wasn't letting go. That "I had no idea my enslavement was an option" line hit hard. And it's not that I didn't believe Donnica when she said she'd never do that, but it does make you wonder what exactly it is she wants from him at this point. Is it just the symbolism of sharing his registration rather than her just having it herself? Is there anything to that other than symbolism?

But even though I (and I suspect she) don't know what Donnica wants from Trevor, I do understand why it's so important to her that she gets it. This whole thing is driven by her love for him. She's terrified that this "thing" inside him is going to pull him away from her, and she feels like him submitting to her is the only way to stop that from happening. Ironically, I think it's this push to own him completely that's starting to drive him away from her.

But Trevor went too far when he told Donnica she wasn't as smart as she thought she was. Holy shit! That was crazy! But I love that, even despite that, Donnica still stood up for Trevor against old Stella. She didn't just say to never threaten him again, she told the snake oil therapist to never talk down to him again. That's, like, her whole schtick! Donnica brought Trevor in there to convince him that he needed to submit to her because she's a giant, and she even let Stella talk down to him a bit in pursuit of that goal. But the fact that Donnica mentioned that in that epic telling off at the end of the segment shows that even that bothered Donnica. She's just desperate to save her relationship, despite the fact that it's her efforts that are putting the most stress on it right now.

I don't blame Donnica for not paying for that session, either. Any "therapy" that is framed to guide patients to a particular viewpoint isn't really therapy at all. I believe the word for that is pseudoscience. But man did Stella have a silver tongue. She did a solid job of making her points sound really good. Even Trevor had doubts for a second there. I can see why she's been successful in the past. But Trevor's will is too strong and his mind too sharp to fall for that shit. He sniffed it out and him calling her a quack was fucking awesome!

Oh, and Donnica orchestrating the therapy session to try and manipulate Trevor into seeing things her way is such a Donnica thing to do. I can't remember if Trevor called her out explicitly for that, but I'm pretty sure he figured it out, and that was part of why he was getting upset with her. But still, he said he thought things were good overall between them. The man knows who he's dating, that's for sure! And I kind of like that his tolerance for the shit she pulls has been recalibrated for her need to control everything! What? You tried to steal my registration, making me a de facto slave? Oh, you!

But even though I think Donnica's heart is in the right place with Trevor (and Amber, for that matter) the shitty way that she's managing those feeling is making me seriously consider jumping over to Team Annabel!

God, that opening segment was fucking perfect! I got so caught up in her emotions, her love for Trevor; that shit is contagious! Her being naked and unable to focus on her work was a great way to convey this, too!

And Goddamn if I Wanna Know What Love Is isn't the perfect song for that scene.

The way this scene balanced out Annabel's love for Trevor and her disdain for tinies in general was so satisfying to read. Her pretending the tinies were Trevor, smothering them with her love, only to come back to reality and realize that this was just some worthless tiny in her hand was so well done. The way she went from loving them to eating and crushing them were such brilliant quick transitions.

I also loved the backstory about Annabel and that song so much. It reminded her of a time she was loved, when she was with her father (I wonder whatever happened to him, if anything), but it was also a reminder of her inability to find that romantic love she wanted so much, that she could only experience in her vampire romance novels. That was such a powerful little piece of information.

The lunch scene was so beautiful! I love how super gentle Annabel is being, making good on her desire in the previous segment to hold him close and protect him the way he protected her before.

And these two have real chemistry together, too! Reading about them talking about books is something I feel like I could do all day! The look Annabel gave Trevor when he asked her if the violence and gore were really her thing was as hilarious as it was hot!

Annabel's extreme concern for Trevor in the rain was fucking adorable! I'm falling for this psychotic sweetheart, I swear!

And that moment when Trevor saw (read Annabel revealed) her love for him? Fucking gold! I figured a lot of his getting along with her was at least partially rooted in office politics and needing her on his side to do his job. A clever strategy on his part, but little did her realize how irresistible he is to broken yet powerful women. Him briefly being at a loss for how to navigate that was a great moment of tension.

But then Annabel bailed him out! And I was a little surprised when it was revealed near the end of the chapter that both that devoted look and that bailout were intentional on her part. She's very clever. I don't even know if I'd call either of those moments manipulative. She chose that moment to indirectly declare her love for him, and bailing him out was meant to calm him down and make him realize that she would never hurt him despite his "tiny size." It was a reassuring gesture, and I love that!

And hey! Shoutout to historical non-fiction! Whoop Whoop! Fucking amazing genre! Dark Roses actually sounds amazing! I actually tried to look it up online, but it looks like you're just teasing us with your fake books, ya jerk!

Trevor being so into the discussion after that, after learning about just how deeply in love with him Annabel is, was certainly interesting! It almost makes me wonder if those problems with Donnica are starting to really weigh on Trevor. Or maybe the magnetism of his natural connection with Annabel is just too strong to resist! I don't know for sure, but we may well have an honest to God love triangle on our hands here! Just like Annabel's books!

Tegan being broken was even more brutal than I suspected it might be. Granted, I was holding out hope that her defiant demeanor might hold up, I can see why she broke here.

It's easy to be defiant when you have nothing to lose. But Annabel didn't just give Tegan a friend or someone to share experiences with; she gave the tiny someone to invest herself in. Tegan suddenly had one singular connection in this world, and she put everything she had into that connection.

We saw this throughout the escape attempt. Tegan altered who she was to meet Rachel's needs. She wouldn't leave without Rachel. Tegan, who, up until now, had been seen strictly as a bundle of negative emotion and resistance, was soft and gentle as she guided Rachel past her fear and brought her back from the being broken.

So when Annabel crushed Rachel, she crushed everything that Tegan was. When Tegan called herself Lisa in an effort to save Rachel's life, she took the first step toward becoming Lisa. Because after Rachel was dead, what was the point of resisting? She was never going to be free. Rachel would never see her family again. And the one person that Tegan cared about was brutally murdered in front of her.

It was just easier to become Lisa, to give up hope and give in.

And the way you described Annabel's footsteps here was fucking stellar! I loved the force of those steps on that floor so much! Throwing around the tinies like that. Fucking hot!

But perhaps the most interesting part of the scene and the entire next segment is that Annabel appears to have broken herself! Like Lisa, she saw that she needed a true purpose, and she seems to have found it. Also like Lisa, accepting this has "freed" Annabel. Both of them are now freed from the burdens that were binding them before, giving in to a new purpose. For Lisa, that came from crushing defeat and the "death" of Tegan. For Annabel, that came from yet another realization from her, this time from watching Tegan become Lisa in real time.

Now Annabel has a real purpose in her life, and knowing her role has freed her, left her feeling almost literally lighter than air based on how she felt on that walk.

I was also intrigued by her reflecting on both Donnica and Trevor. Donnica is her goddess and Trevor is the man she loves. She'd never take Trevor from Donnica because he belongs to her. And Annabel belongs to them both. That's what she's meant for. That could mean a lot of things.

It was also reassuring to see Annabel confirm again that she could never hurt Trevor, pretty much dismissing the notion that he'll end up in her workshop anytime soon (at least not until this love of hers fades, I think). Not that the workshop would do much for Trevor anyway. He already does all the things that Annabel trains tinies to do better than pretty much any tiny out there, except maybe for Rebecca! And I don't think she could break his will no matter how hard she tried, honestly. Because if push came to shove, I think Trevor would rather die than become a mindless slave. Not that Annabel would want that for him anyway.

I'm not sure what to make about Annabel spreading the love like that, either. That kiss on Mia's cheek was kind of sweet. Weird as fuck, but sweet. As was telling Mia that she loved the her. Really interesting stuff, and I'm so curious to see where this is going.

Fucking fantastic chapter overall. Once again, you covered so much ground, and I'm really getting into these Annabel-heavy chapters!

Author's Response:

 Alright Mr. Sunday morning, let's get this started!

Ambers/Rebecca

Thanks for the comment on the balance of SMUT and character development… I know you’re not primarily an ass guy, so I was definitely curious about how you’d take it. Writing it felt a little iffy at times, just because the heavy sexual undertones could easily bury the nuance, but it was a necessary scene. It had to convey the loss of control for both girls and hint at what those ramifications might mean for their relationship.

Will there be clear-cut consequences from this, hard to say but one thing that’s for sure is that it’s undeniably a major shift for them. The master/slave dynamic flirt with the line… now the question is, will they acknowledge it? Does either of them actually think it crossed the line, or was it just blurred? Did it move the line? Those are questions that will demand answers soon.

The biggest question of all, of course: Do either of them actually want this? Or does one of them want it more than the other? And you make an excellent point; what happens when Amber wants the fiery Rebecca, the one who pulled her from the brink? Is she still in there, or have they both changed into something else entirely?

It’s also fascinating to look at Amber as a character… her development has been incredible, but at her core, who is she really? People can grow, they can evolve, but some things stay the same, some foundational personality traits don’t just vanish, they linger, sometimes suppressed under the blinders of love. So, is this just that? Or is it something way more complicated?

In my opinion, relationships always strive toward some kind of homeostasis, and the farther apart two people start, the more chaotic that process becomes. And Amber and Rebecca? Oh man, they started veeeeeery far apart. Hurdling into one another at blinding speed, they careened into each other and that sent them flying apart only to be pulled back again, and now they crash again and again until they are either one, or they are undone.

 

Donnica/Trevor

Are you entirely sure you were wrong in assuming Donnica was happy about Trevor’s progress as office manager? Because I don’t think it’s that simple. Donnica is way more fragile than she likes to believe. I do think that when she put Trevor in that position, she genuinely believed in him, wanted him to succeed (and, of course, wanted him closer to her). But at the same time, I also think a part of her wanted him to fail… just enough to make him realize how much he needed her.

I know that sounds contradictory, but honestly, humans are walking contradictions. We don’t always have to believe just one thing at a time. Donnica can be proud and happy for Trevor’s success one moment and then, in the next, quietly hope he stumbles just a bit, enough to keep him tethered to her. It all comes down to this simple truth: we are all, whether we like it or not, slaves to our emotions. And Donnica, self-proclaimed goddess that she is, is absolutely no exception to that.

I think this same push-and-pull applies to what exactly she wants out of her relationship with Trevor. One thing we know is that she wants him; fully and completely. But the specifics of what that means. That shifts with her fears and desires, moment to moment.

Also, I love that you caught Trevor going too far with that jab about Donnica not being as smart as she thinks she is. That’s exactly what I was going for, but I wasn’t sure if people would pick up on it. Since most of us naturally self-insert with the tiny protagonist, it would have been easy to just see Trevor as completely in the right during that scene, since he was standing up for his autonomy. But he let his anger boil over, and you could tell it got to Donnica. (Or at least, I hope that came through with the way her tone shifted after that.) He made great points, stood his ground, but he also hit a nerve, and for someone like Donnica? That’s not nothing.

And man, I really appreciate the comments on Stella’s silver tongue. That scene was hard to write… I actually rewrote it twice and even considered scrapping it entirely because of the whole pseudoscience bit was hard to convey in dialog. I wasn’t sure if it would actually be engaging on the page. But I think most people enjoyed it in the end, and I’m so glad I kept it in. Still, it was definitely the scene I was the most worried about leading up to release. From what I picked up in your review, though, it worked for you, which is a huge relief!

And yes… Trevor definitely knows exactly who he’s dating. And let’s be honest, he kind of loves it. But the real question is… does he have a breaking point? Guess we’ll find out.

 

Annabel

Team Annabel, huh? That’s an interesting way to put it…

That opening scene was such a blast to write, and funny enough, it actually came from the ending scene of the chapter. I had this vision of Annabel floating through the city, her life’s purpose revealing itself as she drifted through a sea of rose petals, all while listening to I Want to Know What Love Is. I got so lost in the sound and imagery of it, that I had to put it in the story… and from there, I worked backward to that first scene.

Speaking of Annabel, I guess I should tell you where the idea for her arc came from. It all started with a simple question:

What if I took the most cruel character imaginable; a breaker, someone who tortures and enslaves tiny people… and gave her the most beautiful revelation imaginable? Not just falling in love but also finding purpose. But the twist? That revelation would not change her views on tiny people.

What would that character look like? What events would have to unfold for her to function properly on the page? Did I nail it? Miss the mark? Come close? Who knows! But I definitely had a hell of a time writing it, that’s for sure.

I really like that you singled out the tenderness of the park scene. A lot of people have told me how worried they are for Trevor (which, hey, maybe some of that concern is warranted…), but there were real moments of connection there. The way she protected him the same way she thought he had protected her. How she shielded him from the rain… writing that dynamic was so much fun.

I really enjoy blurring the lines between love and manipulation. Annabel frightens Trevor with her love, yet she reveals she’s read Dark Roses to calm him. It’s both her sharp, calculated mind at work and a genuine expression of love and care. It’s beauty and the beast, a deep dive into the inner workings of her character. That’s why I love writing her. She’s all contradictions, all layers.

Also, I love that you pointed out that reaction Annabel had when Trevor brought up the fact that Eternal Hunger was violent and gory, like I was thinking about expanding the passage to make it stick out more (I really wanted people to notice it) but when I did it just didn’t feel right. It seemed to work better as a shorter, subtle passage, but I was worried it would fall to the wayside. So, to have you point it out was awesome… and it was sexy, wasn’t it?

And dude, I actually did start researching Victorian mourning ceremonies looking for a book I could use for this arc, but at some point, I was like, "What am I doing? Just make some book up and get on with the writing!"  Still, it does sound like an interesting read. Who knows, if this erotica gig doesn’t work out, maybe I’ll pivot into historical non-fiction...

Oh, and you think you’re falling for that psychotic sweetheart? Welcome to the club.

 

A moment of silence for poor little Lisa… errrr, I mean Tegan.

You absolutely nailed her connection with Rachel. That segment was hard to write because I had one scene to make that connection land, and you picked up on exactly what I was going for. She’s full of negativity and resentment (and, honestly, who can blame her?), but the way she softened with Rachel, even when she was getting frustrated with her reluctance… it was almost like family.

Like a sister.

And that’s exactly what Annabel knew would happen when she picked through that box of expendables, looking for a female that resembled Tegan, knowing she had three sisters in real life. Annabel was the master Breaker in that moment.

And wow… your insight on Annabel being ‘broken’ too really hit me. I didn’t write it with that in mind, but you’re right… when Tegan became Lisa, Annabel had her own moment of clarity. It was the moment her love and purpose became one. The breaker becomes the broken. Err… okay, maybe that wording isn’t quite right, but you get what I mean :D

Also, did you like that little kiss she gave Mia? Because I fucking loved writing it. Annabel is such a true believer in everything she does. She’s so unhinged in the craziest way.

I’m glad you enjoyed these Annabel-centric chapters. Now that she’s been thoroughly established, she won’t be dominating quite as much of the story, but as a main, she’ll still be a regular presence moving forward.

 

I fucking LOVED this review from you this week.

Although… please don’t make Sunday morning a regular thing lol

 

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 21 2025 3:06 PM Title: PART 22

Oof, Trevor is getting into a dangerous place. There’s no telling what Annabel will do once she gets her hearth broken!

Also, I didn’t see it coming that Donnica would stand up to the therapist. On the other hand, Trevor is on a roll it seems so maybe it’s not that surprising.

I hope that Donnica will accept Rebecca soon. Poor amber.

thank you for writing!

Author's Response:

Annabel can be pretty volatile, can’t she? Yet somehow, at other times manages to stay in control. But heartbreak… if that ever happens, could be catastrophic.

Trevor’s been on fire ever since he got back from vacation, makes you wonder how long that winning streak can last…

And as for Donnica accepting Rebecca if she ever finds out about her? Well, that’s the million-dollar question, isn’t it?

Thanks for reading :)

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20 2025 4:25 AM Title: PART 22

Ok so Annebel is very interesting. First off, you introduce her by breaking in a tiny. She is very methodical and wonderfully brutal about her night job. There is no weakness or hesitation. She is strong and confident. She has no rival in breaking tinys. Even others pail in comparison, or at least they do from the few things told about breakers. The fact that Lisa (Tegan) had multiple breakers before Tegan shows that Annebel has a thorough understanding of psychology. She gets humans in away alot of people dont. Which means she understands that tinies are human.

Maybe its endemic of this genre. But she probably sees poor people and homeless and the week in general the same way or very close to how see sees tinys. After all one of the best ways to get the measure of some one was give them power. So your very first inroduction of Annabel was in the very throws of her power. She was cold, ruthless and wtithout mercy or compassion. She killed a tiny just because he was satisfactory but not excellent. That is cold, and in my opinion waste full. 

It is the one thing that always frustrates me about this genre. JUst cause you are small doesnt mean you arent a threat. There are ways even some one only a few incshes in size could hurt or kill a big. But you dont come to this genre for a small turning the tables on the big. This is power escapism and one of the absolute best repesenations of bondage.

Sorry for the segue.  

So next we see her in office. She is trying to be that strong and confident girl we saw when she was in her element. But here she comes across as small and petty. Also here she is evidently very young. Hell she acted younger than her 24 years. She acted like a teenager who had been told no. So when she is around her peers she presents herself as well pathetic. Then there was the way she handled george. Trevor was right. Most men later in life arent interested in games any more. Honestly I wish he had been right about george.  ANyway she played games. She is still acting like a child.

 Then she has fallen for Trevor. At first that should be completely contradictory to her nature. She sees teh week as beneath her. Some thing for her to rule. And do with as she pleases. Well Trevor hasnt acted like a broken tiny. He fights back.But not in away that she is familiar with. He is patient, kind, and yet authoritive. He also defends her, which is what triggered her falling for him. He also saved her career. She was heading to a firing eventually, if she didnt change her ways. She was being so petty. She was causing the businees to fail. And Donnica would have eventually realized that. Then she was complient and week to those office ladies. 

She is a classic bully. She loves and revels in the power over tinies. Is week and sallow to those more powerful than her. I called her a mirror of Donnica in an earlier review. But after this and thinking about it. No, she is not a mirror. Donnica was strong before her peers. When she put that one lady in her place. Donnica brooks no equal, except perhaps Trevor. Donniica is what Annebel strives to be. 

It will be interesting to see where she goes from here. I am really liking her character. Also, I love her job. Though, She might one to get in touch with Amber. Amber seems to have a good handle on breaking reluctant tinies. Without the murder. It might just take longer.

Author's Response:

Damn bro!

That analysis was worth the wait. Excellent breakdown of the character.

So, I’ll give you a bit of background on my line of thinking when I created Annabel—or rather, when I decided to make her a main character. It all started with a single thought: What if I took one of the cruellest characters in the story — a breaker, someone who exists to torture and enslave tiny people — and gave her one of the most profound and beautiful revelations a person can have… but this revelation didn’t change her view on tinies at all? I wanted to explore what that would look like on the page. What kind of person would that even be?

She had to be completely dominant over little people, but at the same time, vulnerable among her fellow giants—because that vulnerability was necessary to trigger her revelation. That line of thinking is what set her character into motion… her role as a breaker, her office struggles, and her history of being bullied as a teenager.

Did it all come together the way I envisioned? Maybe. The feedback has been very positive, and I had a ton of fun putting it together, but either way, I love the character that’s come out of this. And I can’t wait to show you where I’m taking her.

Now, onto a couple of things in your review:

"So your very first introduction of Annabel was in the very throws of her power. She was cold, ruthless and without mercy or compassion. She killed a tiny just because he was satisfactory but not excellent. That is cold, and in my opinion wasteful."

I partly agree—yeah, you could definitely argue it was wasteful. But I also think there’s more to it. Annabel herself acknowledges in the story that she could have sold the slave separately but crushing him in front of the female was a key part of her breaking method… a final test to see if the female could hold her composure.

Annabel is a perfectionist, and as you pointed out, she’s damn good at what she does. Seeing that the female didn’t break after that moment confirmed to Annabel that she was in perfect condition. Sure, she could have sold the male after the fact, but to her, this was about perfection, and the test mattered more than the profit. Was that the right call? Did the pros outweigh the cons of selling/crushing? I guess that’s up to the reader to decide.

"She is a classic bully. She loves and revels in the power over tinies. Is weak and sallow to those more powerful than her. I called her a mirror of Donnica in an earlier review. But after this and thinking about it. No, she is not a mirror. Donnica was strong before her peers. When she put that one lady in her place. Donnica brooks no equal, except perhaps Trevor. Donnica is what Annabel strives to be."

I love this take—that Annabel strives to be Donnica. Spot on. She adores her, idolizes her. Makes you wonder what lengths she’ll go to in order to please her…

 

Thanks for this! I’ve made it no secret in these responses that I love writing Annabel, so getting a deep breakdown like this was a treat to read. And that last comment about her pairing with Amber? Very interesting. But I wonder… is there another character in the story she could end up teaming up with? :O

This was an awesome review man, same as your breakdown of Trevor/Rebecca, please feel free to send along any more thoughts you have on the story… they’re fantastic!

Reviewer: GiantessLover122 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19 2025 12:57 AM Title: PART 22

Interesting chapter, really enjoyed it as always. For me, the most difficult part was reading that therapist scene - just imagining the discomfort that Trevor must have felt having every single one of his points shut down, ganged up on by the two women there, it all seems a bit much. It also shows how Donnica's desire for control is almost overwhelming, almost making it seem like her concern for Trevor's well-being is just a mask in front of her wanting to just own him. 

In the scene with Annabel and Trevor, I was not expecting Trevor to catch on this quickly about Annabel's infatuation - or "love" as he calls it - with him. You did a really great job at showing Trevor's happiness when he realized Annabel also enjoyed the historical non-fiction (yuck - sorry.). Although I doubt Trevor would ever cheat on Donnica, who he sees as his goddess as much as he may hate to admit it, I wonder if there is a budding emotional affair, or maybe Donnica might not like how close he gets with Annabel. 

Author's Response:

I agree, Donnica’s desire to control Trevor definitely borders on possessiveness. But where does it come from? He already admitted back in Chapter 18 that he has a habit of submitting to dominant women, only to eventually break away from them. Could that be what’s happening here? Is Donnica’s anxiety based on something real, or is it just her innate need to control everything around her?

“In the scene with Annabel and Trevor, I was not expecting Trevor to catch on this quickly about Annabel's infatuation - or "love" as he calls it - with him. You did a really great job at showing Trevor's happiness when he realized Annabel also enjoyed the historical non-fiction”

Thank you for saying that! I felt like that moment worked as a great pole reversal, shifting Trevor’s emotional state from negative to positive while also setting up intrigue for how he might handle Annabel’s feelings moving forward. Will he cheat on Donnica? Would Annabel even allow that? Who’s to say...

Also, excuse me?? Yuck???? Historical non-fiction is clearly the best genre :P

Thanks for the comment, man!

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: February 18 2025 7:55 PM Title: PART 1

This review is not about annebel, sorry for the tease, but this is my thoughts on Trevor and Rebecca,

 I have finally narrowed down why I didnt like Trevor at the start, and why I usually dont care for men in these types of stories. 

To often men in thses stories are both following there cocks and being passive. Trevor read to me that way. He was so far up Donnica's ass. LIke I couldnt understand why he wasnt trying to actually do what Rebecca asked of him, back when the info that was on her laptop and the excuses he gave about not being able to get to the incriminating data didnt ring true to me. LIke dude, this could help your peoples lot in life. I was so frustrated with him. I was writing him off, because as far as I was concerned, he was what Rebecca is now. 

Rebecca on the other hand, was so full of spit, spite, vigor. She was standing up to her giantess where Trevor cowed before his. Then things started to change. Rebecca both fell for her giantess, and imprinted on her. She can still fight her (maybe) but wants to make her happy. Even at her own expense.

Trevor wants to be with Donnica but not at the cost of his own freedom. He has become a much more interesting character to me. He has really changed, he is starting to fight back. Though only thing left that really frustrates me is the fact that Trevor loves a woman he knows wants to set back tiny rights. Like she wants to make tinys property. How he loves her is beyond me. But the fact that she loves him is what gives him a chance. I am hoping that he will yet actually help his people. But I realize that may be too much for a giant that is trapped in a tinyies body.

Look I get wanting to be dominated by a beautiful partner, but there must be balance. I really am interested to see how this relationship plays out. I am actually rooting for them to find a healthy balance, presumably after alot of tears and words and maybe some violence. 

So yea Trevor has jumped up alot in my estimation. But I am still heavily invested in Amber and Rebecca. 

Now for my own hypocrisy I guess. I know I just got done harping on Trevor needing to help improve his peoples lot. But this genre is size. Cant have size play without a big and a tiny. The big rules, the tiny obeys. So Amber and Rebecca's relationship is almost ideal for me.  Amber needs to just back off just a little. Make sure her tiny is genuienly happy. Not jjust lost in lust or sexual graification of the

I love the imprinting and hate the imprinting. It helps faciliate a tiny's relationship with a big they may not have otherwise had. But it muddies the waters of freewill. Is this really rebbecca or just her body. Is she really wanting to play and love Amber like this, or is it just a physical reaction to keep her safe. Thats my big concern, and I am really worried about Rebecca. 

So Trevor and Rebecca have almost mirrored each others development. TRevor was passive and subserveant to Donnica earlier where Rebecca fought back. Now Trevor is far more assertive and confident where Rebecca is dominated and maybe losing herself. Though hopefully she can now commiserate with Trevor about how great ass is.

Author's Response:

Dude, I never noticed it before, but you’re completely right, Rebecca and Trevor really have switched in terms of active/passive protagonists. Though I will say, while Rebecca’s shift is by design, Trevor’s wasn’t.

I started this story back in November, just lying in bed “fantasizing” about a scenario where I went to a giantess’s house for dinner and ended up getting tormented by her teenage daughter. The next day, I started typing it up. Fun fact; I started writing it in Notepad (which I always keep open for jotting stuff down), and I haven’t stopped typing in it since. All 250K+ words of this story have been written in Notepad lol. That said, I’ve started doing my final drafts in Microsoft Word… mostly thanks to It Was Me trying to break my Notepad addiction. One day I’ll get there :P

I totally agree that Trevor was a somewhat weak lead in the first 10 chapters (although he did have his moments!) A passive protagonist is almost never a good thing, but honestly? I was winging it back then. And it’s worth noting that this is literally my first giantess story ever, something I just started on a whim. At the beginning, I was mostly using it as a way to write a ton of smut, which you can definitely tell from the earlier chapters. Character development wasn’t really my focus; I was just testing the waters of the giantess erotica space.

But then around Chapter 11, when the characters really started taking shape, that’s when things took off. And now, I think the characters are the strongest part of the story.

I know I said passive protagonists make for weak leads, and I know Rebecca might seem passive right now. But that’s intentional, and that’s all I’ll say for now… I’m taking her on an odyssey, and I can’t wait to show everyone where it leads.

And yes, you totally teased me with that Annabel review… when I saw your name and the wall of text I for sure thought it was about our star Breaker! Although this review was great and super fun to break down :)

Thank you!

(although I’m still expecting that Annabel review…)

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 18 2025 1:22 AM Title: PART 22

Perfect as always, the intro with Annabel is so nice. I enjoy the part with the music so much, c' est une really nice idea and it brings some info about the character's past. (And the mucis is great too lol)

The second part with the "Therapist" is well done too ; it's funny to see Donnica trying to manipulate Trevor but him being smart enough to not get caught in the trap. And I really love how Trevor challenges her ; no one does, even normal-sized people, they are all scared, but he doesn't care, even if he is so small. It's so illogical.

And the work on Annabel's character is so well done ; she goes from just a mean woman/giantess to a really interesting character in just a few chapter. 

And to finish, I'm happy to have some info about Jasmine feet and hope to see a small part of a chapter with her, maybe a small intro.

Author's Response:

“Perfect as always, the intro with Annabel is so nice. I enjoy the part with the music so much, c' est une really nice idea and it brings some info about the character's past. (And the mucis is great too lol)”

Yessss I loved the music to. I actually wrote the whole scene to 'I want to know what love is', so I was really feeling it lol

Also, is that French you used there? c’ ets une… are you French!? Do I have an international audience?????

“The second part with the "Therapist" is well done too ; it's funny to see Donnica trying to manipulate Trevor but him being smart enough to not get caught in the trap. And I really love how Trevor challenges her ; no one does, even normal-sized people, they are all scared, but he doesn't care, even if he is so small. It's so illogical.”

That’s definitely one of the biggest dynamics driving the story… Donnica’s total domination over everything except Trevor, who’s just barely out of her grasp. Makes for some very fun scenes!

“And the work on Annabel's character is so well done; she goes from just a mean woman/giantess to a really interesting character in just a few chapter. “

Yes, bringing Annabel into the forefront of the story has been an absolute blast to write, and I’ve got so many things I want the character to experience. Can’t wait to show you!

“And to finish, I'm happy to have some info about Jasmine feet and hope to see a small part of a chapter with her, maybe a small intro.”

You really love her, hey? Maybe I’ll write her in again lol She is both an ass and a foot stand-in, so very useful to Annabel!

Maybeeeeeeeeeee

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: February 15 2025 6:05 AM Title: PART 21

Learning so much more about Annabel's background in this chapter, I'm starting to see a lot of similarity between Donnica and her. As such, it's starting to make sense to me why Annabel looks up to Donnica so much, as well as how they could both fall in love with the same man, despite that man being a part of the very class of people they view themselves as superior to.

I've been thinking that Donnica was beaten down by life before rising to prominence for some time now. We learned a little more about that here as well, with her admitting to Trevor that her parents were harsh and spent so much time working for a better life that she felt unseen as a child. We obviously know things didn't work out between Amber's father and her, and, given Amber's abuse at their hands, Donnica's past lovers were anything but good people (they even made her self-conscious about the smell of her feet). Then there's the fact that, thanks again to Amber, we know that Donnica and she were poor as she was growing up, with Donnica repeating her parents' mistakes in order to lift the out of that hell.

With Annabel, her path was different but similar enough. She was just a nerd, not pretty or someone who stood out, at least for anything good. But she was a target. Her peers loved to bully her. And they went out of their way to do so, too. I mean, creating a fake profile on a message board and pretending to like a book series just to get Annabel to poor her heart out about it, only to spread those private thoughts around to embarrass her is a lot of effort to ruin someone's life. She was on the bottom of the social hierarchy, and everyone above her was kicking her while she was down, even though she wasn't even trying to stand out. She kept everything to herself to try to prevent being bullied and that shit didn't work. She was beaten up by life before she even reached her twenties.

But, like Donnica, she climbed her way out of that low point. Once her body matured (I'm assuming that was the big change for her) and she became beautiful, she used that beauty. She, too became what she hated, using the power her looks and cold heart gave her to get what she wanted out of people and cast them aside. She was as vindictive with them as her bullies had been with her.

So, in both of these cases, we have women who were nearly destroyed by the cruelties of life, barely hanging on by a thread. But both of them fought their way back, and they earned the right to rise above those who kept them down for so long. And there's a simple message in the background of both of these stories, unspoken but present in every part of their attitudes throughout the story up until now:

Never again.

I've come to believe that it was the fact that society tried to cast these two aside, to make them feel like they weren't good enough, that's at the core of their feelings of superiority and even hatred toward tinies. Their experiences in life forged them to despise weakness, and, let's face it, you can't get much weaker than being an inch tall.

So now that they're the ones in positions of power, Annabel and Donnica refuse to go back, and that refusal has made them into the very monsters that tortured and shaped them. They see in tinies the weakness that they purged from themselves, and they hate it! And now, it's their turn. They're the ones in charge now. They're the ones that get to be on the other end of things for once. They're the ones that are really slaves here, slaves to their own history and the echoes of their abuse and mistreatment.

But Trevor is different. He's tiny, but he's a fighter. Like them. He lost everything when he shrank, but it's never stopped him (at least as far as they can tell). Yeah, there are persona reasons why they love him, too. We've talked at length about Donnica's reasons by this point, and I'll get more into Annabel's in a bit, but I think there's more to it than that. Annabel finally saw Trevor for who he truly was at the end of this chapter. It wasn't just him defending her that won her over, but it was the fact that he fought so fiercely, so confidently, and so calmly against what should have been a fight he couldn't win. He stood across from five heartless giantesses who think of him as less than nothing, but he was the one who put them in their place, who left them speechless and unable to defend their points.

Trevor fights for everything, just like Donnica and Annabel have, and I think they see a kindred spirit in him. That, as much as anything else, is what draws them to him.

But man, Annabel took a huge step toward maybe moving beyond being trapped by her own past suffering near the beginning of this chapter. I mentioned before about how you don't really become who you're going to be until your mid-twenties, and she had one of those huge realizations that comes at that age here.

But first, I love that life lesson that Trevor bestowed upon her. The way he described empathy and why it's so important was so poignant and profound. He's exactly right that empathy isn't just about feeling sorry for other people, especially those who have hurt you. It's about understanding them and thus understanding why these kinds of things happen. It's something for you, not just for them. That understanding is healing; it allows you to start to let go of all the spite and hate in your heart and move on. I can't begin to say how much this resonated with me personally and how happy I was to see this conveyed in any form of fictional writing, let alone a story on an amateur porn story site. It was incredible to see, and I want to thank you for including it. That's how moved I was by this.

But to see it actually hit Annabel, to see her finally understand what Trevor meant, to feel it, was so rewarding. I was so happy for her in that moment. It was truly special. And the way it was written, that whole passage about how everyone is caught up in this vicious cycle, how the people that hurt her were likely hurt just as badly themselves before, was so beautifully done. I really felt like Annabel grew up a little bit here, and we saw that in how she started to treat Trevor differently afterward. This didn't instantly make her a good person, and it may never make her that, but I have more hope for her now than I did before. And either way, Annabel is so much better off than she was before, and regardless of how I feel about her as a character, that makes me smile.

As for Annabel falling in love with Trevor, I know I said before that Annabel was pretty wide open as a character, but damn! I didn't see that one coming! If you had told me this was the plan after the end of the last chapter, I would have told you that the twist makes no sense! But you made it make sense here, starting with that revelation about the reality of life that I mentioned above. And, from the point that she offered to let him into her systems (phrasing!) onward, it became pretty clear how she was feeling about her former hated enemy.

You know, oftentimes telegraphing a twist is a bad thing. It ruins the shock value and makes it unsurprising to the reader. This was not one of those times, however. I feel like that scene in her workshop, with her smiling as she started thinking about Trevor and appreciating how much better her life had gotten since she started cooperating with him, was actually vital to the chapter. And her staring at her phone, hoping to see that blue notification light flashing, was the icing on the cake. Not only was this a sweet callback to the previous chapter, but her energy was so different here compared to then.

The light was a source of stress for Annabel then. Why wasn't George messaging her? Did she respond too fast? She's the one who's supposed to play these games, not him, right?

But none of that was present when she was hoping Trevor would text her. She just wanted to hear from him. And when she saw that light flash, her joy was contagious! She gave her response some thought, sure, but when she added that "How are you doing tonight," there was no power play there or even the thought of one. She was giddy that she had gone through with it, and instead of worrying that she was responding too quickly, she hurried to hit send before she could talk herself out of it. This was so different from her texting with George, despite the fact that, even if she didn't realize it yet, it was just as much of a relationship thing as it was George.

And it was so cute how seriously she took that simple text! I loved it!

But the way all of these good vibes played off of her breaking job going on at the same time is just brilliant! It's a reminder that, despite all these good feelings, this is still Annabel we're talking about. That she killed a tiny here, that she basically planned it from the start, is particularly devious. But again, she's a "true believer." She really thinks tinies are beneath normal-sized people. We even saw that when she was pissed at Trevor for getting on her gently about being two minutes late. So it makes sense to me that she's evolving as a person but is still doing these terrible things right now. And hell, she actually showed mercy to that other tiny who didn't bow to her, so maybe she's loosening up a bit?

Back to that being late thing, though. Holy fuck was Annabel thinking about how she crushed a tiny with that same hand not so long beforehand as she carried Trevor to that meeting hot. And the thought that she would never hurt him, contrasting dramatically from her thinking that she could easily do Donnica "a favor" and just kill him at the beginning of the chapter, was so great! It captured what's going on with her perfectly right now! And she still thought of him as less than a person in that moment, despite clearly caring for him deeply at the same time. I fucking love it!

The meeting itself was such a gratifying scene, too! To see that "horrifying" secret of Annabel's that we had just been made privy to in the opening segment expose, and to Helena and her crew of all people, had me feeling so bad for her. When they started making fun of her, I found myself wanting to defend her, despite all the evil shit she's done/is doing. But I didn't have to. Trevor took care of it, and I loved his defense of Annabel so much!

I hate when people just decide when something that someone else likes is stupid or childish. Who the fuck are they to tell that person what to like?! It pisses me off, honestly. But Trevor shut those bitches up real quick, and it made me so happy! He doesn't even like the series, yet he explained why it had merit! But beyond that, him pointing out that Annabel reading anything is better their own efforts (or lack thereof) to get into literature was so. Fucking. Perfect! That line about him betting that they haven't picked up a book since college was exactly the kind of point I wanted to make! And their silence at that wonderful insult shows that it hit a little too close to home!

I can see why this was the moment Annabel realized her feelings and fell in love with him!

And now, I have no idea where you're going with Annabel with this new angle! Again, you could go in so many different directions here! I love how unpredictable this is!

I think the natural assumption is that Annabel will end up trying to "break" Trevor and make him love her back. You could prove me wrong over the next chapter or two, but I don't see it. I think if she viewed Trevor as just another tiny whom she could break, then he wouldn't be worth loving, let alone pursuing!

I could also see this situation with Teagan shaking out in a number of ways. Will Annabel successfully break her and reinforce her view on tinies? Or will Teagan resist, almost forcing Annabel to reexamine her thoughts on tinies? Or will that resistance not change her views on tinies in general, but make her look at Teagan in a different light? Or will she just get pissed and kill Teagan, and she's been a red herring all along?

Then there's Annabel's worship of Donnica, which can only be strengthened at this point, right? I mean, the one thing Annabel saw that was "wrong" with Donnica was her relationship with Trevor, and now that's not something Annabel sees as fault, as she wants the same thing now (and was even starting to feel this way before she realized she loved him). I have a hard time seeing Annabel doing something to fuck over Donnica, no matter how much she loves Trevor.

But, then again, love makes you do stupid shit! So Annabel is really capable of anything right now, isn't she?

Not to mention that you've quietly set up Helena as a potentially major villain! That could play into this whole Trevor/Annabel thing in a number of ways. I'm very curious to see where you go with Helena, too! I have a feeling that, between this Annabel stuff and Helena rising up in the firm, Trevor's advice to Donnica to spend more time at home, while well-intentioned, is going to make things a lot more ... complicated for everyone involved, as well as for Amber and Rebecca!

Speaking of those two, I'm kind of worried about them now! This chapter showed that there are some serious issues with both of them bubbling just beneath the surface, and I don't think playing this master-slave game is going to get them through all of it!

Did I say master-slave game? Why yes, yes I did!

You see, at first glance, that scene looks like a master punishing her slave for forgetting her place. But that's not what's really happening there, I think. This is just the sexual dynamic that both Amber and Rebecca love, and they used it here to try and play out their emotions coming off of the fight. With them giving into that "primal" understanding of things and Amber taking full control, she can feel better in the moment making Rebecca "pay" for lashing out at her like that, and Rebecca can, in turn, suffer the way that she wants to for hurting Amber.

But this whole notion of Rebecca being a real slave and Amber needing to remind her of her place is just an act. We've seen Rebecca take control of the conversation with Amber several times since they've been together, and Amber, at most, has tried to defend herself in those arguments. Amber tip toes into rooms and keeps her voice down so as to not disturb her "slave." Amber wants Rebecca to feel loved and cherished. None of this is master-slave behavior.

Now, let's look at how this whole thing came to be. Rebecca got carried away trashing Amber's book (I hated it here, too; sorry Rebecca!), and Amber instinctively resorted to physical force. Rebecca, in turn, went right back to accusing Amber of hurting her, digging deep to hit a spot she knows is a sore one for her giant girlfriend (this was made clear last chapter in the food court).

So what happens next?

Amber, the great and powerful master, walks away and starts to cry at her desk. Rebecca begs for her to come back, which she eventually does. Amber tells Rebecca that the tiny is "scary" when she gets mean (which is accurate), and Rebecca, despite not really believing that she can be scary to Amber, realizes that she has a problem, one she's all too familiar with, and apologizes profusely. It wasn't until Rebecca asked if there was anything she could do to make it up to Amber that things shifted, and they resorted to sexual games to clear the air between them.

And what a sexual game it was! I loved every second of it! Amber forcing Rebecca to wait before the tiny sub could pleasure her was fantastic! And Amber, in her anger over how Rebecca made her feel, denied Rebecca release, which was so fucking hot!

But yeah, this only happened when Rebecca asked for a way to make things up to Amber. This whole thing was voluntary. Rebecca listened to Amber because she wanted Amber to feel better. And Amber did this to Rebecca only after Rebecca gave her "permission" with that question. I've said this before (and I believe you agreed with me), but Amber won't do anything to Rebecca that Rebecca herself doesn't want to do. And honestly, what would Amber have done if Rebecca had said fuck it and started fingering herself in the middle of all this. Nothing, that's what. At worst, Amber would have broken the mood and been pissed/sad that Rebecca didn't listen to her. There would have been no punishment, of that I have no doubt.

So why does the fact that they resorted to this game make me worried about them as a couple? Because it did nothing to actually resolve any of their issues.

Amber resorting to physical dominance when pushed too far, especially given the history between Rebecca and her, is probably a lingering sign of her own abuse. It's natural for her to lash out physically because that's what those assholes always did to her as a kid.

Rebecca's anger issues and biting comments are clearly a result of the abuse she suffered at the hands of her stepfather. I mean, that has more or less already been said outright before, back when she talked about getting into fights all the time and taking shit too far. Amber is surely far from the first person to find Rebecca "scary" (and, randomly, this makes me appreciate Trevor even more for sticking with Rebecca through everything; I have a feeling she didn't always make it easy for him!).

During sex, Amber's fear about Rebecca leaving her came out again:

 “I’ve got big stinky feet and a sexy pussy, and you’re my bad, bad little girl. You’re my doll, and I get to do whatever I want to you. You belong to me and you can never get away from me and you're all mine!”

This is clearly still bothering Amber. She still thinks Rebecca is going to leave her because of the way she treated her tiny girlfriend early on. Just hugging it out in a dress shop without talking about it did nothing to address the problem, and neither did this!

And Rebecca going back to that well, telling Amber that hurting her is the one thing that never really changed about her, is makes it incredibly obvious that a part of her isn't over that abuse at the start of their "relationship" either. She loves Amber and isn't afraid of her anymore, but the scars of that treatment are still buried in her, and they come out when she gets angry enough.

So yeah, pretending to be master and slave did nothing to address any of that, which means all of it is still bothering them, holding back their relationship. At the heart of the matter is that these are two broken women trying to deal with their abusive pasts and the abuse they suffered at the hands of each other (I'm counting Rebecca's verbal abuse because she was fucking harsh at times, even if she didn't realize how deep the sting of her words was). And neither of them knows how to get to the root of their issues. Yeah, Rebecca can lend an ear to Amber when she needs to talk about her abuse (even when she doesn't think she can), but Rebecca has pretty much given up on trying to heal herself, which is a huge fucking mistake!

I really don't know if these two can navigate these emotional waters alone. If only there was someone that could help them out. Someone who has some experience talking to a victim of abuse. Someone who it seems as though he can do damn near anything these days. Someone who can thrive in a world of giants despite being tiny. Someone who ...

Okay, fine! I'm talking about Trevor, okay! There, I said it! Thanks for ruining my fun!

But yeah, I feel like he's their best hope at this point (unless Donnica being home more turns out *a lot* better than I think it's going to).

Speaking of which, I loved the dinner scene so much! Amber was actually being cool around Trevor, which was fucking awesome! We're not quite at friends level yet or even approaching, dare I say, father-figure levels, but it was nice to see Amber smiling at Trevor and for her jab at him to be lighthearted for once. It warmed my heart and gave me hope for the future with these two.

Obviously, I agreed with Amber when she called Donnica a hypocrite. I think we've all known that about Donnica for some time now! Donnica being so dismissive about Amber's question that she didn't even realize her daughter was getting upset at first was so sad. They were getting along so well! I loved reading that Amber was excitedly telling her mom about soccer! Given how that call went way back during the chapter at the soccer field, this was so refreshing and satisfying!

But Donnica not taking Amber seriously and it taking Amber's emotions to boil over before she realized there was a problem was fucking heartbreaking! And I get that Donnica's view of the world makes her not even consider that her daughter would want to date a tiny, but she was dismissive of Amber not wanting to get married to a guy, too! Amber already told Rebecca that she wasn't looking for that in her life right now and might never, but Donnica has a vision in her head of what a happy life would be for Amber, and she can't imagine Amber not wanting that.

Sadly, Donnica is right that she's become her parents, at least somewhat so. Donnica really cares about Amber and wants what's best for her, but she doesn't really know her daughter at all. I love that she realizes this and wants to fix it. Better late than never, right?

But, as I said earlier in this review, trying to do that is probably going to bring up a lot of issues for her, both at the office and at home.

I wonder if Amber went with tiny boy instead of tiny girl because she thought telling her mom that she both in love with a tiny and a lesbian was too much to throw at her at once. Or does Amber think that Donnica will judge her for being gay? Or did she just think the conversation would flow better if she went with a boy instead of a girl? Now I'm even more curious how Donnica will react if she finds out about their relationship (assuming she finds out about the relationship before she just finds Rebecca)!

I'm really hoping that those harsh comments from Amber about Donnica and Trevor's relationship were just her being angry at the situation or trying to get at her mom. But, knowing you, I could see you taking this new Trevor-Amber dynamic away from me right after you teased me with it, ya jerk!

Great fucking chapter overall! There was so much here, as is the case with most of your chapters! That doesn't go unappreciated! And you've got me scrambling to try to figure out where you're going to go next, which is so fun!

Author's Response:

Annabel

Annabel’s journey has always been wrapped in contradiction. Her revelation — this profound, almost spiritual moment — wasn’t about tinies. It wasn’t about guilt, remorse, or reckoning with her cruelty toward them. It was about herself. About the machine she was apart of, the endless loop she was caught in, the life she built out of raw, unrelenting control.

What she saw in that moment wasn’t just her own pain, but the cycle of suffering that created her. She understood, deeply, how the world had shaped her, how the cruelty of others had seeped into her bones and made her into someone who now inflicted pain without hesitation. It was a moment of true clarity, of self-awareness. But the complexity — the part that makes her so deeply human — is that this realization didn’t extend to tinies.

She saw the cycle. She felt the weight of it. She understood it. But somehow, tinies remained an exception, an asterisk in her worldview, something outside of the very epiphany she had. And yet, the one who led her to this realization? Trevor. A tiny. The contradiction is deliberate. It isn’t meant to make full sense, because people don’t make full sense.

Annabel’s realization is genuine, but incomplete. It forces something inside the reader... a push and pull between understanding her and being unable to reconcile how she can see the world so clearly while still remaining blind to an entire piece of it. And that discomfort? That complexity? That’s the point.

That’s why her humanization matters. It’s not about redemption. It’s about conflict.

Because Annabel isn’t just a villain, she’s a woman who has been beaten down, humiliated, and cast aside. She grew up being bullied, made small, made to feel like she was nothing. Then she rebuilt herself. Sharper, colder, untouchable. She became the predator she once feared.

And yet, she still suffers. Helena’s treatment of her, the casual cruelty, the way she is stripped of dignity in ways that echo her past... it reminds the reader that for all her power, she is still a victim in certain spaces. And that tension, that paradox of someone who inflicts suffering while still enduring it, is what makes her so hard to pin down. Do you hate her? Do you pity her? Should you?

That’s the point.

Annabel’s journey isn’t about choosing between light and darkness. It’s about wrestling with both. 

Trevor

Trevor has always been navigating the world of giants, but this chapter marked something different. He’s no longer just surviving, no longer just maneuvering around their power... he’s owning his space. He’s found his groove, and he’s doing it in a way no one ever expected: not through submission, not through brute defiance, but through something far more powerful; humanity.

It’s the thing that makes him dangerous, the thing that makes him impossible to crush, no matter how small he is. He doesn’t just demand respect; he commands it. And it’s not because he’s some unbreakable force of will, it’s because he knows exactly how to tap into something giants rarely consider: empathy.

That moment in the meeting? It wasn’t just about proving a point. It was about flipping the entire power structure of the room. Five giantesses who should have been able to silence him with a word instead found themselves on the defensive. He called them out, made them answer for something they weren’t even used to questioning. And in doing so, he did the one thing that no tiny had ever done before... he made them feel small.

And Annabel? She saw it. She felt it. It’s not just that he stood up for her. It’s that he stood against them without fear, without hesitation, without ever once looking like a man who was outmatched. She saw the fire in him, the same fire that burned in herself and in Donnica. He was one of them.

And yet, he wasn’t.

Trevor’s power doesn’t come from dominance, and that’s what makes him so dangerous. It’s not about physicality. It’s not even about intelligence (although he has plenty of that). It’s about the way he makes people care. The way he forces even the cruelest giantesses to see him, to acknowledge something about themselves they’ve been trying to ignore. It’s why he’s thriving, not just surviving, but thriving. The same quality that won Donnica over is now pulling Annabel in, and even she doesn’t understand it yet.

And that’s why the text exchange with Annabel was so important. Because there was no calculation, no mind games. She wanted to hear from him. And when she finally did? It wasn’t a power move. It wasn’t a test. It was just her, letting herself feel something, maybe for the first time in years.

But what does that mean for her? What does that mean for him? Annabel isn’t the only one caught in something bigger than she understands. Because Trevor? He’s not just finding his place in this world... he’s shaping it. And he has no idea how much power he’s really starting to wield, or what he's capable of, for good and for ill...

Amber & Rebecca

That scene was something else, wasn’t it? The way it shifted so naturally from a heated argument to something much more intimate, there was something raw, something real about it. These two aren’t just playing at something; they’re in something, deep, and neither of them can quite define it.

I do think sex reveals hidden truths, and with Amber and Rebecca, that’s especially true. They fought, they snapped at each other, and then they fell back into what they know best, control, submission, the desperate need to remind each other exactly what they mean to one another. Was it makeup sex? Most likely. But I wonder if there’s something else at play too, something they haven’t even admitted to themselves yet.

The size difference between them isn’t just physical. It’s emotional, psychological. Amber looms large in Rebecca’s life in every possible way, but that doesn’t mean Rebecca is powerless. She’s pulled at Amber’s strings before, bent her to her will in ways Amber never saw coming. And Amber likes it. Even in the height of her dominance, even when she’s reminding Rebecca of her place, there’s something pleading in it. That whole monologue; pure, unfiltered Amber. She needs Rebecca to belong to her. Needs it in a way she can’t fully explain, even to herself.

And Rebecca? She lets her have it. Lets herself be owned, because that’s what Amber needs, because in some twisted way, it’s what she needs too. But the question lingers... where do they go from here? They love each other. That much is undeniable. But love isn’t always enough.

Or is it?

And as for Trevor swooping in to fix everything—man, I love your faith in him. You’re not wrong, he’s really come into his own, and yeah, he knows Rebecca better than anyone. But he’s got his own world to navigate, his own battles to fight.

Besides, do they really need an intervention? It was just a little fight that turned into a master/slave domination session. Happens to the best of us.

I’m sure they’ll be fine. Probably.

Final Thoughts 

Man, this chapter shook up everything. Annabel’s shifting. Trevor’s rising. Amber and Rebecca getting complicated. And Donnica? She’s trying to be a better mother while holding a tiger by the tail at work.

But where’s it all leading? Who’s going to snap first? And what happens when all of these dynamics collide?

Let’s just say, the next few chapters are going to be very interesting.

Thanks again for such an amazing review! You caught everything (well most things) and then some. Can’t wait to see what you think of what’s coming next!

Reviewer: breastclimber Signed [Report This]
Date: February 11 2025 2:36 AM Title: PART 21

One more thing about Tegan and "Expendable". If you are in war together, sharing a trench, sharing rations, covering each other backs, and then your friend gets shot. It might break you, but more likely it'll piss you off even more and want to get revenge. I am pretty sure you are not going to write Tegan this way, but my reaction would be pissed off and wanting revenge.

Go Tegan Rage!!!

Author's Response:

Trauma does strange things to us all. Let’s see how it plays out for Tegan and the expendable (damn, doesn’t it feel cruel calling her that?! The jerk author of this story should give her a name!)

I will say this, from what little we do know about Tegan, she seems pretty tough. She already survived 2 other breakers. Can she get the hattrick? 

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Date: February 11 2025 1:16 AM Title: PART 21

In the last chapter, I was going to lay into Annabel. She was evil pure and simple. Her idea of breaking men to make people lose their will completely. To kill them just to make a point and to break others. Her complete cold disregard for tiny people was deplorable.

In fact, she still is completely this way as was demonstrated in this chapter. The way she slams her hand down to crush people. It's disgusting and the fear she invokes in tiny people for the reasons she chooses is simply awful. She doesn't just make people into slaves, she removes their free will. It's a terrible thing to do to people. To make them so irrevocably scared that they can only do the actions that she trains them to do.

In the last chapter, she needs to cause Trevor as much grief as possible. To prevent him from installing the software that would even help her as he pointed out, but no, she won't even listen to him because he is tiny.

So in this chapter, you tease that she might be becoming human. She has this moment of clarity as empathy leads her to discover the cycle of torment and abuse, but then later on SHE DOES NOTHING ABOUT IT. She is still breaking tiny men, happily. Killing them with no regard to them at all.

You try to then make her look even more human when Trevor defends her in the meeting, and she falls in love with him. I realize this is just probably mostly done to have a power struggle between Annabel and Donnica. Do I think her new regard for a tiny man will change her in future chapters? Hell no. She is forever broken. A mean torturer who might love a tiny herself, but she will never let that interfere with her work of enslaving and breaking the wills of other tinies. Her own experiences won't inform her other actions toward tinies.

This theme of giant women falling for Trevor or Rebecca and then never having any other impact on their relations with other tiny people is very frustrating as a reader. (at least for me).  I mean I have seen Amber only as a bully toward tiny people after Rebecca. For what she considers to be good reasons. I haven't seen her interact with other tiny people so I don't know how she would treat them, but I suspect her relationship with Rebecca won't inform her actions.

AAARRRRGGGHHH.

But that being said, I'm glad Annabel fell in love with Trevor. May she choke on it as Donnica whoops her ass, she deserves it.

Author's Response:

“In the last chapter, I was going to lay into Annabel. She was evil pure and simple. Her idea of breaking men to make people lose their will completely. To kill them just to make a point and to break others. Her complete cold disregard for tiny people was deplorable.”

Are we reading about the same Annabel??? The one in my story is an angel :D :D :D

>:)

“In the last chapter, she needs to cause Trevor as much grief as possible. To prevent him from installing the software that would even help her as he pointed out, but no, she won't even listen to him because he is tiny.”

This is the real reason you hate her. Admit it!!!! And to be honest, not adopting a more effective system is fairly irredeemable act… OFF WITH HER HEAD!

“So in this chapter, you tease that she might be becoming human. She has this moment of clarity as empathy leads her to discover the cycle of torment and abuse, but then later on SHE DOES NOTHING ABOUT IT. “

That’s not entirely true. Her revelation, which came from Trevor’s advice, is what started the chain reaction which led to her falling for him! So it did that….

“This theme of giant women falling for Trevor or Rebecca and then never having any other impact on their relations with other tiny people is very frustrating as a reader. (at least for me) “

Yeah that is definitely one of my things, isn’t it  :)

“But that being said, I'm glad Annabel fell in love with Trevor. May she choke on it as Donnica whoops her ass, she deserves it.”

I mean, Donnica has crushed and enslaved tiny people this whole story so maybe they both deserve it. But then again it is me writing this sooooooooooooo >:)

 

Glad to see you back in the review column and CONGRATULATIONS for posting my 100th review!!!! Had to be you, baby!

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Date: February 08 2025 11:21 PM Title: PART 20

Thank God those attendants got that dress sale. They were the real heroes of the chapter!

So I was pretty excited to see a lot of my thoughts on Annabel be proven right in that first segment. She's definitely in the true believer category, thinking things like how Trevor is "meant to serve and nothing more." And I knew the thought of him "corrupting" Donnica, her idol, was the source of Annabel's anger toward Trevor in particular. Donnica is perfect in Annabel's eyes except for her relationship with the tiny dude, which Annabel finds unnatural and insulting (yet doesn't seem to think less of Donnica because of it).

But given Annabel's true believer status, her profitable side job makes a lot of sense. I like how this built off of her training all of those office slaves (I was wondering if anything was going to come of that). Her tactics as a breaker are cruel, cold, and efficient, which, it turns out, ends up being a pretty effective combination when it comes to enslaving tinies.

But man, I have to admit, I'm actually kind of impressed by her approach to this. I'm not saying I'm a fan or that I support it, but she does put a lot of thought into what she's doing. In that last segment, the beginnings of her strategy for taming Teagan caught me by surprise. It made sense to me that each of the two previous breakers used at least 20 expendables each, as I feel like the kind of person who would take that job would view tinies as bugs or animals and therefore would think simple "examples" would be enough for their little subjects to learn.

But Annabel, oddly enough, is taking Teagan's humanity into account here. She searched until she found an expendable that looked like she might have come from a similar background to Teagan. She's now putting them through the same trauma but not in an obvious way (I feel like a rookie mistake would have been putting them in the same shoe, as that would have been a clue to a smart tiny that something was up). She wants the two of them to bond so that Teagan is broken when she takes the expendable away later. That's super evil, but it's also incredibly brilliant!

And in an odd bit of irony, Annabel is thinking of Teagan as human rather than as a bug or animal. It's just such an inherent contradiction within her. The exact kind of thing you'd expect from a "true believer," someone so lost in their own rhetoric or flawed worldview that they just can't see the cognitive dissonance right in front of their face!

Even more ironic, in my view, is how Annabel doesn't apply this same skill, thought, and logic her job at the firm! She seems so incompetent at the office, but she's so efficient as a breaker. I mean, if she approached her real job with the same intensity and drive s she does her side job, her "Trevor problem" would have never come to be in the first place.

How can she handle each job so differently? Sure, Annabel is more passionate about breaking than she is office work, but it was also made clear that she would do anything for Donnica, so I don't think that's the issue. No, I think it's that belief that tinies are inferior that allows her to be her "best self" while breaking them. Even though she's capable of being as manipulative and effective in the office, the fact that they're all giants keeps her from displaying that same confidence.

In other words, her beliefs are holding her back.

It was so weird seeing Annabel being pushed around by Juliette after reading her in that first segment, but it makes sense when you think about it. While she subconsciously knows tinies are just like her (again, this is why her training is so effective), she can't consciously accept that, so she can't have that same confidence around her fellow bigs.

But even beyond that, Aanabel's immaturity doesn't allow her to fully understand how things really are, which is an even bigger problem for her. Take her "plan" to deal with Trevor, for example. She really thinks that if Trevor fails at this job, Donnica is going to abandon him, and then she'll be able to "train" him and destroy him like she fantasized about at the start. Not only that, but she assumes that her dragging her feet or even outright refusing to help will reflect poorly on him and not her.

None of that is true, of course. If Trevor fails as office manager, Donnica would just stop pressing the issue and let him go home. Also, Donnica *knows* that Trevor knows how to fix the office, and she knows that he's going to be met with resistance. So, if Trevor fails and her plan to keep him close at work fails with it, she's most likely going to blame Annabel (who she seems to trust) for not doing what Trevor needed, what Donnica needed her to do for Trevor.

Donnica loves Trevor, and that's something Annabel can't comprehend. She's never felt real love before. She's only just know starting to with George. But Annabel is so lost in her beliefs that she thinks her pettiness will just be blamed on the tiny instead of her. She can't understand that Donnica knows how competent Trevor is or that she put her boyfriend in this position because she has faith that he can thrive even in this hostile environment. Annabel is just totally blind to the truth when it comes to such things, and that could be what destroys her in the end.

It doesn't have to be that way, though. I do see a little window of hope with Annabel. My favorite part of her character is that she's written in very much the way I view a person in their mid-20s: as someone who's trying to find herself. Yeah, she's got some fucked-up beliefs and she can be ridiculously petty, but that desire she has for something more and how cute her nerves are over how to handle George's texts show a different side of her, a more mature Annabel trying to get out.

I'm a big believer that you don't really find who you really are until sometime in your mid-20s (apologies to anyone reading this who is younger than that). To me, this thing she's pursuing with George could be a major coming of age experience for Annabel. I think we'll likely see some major changes in her as the story advances. Now, does that mean I think she's going to do a 180 and love all tinies or that a move in that direction would make all the shit she's done okay? Not at all (I mean, it's possible but highly unlikely). But I could see Annabel becoming a better person moving forward and maybe even quitting her side job, even if she still looks down on tinies in general.

That's not a given, however, and she could stick to her guns throughout, but I can only see that ending with everything blowing up in her face. So, for her sake, she should probably get her shit together at some point!

I'm also really curious to see how this Teagan arc goes. I love the fire she has (for the same reasons I loved Rebecca standing up to Amber that first time). Now, I can only think of two reasons why she exists in this story: She's either going to be a character who won't break and play a role in Annabel becoming that better person I mentioned above, or you're just super into this breaking process and want to really get into the details of it in the coming chapters! I could see it going either way right now, too, so I'm intrigued to see which way you go!

I'll also be interested to see how she interacts with Trevor next chapter. I don't think she's going to warm up to him at all, but his advice about George did work out. Ironically enough, Trevor actually represents a lot of that unknown thing that Annabel wants in her life. If she keeps listening to his advice, shit might just work out for her on the George front. But I'm curious if she'll be a little more cooperative with Trevor as an unspoken thanks (because she'll never speak it!). Or maybe she'll start to wonder if he's onto something about LegalSync since he was right about the texting thing. Or is she going to ignore that and stick with her original plan? We could learn a lot about her from how this alone plays out.

As for Trevor, I thought he was brilliant here! He's picking his battles and keeping his cool, just waiting for the right opportunities. And he found one with those texts! He kept going on about them as Annabel tried to ignore him. He got in her head to the point that she gave away George's age, which was pretty impressive.

I also loved the urgency in which he came at Annabel and told her to text him back right away. Despite everything Annabel had done to him and how she was treating him, it still felt like he was genuinely trying to help her and not just for work reasons. He really is a good dude, although he was able to slip in that fake age compliment, which was clever.

After seeing him in the office for a day, and even despite Lillian mistaking him for "one of the Turner boys," I'm actually feeling a bit more confident that he's going to make this work. He even has someone he can make into a common enemy with Annabel in Helena, who I'm sure we'll be seeing sometime soon as well.

I really, really loved all of the Amber and Rebecca stuff this chapter, too! 

Obviously, Rebecca helping Amber go cleat shopping was super fucking cute! And her using it as an excuse to get closer to the smell of her feet was endearing, given the context behind that from previous chapters.

But when Rebecca threw that "You mean will I eat your ass again?" line out there, shit got real for a second. With all of this great Amber and Rebecca stuff since "the talk" the way Amber treated Rebecca at first hadn't really been addressed up to this point, so it was great to see it come up. It seems like Rebecca has pretty much forgiven her for what she did before, but you have to wonder why she'd bring it up if she was totally past it. Her love for Amber is stronger than whatever lingering feelings she has left from that time, but this is something they may end up having to address directly at some point.

Actually, scratch that. They will have to address it directly. That Amber scene when she's trying on the dress was so powerful, so raw, so emotion! It was fantastic! It made so much sense, too! For the first time, since Amber captured Rebecca, the tiny was truly free, and the delay in her realizing that just made the scene hit harder.

At first she's worried about someone coming and snatching Rebecca (which makes even more sense since Rebecca isn't registered), and that gave us the false impression that the drama of the scene had come and gone. But then Amber thinking back to all the shit she did to Rebecca in those early days and realizing that Rebecca could just leave on her own if she wanted to, go anywhere in the city, kind of scared me a little as a reader. Would Rebecca really do that?

Then we get deeper insight into what Amber really thinks of Rebecca. It was actually really sweet to see someone who once just called Rebecca a bug, worm, or toy reveal how much she respected and admired her now. To think Rebecca capable enough to disappear and be just fine on her own, to think about just how smart Rebecca is, isn't something I would have expected from the Amber at the start of the story. It's amazing how far she's come!

But yeah, when Amber asked herself, "Why wouldn't she leave?" and admitted that she would have left if she were in Rebecca's place, it was depressing, terrifying, and cathartic all at the same time. It's terrible that Amber feels this way now, even if it is deserved based on her past actions. And it was certainly terrifying to think that you might pull the rug out from under us and have Rebecca escape, ya jerk!

But cathartic? How so, you might ask.

Like I said before, all of that terrible treatment from before has kind of been forgotten about up until this chapter. I think that made sense, as their relationship was pretty new, and what new couple wants to be weighed down by deeper issues like that. But to see Amber fully realize her mistakes, and in such an organic way, was very touching. She's becoming such a better person, but now it's time to confront the shit she did wrong before.

And we didn't even have to lose Rebecca to get something like this. I was so relieved to see Rebecca still there, and that long embrace was incredibly heartwarming!

But like I said, I highly doubt this is the end of them dealing with this. Amber will probably need to express her feelings on this at some point, and if Rebecca really is repressing something from those darker days, then it's going to come out sooner or later (probably sooner, based on her personality).

Speaking of Rebecca, that whole scene at Tiny Teen and Me was both adorable and insightful. Cute for all the obvious reasons, but insightful because of what we saw happen to Rebecca in there.

Why is it that Rebecca loved seeing herself in all those clothes that "weren't her style" and that she used to make fun of when she was a teen? Why did she suddenly decide that she likes being small and no longer having to deal with all of those responsibilities that life throws at you? Well, that's because Rebecca never really got a proper childhood!

Rebecca got the shit beaten out of her routinely by her stepfather. We don't know when that started exactly, but it's safe to say a mostly developed teen would have known to report him. That shit usually starts when the kid is young. So I think it's fairly safe to say that Rebecca was abused for most of her childhood. I feel like that has a lot to do with her counterculture approach to life even now, but especially when she was a kid.

I'd argue that she made fun of all the kids that dressed the way that she herself did in this scene because of jealousy. Those kids got to have normal lives and live without a care in the world. Rebecca never had that, and she hated it. But instead of acknowledging that, she judged everyone who had what she didn't instead, which is why she kept bringing it up here.

And that's also why she was so shocked at how much she loved the way she looked.

This was her getting to finally get that experience. She finally got to wear those cute clothes and be that kind of girl. It's something that she clearly wanted but never knew it until now. It almost felt like she was getting back the childhood she was denied all those years ago.

But more than that, it was the reason why she was able to feel this way that made her feel so good. Amber wanted Rebecca to feel cherished by doing this, and it was so great to see Rebecca admit that she did, in fact, feel special by the end of the segment.

Rebecca has had a hard life. There was the years of abuse, all the trouble she got into at school for the aggression that abuse brought out of her, her mom getting sick and her having to drop out of school to take care of her, her mom dying, getting the shrinking virus, losing her registration and the way that she was kicked out of her complex, and even all the shit Amber put her through before they both realized how they really feel about each other.

So to feel so loved for once is a big change for Rebecca. To have someone take away all that responsibility, all that hardship, and only want to care for her is something she came to terms with in real time during this scene. That's why she likes being small. That's why she chose to start seeing her no longer having adult responsibilities as a good thing. That's why her fiscal self relented and let Amber spend all of that money on her (something I think could come back to bite them later, unfortunately).

So it was awesome to see Rebecca receive semi-literal retail therapy here!

Also, Amber was incredibly cute throughout this scene as well. The joy she felt both for herself and for Rebecca was contagious! She loved seeing Rebecca all dressed up and basically being her doll (although, again, as we saw in the dress store, she see Rebecca as so much more than that), but she also loved that Rebecca was into it herself.

And the way Amber stared yearningly at that fairy outfit but didn't ask, not wanting to push Rebecca too far, was really sweet and actually kind of mature. I was glad Rebecca saw that and offered, though! Between that and Amber silently asking Rebecca if it was okay for the other teens to take her picture (which could also become a problem at some point), she was incredibly respectful of Rebecca which is always great to see!

Also, should I read anything into the fact that the teens asked Amber and not Rebecca if they could take pictures of the tiny fairy girl? That struck me as a bit rude!

But yeah, you killed this chapter! It was a lot of fun, and it potentially set up a ton shit down the road. I'm really eager to see where you go with it!

Author's Response:

Annabel & Trevor

Great insights on Annabel here!

One of the most striking realizations I've had from your review is just how much she embodies the experience of a mid-20s person trying to find their way in the world. I didn’t have a character like that before… Donnica and Trevor are both 40, Rebecca is 31, and Amber is 18. That whole self-discovery period of the 20s was missing until Annabel really came into focus. She brings an entirely new dimension to the story that I didn’t even realize I needed.

I’ve always been drawn to her, even before I had fully fleshed her out. Way back when we first met her, after Donnica relieved tiny John Turner of his duties, my initial idea was just to have him scurry out of the room. But as I was writing that scene, something clicked… Annabel walked in, and instead of letting him go, she enslaved him. That moment opened up so much potential for her character. Then, a few chapters later, I had Donnica coming into the office to punish Marge and Dolores, and again, Annabel’s presence expanded the scope of that scene. At first, it was just supposed to be John, but as I got into Annabel’s head, her actions became even more devious. It felt more fitting, more natural, that she wouldn’t just take John, she would take his entire family and turn them into office foot slaves. That kind of cruelty and total domination is so core to who she is.

You absolutely nailed it when you described her as a true believer. That has always been fundamental to how I see her. She truly believes tinies are meant to serve, and that ideology bleeds into everything she does. I’ve always felt this about her in the way she treats Donnica, her worship of Donnica is near-religious. But now, having the chance to fully flesh out her thoughts and inner world, it’s been an absolute joy to write. Over the last few weeks, she’s become my favorite character to explore, simply because of how layered and contradictory she is.

Her contradictions are what make her so compelling. In her workshop, she’s an unshakable master, completely in control of her slaves and surroundings. But in the office? She’s bullied by Helena and her team, clearly out of her depth in dealing with fellow giants. She’s ruthlessly confident when enslaving tinies, yet she gets nervous over something as simple as texting George. She’s a brutal and calculating breaker, yet she’s petty and jealous when it comes to Trevor. In many ways, she’s the most complete character yet because she’s so deeply human, despite how monstrous she appears in most scenes.

Another thing that makes her so unique is that, unlike Donnica and Amber, she actively collects tinies. Donnica and Amber happened upon them—Donnica through her relationship with Trevor and Amber through her mother/Trevor. But Annabel seeks them out, knows how to find them, how to exploit them. They fall into her lap regularly. That dynamic changes the way I can approach the world of the story… she’s not just another giantess playing with the tinies who cross her path, she’s a predator in the truest sense. It’ll be fascinating to see how that plays out as she moves forward in the story.

Trevor picking his battles is the perfect way to describe him this chapter. He’s incredibly strategic, he knows when to push, when to pull back, and how to manipulate situations to his advantage. But you’re absolutely right that there’s also an element of genuine empathy in the way he interacts with people. A lot of tiny people in this world would want absolutely nothing to do with giants, and yet Trevor, despite everything, has this almost instinctual way of navigating these larger-than-life women. Sure, his love for Donnica is at the center of that, but I do think there’s something else, something in him that’s drawn to this world, even when it should repel him.

But winning over Annabel? That’s going to be his real challenge. Given her blind worship of Donnica and her outright disdain for tiny people, she’s not going to make it easy for him. The real question is, can he do it? Is there a path where he earns her grudging respect, or will she always see him as an intruder in Donnica’s world? That’s something I’m excited to explore further.

And one last thing… I completely agree that Annabel, with all her bravado and cold precision, doesn’t actually understand real love. She can’t grasp the depth of Donnica’s feelings for Trevor. But something tells me… love is right around the corner for our Breaker.

 

Amber & Rebecca

Man, I have to tell you one of those funny writer stories… I came so close to cutting the prom dress shop scene. For whatever reason, I felt like a lot of it didn’t click. Yes, it had that big revelation at the end, and I definitely wanted that, but I wasn’t sure if the chapter was paced well enough to keep interest until we got there.

I played around with it a lot, even considered taking it out entirely and trying to fit the revelation somewhere else. That meltdown in the fitting room? That had so many rewrites. I’m still not 100% sure I nailed it, but reading your reaction, and especially hearing that you, as a reader, genuinely didn’t know if Rebecca was going to be there when Amber walked out, that makes me feel better about the tension working.

…Though, to be fair, I might have just over-researched prom dresses to the point that it soured my mood on the whole scene. :D

Great points on the food court scene, too. I knew at some point I had to address Amber and Rebecca’s history more directly. Amber forcing Rebecca up her ass was obviously traumatizing… no matter how much Rebecca loves her now, trauma doesn’t just vanish because an understanding is reached. Those kinds of memories linger, and for someone like Rebecca, who is loud, sharp-tongued, and a fighter at heart, those wounds are bound to surface when she’s vulnerable or pushed.

The real question is: how will it continue to come up? Will it be destructive or healing? I don’t think we have a concrete answer yet, but we’ll definitely be exploring it further as we move forward.

Your analysis of the Tiny Teen & Me scene was fantastic. Honestly, I hadn’t consciously thought of Rebecca reclaiming her lost childhood as she tried on those clothes, but you’re absolutely right. Looking back, I can see how that thread naturally wove itself into the scene.

I’m going to put on my pretentious writer’s hat here and say that, while I didn’t intentionally construct it that way, I think I was guided by intuition. After spending so long with these characters, you start writing on instinct, channeling things about them that you know at a deeper level even if you don’t fully realize it in the moment.

You’re a fellow writer, so you know that feeling when you just know you’re spinning something great. That was what happened for me in that scene. When Rebecca stepped out in the fairy costume, twirled for Amber, and had that quiet revelation about how much she truly loved her life now—I felt that moment. I was almost overwhelmed with joy, with something even deeper I couldn’t fully explain.

I am very, VERY proud of that scene, and reading your breakdown — seeing you get to the heart of why it clicked — was so rewarding for me. So, seriously, thank you for that. I know this is just some silly erotica story, but knowing that it’s working on a deeper level means the world to me.

Also, bro… that paragraph where you laid out everything that’s happened to Rebecca? From her stepfather’s abuse to shrinking, losing her registration, being kicked out of her complex, and all the torment Amber put her through? I sat there thinking, damn, what did I do to this poor woman?

But, I mean… that’s what we do to our characters, right? We put them through hell. It makes the highs hit harder. Though I will say… it seems like Rebecca has suffered enough at this point. Maybe it’s smooth sailing for her from here on out.

…Probably.

And I’m not sure if you should read too much into the teens asking Amber first and not Rebecca about the pictures—other than the fact that, in this world, most giantesses assume other giantesses are the ones in control.

Probably because they are :D

But we’ll see!

 

Thank you so much for the positive feedback! This chapter was a crucial turning point in both style and plot, so seeing you break down why it worked was both amazing and a huge relief. Plenty more to come!

P.S. Did you catch all the italics and bold in this response? Guess who’s using Word now????