Reviewer: darkone Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06 2025 11:42 PM Title: PART 1

So many here have expressed many of the ideas and feelings I have and I don't want to be redundant. But I do want to express my concern that Rebecca is losing her free will. I like the relationship that she and Amber have forged, but I hate to see her become a true slave.

Reviewer: breastclimber Signed [Report This]
Date: March 06 2025 6:46 AM Title: PART 25

Called it!

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 04 2025 12:05 AM Title: PART 25

Fantastic as always but damn so many thing happened and the end of the chapter? For real it's gonne be so hard to wait a full week. 

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: March 03 2025 5:35 AM Title: PART 24

Sorry for the late review, irl has beet me up.

So this chapter was hard to read. No fault of your writing, its just well from the moment I realized they were at a formal event, I realized this was when Donnica would find out about Rebecca and she did, (sort of0. 

This chapter started so well to. It was actually kinda sweet. I also did like Rebecca asking about the future and where Amber saw them heading. Though Amber is way to spoiled and selfish to really be able to handle that question. Probably why she couldnt answer it. 

The dance it self was cute. Very wholesome. I was on edge here, kept waiting for something to happen. It finally did. So Donnica now knows that AMber is in a relationship with a tiny. She both took that much better and worse then expected. Rebbeca is alive (plus) and Donnica didnt kill her for her temarity to speak so horrribly (justified) to Donnica. Now exactyl what Donnica thinks is going on remains unclear. But for now she is safe from Donnica. 

     So, Rebecca is now fully in thrall with Amber. Rebecca is still there, but she is no longer in control. She has fully submitted to Amber. If Amber wasnt such a bitch yay. But Amber is A Grade a bitch, not suprising considering her mother, but Amber needs a strong partner, and I am afraid she wont see what see has lost in Rebecca. I really do hope there is a positive light at the end of this tunnel. I dont mind a tiny being subserviant to their owner, but they need some spit and vigor. Rebecca may have just lost that. I hope Amber realizes that. I really am rooting for these two. 

Your sex scenes remain top tear.

Author's Response:

Sweet with a hint of impending doom was exactly what I was going for, so I’m glad that landed for you lol.

I wanted to start off with tension — that little fight in the back of the car, the conversation about Donnica to plant the seed of unease — but then ramp up the sweetness with Amber caring for Rebecca, leading into the dance where they finally eased up… and then it all fell apart with Donnica showed up.

I’d also suggest that Amber’s lack of an answer about where their relationship is heading isn’t just her avoiding the question, it’s probably because she genuinely doesn’t know. She’s still a teenager, and I don’t think she has a clear sense of where anything in her life is going right now. But on a deeper level? I do think she cares about Rebecca.

And yet, you’re absolutely right…. The tiny woman is being pulled into Amber’s gravity, caught in something bigger than either of them fully understand. How or why it’s happening is still up in the air… and what it’s all leading to? Yet to be seen.

I’m rooting for them too! Let’s hope they figure it out.

Also, thanks for the comments on the sex scenes… I’ve actually been paying more attention to them lately, tweaking things after hours. Since this is my first giantess story, I’m still figuring a lot of this out as I go.

Appreciate the comment, and I hope your IRL stuff isn’t too rough for you :)

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02 2025 8:10 AM Title: PART 24

Okay, so I spoke a little too soon in my review a couple chapters ago, when I thought Amber had broken Rebecca.

Just a little, though.

A lot of what I said then applies to the back end of this chapter. Amber's power tripping, surrendering herself to those darker, primal urges, herself, ironically enough, becoming a slave to them, is still something I strongly believe she's going to come to regret.

This time we actually got to see Rebecca's sense of self being wiped away, both in Donnica's hand and at the smell of Amber's feet. If not for the former, I might have assumed this was just pheromones playing a larger role in things than we were initially led to believe. But between that act of submission to Donnica and the way Trevor carries himself in general, clearly there's more to this than that. In fact, we saw Trevor almost succumb to something kind of similar when he confronted Helena, with the thought of standing up for Annabel grounding him and allowing him to fight it.

But with Rebecca, it's the one she would fight for that's doing this to her.

This was a heartbreaking chapter, agonizing in the most beautiful of ways. I think what made this worse was how much of the real Amber we saw come through here. Now, I already know what you're going to say here in your response:

Who's to say which part of Amber is real and which part isn't? Those primal urges are real, right? Maybe this was who Amber has been all along. Look at me being all cryptic and shit.

So let me go ahead and nip that in the bud. By the "real" Amber, I mean the one capable of rational thought and complex emotions. The one that needed Rebecca to give her the strength to overcome her fear and go into the dance and make friends. The one that freaked out in the dress store because she knew how capable and smart Rebecca is and that the abuse Amber had done to her in the past could make the tiny want to leave her. The one that tiptoes into her room and keeps her voice down so that Rebecca doesn't become startled.

The one that actually loves Rebecca.

But yeah, we saw Amber trying to reconcile primal Amber with real Amber early on in that first segment. She tried to dominate Rebecca, attempting to force her to talk about how many times she had slept with someone in the back seat of a car and defending her mother. But when Rebecca resisted, Amber became confused. Actually, when she asked why Rebecca was "making it weird," it reminded me of that scene when Amber got off for destroying Trevor's house. There, too, she insisted that the tinies actually liked what she was doing to them, even though they made it clear that they didn't. It was slightly different here, as Rebecca's thoughts on that treatment are a bit more ambiguous, but, to me at least, this was more or less the same thing.

This is important for two reasons.

First, seeing this part of Amber's thinking helps make what she ends up doing to Rebecca later on seem less evil and more unfortunate. Yeah, she was punishing Rebecca with her ass and pussy, but a part of her really does believe that Rebecca wants this. That's why using her smell and authority to strip Rebecca of her free will, even with Rebecca fighting it so admirably, doesn't contradict with Amber's love for her.

Amber just doesn't understand. Not yet, anyway.

Second, this stood out to me particularly because I feel like Amber has been backsliding the last couple times we've seen her. She's going back to punishing Rebecca, putting her "in her place" and establishing that she's the giant here. That's pre-abuse-talk Amber stuff. Only this time, that primal urge is backing up that behavior, which makes it even more dangerous.

Oh, and the fact that Amber is really starting to like her mom again isn't helping things, either.

But Amber's concern at seeing Rebecca so disturbed in S1 was really touching, and it showed that real Amber is still in there, that she still cares for and loves Rebecca, despite that urge to dominate threatening that love. And Rebecca reciprocating by deciding that they should still go to the dance despite having no energy or desire to, let alone the dangers she faced, all for the sake of helping Amber overcome her trauma and have the life she neve did was so fucking sweet! I love Rebecca so much! Poor girl!

And seeing how Rebecca moved past her own (very justified) insecurities about the danger she could face and how even wealthy tinies were free of such concerns in order to help Amber socialize and have a great time at the dance was so endearing, The love Rebecca has for Amber is very real and clearly goes far beyond any primal urges or simple master/slave relationship. Rebecca even got into the mix, socializing with Amber's teammates too, which was super cute (I love how she pumped Amber up to Megan and her friends).

Actually, I'm always curious when a new named character shows up. Was Megan just named in order to show that Amber was familiar with one of them, or might we see some more of her in the future. The brief glimpse we got of her made her seem pretty sweet, but I wonder if that would have changed if she knew that Rebecca was unregistered or even just that Amber was actually dating a tiny. We haven't seen a lot of how people feel about tinies outside of the firm and the characters that we're following, so I actually found myself pretty curious about how someone like Megan might feel about these things.

Speaking of which, detailing the tiny walkway and noting that there was a tiny food table, despite the fact that the school had no tiny students (at least I assume as much, given that Rebecca going to St. James seemed to justify her tiny status), was pretty cool! Again, it made me wonder how most of the students and mothers there actually feel about tinies, but it was awesome to see how this society is capable of accommodating them (and the fact that these things are even available seems to imply that at least some people have a more favorable view of tinies).

But man, just seeing Rebecca reassure Amber throughout the night was fantastic. It was cathartic, in a way. Seeing Amber relax and get into things thanks to Rebecca's help kind of allowed the reader to experience that relief vicariously through Amber.

Registration continues to be an open question in this story. If only there was some worldbuilding to clarify things! But seriously, I am curious as to what, exactly registration is. I know it amounts to letting bigs do whatever they want to tinies, but that can't seriously be the law, right? I mean, is the government literally making tinies pay protection money in order to survive? If I had to guess, it's probably more about recordkeeping and how much harder it would be to even know that an unregistered was murdered rather than the law just saying, "Fuck it, squish 'em. It's cool."

But hey, I could be wrong, too.

Then Donnica had to show up and ruin everything! Ha!

When Donnica asked Annabel to seek out a school even she could surprise Amber by showing up at, I figured it would be the prom. After careful consideration and deliberation, I've decided to give myself the point on this one. After all, you invented a whole different "test dance" that we weren't privy to knowing about beforehand, so close enough. Adjust my current tally accordingly.

It was so intriguing watching Donnica navigate handling tinies in the outside world. I assume it was a combination of thinking Rebecca was registered, knowing how some people think higher of tinies than she does, and not wanting to upset Amber that led to Donnica taking the nice, yet condescending approach. I also wonder how much of Donnica talking down to Rebecca had to do with Donnica actually thinking of her as a lesser being versus knowing full well how insulting she was being and enjoying throwing it in the tiny's face.

But then the biproduct of Rebecca's abuse struck again! That condescension from Donnica and the belief that she was protected led Rebecca to tapping into that hate in her heart for Donnica, and she couldn't stop herself. Amber was right to be pissed here, as Rebecca herself later acknowledged, but I understand why Rebecca couldn't hold back. Amber might too, if she stopped and thought about it. I mean, Amber almost killed a dude for pushing Rebecca down some stairs and being a jerk about it later on, but Donnica set the stage for that to happen and , oh yeah, took everything away from Rebecca. Of course Rebecca can't contain her anger when she thinks she's free to let it out.

Then it got worse when Amber stuck with their "great friends" cover story. Rebecca took it as a slap in the face, as though Amber was ashamed to admit to her mother that they were dating. Or maybe a part of it was, with the shift in their relationship, Rebecca might have been starting to doubt whether Amber really views her as a girlfriend or not (which is a really, really valid concern at this point, even if Amber doesn't realize it yet).

And now Donnica knows that Amber is dating Rebecca, which makes perfect sense, between how poorly their story could stand up to the slightest of scrutiny and Rebecca fighting over the "great friends" thing. Her reaction was really interesting, though. She wasn't angry or shocked that Amber was actually dating a tiny woman, she just wanted to make sure that Rebecca treated her daughter "with the utmost respect."

Rebecca submitting to her so thoroughly was a bit of shocker, though. But that shows that the primal urge we keep hearing about within both Amber and Rebecca really isn't sexual in nature at all, even if that's primarily where it came out for them up until recently. Donnica seems to have a pretty good understanding of this, too. I wonder if she just haughtily expects this or if she actually knows something about this phenomenon that we haven't seen yet.

Amber freaking out about Donnica holding Rebecca and demanding she put the tiny down was so sweet to see. Despite her behavior sometimes, she really does care about Rebecca. Of course, that description could be used to describe a lot of abusive relationships (I'm looking at you, notepad). Donnica playing around by not setting Rebecca down right away, offering the tiny to Rebecca like she was a party favor, was a very Donnica way to handle the situation.

But I get why Amber is taking her mom's side here. She's not wrong that Donnica is trying. We've seen Donnica want to repair her relationship with her daughter, and for Amber to recognize that here felt kind of good. However, Amber using this to brush aside the truth about what Donnica is trying to do and getting upset at Rebecca for telling the truth is really unfortunate.

Not that Amber didn't have good reason to be pissed. I do understand Amber wanting to defend her mom, even if she was at least partially wrong in doing so. And Rebecca ditching the plan and attacking Donnica like that did leave Amber out to dry. I don't necessarily agree that Rebecca is ungrateful (although it makes sense to me that Amber would think that). Actually, I kind of think the opposite is true. Rebecca has helped Amber so much, bringing out the beautiful person that was buried inside that trauma and past abuse, including on that very night. But Amber was too busy pretending that she was a god to recognize this.

Like I said before, Amber making Rebecca say she would obey, with the foot smell, the quiet authority in her voice, and that finger bearing down on her, while incredibly manipulative and intentional at this point, is something I can understand Amber doing because she feels like, deep down, Rebecca wants this too. It's easier this way. She's doing it for Rebecca's own good, really.

But man, she's going to hate herself by the time she finally has Rebecca where she thinks she wants her.

Because at some point, Amber is going to have to choose: Does she want a slave or a girlfriend? Because she can't have both. Rebecca's thoughts while this was happening have removed any doubt I had about that before.

Right now, Amber thinks she can have it both ways, leaning on Rebecca when she needs to and enslaving her when she doesn't. Sooner or later, though, she's going to realize just how wrong she is. The only question is whether or not she'll be able to bring the Rebecca she loves back once she finishes breaking her.

Author's Response:

The thing about Rebecca and Amber’s relationship is this… who’s to say which part of it is real and which is springing from that primal urge deep within the collective humanity that-

Oops!

Must have got carried away there for a sec! Let’s walk this back ;)

 

I’m glad you referenced both of Rebecca’s surrenders… one in Donnica’s grasp and the other in the car with Amber. I know a lot of readers might be leaning toward the biological link as the cause of Rebecca’s obedience, but the scene with Donnica was deliberately placed to muddy the waters and keep things ambiguous. What’s really going on? Who’s to say… (ok, I caught myself doing that, and you’re right, it’s annoying lol).

Great pickup on the "you’re making it weird" line. That was an important piece of dialogue, you mostly got the meaning, it was a call to previous chapters where Amber commands and Rebecca obeys, yet neither of them are fully aware of what’s happening between them. I even had Amber ask it twice in that scene just to hammer the point home. Nice callback to Chapter 11 too… both moments definitely come from the same line of thinking.

“That's why using her smell and authority to strip Rebecca of her free will, even with Rebecca fighting it so admirably, doesn't contradict with Amber's love for her.”

I just wanna say this is spot on and I appreciate you stating it so clearly. I sometimes worry Amber’s love gets overshadowed by what’s happening between them, but it is very real.

Glad you pointed out Amber’s concern in the car, too. That scene was heartwarming to write and led into their conversation about their future and Amber committing to Rebecca no matter what. But at the same time, Amber is still a teenager, completely unequipped to handle what’s happening between them. She doesn’t have life’s answers, she’s just grappling with emotions she doesn’t fully understand. That internal push-and-pull that happens in young people is very much still happening in her.

Thanks for the words on Rebecca assuring Amber and how it allowed the reader to get into the dance as well. As you know I am a very conflict first writer and often find it difficult to carry gentler moments, so it was important that this part, small as it was, land.

Also, quick question; before Big D made her entrance, there was a little food talk between Amber and Rebecca where she joked about putting Rebecca on the menu. Did you like that? I mean, I know it wasn’t outright vore, but it might have alluded to it a little. ;)

“Registration continues to be an open question in this story. If only there was some worldbuilding to clarify things! But seriously, I am curious as to what, exactly registration is. I know it amounts to letting bigs do whatever they want to tinies, but that can't seriously be the law, right? I mean, is the government literally making tinies pay protection money in order to survive? If I had to guess, it's probably more about recordkeeping and how much harder it would be to even know that an unregistered was murdered rather than the law just saying, "Fuck it, squish 'em. It's cool."”

I’M SORRY BUT IT SUDDENLY GOT VERY LOUD IN HERE AND I CAN’T HEAR WHAT YOU’RE SAYING! WAS IT SOMETHING ABOUT WORLDBUILDING? WHAT? SORRY CAN’T HEAR I’LL CHECK BACK LATER IN LIKE A FEW YEARS OR SOMETHING.

 

Wow that was strange, getting all loud then for no reason. Oh well, I’m sure that part of the review wasn’t that important. Moving on…

Okay, fine, I’ll give you points on the dance. I was going to award half-points, but I suppose a dance is a dance.

And yeah, in public, under the eyes of the law, Donnica has to somewhat behave. But I also think she realized Rebecca was at least somewhat important… though, let’s be real, her natural dominance over tinies was still on full display. She truly sees herself as a goddess, and that bleeds into her interactions, not just with random tinies either, but sometimes even with Trevor.

Hey, remember when I said in private chat "maybe we’ll see some of that Rebecca fire?" Well, there it was. She went off on Donnica, then on Amber. Of course, she actually isn’t registered, so once the dust settled, a raging Amber had her way with her. But there was fire.

I had so much fun writing the power outage scene… really tried to amp up the mystery and ambiguity of what’s going on behind the scenes with Rebecca. And I loved the way everything seemed to snap back to normal once the power came back on, like the spell was broken. I hope that’s how it came across for you too.

And yes, a very Donnica thing to offer Rebecca to Amber first. Classic.

“Amber freaking out about Donnica holding Rebecca and demanding she put the tiny down was so sweet to see. Despite her behavior sometimes, she really does care about Rebecca. Of course, that description could be used to describe a lot of abusive relationships (I'm looking at you, notepad).”

If you are implying that my relationship with Notepad is anywhere near as complicated and abusive as the relationships in this story… then you are 100% correct. And oh my god, I just realized where I’m getting my inspiration from.

Love that you pointed out how Amber justifies everything in her head. The best interpersonal conflicts are the ones where the reader can understand both sides, and I really tried hard to make that happen here. And while I know the audience is heavily on Rebecca’s side, I do think Amber has a strong argument… even if her mindset is young and misplaced.

“Right now, Amber thinks she can have it both ways, leaning on Rebecca when she needs to and enslaving her when she doesn't. Sooner or later, though, she's going to realize just how wrong she is.”

Absolutely love how this is worded. Of course, I have to add my signature "even though it may not be exactly what’s happening" disclaimer… but yeah, mostly correct. We’ll see how it plays out. ;)

 

Amazing review, as always!

Reviewer: breastclimber Signed [Report This]
Date: March 01 2025 1:58 AM Title: PART 24

Okay, I am going to do a two part review, for the past section and this one.

So I think It was Me covered the Donnica's killing of Marge and Dolores. What I have to add is that when Donnica killed tiny's previously it was in extreme response of anger because those tines almost put Amber in jail. Marge and Dolores was just to get Annabel to stop not paying attention? Wow that was such a weak motivation. So I am sad that Donnica is now willing to kill for very minor reasons. 

I'm not sure I agree with It Was Me's analysis that Annabel broke herself and that why she is willing to clean Donnica's feet. I just think Annabel has lost her marbles and is living in a fantasy world where Donnica is Queen and Trevor is King. She in my opinion is just whack-a-doodle-doo.

The way you describe the lives of Marge and Dolores after they die.. it feels personal, like you are trying to remind me that they had lives until Donnica just casually snuffed them. Argh.

Now moving onto the next section. Holy crap Juliette, out of nowhere. Why are so many giantesses in their mid-twenties? Their most volatile age where they are still figuring out who they are? Anyway it wasn't the way that Juliette handled Trevor it was when she put him on the ground, making purposeful Tremors and considering doing more. Holy crap!

Then Helena. Purposefully taking off her shoes to assert dominance. And her growing anger when holding him. To me it looked like she would crush him in her hand if not for Annabel rushing in. And then Annabel holding Trevor to her chest. That's quite an intimate spot.

Then Donnica "punishing" Trevor. God, I loved that pussy scene. More more more!

But Annabel watching Trevor, imagining improving his technique, as he ate out Donnica's pussy. It so made me think that breaking Trevor might still be in his future! Especially since Annabel wants to be a part of their relationship so badly.

Now on to the second half of the story, Rebecca and Amber. So the first thing that really struck me is that Rebecca wasn't broken (at least not visibly yet, she shows signs of it later on).

It was interesting seeing that fight between Amber and Rebecca in the car about Donnica. It's clear that Rebecca and Amber need to work out that issue. The problem came later in the chapter when Rebecca felt intimidated so much by Donnica that she just became a slave to her? That was weird. I mean I can understand unbridled fear of a giantess, but I think Rebecca's submission is leaking out to any other giantess, and it's worrying to me.

Amber making some better friends in the gym was nice. I mean I think it might lead to her friends visiting and then maybe wanting to play with Rebecca? I dunno it would be some fun drama leading to Amber asserting her ownership more with Rebecca towards her friends.

The initial conversation between Donnica and Amber was pretty revealing. Donnica talking to Amber like she was a small child, or ignoring her. Looks like Rebecca was right all along but Amber fails to notice it. And then when Rebecca fly's off the handle because Amber won't admit they are girlfriends, and somehow Amber not noticing that as well. I guess Amber is kind of like Donnica, not too bright!

And then the big scene during the blackout when Donnica held Rebecca. I admit I had a hard time trying to figure out what Rebecca was feeling that was more primal than fear. The idea that submission is deeper than even fear is not something I can really relate to. I just don't think humans ever had something in their evolutionary tree to cause this kind of feeling. We have always been able to overcome all obstacles that the wild has beset us with. I don't know, maybe this is just a Rebecca thing.

And then the scene where Amber is furious beyond all reason. Of course foot oder to the domination rescue? Ok, you have a foot thing. But again the idea that it can tame Rebecca was just weird to me. And then that weird submission thing again that Rebecca has. I guess Rebecca has been broken, but since it wasn't done by a professional like Annabel, it only gets triggered by certain situations?

And of course as I predicted last time, Amber goes all god complex! Screaming it out. I was kind of bummed out that the pussy scene with Amber was so light in description, and then Rebecca lost time, and the pussy scene was gone.   grrr.

Then the scent of Amber thing again, putting Rebecca to sleep. I mean who really smells so much? I have a super sensitive nose, and when I meet people, it's not like their scent ever is that present. Well, Rebecca falling asleep to it was sweet, but I am super worried about Rebecca's mental health. She is becoming more and more like an Annabel slave. God help her.

Author's Response:

I don’t know what story you’ve been reading but Donnica would crush you for looking at you funny. One of my other readers is going through the story again and chatting with me over discord and reminding me how much more easy-going Donnica gets in the later chapters… she’s been enslaving and crushing her way through the story for a while now. And that thing with her daughter… that was 1 table at a restaurant, she crushed everyone there… go back and reread that passage, she even does it kind of with a casual indifference at first, and then starts to get turned on.

 And at the island she had no problem buying 2 tinies for Victoria she knew would be killed and laughed wickedly when they did. So, bro you either have a selective memory or are trying to shoehorn some idealized version of her back into the story.

Making Dolores and Marge more relatable was the point. It was supposed to show the contrast between the crushing act of snuffing them out against the indifference of the giantess above them.

How many giantesses are in their mid-twenties besides Julette and Annabel? Donnica and Helena are same age, Donnica’s friends (like Victoria) are all her age. All Amber’s friends are her age, eighteen. So just giantess in their mid-twenties… two?

“The initial conversation between Donnica and Amber was pretty revealing. Donnica talking to Amber like she was a small child, or ignoring her. Looks like Rebecca was right all along but Amber fails to notice it. And then when Rebecca fly's off the handle because Amber won't admit they are girlfriends, and somehow Amber not noticing that as well. I guess Amber is kind of like Donnica, not too bright!”

The cover story was that they were just friends. Not girlfriends, just her tiny friend from St. James. That’s why Amber was so thrown into a loop when Rebecca acted the way she did.

“I don't know, maybe this is just a Rebecca thing.”

Maybe it is…

“And then the scene where Amber is furious beyond all reason. Of course foot oder to the domination rescue? Ok, you have a foot thing. But again the idea that it can tame Rebecca was just weird to me.”

Rebecca doesn’t have a foot fetish; in fact, she hated feet before she met Amber. But something happened to her biologically when she became closer with Amber, she started to like the smell, it started to rewire her brain in ways she doesn’t understand. Amber, had something of a moment of clarity in the car, that the scent was more than an aphrodisiac, it was something else… and knew in that moment it would throw Rebecca into a loop (which it did) 

“Then the scent of Amber thing again, putting Rebecca to sleep. I mean who really smells so much? I have a super sensitive nose, and when I meet people, it's not like their scent ever is that present.”

Rebecca is an inch tall, down Ambers dress and pressed up against her skin…. Of course, it’s plausible that she would smell her. In fact, anyone would, especially if that skin had been out dancing and had just had sex. 

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27 2025 11:47 PM Title: PART 24

Perfect as always! The way you describe Donnica's presence is pure gold. I love this one so much and can't wait for the next update."

Author's Response:

Perfect review as always :)

Yes, I’m glad you enjoyed the way I described Donnica, she is like a force of the universe! Thank you for the kind words and see you on Monday!

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27 2025 6:31 AM Title: PART 23

I was just wondering how Marge and Delores were doing! Wait ... did I do this? Whoops!

But their deaths were so intriguing to me, not for the actual dying (although the ho-hum way Donnica stomped them was super fucking hot!), but rather why the were killed. And there were two reasons for it, actually.

First we have broken Annabel getting upset and distracted at the "poor job" the two tinies were doing on Donnica's heels. Now Annabel was always a perfectionist, but this was something else entirely. She was holding them to an impossible standard, absolute perfection, not because of her pride as a breaker (which would have been her reason for this pre-Lisa's emergence) but because they weren't "completely devoted" to serving Donnica. Annabel sees this as a privilege (one they can't refuse!), and she sees their inability to do better as sacrilege. That's why they bothered her so much here; they weren't giving Donnica what she deserved. They weren't fulfilling their purpose!

And then there's Donnica. She saw that Annabel was distracted by them, that they're existence was stressing Annabel out. So she stood up and casually stepped on them, ending their lives for Annabel's sake. Of course, Annabel's so focused on serving her master that she at first misinterprets this as Donnica being upset with her for failing to properly train the tinies.

So then we get that wholesome moment sprouting out of those two cold-blooded murders. Donnica tells Annabel to not stress out about things like that, to try and not be a perfectionist. Then she tells Annabel that she's the best (aw!). And the reaching out to put her hands on Annabel's shoulders, grounding her in a figurative sense was such a nice touch!

So those murders were born from Annabel's unyielding devotion to Donnica and new understanding of life and Donnica wanting to make things easier for Annabel. It really is amazing how such a terrible (and damned sexy) thing can come from such raw and touching emotions on the part of the giants here.

Of course, Annabel's devotion has been taken to another level now that she's broken herself. And yeah, this first segment, in particular, proved me right about that, I think. Her worry and anger over the tinies was a sign of it, but if there was any doubt, Annabel offering to clean off Donnica's foot and the foot rub that came after removed it. The pleasure Annabel took in serving Donnica is exactly what she expected out of Marge and Delores (and all tinies not named Trevor).

Oh, and slipping up and calling Donnica mistress. That was a sign, too. Although, I'm not sure which was more surprising: the casual way in which that slipped out or how unsurprised and imediately accepting Donnica was that Annabel viewed her that way.

Annabel's purpose in life is to serve Donnica and Trevor. I love how the narrative makes clear that Annabel could thrive without her job at the firm, making a killing at her breaking side job. But she stays because the only two people she really cares about are there, and she wouldn't even dream of leaving their side.

I also found it interesting how that devotion and servitude take different forms when she applies them to Donnica and Trevor. With Donnica, it's literal servitude, as in every word Donnica says is a command to be treasured and obeyed. Annabel gets pleasure out of doing whatever Donnica wants her to do. Annabel never showed an interest in feet before this chapter, but rubbing Donnica's was such a gratifying experience for her here, all because it was Donnica. She is to Donnica what she expects a tiny to be to a regular-sized person, only Donnica appreciates her devotion and actually really likes her, so it's a mutually beneficial form of servitude.

With Trevor, Annabel aims to serve through protection and helping him via an "I know best" approach. The way she found the courage to stand up to both Helena and Julianna, her two biggest bullies in the office, without the least bit of hesitation (more on that in a minute) was truly inspiring, and it was solely due to her feeling that Trevor was in real danger and in need of her protection. She was also talking over Trevor and explaining the situation with Helena to Donnica despite him not wanting her to because she thought, as a tiny, he didn't truly understand the danger he was in in that moment. She loves him, but she had to do that to him for his own good, at least in her mind.

And later, when she's spying on Donnica and Trevor's "disciplinary session," she was quite literally plotting ways in which she could help Trevor improve his technique. She knows he enjoys serving just as much as she does (that might not be exactly true, but she's not totally wrong, either), and she saw an opportunity to help him improve in that regard, something I think she would appreciate herself in equal measure, honestly.

That second segment was intense and incredibly erotic! From Julianna grabbing him and making sure he had to sit to keep from falling over from her steps and those slight movements with her shoe when he was on the ground to Helena knocking him on all fours with her casual steps, this is exactly the kind of writing that drew me into this story early on! I can't say enough about how much I loved this! Oh, and the way Helena's voice rattled his bones from so close? Very choice!

But Trevor being able to overcome all that was inspiring! And the fact that it was the thought of Annabel being bullied by these people that not only motivated the original effort but gave him the strength to intimidate a tiny-hating giant like that was ... intriguing, to say the least. He's really grown fond of Annabel, hasn't he? Could he be growing a little too fond of her? Was I right to jump ship to Team Annabel when I did? Or was this him just standing up for a treasured friend?

Or maybe this isn't a love triangle at all. Maybe our power couple will find ways to "incorporate" Annabel into some of their fun. I have no doubt Annabel would be down for that!

But man, the way Trevor took charge against Helena was impressive. He called out her performance. He basically said she's a cancer to the office. Shit, he even pointed out a loophole in her contract that could lead to her getting fired, and his semi-bluff, not being sure if he had the authority to fire her but saying he did, was gutsy as fuck! I respected all of that! And he even included telling them to leave Annabel alone in his list of demands to her.

Then he had to twist the knife. "You will obey."

I'm really starting to think something more is going on with Trevor. Maybe it's a Napoleon complex on steroids or just a need to see how far he can push things. Maybe he's a daredevil and gets a sort of high off of living on the edge by taking things too far with giants. He could even just be so high off his own success that he's trying to relive his "big" days or something. I'm not sure, but, at this point, I think this is something beyond him just trying to establish himself in the office or fend off his girlfriend's attempts to literally own him.

But again, Annabel coming in and being fearless for Trevor's sake was such a wonderful moment for her. These were people she was terrified of just a few chapters ago. Now she's telling them to shut the fuck up and ordering them around when it comes to Trevor's safety. I'm falling for this girl more and more each time we see her, at least when she isn't killing tinies (okay, okay, even then sometimes, too; what? That I Wanna Know What Love Is scene was fucking adorable!).

But you know what struck me the most about this whole thing, the one question that was in my head throughout this whole scene?

Why won't Helena use LegalSync and follow office policies?

That's really shady to me. She gave me the same vibes the first time we met her, too. I think she's up to something. Donnica's office coup may not be the last one we see in this story ...

Seeing Trevor fight Donnica hard for what he knows is best for the office was so frustrating to read! Annabel's heart was in the right place trying to defuse the situation, but fuck if she wasn't blocking him from getting through to Donnica. That's the difference between a devoted servant and someone who truly has your best interests at heart: Annabel is too obsessed with Donnica to even try to help Trevor make his point, even though I think she knows that he's probably right here. Because doing that would technically put her at odds with her master, and she can't do that. If she approached Donnica in the way she did Trevor, wanting to do what's best for him even if he might not be thrilled about it, she'd have been right there arguing alongside Trevor and probably getting their point across to her.

So that's the difference between her love for Trevor and her devotion to Donnica: She'll always protect Trevor, but she'll always let Donnica walk into whatever minefield she's about to step into, too convinced of her master's divinity to see the truth.

But Donnica being so dismissive of him, even after everything he's done to improve the office, kind of proves Trevor's point from the last chapter, doesn't it? He was pushing it when he said it, but Donnica really isn't as smart as she thinks she is. She's so convinced that everything is under her control that she won't even listen when the man she loves, the one who fixed her failing firm, the guy who saved her when no one else could. And given my thoughts on Helena in general right now, I'm pretty sure this is going to come back to bite her later on.

But, I've gotta admit, she knows Trevor so much better now than she did pre-island. She's learned that the stick does nothing to him, but the carrot is his big weakness. When she decided to finally say fuck it and just take him, she didn't force him or threaten him; she just took her clothes off and he was done! She could do whatever she wanted with him, and he would be thrilled for the privilege of having it done to him. This has been the case for a little while now, but this may be the most blatant example of it to date.

And Donnica revealing (to us, not Trevor) that this was the whole reason he's in the office, to be there for her whenever she wanted, to serve her and assume his "true place" as her sex slave was a very her thing to plan. I know, she also truly believed that he could help once he showed that he had the knowhow to fix the firm, but yeah, her just not wanting to wait for that release anymore makes a lot of sense, given her character.

But what I loved most about this third segment was how Trevor defying Donnica was such a turn on for both Donnica and Annabel. Annabel desperately wanted Trevor to stop fighting their master (this made me feel like she put Trevor on the same level as her, which makes sense but is still a big thing given his size), but after a while she found their fight to be "intoxicating." She wants Trevor to understand and obey like she does, but that fight in him still does it for her.

And even though Donnica has been trying to stamp out that resistance within him, it really got her going here, too! His defiance went from an agitation to an aphrodisiac on a fucking dime! Like I've said several times at this point (but is still no less true), Donnica both hates and loves this part of Trevor!

The smut itself was fucking incredible, too! I feel like you went into a little more detail than you usually do with things on the "front end," and that effort was definitely noticeable and appreciated! Excellent work here!

Annabel spying on them was both hilarious and a little heartbreaking. I felt for her, being on the outside looking in, being so close to everything she wants but not knowing how to actually reach out and grab it. It was kind of sad, but also kind of hot (you know, if you're into the whole voyeur thing).

And her telling that polite assistant to "GO AWAY!" made me laugh so hard! I loved that! I get her frustration, though. But I also think that was a big thing for her, too. A few chapters ago, Annabel was struggling to get respect in the office, sucking hard at dealing with her fellow giants. Now, instead of being a doormat for them, she's taking charge and not afraid of them anymore. Unlike in the previous segment, she wasn't even protecting Trevor this time. She was just annoyed and Donnica didn't want to be disturbed, so this lady could just fuck off!

This was a great chapter! As always, I feel like there was so much here! I'm actually glad you decided to break the chapter up, because I think it would have been a bit of an overload to have had much more here!

Author's Response:

So, when I was writing that first scene after her awakening (or breaking, as you put it), I was sitting there thinking, I need something to happen… and then it hit me, we hadn’t had a real goddess Donnica moment in a while. I also realized we had some office slaves just lying around, barely seen in forever, so… I took it from there.

That was a wholesome moment between Donnica and Annabel after Donnica crushed the slaves, wasn’t it? Donnica has this patience with Annabel that I find so endearing. Even later, when Annabel storms back into the office all huffy, Donnica is just so calm, just casually calling for Trevor to be returned to her where she might have otherwise been concerned to see him in the clutches of another person. Then there’s both of them lording over him like concerned parents… it’s like she’s totally at peace with Annabel being right there beside her.

And yeah, Donnica had zero reservations about being called Mistress or getting her feet rubbed that sensually. Just another day at the office. I love writing those three together.

Bro, I was hyped that you pointed out the writing style of the Trevor/Helena confrontation. When I sat down to write it, I literally told myself, back to basics, so seeing you pick up on that? Chef’s kiss.

When it comes to Annabel, that whole scene was about mutual care… Trevor drawing strength from seeing Annabel bullied, and Annabel finally standing up to those bullies when she sees Trevor being threatened. When I wrote it, I got this warm little feeling in my stomach, and seeing it translate onto the page? That’s the best part.

Oh, and that "You will obey" line? Totally spur of the moment. At that point, I could feel the scene slanting too much in Trevor’s favor, and I was like, "Wait, I need to actually put him back in danger again."

BOOM.

That line hit, and everything shifted.

Honestly? Judging by your reaction, I might have taken it too far… Trevor really does look like a madman at times. But maybe there’s something deeper there.

And I can’t help but wonder, despite all the ways Donnica undermines Trevor, is her love and belief in him actually helping him? Maybe even Annabel’s protection is rubbing off on him in ways he hasn’t realized yet. We’re all shaped by the people around us, whether we know it or not.

Is that what’s happening here? Who knows. But it’s something to think about.

That “reprimand” scene with Trevor was a blast to write. I love the Donnica-Annabel-Trevor dynamic… Donnica the goddess, Annabel the true believer, and Trevor the rebel. Watching them bounce off each other has been so much fun, and trust me, it’s only going to ramp up in the next few chapters.

Also, great point about Donnica and the carrot. She’s all stick with everyone else (RIP Marge & Dolores), but with Trevor? She’s learned how to tame him. And I love how that plays out in their relationship, especially when you compare it to how they treat everyone else.

And yes, thanks for the SMUT shoutout! I always worry I dial it back too much when I’m deep in plot and character, but yeah, I put some extra effort into that scene. Gotta give some frontal love, baby! ;)

Also, Annabel shrieking “GO AWAY!” was by far my favorite thing to write this chapter. I was laughing so hard while writing it that I actually had to stop and ask myself, "Wait… is this actually funny, or am I just losing my mind?" You know how sometimes you write things you love but they are never received as well by readers? So, I’m very relieved to hear you got a kick out of it too.

And yeah, I’m really happy with the decision to separate the chapters… an idea I totally came up with on my own, zero outside influence whatsoever… unless people hated it, in which case I’ll be blaming someone else :D

Event-wise, this chapter was pretty short, but I think the insight and characterization carried it.

Thanks as always for the review, bro!

Reviewer: Ralgar Signed [Report This]
Date: February 25 2025 4:06 AM Title: PART 23

Well Donnica is something. I will give her that. I have to admit. I lost respect here for her. I didn't think she was a cheater. I haven't fully decided if that constituted adulatory yet or not. But the simple fact that I am even considering if that was cheating on her part. Well that says all I think needs to be said. Donnica is an uber bitch. She is also way to arrogant. She really needs to be brought down some how. I assume by Trevor, cause Amber is a not in the poistion to fight her own mother, b not strong enough, and c not exactly having the moral high ground to fight her. 

So this chapter revealed a side of Annebel that while I am not suprised is there, I wasnt expecting it. She is a natural tiny at heart. If she has the right master/owner. I think I get it now, her desire for tinys to obey. Cause she would be the perfect tiny. She wants all tinys to be as obedient as she is or rather would be. I doubt any of this is concious. Its purely subconscious. She wants a strong dominating master. She might not want to be an actual tiny, but she is one tiny regardless. 

Trevor, wew that took guts. To be willing to walk into the lions den, and even further into its open paw while its licking its chops. Then to basically tell said lion to stop trying to being a loner, and get with the program (sorry lost the analogy)Wow, that was either very brave or very stupid, or maybe very smart. A tiny being so strong does seem to through these giant ladies for a loop. They dont seem to know how to react. 

Also Donnica killing those two tinies. I am not suprised, but man it just goes to show the massive dissonance she has went it comes to Trevor. LIke I honestly think if she was ever forced to really confront herself, she would lose her ever freaking mind. It is such a contradiction, that there is no way to justify the thinking that makes Trevor special, and yet be ok to kill other tinies, just becasue they needed a break. Now I could bring up how that is completely accurate statement to how a lot of bosses treat there employs in the real world. But that is a topic that is both beyond me to have, and probably not appropriate for this site.

While I LIked this chapter, I am interested in what happened to cause this chapter to become two. I am not complaning, I will always want more chapters. But I am really curious to see what the next chapter brings on thursday.

Author's Response:

Interesting take on Donnica “cheating” just by accepting a foot rub from Annabel. Was it an act of sexuality, or just a self-proclaimed goddess basking in the devotion of her subject? Maybe a little of both. ;)

You think Donnica and Trevor are headed for a confrontation? If anyone could challenge her, it’s him. Well, in a battle of wills, anyway... because physically… yeah, not happening.

“So this chapter revealed a side of Annebel that while I am not suprised is there, I wasnt expecting it. She is a natural tiny at heart.“

I love this insight, I hadn’t thought about it in quite that way, but I totally see it. I’ve always envisioned her as a true believer in the hierarchy of power. She sees herself above tinies as much as she sees Donnica above her... it’s ingrained in her.

And yeah, she really does have quite the Master in Donnica, doesn’t she?

Thinking back to your last review, you made a similar observation about Trevor, how he’s a natural giant who just happens to be tiny. And now you’re seeing Annabel as a natural tiny who just happens to be big. That’s such a great contrast between the two. I need to sit with that idea more, but I love the observation.

Speaking of Trevor…

“Trevor, wew that took guts. To be willing to walk into the lions den, and even further into its open paw while its licking its chops.”

Bro, I loved that extended analogy lol.

Yeah, that was a fun scene to write, and you’re absolutely right... Trevor completely throws them off with his boldness. But I think he almost took it too far with Helena.

He’s definitely part brave, but also part stubborn… maybe sometimes he just forgets his size :D

“Also Donnica killing those two tinies. I am not suprised, but man it just goes to show the massive dissonance she has went it comes to Trevor. LIke I honestly think if she was ever forced to really confront herself, she would lose her ever freaking mind. It is such a contradiction, that there is no way to justify the thinking that makes Trevor special, and yet be ok to kill other tinies, just becasue they needed a break.”

Oh yeah… Donnica, like most of my characters, is a walking contradiction, I love writing them that way.

I actually think that the more demeaning attitude she has toward tinies does creep into her relationship with Trevor, especially when she feels like she’s losing control of him. We’ll definitely see those limits tested as the story moves forward.

“While I LIked this chapter, I am interested in what happened to cause this chapter to become two. I am not complaning, I will always want more chapters. But I am really curious to see what the next chapter brings on Thursday.”

So basically, I split this chapter up; I took all the Rebecca/Amber content and made it its own thing. So Thursday’s drop is gonna be all about your favorite dysfunctional couple.

We check back in with Trevor and Donnica next Monday.

And yeah, I get what you mean about this one ending a little abruptly, but for what it’s worth, there’s no more office drama content until Monday. Thursday is all about Amber and Rebecca. Hope you’re ready.

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: February 24 2025 3:25 AM Title: PART 1

Are you entirely sure you were wrong in assuming Donnica was happy about Trevor’s progress as office manager? 

Well I was until you asked this question!

But I get what you're saying here. I took that passage a little too seriously and assumed that's all there was to Donnica's thinking on this. So that confidence in him that she showed when she talked him into the job was also legit. And you're right that people are contradictory, and now I feel like I have a better understanding of where Donnica is coming from here. 

I'm no longer a little disappointed in her.

Author's Response:

“I'm no longer a little disappointed in her.”

Phew…. This is all that matters, gotta look out for my girl ;)