[Report This]Date: October 27 2024 6:11 AM Title: War Machine Fuel
This was a fun little read. The scenario is creative and I like your subtle approach to worldbuilding. Megastructures like a giant-sized tank are a cool idea, and the little details you sprinkle in about the conflict grow interest while keeping the pace up.
I like your prose, and your description is quite strong. My biggest critique is that the general flow could be a little smoother. I think swapping from present tense to past tense might help. Present tense can totally work, though it's tricky, and even super well-written present tense novels can turn people off anyway.
But still, this was a cool read. I hope the critique helps.
Author's Response:
Interesting, I had no idea that people were picky about the present to past tense dynamic as I tend to read much fiction and nonfiction that uses present tense for most of its prose. Thank you.