Reviewer: narisajt38 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2024 5:39 AM Title: Part 1: At first you don’t succeed try, try and try again

Hey, well i just finish reading this and i liked.

I liked Anura, i could identify with him in a few issues like the lack of friends during school and anger issue, although i never get into a fight i understand his anger, i fell that Anura is more a version of you in that universe instead of Max.

Speaking of Max well, a thing that i din't like was that you can of spoil his ending in the main story, yes we know that he would not die because you say it in the reviews but i fell that putting that abouth Max in here it kind of ruin what will happend to him and let us suspect what will happend to him during the end of it and it was a thing that i was fearing that you will put here.

Speaking of Max book “1001” pages it doesn't fell enough to cover the full story, i fell that maybe Max din't write all the details of it because it could be a lot strong . Speaking of it, i suspect that he probably change his name and his family also in the book so avoid the similitudes, also i will not surprise if he din't write abouth Christine or he did it but have to censure a lot of her.

I surprise that the news and the police instead of just looking for Max din't also go to contact his parents, i know that Robert and Rebecca din't write the book but the authorities could belive that they have some influence on his son writting, also considering that in the main story you have teased that Rebecca will find out what happend to Max they could really know a few things.

Abouth the aphids apart of they deaths, i'm surprised that they could ride a ladybug, considering that is a predator to them this make me curious if the aphids could tamer a ladybug or they just jump to his back, if the aphids could tamer one of their predators i can of curious if the ants could due it with a small bird.

I'm surprised that you adressed everything that happend after Olivia and Emma, i belive you will put somenthing like Anura saying “i din't see Emma since his boyfriend disappear”. I'm also surprised that you din't go by the path of Emma shrunk his sister for rage because for the reviews i fell that you will go to that path, i don't know if it was my review saying that instead of shrunk her by rage Emma will just tell her and see the mental breakdonw that she have but i'm glad that you go by that path. 

A thing that i din't like was somenthing in the tags list, you see at the same like Anura i fan of somenthing that start with the latter V, so i can of curious if we will have some V in the story, i liked how you write V in antopia and i can of curious i you will do it her considering that you will focus on unaware humans instead of insects.

Also a thing that you think can due is......  you think that considering that you make that the essedon bombers won the 2019 ALF you think that joker 2 could NOT make to the light of day, because if Anura saw that movie he will have the same reaction when i saw the episode 9 of star wars.

Reviewer: Barkinis Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12 2024 11:41 AM Title: Part 1: At first you don’t succeed try, try and try again

 I like slow-paced stories like this one where everything makes sense more than stories written without caring about the story. I'm still eagerly waiting for your posts from Turkey :) 

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review 

Yeah, I think setting a concrete storyline is a lot better than those messy action one-shots with no coherent storyline or development which are essentially porn while I prefer to write erotica. 

Chapter 2 will be out in a few weeks hopefully and I am 50% through it. I only have time to write on the weekends these days due to full-time work. 

Also, I think you accidentally posted your review twice.