Reviewer: narisajt38 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 28 2025 9:07 PM Title: Part 1: At first you don’t succeed try, try and try again

Hi once more :)

This is not a review but i wanted to put here all the easter eggs that i found throw this chapter, i felt that is necessary because nobody in the reviews has catch or mention the easter egg that they found and what's the point of the easter eggs if nobody found them and let it know.

The first from antopia are Anura cousin and her redhead friend that this 2 are divya and Lucy, then Is the would thing abouth Max and the mention of his parent Robert as a real estate agent, which i found a little weird that he would organice a rent outside of Melbourne where he lives unlest he move to mildura with his family, but i don't know much a lot about real state agents so i don't know.

From Is just a bug, is basicly everything that they mention abouth Emma and Olivie here.

For the Harry Potter fanfiction, i don't know. The true is that fanfic Is not my cup of tea and i didn't see anything related to world of JK Rowling. I guess the joker trailer which Is made by Warner bros the same company that made the movies.

I guess that's everything i found, i was expecting that the easter eggs would be somenthing like the pizza planet truck or the A113 from Pixar, but i liked how you reference most of the stories here.

Also considering that Anura Is loosely based on you, i'm sorry if you have a very rough past, i know that you change a few stuffs but still if you got a hard time i'm sorry and i want you to know that i also have troubles with my emotions and anger and i can understand a little.

But anyway that's all the easter eggs that i found, i don't know if there is more but if there, just let me know and i would deep here once more :)

Reviewer: narisajt38 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2024 5:39 AM Title: Part 1: At first you don’t succeed try, try and try again

Hey, well i just finish reading this and i liked.

I liked Anura, i could identify with him in a few issues like the lack of friends during school and anger issue, although i never get into a fight i understand his anger, i fell that Anura is more a version of you in that universe instead of Max.

Speaking of Max well, a thing that i din't like was that you can of spoil his ending in the main story, yes we know that he would not die because you say it in the reviews but i fell that putting that abouth Max in here it kind of ruin what will happend to him and let us suspect what will happend to him during the end of it and it was a thing that i was fearing that you will put here.

Speaking of Max book “1001” pages it doesn't fell enough to cover the full story, i fell that maybe Max din't write all the details of it because it could be a lot strong . Speaking of it, i suspect that he probably change his name and his family also in the book so avoid the similitudes, also i will not surprise if he din't write abouth Christine or he did it but have to censure a lot of her.

I surprise that the news and the police instead of just looking for Max din't also go to contact his parents, i know that Robert and Rebecca din't write the book but the authorities could belive that they have some influence on his son writting, also considering that in the main story you have teased that Rebecca will find out what happend to Max they could really know a few things.

Abouth the aphids apart of they deaths, i'm surprised that they could ride a ladybug, considering that is a predator to them this make me curious if the aphids could tamer a ladybug or they just jump to his back, if the aphids could tamer one of their predators i can of curious if the ants could due it with a small bird.

I'm surprised that you adressed everything that happend after Olivia and Emma, i belive you will put somenthing like Anura saying “i din't see Emma since his boyfriend disappear”. I'm also surprised that you din't go by the path of Emma shrunk his sister for rage because for the reviews i fell that you will go to that path, i don't know if it was my review saying that instead of shrunk her by rage Emma will just tell her and see the mental breakdonw that she have but i'm glad that you go by that path. 

A thing that i din't like was somenthing in the tags list, you see at the same like Anura i fan of somenthing that start with the latter V, so i can of curious if we will have some V in the story, i liked how you write V in antopia and i can of curious i you will do it her considering that you will focus on unaware humans instead of insects.

Also a thing that you think can due is......  you think that considering that you make that the essedon bombers won the 2019 ALF you think that joker 2 could NOT make to the light of day, because if Anura saw that movie he will have the same reaction when i saw the episode 9 of star wars.

Author's Response:

Hi there

Yeah, I will say that kind of spoiled the ending bit with Max in Antopia by revealing he lives through his ordeal. However, the things that happen to him throughout his ordeal will remain a mystery so you can imagine all the crazy shenanigans that happen to him.

As for the book Max wrote about his ordeal (1001 pages) you are right in the sense that he changed his name and the names of his family and friends. However, all the events that he depicts in the book are based on real events. It is important to remember that the world and wider community believe it’s a completely fictional story that he imagined and doesn’t know that these events really happened. In this sense, he doesn’t censure the strong ‘graphic’ details since fictional depiction lets the author write as disturbing as possible and results in his book being classified as an adult novel (18+).

As for the Police, I will have to spoil it a bit, yes, the police do get involved after Max’s parents call them after realising their parents realise, he is missing. Obviously, they look in the wrong place far and wide and the police don’t find him but I guess we will have to see who discovers Max in his shrunken state…….

Yeah, at first it is believed by the police and the wider community that Max went in hiding in the countryside or joined a street gang however they start to become suspicious of this assertion especially when his book is published and start noticing the strange accuracies to real-world events and wonder where his ideas have come from

Orange ladybugs are not carnivorous at all, they feed on sap so in this sense they wouldn’t be considered a predator to the aphids at all. Also, they haven’t tamed the ladybug, they have just hitchhiked on its back, similar to how birds ride on the back of elephants and rhinos.

I feel like the human instinct is to lash out using violence. Emma was in a moment of rage and resorted to punching her sister several times in the face rather than picking up her shrink ray and firing it at her. Had she been a bit more collected she probably wouldn’t done that however, she didn’t have time to shrink her after this since the police came shortly after this.

Vore comes later on in the story.

Apparently, Joker 2 is trash but I am curious now to see just how bad it is. 

Reviewer: Barkinis Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12 2024 11:41 AM Title: Part 1: At first you don’t succeed try, try and try again

 I like slow-paced stories like this one where everything makes sense more than stories written without caring about the story. I'm still eagerly waiting for your posts from Turkey :) 

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review 

Yeah, I think setting a concrete storyline is a lot better than those messy action one-shots with no coherent storyline or development which are essentially porn while I prefer to write erotica. 

Chapter 2 will be out in a few weeks hopefully and I am 50% through it. I only have time to write on the weekends these days due to full-time work. 

Also, I think you accidentally posted your review twice.