Reviewer: Holt1999 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 29 2024 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 1

Like this, its setting up to be really interesting with a unique bit of world building. This is greatly enjoyable to read! 

Author's Response:

It's been greatly enjoyable to write too.  I'm working on chapter 9 now.

Reviewer: TerryLarka Signed [Report This]
Date: October 08 2024 12:38 PM Title: Chapter 1

Good start. I'll admit that some of Kristi's behavior and actions felt forced to me, and I was willing to overlook that because her and Rory's interactions were very hot and well-written, but then the cliffhanger ending completely justifies her "porny" mannerisms. I did not expect where this chapter was going, and I'm curious to see where the story goes from here.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you're enjoying my story.  My motivation for writing this was to justify the beginning by the end of the chapter.

Reviewer: MintDisco Signed [Report This]
Date: October 08 2024 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 1

Great start, looking forward to seeing where it goes.

Author's Response:

Thank you for your interest.  Chapter 2 is available now.