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Reviewer: greenpeon Signed star [Report This]
Date: September 02 2024 5:27 AM Title: Chapter 1 :The girlfriend's arrival

The concept is good but the delivery leaves a lot to be desired. 



Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, I'll try to improve in the next chapters. 

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