Date: August 12 2024 8:59 AM Title: Idle Mercy
You have such a way with words. The desperation of the tinies and their despair is really amazing to see. Do you do commissions, by any chance?
Author's Response:
Sure! You can find me on Twitter under the same handle. I like writing exercises so might as well try and see how it goes. c:
[Report This]Date: August 05 2024 4:11 AM Title: Idle Mercy
You say you’re new to both GTS and stories but I’m guessing you’ve both read a
lot of GTS stories and written stories before, just not in this community. Your
understanding of how to apply the GTS elements in your story especially the
emotional byproducts as well as the overall quality and technique of your prose
makes me think that. Your descriptions are for the most part very detailed but not
distracting. I noticed a few seemingly deliberate bookends and comparisons that I
think showed that you have a good understanding of audience psychology. Such
as the sergeant’s statements to teh old man betwen chapters 1 and 2:
“Weren’t you the one who said we were all going to die?”
“Hey. Weren’t you the one who said we survived, and we could get through this?”
The way these two lines were set up seemed like a deliberate mirror. Bravo if it
was. Another was the similar positions but different outcomes of the sergeant and
LT in chapter two. Where the sergeant bows to the goddess silently, but she wants
him to speak and even listens. But the LT bows to the goddess and begs and
prays for mercy from her, and she couldn’t care less or even notice. That also
seemed to be on purpose.
The story so far is extremely depressing and set to only get more depressing,
though with a hint that maybe, just maybe, as the goddess continues to learn
things from humans she may change her outlook in non destructive ways. Very
unlikely, but hey, they can hope right? Your story has stuck with me after reading
the first two chapters and that’s one of the highest compliments I can give. Bravo
on your first entry into this community, I think it and you have great potential. I
don’t review much of anything on this site, but your story was worth the effort.
Author's Response:
omg
I’m so glad you’re taking the time to read and even be so thoughtful here! I’ll be honest I haven’t actually read like any gts stories and literally dove into things a month ago. Building on that I feel like this kind of… self exploration… was really depraved and it was a bit tricky convincing myself that continuing this was worth it (I typed up the first chapter on my phone on a lazy day in bed lol). If people like you can read into things even in a setting like this, then maybe it really is worth it…!
With that in mind, I’d hope to put out a chapter a week… it’s nice to get into writing again, even if it is for something as odd as this. Thanks a million for leaving such a thoughtful comment!! :3
[Report This]Date: August 04 2024 3:14 AM Title: Planetfall
This story has been great dude and I legit can’t wait to see more.
In term of what I would like to see more- vore, some butt, and maybe some unaware action honestly
overall it’s been very good story keep up the great work
Date: August 04 2024 1:11 AM Title: Planetfall
Hey, I just wanted to say this is fantastic for a first story, and I'm very much looking forward to what you do next!
Date: July 28 2024 7:51 PM Title: Planetfall
This was really good. There is a real lack of lewd giantess vs military stuff so I look forward to next chapter