[Report This]Date: August 07 2024 1:27 AM Title: Chapter 1 - New Reality
So far I am loving this story. Is Sadie a Yandere? I love the idea that she is that obsessive and yet a bit whacky in her protectiveness.
[Report This]Date: July 27 2024 12:28 PM Title: Chapter 1 - New Reality
The crazy obsessed stalker trope is something you see every now and then on this site. What makes it interesting is seeing where the author takes the story with it, with the extent of the cruelty or the selfish “love” the stalker has.
Deconstructing it and labelling it as love but also diving into what it really is, or perhaps they’ll go into a route where that love turns into a desire to be dominating and cruel.
This is only chapter 1 but the intrigue for the future has definitely been built up. Some more description on how our characters, both of them, look like and what their interests are would be nice to know.
The giantess seems to be nervous about her actions. She refuses to believe it to be kidnapping but rather doing it out of love for her tiny. It’s a thin line to keep with a character like this, you don’t want to push them in being too overbearing or too much of a pushover either. They can be tough to write but I’m interested in seeing where this goes.
Author's Response:
Thank you for writing a review for my story, it makes me super happy that the chapter has made you intrigued for where it goes in the future. I do agree that I need to include more physical descriptions and personal descriptions of the main characters and plan to do so in future chapters. I also agree that Sadie's character is a very thin line to walk on and I've spent a lot of time trying to figure out exactly how her character rides that line and why she is the way she is. I intend for this to be a slow-burn story so some of those details might not be fully shown until much later when I feel like it's time, but I hope that the direction I plan on taking the characters and the story is able to meet your expectations. Once again thank you for the constructive feedback, it is much appreciated!
Date: July 24 2024 11:02 AM Title: Chapter 1 - New Reality
Interesting setup! I love the idea that Sadie doesn’t have a personal interest in the giantess fetish stuff but is doing it all for Riley, whether he wants it or not.
I could see Riley going in two different directions: either he is overwhelmed by seeing his fantasies actualized and abandons them entirely, or he embraces his dark side and becomes a willing participant. I would prefer the latter ;)
I would enjoy more detailed physical descriptions. All we know about Sadie is that she has long brown hair.
Can’t wait to see where the story goes!
Author's Response:
Thank you, glad you're enjoying it! I appreciate the constructive criticism and looking back at it I fully agree that I could have included more physical descriptions for the two characters. In future chapters I'll put in more of an effort to include these details, thanks for the feedback!
Date: July 24 2024 3:16 AM Title: Chapter 1 - New Reality
Wow I haven’t been this intrigued in a story on here in a little while! Especially with the F/f tag, I’m hoping that comes into play with how Sadie plans to make Riley’s darker fantasies come true! Really looking forward to seeing more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the kind words in your review, I'm glad that it's caught your attention! Also, without revealing too much, you won't be disappointed haha
[Report This]Date: July 23 2024 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 1 - New Reality
Interesting start. Would love to see where this goes. A suggestion I have is to perhaps make it so eventually our protagonist will start to develop feelings for his captor, akin to Stockholm syndrome. Another suggestion is to occasional give us short POV sections of the giantess. With these kind of obsessive characters, their mindset and they way their brain works is always kind of interesting, so would love to occasionally see what she thinks. Good first chapter overall.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! I definitely want to have some sections from Sadie's POV to explore her perspective and the inner-workings of her brain since as you said, it's always interesting to see that from characters like her. Happy you're enjoying it so far, I'll be releasing the next chapter of this story as soon as I can.