Date: February 10 2010 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 1 Weight Lost and Man Found
Mmmm Pamela u have out done Yourself And this story is so Hot! and U rock! Can I ask You one Favor Though for the next Chapter? could You like Scare David and Take his Cell phone and Qustion himon who he has been calling, and when U catch him in a lie! Swallow his cell phone Then tell David where heHas to go now To answere his phone and Then You call him when He just arives in Your Sexy Tummy, and Casualy ask him how the weather is There! That would be so Hot! I Know U can make it even better than My Idea Pamela!Please!
Author's Response: I know they make small cell phones...but one you could swallow? Now that is ridiculous! LOL But that is what fantasy is about, isn't it? For my first Vore story though...I am trying hard. Glad you like it so far.
Date: February 07 2010 2:33 AM Title: Chapter 2 Tempting Attempt
I absolutely love the way he gets swallowed whole, but temporarily on this first occasion, leaving you the suspense to continue the story. Great descriptive quality all around, presses all the right buttons. You've really adapted marvelously to writing vore.
I can hardly wait for chapter 3. I'm sure you'll pleasantly surprise me again.
Author's Response:
I'm not that great with anatomy, but we'll see how it goes...
Date: February 06 2010 7:51 AM Title: Chapter 1 Weight Lost and Man Found
Please please please continue this great story.
Author's Response: Sorry it took so long to get back to the story... I hope I don't disappoint.
Date: January 08 2010 2:38 PM Title: Chapter 1 Weight Lost and Man Found
Pamela'
I have read this story now again a few times and have realized I love it more each time even though you just started it I see detail that is so cool like the discription of the movement of your suculant Lips and tounge! Details that make your very first vore story HOT and it Rocks! Pamela! please continue!
KongoBoy
Author's Response:
I appreciate that the mouth is a centerpiece of eroticism for many. Thanks for reinforcing that!
[Report This]Date: January 07 2010 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 1 Weight Lost and Man Found
This story has a lot of potential. Here is some constructive critisicm - The story moved along rather fast and she didn't seem too shocked to see a small man in her pantry, although it showed a little.
I really like how he was afraid of her at first and how she is gentle with him. I think you can be a really good writer. I will wait for your next story!
Author's Response:
I was rushing but I think I wanted to get started or was afraid that I would just continue adding chapters to the other stories I started. This topic is quite intimidating for me so I can always go back and edit. Normally I just write what comes to mind without editing...
What would my English Teachers say! Oh my! But some of my 'fans' (is that the right word) were asking for vore, so I wanted to please. I will take more time with the rest of it. Thanks for the input!
Pamela
Date: January 06 2010 3:33 PM Title: Chapter 1 Weight Lost and Man Found
This is very promising, and I certainly like your writing style. With her surgery, however, I get the feeling like the vore will not be a finale for little David. More's the pity.
Author's Response:
Well, I have a few ideas... Stay tuned.
Date: January 05 2010 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 1 Weight Lost and Man Found
That's right, I remember the title now. It's "Mrs Long: Back to her married years" (and has a time travel subplot)
Date: January 05 2010 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 1 Weight Lost and Man Found
You've really picked up on it quickly, for someone new to vore. The pantry is a very sexy setting for the discovery of the little guy. Reminds me of one of my Mrs Long stories.
Author's Response:
Perhaps too fast! I will try to slow down and put even more action in future installment.
Thanks!
Date: January 05 2010 9:23 PM Title: Chapter 1 Weight Lost and Man Found
MMM Pamela I love the Start to this one is very Promising! I think your little friend is growing attached to you! But You should Probaly stiil eat him! after you have some Fun first! Love it please continue!
Your fan&Friend
Kongoboy