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Reviewer: EchoofZen Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01 2024 2:14 AM Title: Chapter 2

Lacks a certain 'oomph', mainly due to two reasons:

1) Not describing the impact itself.Besides the rolled up magazine description in the beginning, there is nothing in the act itself.

2) No sound during said act. A 'Wham!' or something would help.



Author's Response:

I appreciate your opinion. The truth is that I like to leave certain things to the reader's imagination, but I will try to take your advice into account for future projects. Thanks!

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