Reviews For Forced Vacation
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Reviewer: Zankuro Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 18 2024 6:10 PM Title: Forced Vacation

Great to see another Genshin writer on this site. I enjoyed the scenario and good callbacks to the game's events. You captured both characters well.


My only suggestion is to be mindful of tense. Some paragraphs are in present tense: "Lisa notices," and past tense "Jean licked." Both are perfectly fine to use, but try to keep it consistent. Otherwise great story and I'm excited to see who Lisa's other lucky guest is.

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