[Report This]Date: May 23 2025 8:52 AM Title: Freefall
Well shit, that was not the way I thought this was going to go down! Honestly, I expected this to end with Teddy and his girlfriend tiny and suffering while Anna took back her Grant.
But this is so much more intense!
Ms. Adler makes for a hell of a villain! She's so polite with her thin veil of professionalism, which made me feel uneasy right away. The way she was frustrated by the courts starting to crack down on their shrinking was pretty chilling as well. There's a sense of entitlement there, like they should be owed the right to shrink whoever they want for the sake of the business. She's the perfect face for this evil company!
I thought it was interesting that she thought Grant knew Anna had stopped by. Maybe she assumes that he's the one who told Anna about the facility? That would stand to reason. Her logic for dealing with the Anna problem makes sense, too. She wants Grant, so if she thinks Grant is dead, she'll just give up, right? I mean, like Ms. Adler said, Grant is mediocre at best at his job. The girl is clearly just into him because he's the first tiny she's had service her. That feeling will surely pass after he's gone.
It was nice to see that all that cruelty at the hands of Teddy actually paid off and saved his life! As awful as all of that was, it feels like it actually served a purpose. Grant would be in Ms. Adler's stomach right now had he just had an average week as a sampler. I thought it was really cool how this worked out!
Ms. Adler not bothering to finish the job kind of makes sense, too. With some editing, it looks like Grant is dead, so that's good enough. They can still get some use out of him before he's "retired" for real. And shipping him as far away as possible is just smart. It also adds some drama and tension to the final chapter!
Anna watching what happened to Grant was agonizing! You did a good job of recapping what we just read without being redundant yet still giving it some serious emotional punch. Anna fawning over him as the video started, her fear at watching him try to kill himself, her denial of his fate, and her sadness giving way to anger as she believed that he was swallowed: All of this was perfectly executed! It made it believable when she burst into Becca's room and demanded the shrink ray.
Becca and Rick are interesting together. The scene Anna walked in on makes me think that they're both enjoying their time together. I mean, it's possible that Becca demanded that he fuck her nipple, but if she was just using him as a toy, you'd think it'd be him inside her instead of her fingers. And even before, when she demanded that he kiss her toes when talking to Anna over the phone, it felt like she was making a demand to a person rather than expecting an object to perform a task. I wouldn't be stunned if it came out that Rick is actually into all this stuff.
But the way Becca tossed him back on the bed could imply otherwise. Or maybe she was just too wrapped up in what was wrong with her friend. I love how sweet Becca was with Anna here, eager to do whatever it takes to help. She's mostly come off as carefree and just a little bit haughty, so this was a real humanizing moment for her.
So yeah, it was nice to see some layers from Becca, and I'm hoping we'll find out one way or another if Becca is just using Rick or if what they're doing is consensual. It's not critical to the story, but I'm really curious about this (and hopeful that they're actually into each other too; what? I like happy endings).
Awesome chapter overall. It really sets up the final showdown between Anna and the company quite well. I'm looking forward to seeing Anna bust into the building and go on a shrinking spree before she finds out her sweet Grant is actually still alive!
Author's Response:
Yet again, an incredibly thorough and encouraging response! I’ve said it before, but it means a ton that you’d read my silly story generously enough to give it this kind of analysis.
I’m glad you liked Ms. Adler! She was originally not much of a character, but I tried to flesh her out and make her more of a layered adversary. I’ve always thought that there is something about a stern and unavoidable bureaucrat that makes for a pretty terrifying (and simultaneously endearing) villain. I’m glad you thought similarly!
Finally, the Becca and Rick situation. I’ll be totally honest: I hadn’t given a ton of thought to their relationship after they serve their purposes to the final chapter of the narrative. However, due to your honing in on their connection (whatever it may be), I’ve taken a second look at them. While I’m sorry to say that their dynamic won’t really be included in this final chapter, I’m already scripting out their involvement in the epilogue. Rest assured, that plot thread will indeed have a terminus point. I’m thrilled that you’ve enjoyed the two of them so much!
[Report This]Date: May 15 2025 10:59 PM Title: Ping-Ponging
This is a really cool premise for a story, and it's executed really well so far!
I think you did a good job of showing how Anna and Grant fell in love without spending too much time on it, as the building of the relationship isn't the central focus of the story. The way he recited that line from the book to get her to realize that he's actually a person was a great moment, and the time jump to the end of the week gave us enough reminiscing to have a good idea of how things shaped up between them.
And that, of course, made her sending him back so heartbreaking!
I love that Anna wouldn't have done it if Grant didn't basically make her. They both feel strongly enough about each other that they're both putting the other ahead of themselves. Anna was willing to deal with the consequences of not sending her love back to the hell that is Grant's "job" (although I'm not sure if she fully understood that they would have just shrunk her like they did him, though; it's one thing to hear it and quite another to experience it), and Grant was willing to suffer that fate to protect her. This makes it so easy to pull for these two.
But the meat of the story (at least for now) is the struggle for Anna to find her man as he is put through what's clearly the worst experience he's had since being kidnapped yet! You write every agonizing moment of his torture so well here, with the two giants doing this to him being more careless and looking for a laugh than outright sadistic (which almost makes it worse in my mind). Yeah, Teddy is taking out the fact that they didn't send him a girl out on Grant, but I don't think he's getting any glee or sexual excitement over what he's doing to Grant (the same goes for his girl, too, I think). This is just a bit of harmless fun for them, which makes every torment grant suffers even more devastating.
Anna no longer being able to sit around and actively trying to find Grant is great! Without Grant around to talk her down, she's now ready to fight for him, and I love that! Her initial plan was a solid one, too. Using Rick to find out where Grant was shipped out of makes perfect sense. I do think she could have explained the situation to him and tried to get him to talk willingly before letting Becca torture him, but I can understand her sense of urgency and not feeling much sympathy for him based on the attitude he showed when she kept asking him about it. Still, I don't know if Rick was enough of a dick to deserve that (at least not yet; he could have gotten there if they kept pushing). Then again, maybe he's enjoying his time with Becca as much as she's enjoying him? Are Becca and Rick the surprise power couple of this story? Plot twist!
But man, Becca having access to shrinking tech opens a lot of doors for whatever is going to happen next. I can see that going a lot of ways. And Anna might need something like that, given that she just waltzed in and threatened a company that kidnaps and shrinks people! Although I can also think of a certain couple that could stand to lose about five or six feet themselves ...
Great story so far! I'm also curious how far you plan to take this. If you don't mind me asking, do you have a set number of chapters in mind for this one? I could see this ending with Anna getting Grant back permanently, but there's definitely potential for there to be a larger story beyond that as well, and it'd be cool to see these two together for a while too, if the story calls for it!
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you so much for your review! It means a ton that you’ve responded so positively to the story! I definitely won't be able to match your generosity, but know that you have my sincere appreciation. Your analysis is pretty spot-on, and it’s incredibly cool to me that you were willing to take extra steps like digging into the story’s subtext. As this is the first story I’ve properly posted here after being a long-time lurker, reviews like this tell me that I made the right decision!
Regarding the story’s future, I have two more chapters essentially finished (one of which I just dropped!) that will wrap up the main plot. Additionally, I’m in the process of planning an epilogue that will serve as Servitude’s definite conclusion. After that, who knows! I have some entirely different stories in the pipeline, but I would love to revisit these characters and this world. I have a feeling that we haven’t seen the last of Grant and Anna (even if their fate is yet undetermined…), but we’ll see!
Date: March 22 2025 8:30 AM Title: Oh, What a Life
I very nearly stopped reading after your note at the start of the third chapter, but I'm glad that the future will all only be female giantesses. (I think it was completely unnecessary to choose what you did for the third chapter and potentially lost a lot of readers there. However, you are the author and its your story).
I very much can't wait to see how Grant and Anna's story continues.
[Report This]Date: March 21 2025 7:29 PM Title: Oh, What a Life
Very impressive stuff. Can't wait to see what's next.
Date: May 01 2024 2:11 PM Title: Balm in Gilead
I like what has happened thus far, it's just been very fast-paced. Interesting to see where this goes.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much! I agree that it's been a bit fast-paced; these first two chapters are mostly expository. The real plot will begin with the third chapter and slow things down (in a good way!).
Date: April 29 2024 1:21 AM Title: Oh, What a Life
Like Phil and grant? What is the reason for your name..
Date: April 29 2024 12:09 AM Title: Oh, What a Life
Cool Story. Are you planning to put feet stuff more in this story? I like your feet stuff so far.
Author's Response:
Thank you! My stories will absolutely be feet-focused, so look out for them!