Date: April 21 2024 4:00 PM Title: Soup. Idk it’s hard to turn soup into a title
As a fan of vore and mass-vore, I loved it. Definitely a story to remember. I just love it when the biggo is so uncaring of the smols. Also, given the attitudes of the Lilliputians, I'm guessing this is non-fatal vore?
One small critique, I wasn't a fan of the perspective shifts so close together. It can get confusing who's telling the story and going from first-person to third-person threw me off a couple of times.
I hope to see more of either this story and more from you!
Author's Response:
Thanks! And yes this is supposed to be non-fatal, it’s basically a day job for them. Yeah I’ll try to tone down the perspective switches, I guess I overdid it, thanks for that
Oh i’m loving echoes of Lilliput btw
[Report This]Date: April 19 2024 5:39 PM Title: Soup. Idk it’s hard to turn soup into a title
This was good. I love the idea of Lilis working a 9-5 as seasoning, and the brief interactions we see between them and the Brobs were really enjoyable. I especially loved the scene where Amelia leaned over and asked the last few Lilis to climb into their spoon. Their eagerness to comply (and her shyness at having to ask) was adorable. It was neat how you described the different groups of Lilis, from the experienced fivers to those taking part as tourists, it's all just a very fun setup. I am left wondering what the process of getting out of the bodies is like. Obviously they follow the food through the regular digestive process, but are there like workers in the sewers that help retrieve them, or are they just expected to crawl out of the muck on their own lol? But yeah, for your first story, this is well done!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I was kind of worried the different lilly types was overdoing it/a waste of time so i’m glad that panned out lol, also glad that the interactions were enjoyable so thanks again.
Yeah as for how the Lillys get out of the bodies the real answer is i just avoided it (not really my thing) although i did kind of have a few ideas which are also kind of avoid-y. One was that they just don’t exit, they reach the end of the intestines and get teleported off-screen back to their homes, obvs the laziest explanation i could come up with. The other one was basically all the sewers have these high tech filters (like force fields) and chemicals that reduce all the sewage to clean water while leaving the Lillies intact, then there’s an underground train system alongside the sewers, which is slightly better I guess? but yeah thanks