[Report This]Date: November 22 2024 12:28 AM Title: Shifting Perspectives
Well shit, you covered a lot of ground with this one!
It was really sweet to see Sofia being so caring and patient with Harper and Ava. It also sounds like maybe not a lot of DPS agents are like that, based on that dude that just wanted her to grab them and go, which only would have traumatized the girls more. But hey, paperwork's important too, I guess? Nah, what a dick!
I also love that exchange between Evie and Sofia. I think Evie's feelings about Sofia at this point make perfect sense. She isn't ready to forgive or forget the things that Sofia did to Miguel, but she recognizes that maybe Sofia the purely evil bitch she thought Miguel's ex was before. Now Evie knows that, on some level, Sofia does care about downsizers, even if she has anger issues and likes a good power trip.
I also thought Sofia's wish that she could downsize and be tossed in a microwave to show it wasn't a big deal is perfect! We see this with Tricia later on as well, but this shows that Sofia simply didn't understand how traumatizing Microwavegate really was for Miguel. Even after receiving her permit training, she still can't comprehend how devastating her actions really were to her tiny family. Or maybe, at this point, she's just refusing to accept what she knows to be true.
Speaking of Tricia, there's a lot to say about her here, and I think I'll start with that bathroom scene, as it ties into what I just said about Sofia. That prank she pulled on Mateo and Emma was such a Tricia thing to do. I can understand why some people might think that this contradicted the change we've seen in her, but it made perfect sense to me, especially her reaction to seeing Emma cry. Tricia was surprised that she was that scary to them. There's no way she can understand how she looks and how scary she can be to them. I actually think it shows some growth on Tricia's part that she stopped her prank after seeing how much of a mess Emma was. While she still found the prank to be funny, she showed a lot more empathy to Emma there than I think old Tricia would have shown to a human in that situation.
Tricia's apology to Mateo and Emma was beautifully done. She showed sincere remorse while still very much being Tricia. She had just the right amount of hesitance and nerves when she got serious. I also like how she included the way she treated Mateo after he told her he had to downsize and to Emma for just being a bitch in general to her. The way she teased Emma at the end of that scene was great, too! Very Tricia of her!
I also want to single out that moment when Mateo recognized the change in Tricia and forgave her. That was a big deal for both Tricia and Mateo, and stuff like this is why I love him so much as a main character. He's just genuinely a good dude trying to do the right thing, and I think him downsizing has actually amplified that, if anything. Yeah, he had his moment when his emotions got the best of him and he walked out on his family (even then, I think that's understandable, given the circumstances), but after adjusting to being downsized, he's truly been the kind of character you want to root for and you know is always going to try to do the right thing.
I also really enjoyed how she just showed up on Beth's doorstep and walked in like everything was cool. Her line about hearing how Beth is taking care of people smaller than her made me laugh! Her reunion with Kamila was super sweet, and I particularly enjoyed their time on the couch together later on! Obviously the sex stuff was fantastic, but I even loved that little Polish "I love you" exchange. So adorable!
More importantly, though, despite Tricia still having the same bratty, instigative mentality, we see real signs of remorse for what she's done (aside from the apology to Mateo and Emma). The way she hated how Lin treated Melissa and Brian (even if Brian was into it) was very telling in and of itself. But we see this more directly when she tells Kamila that she wants to confess and become a prisoner in Beth's shelter. She's putting up a strong front, but the guilt of killing those downsizers and torturing Steve for years is clearly eating her alive.
I'd even argue that some of Tricia's immaturity is her way of hiding these feelings and/or coping with them. I got the impression that, before Kamila came onto the scene, Tricia didn't really have anyone to confide in, so she's really not good at sharing her real feelings with people. So her actions when she joined the group for lunch (it was hilarious how she just integrated herself like nothing was wrong) are really just her not knowing how to apologize (again, this is why her hesitance with Mateo and Emma made so much sense to me) and ask to be friends, which is what I think she really wanted in that moment. I think the best example of this was when she mocked Emma and Mateo and told them to listen to their humans while texting Mateo that she wanted to help them. Yeah, she didn't want the others to know that she was going to help them, but the meanness she used to cover it up wasn't necessary at all. No one would have thought a thing about her texting or that it was Mateo she was reaching out to. No, she felt a need to lash out, even when trying to be nice, because she struggles with that.
Tricia's confession to Sofia was both really funny and really revealing. Tricia's words to Kamila weren't just talk, and no matter how much Kamila wants her to keep her size, Tricia seems determined to face justice for what she's done. That's actually really admirable and, ironically, makes me side more with Kamila than with Tricia herself on the issue.
Beth's handling of the hostage situation is heartbreaking. She tries to keep it inside, but that leads to her snapping at Kamila when the downsizer asks to be taken to Tricia. I liked Kamila's response there a lot, and Beth realizing what she said and quickly backtracking was a great way to show how the stress was getting to her.
Beth pretending not to care about her parents, only for Mateo to know that she's lying to herself about it, was so sad to read. I get the genuine hurt she feels because she thinks her parents abandoned her, but it only makes sense that she still cares about them. Fuck, that love she still has for them has a lot to do with why she loves downsizers in general so much. I do love how dedicated Beth is to those in the shelter, though. To her, the idea of sending those people back to the junkyard is unthinkable (until Mateo and Emma are captured, anyway).
Felicia complicating things by revealing the truth about Beth's parents, that they're really victims too, sure muddied things up for Beth. I like how she refused to believe it at first, because that makes it a whole lot harder for her to leave them to their fate with the mayor.
I do have a question, though. Earlier, Beth revealed that her parents downsized without her but give/gave her money to live off of (I can't remember if it was all in an account or if it was transferred every so often), but here Felicia reveals that they had to give Pearson every penny they had to keep him from going after Beth too. So now I'm wondering, was the money that Beth has just stashed away, was there a compromise with the mayor to pay for Beth's expenses, or is someone else paying them?
I also really enjoyed all the tension between Beth and Tricia throughout the chapter. They've been made out to be mortal enemies, and that certainly shined through here. I love how Tricia smugly (and figuratively) hides behind little Kamila when she pisses Beth off. And the way Tricia casual says that she'll rescue "mommy and daddy," mocking Beth even as she's doing something truly good for her, is incredible. And the way Beth (and Hazel) gets pissed pretty much at the sight of Tricia fits her so well!
Now, you know how I feel about cock, but I thought that Felicia and Jack scene was so much fun! It was so awesome to see Felicia being a domme pretending to be a sub at two inches tall to a full-sized human. Jack stumbling his way through and not being in control at all, even when Felicia is held down with push pins, was fucking great! The elaborate set up was great, too. A pentagram and candles, dropping wax all over her body like that: Felicia has a very particular kink. I loved this whole thing, regardless of penis.
Lastly, I really enjoyed that little scene with Mateo and Emma talking in the cab, making the driver feel super awkward. Also, the thought of Beth accidentally drowning the city in her cum is an image that's going to be stuck in my head for some time!
Tied to that, what a dick the mayor is. I thought Mateo's compromise made perfect sense, now he's demanding Tricia downsize as punishment for something she didn't even want to happen. He's such a despicable villain, which is great!
This chapter was really long but never boring. I was hooked the whole way through. Fantastic work, as usual!
[Report This]Date: November 18 2024 7:57 AM Title: Shifting Perspectives
Excellent chapter
Date: November 08 2024 8:48 AM Title: School Days
Love this chapter!
We definitely need a mother and son night. Kinda miss the mom and son dynamic and to see how much Sofia has grown , plus she’s needs some company and comfort. Would definitely enjoy Sofia asking for a foot rub after a long day of work from Mateo, or trying to get him to drink some more of her milk.
[Report This]Date: November 06 2024 2:18 AM Title: Convergeance
It's awesome to see so many characters coming together in this chapter (you named it perfectly, by the way)! There's so much going on with all of them, but I think I want to start with Sofia.
This is the first time we've seen Sofia since the divorce, and I'm a huge fan of the way you've developed her coming out of it. The first thing that stuck out to me was her handling of Kamila and that it was noted that she couldn't tell that Sofia had ever been rough with downsizers. I love that she finally did that training and now knows how to handle them. That's a really good sign that she's learned something from the failure of her marriage (maybe she was forced to, either by the DPS or Evie specifically, but the fact that she still hadn't even after starting her new job implies to me that this was a choice on her part to finally do so).
We also see a change in her through her professional demeanor when interviewing Kamila. She took what the tiny said seriously, and I got the distinct impression that she viewed Kamila just like a cop would a normal victim. It's hard to explain, but there was a sort of vibe of equality there that's been missing with Sofia when dealing with her downsized family since that first scene after her downsizing didn't take. This feeling was reinforced when Sofia felt that magical connection everyone seems to form with Kamila and decided that it was worth risking her job to get justice for the downsized Pole. To me, at least, these things subtly show that Sofia's feelings about downsizers have shifted since losing her husband.
I also think we see signs in this chapter that she knows she was in the wrong when it comes to how she treated her family, even if she says otherwise. Yeah, she straight up defended her past actions with Mateo and even thought in the narrative that she did nothing wrong before (even if she did admit that she would have done things differently if given the chance), but then there are moments when she seems to contradict that. Her telling Kamila that she's "not an easy human to be with" and pretty much her whole conversation with Melissa seems to make it pretty clear that she knows she was wrong for the things she did, even if she can't accept it, let alone admit it to someone else. Her pride in Mateo for being so selfless also fits here, I think, as she noted specifically that this is something she thinks she could never be.
In particular, when she told Melissa, "I’ll never have a pure heart like hers because I know I’m incapable of that pure love," that's when I knew she felt legitimate guilt for everything she's done. It's just easier to portray herself as an inherently bad person than to accept real responsibility for her actions. I feel like she made some real strides in this chapter, however, and we just might see her really come to terms with everything and be able to actually move forward in her life. I feel like as long as she keeps thinking of things the way she does now, she'll remain stuck in place, so to speak, constantly wallowing in guilt without even being fully aware of it.
I was also glad to see Sofia come around on Beth. Hearing her call Beth an angel just felt good to read, and that Mother Tereasa line was as funny as it was accurate (and it was fucking hilarious!). Seeing Sofia's eyes being opened when she saw the village says a lot about who she really is as a person, beyond the temptation of absolute power or her short temper going unchecked. It also says a lot about, again, how her view on downsizers has evolved. And she's finally convinced that Beth isn't going to abuse Mateo the way she did Miguel; that's a massive change from when they had that dinner together and Sofia was so sure that things were going to go south for them. This Sofia here, in this chapter, is the one I loved so much earlier in the story, even if she's still wrapped up in past sins.
Also, watching her taunt teeny tiny Melissa was incredible! I've always loved the classic, "slowly bringing in the fingers crush" taunt, and that bite was pretty awesome, too! While I've praised all of the development Sofia has undergone since the divorce, it's good to know that that this part of her hasn't gone away. It's also more realistic, as that desire to dominate downsizers wouldn't just evaporate. In fact, I think knowing that this is still a part of her makes her newfound respect for downsizers more admirable: She doesn't have a natural love of them like Beth does, so her journey to this point was a harder one for her, and that's something I can respect.
Oh, and making Melissa smaller than a downsizer was fucking brilliant! I love the even wider size gap. I'm eager to see what Tricia does with it. Also, I kind of hope her stepdad does give Tricia some trouble so that Sofia can have her own slightly-less-than inch-high dude to play with!
But, despite the above massive rant, maybe your best character work in the chapter was with Kamila. Her meek, timid demeanor throughout the chapter fits so well with someone who's been through everything she just went through. Yeah, she was recovering from all the Tricia stuff after Tricia got on her medication and started treating Steve and her better, but that shit still stays with you. And, of course, not only witnessing a murder but coming so close to being murdered yourself, both when Melissa first reached under the bed and when the crazy mom chased Tricia and her out in public just to try to kill Kamila, is going to leave anyone a little shy.
I find it intriguing that the two humans Kamila feels closest with are mortal enemies with one another. I'm glad to see her still feel a strong connection with Tricia and feeling a little desperate to talk to her again. Beth misunderstanding this at first and thinking Kamila was afraid of Tricia made perfect sense, and it was nice to see Kamila correct her on this and defend Tricia a bit. Seeing Kamila so tight with Beth by the end of the chapter and them having a rapport with each other (Beth calling her chump was so fucking cute!) was really heartwarming. All of this makes me wonder if Kamila might be able to bridge the gap between Kamila and Tricia.
But maybe my favorite Kamila scene in the whole chapter was Hazel finding her out in the living room. Hazel moving the shoe rack out of the way to expose Kamila out in the open had to be horrifying for the little Pole, and I love that Hazel recognized this and put the rack back, inviting Kamila to come talk to her whenever Kamila was ready. That was so well handled by Hazel!
I feel like we all needed a proper Hazel fix at this point, and this chapter certainly delivered! There was so much great Hazel stuff here! Her getting wet off of walking around the shelter, watching her steps shake the downsizers and their houses was amazing! I love that she discovered that about herself!
That whole fight between Hazel and Emma and Felicia was great! Hazel and Emma have such a fun dynamic. Emma talks shit, Hazel drops the tiny in her butt, everybody wins! Felicia going off on Hazel, trying so hard to get Hazel to be rough with her was actually pretty good character development for Felicia, I think. She's tough and can't admit to herself that she wants to be toyed with, so she does everything she can think of to try and piss Hazel off, because that's easier than showing vulnerability and just asking for what she wants. It was great that Hazel could figure this out, and that foot scene was awesome! I don't know if I've seen a foot spider crawl in a giantess story before, but I fucking love it.
Not only that, but while Felicia is getting the rough treatment she wanted, Hazel is getting to explore this new desire to dominate downsizers that she just discovered as well. It was actually a pretty good match for the two of them.
Hazel calling Emma when the downsizer was in her butt was so fucking funny but at the same time so fucking hot! I liked Emma's conditions for playing with Felicia, too. "Oh yeah, it's totally fine, as long as she, you know, doesn't touch you at all!" I love how possessive Emma was of Hazel, even when Hazel had her almost completely immobile inside her butt. There was a cuteness factor there, as well!
Now we just need the group to follow through and introduce Felicia to Jack. The poor guy needs a downsized girlfriend, and somebody needs to be there to give Felicia what she wants. All the giantesses of the story are spoken for, unless Felicia has a thing for older women ...
Beth was fantastic here, as usual! Her teasing game about eating Mateo up is so hot, and that mouthplay scene between Mateo and her was a definitely a highlight of the chapter. I like how personal she took Sofia's explanation that the DPS doesn't look out for individual downsizers. Beth is so passionate about downsizers, and she doesn't give a fuck about their status, as it should be. I'm glad Sofia and her were able to clear the air a little bit in their last segment with each other.
I also absolutely love Beth's arrangement with the downsizers at the shelter. She's so considerate of their rights and about not picking them up without permission, so negotiating a way that she can always pick them up whenever she wants is heaven for her. And all she has to do is let them build their own houses. That scene where she plucks up that random dude outside his home and sets him in her palm was spectacular. I don't know if it was the randomness of it, the way you described her eyes looking down at him (I actually shivered a little bit when I read that part), or that second of uncertainty the downsizer felt for a second, but I really felt Beth's size right there.
The thought of Beth having a conversation with Kamila and orgasming mid-sentence will never leave my brain now, so thanks for that! In a related question, is it possible to be both sarcastic and dead serious at the same time?
Jumping back to the Evie, Miguel, Luna, and Liam stuff, I really enjoyed Liam's punishment. To be fair, I liked that Liam accepted responsibility for his actions when Sofia slapped him at work, but seeing Evie punish him by keeping Miguel and Luna with her for the night was so hot! It was so fun to see her reading a magazine while they fucked on her foot while high on her pheromones, only for them to "sneak" into her panties like that. The idea of them fucking inside her while she taunted Liam was a scene that worked on so many levels!
Finally, we have the mayor enter into the story. What an asshole this dude is! He intentionally kept the unregistereds out in the desert, but he still needs them to work inside the town that he kicked them out of. That's pretty damn evil, especially considering all the threats those people face on a day-to-day basis out there.
He also seems well-connected, finding Beth and knowing seemingly everything about her before even calling her. Kidnapping her family is incredibly low, and I immediately want all the worst things in the world to happen to this man (he's still not as evil as Melissa, though; I'll never unsee what she did to Steve). Maybe now we'll find out more about Felicia and Lillian's issues with the mayor and even why Felicia suddenly decided to trust Beth out of nowhere.
Excellent work on this one! I'm looking forward to what happens both with the cliffhanger and what Tricia does to Melissa next!
Author's Response:
How do I tackle such a monster of a review that’s longer than most stories posted here! ^.^
First off, lemme say thank you so much for supporting me and helping me work through this story! It’s been a blast talking about this story behind the scenes and theorycrafting everything that has and will happen.
Sofia and her change in character has been a blast to witness. Her interactions with Kamila show this, and the great lengths she went to help her out, show Sofia becoming a better person. There’s still parts of Sofia that believe she did no wrong, but the tiny bits she admits to, show the cracks of her logic breaking down. Sofia is on her way to becoming a better person.
I’m glad you picked up on that Mother Theresea line, haha. I wasn’t sure if anyone would get it.
I’m glad to hear you liked Sofia taunting Melissa. Finally, Sofia can use her domineering personality on someone that deserves it! I’ve been waiting to write that scene of Sofia not shrinking in a downsize machine for a LONG time. I know others expected it, but I hope the red herring of making the room look like an interrogation room worked out!
OMG! Yes! Wasn’t Hazel’s scene so fucking cute? Hazel is just the best. The way she was super chill with Kamila and gave her space and time is only something Hazel would know. I mean, she’s got plenty of experience with downsizers, so it makes sense she knew hot to approach Kamila. And yes, Hazel’s other interactions in the story were so much fun to write. Her walking around the village, footplay with Felicia. It was all fun and made perfect with the perfect giantess.
Beth and her little rule about being able to pick up anyone whenever she wants, haha. That’s so Beth. The other downsizers might find this annoying over time, but living in her village in the junkyard … it’s a small sacrifice, right? Not like she’s torturing them. She just loves them so much, she wants to hold every single one of them.
And yes … the mayor. The ultimate antagonist of the story. What a dick! Unfortunately for him, he doesn’t know who he’s dealing with. That is, collectively, he doesn’t know who he’s dealing with. He’s going to be in a world of hurt when the gang sets their crosshairs on him.
Thanks again for your massive review, dude! I won’t be able to hit every point you made, but I loved every single word you wrote. I’m glad the characters are shining through. We’ve been hanging around these characters for so long, sometimes we gotta remind ourselves they’re not real, lol.
[Report This]Date: November 05 2024 8:54 PM Title: Convergeance
Hot damn, That cliffhanger though! Excellent work as always looking forward to the next
Author's Response:
Thank you! Leaving chapters at a cliffhanger is what I do best!
[Report This]Date: November 05 2024 1:53 PM Title: Convergeance
Yet another great chapter. It's nice to have a sort of debrief after all the high tension from the last few chapters. It's cool seeing Sofia grow as a character too, and her attempt at redemption by helping out Kamila was touching. And I mean shit, I could read about Beth doing stuff forever, best girl.
Also, I gotta confess a crackpot theory I've had for months now: I reckon Sofia's been pregnant this whole time! I think the reason she didn't shrink the first time round was because the machine registered two targets in one spot, and just shrunk the baby. That could explain the extreme lactation she's experiencing. And of course there'd be no bump because the baby is tiny-size now. I'm even more confident after this chapter, cause I feel like it'd work well with her arc. Help her feel less lonely and all that.
One spanner in the cogs is the fact that she sat through another downsizing machine this chapter. It's a point in favour of her just being immune like the doctors said, and weakens my theory. Though I still reckon it could work. I don't remember if there's been anything said about what happens if downsizers go through the machines more than once, so maybe the hypothetical baby wouldn't change? Or maybe she just gets an extra small baby, idk.
Anyway that's my crackpot theory. Feel free to shoot me down if I'm dead wrong lol. Great chapter as always.
Author's Response:
Heeeey, thank you so much for your continued support!
I'll dispel the Sofia rumor right away and say, no, she's not preggers. Her hormones are acting up, causing her to lactate. My theory is that being around tinies is forcing the motherly side of her to come out. Like, her body sees tinies as babies that need to be fed. Unfortunately, with Sofia's overbearing personality, her motherly side is seen abusive, lol.
Interesting theory though! I never thought about the effects of a fetus being immune or not inside a downsize machine. I don't think I'll be exploring that in this chapter.
But anyway, I'm thrilled to hear that you think Sofia is growing and on the way to redemption. Her helping Kamila felt so right and good in this chapter, right? And Beth is one of my favorites, too!
Date: November 04 2024 8:31 PM Title: School Days
Nothing useful for me to say, but I have to give you pat on the back.
Keep going, please!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your support!
[Report This]Date: November 03 2024 7:09 AM Title: Convergeance
Fantastic chapter as always! Thank you for the read!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your continued support!
[Report This]Date: November 03 2024 2:50 AM Title: School Days
Now that the dust has settled, I can now review this without feeling like I gave away a spoiler.
First off, I love how the "Scooby gang" is coming together to help out the unregistered though I feel that their biggest undertaking is coming.
I also like the misadventures the adults are having despite the dilemma that has happened.
One thing I would say is that Sofia for sure needs professional help. Yes, karma has paid her a visit but if she wants to get through this and be a efficient DSS agent, that will definitely help her.
I love the overall plot but do you think we'll see a hijinx chapter in the future? I get the feeling when the finish line is crossed for them, they'll need a break.
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks for your comment!
The story is heading for a conclusion, and we'll see all the arcs come together. (I think.) So, there won't be anymore hijinks with them. (I think.)
You made me laugh referring to the teens as the Scooby Gang, lmao. They are kinda like that, huh? Trying to do the right thing, while the adults cause a bunch of drama. And for Sofia, she doesn't strike me as the type of person that would seek professional help. In Sofia's mind, she doesn't think she's done anything wrong.
Date: November 02 2024 7:17 AM Title: So Happy Together
Finally! The one responsible for protecting the tiny actually locked the door while they were gone!.this is a work of art! And i love the thought put into the story. Easily one of my top 10 favorites.
[Report This]Date: October 21 2024 11:19 AM Title: The Downtrodden
So much happened in this chapter! I didn’t expect Tricia to make such a big turnaround! But it’s so sad that she has now lost her dad, I feel for her.
i really hoped Beth would go on a rampage at the end, but I also know that in this universe that would also probably result in being arrested.
Thank you for writing this!
Author's Response:
Haha, Beth on a rampage? We'll see, I guess. Beth loves tinies so much, I don't see her harming them. Tricia on the other hand ...
Thank you for writing a comment. I love getting them!
Date: October 20 2024 6:01 PM Title: School Days
Great Chapter, I think there is more to Melissa than we think. She may have some powerful friends me thinks. I thought the violence you did was really well done, the power a giant has over someone 2 inches tall was so well portrayed.
I find it more exciting when the bad guys have the upper hand all the way up until the end. And I really hope the end is a long way off, this is a great story.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your comments! Melissa is still a mysterious character, and her future is murky. We'll see what happens.
[Report This]Date: October 19 2024 6:11 AM Title: The Downtrodden
Excellent chapter. You should publish this through Amazon when finished.
Author's Response:
I'm planning to!
[Report This]Date: October 19 2024 1:08 AM Title: The Downtrodden
Perfect as always
Author's Response:
Thank you!
[Report This]Date: October 19 2024 12:27 AM Title: School Days
This is the best story of its type in a long time. These characters are fleshed out so well.
I'm relieved Beth got Kamila from the clutches of Tricia. Call me simple, but I like how nice Beth treats the downsizers. Tricia gave me anxiety because I thought Kamila could be a goner at any second. Beth, in contrast makes me happy.
The story arc I like the most is Miguel, Luna, Sophie,
Evie and Liam. Liam is the shit. Does everything in a moral way for nice
downsizers. As for the bad ones, I don't think he's having enough fun
eating them. I wonder about how or why his cock is the last thing some
of them see. Is it a simple crushing?
Miguel is another
favorite character. I love that he is sickened by men's cocks--except
for Liam's, apparently. Miguel is tortured but becoming more evolved. He's the tiny man with the huge personal growth. He realized his poor choice in marrying Sophie. Maybe it took her being thousands of times his size for him to see it clearly.
Poor Liam. Lately, he doesn't seem to get in on the action between Luna
and Miguel. For some reason, he's happy just to watch. If I were Liam, I
wouldn't just watch. I'd have Evie or Sophie give me a handjob and aim
right at Luna and Miguel. Or maybe insert them vaginally just before
having sex. Of course, Liam would ask first because he is so sensitive
to the feelings of Luna and Miguel. Miguel would pretend not to like it. But we know he'd love it.
Author's Response:
Yooooooooooo! Thank you so much! I greatly appreciate your support!
It's awesome to see Kamila in excellent hands, huh? She'll be a lot safer with Beth -- that big bully has a heart of gold and will take care of all downsizers that need the help.
I also like the Miguel/Sofia arc as well. It's especially fun now that Evie is in the mix. And yeah, that line about Liam was because of his preferred method of execution. Miguel has grown a lot, and isn't too worried about being near Liam -- since Liam helped him a lot and is a true bro. And you're right, it took Sofia being a giant to show her true colors. Good for him for leaving.
That stuff you mention about Liam just watching ... haha, yeah, he's been getting blue-balled a lot. He just wants to have fun with the downsizers. Now that Miguel is a lot cooler, and with Evie around, maybe he'll get more chances. That last thing you said about Miguel actually liking an orgy made me laugh. Haha, yeah, I think he would like it!
Thanks again for your Ko-Fi tip! It means a ton to me!
[Report This]Date: October 12 2024 11:33 PM Title: Downfall: Part II
We've already talked about this chapter and how much I love it, but I want to make sure you get your proper allotment of stars, so here are a couple more thoughts!
I know I mentioned how much I loved that handheld scene with Evie holding Miguel and Luna while talking with Liam after Sofia went to sleep after the dinner party. But I actually went back and reread that part, and I noticed some details that really made the scene feel special. I love how you highlighted how much Evie was moving her head and other hand when she talked and how steady (even gently rocking) the downsizers in her other hand. It's a small detail, but seeing how much she talks with her hands and body really makes the fact that she is keeping them steady and making sure they're comfortable show how much attention and care she's paying to them. Even though she's talking to her ex who she wants back (and the guilt she's wrestling with about it), she's still making them the priority, balancing those feelings with their safety and comfort. Evie is fucking incredible!
Of course, that it's Miguel in her palm might have helped with that!
As you know, I love Liam, but holy shit was that scene where Miguel and Luna had a lovemaking session rather than just fucking, only for Liam to have been watching and calling it beautiful was next level. He loves his wife so much, and he wants her to be happy, knowing that Miguel can do things for her that he can't. And it feels like he's starting to truly feel the same way about Miguel, not in terms of romantic love but a real connection, as opposed to Liam just being a chill bro who cares. This moment cemented them as a throple for me.
I also really like how this parallels Luna's desire for Liam to get together with Evie. I loved Liam's hesitance to do that, because he knows there's a deep emotional connection between Evie and him, and he doesn't want Luna to feel threatened. But Luna knows this, too, and she doesn't want her husband to have to give up that connection he has with Evie. As long as they play with her, too, of course! But seriously, like Liam feels about Miguel and her, Luna realizes that there are things Evie can do for her husband that she can't.
In both of these cases, it's not a simple case of getting off on being cucked or just allowing their each other to experience normal sex. They want each other to embrace the love they feel for Miguel and Evie, too. They love each other so much that they aren't threatened even by such deep emotional connections coming from outside the marriage. There's something really beautiful about that, and it's no wonder that such a thing could sweep up even someone as traditional and stubborn as Miguel.
Of course, that Evie and Miguel have something brewing between them too only makes the whole thing more interesting! Honestly, I don't know if I've seen a polyamorous relationship covered on such an emotional level in a story before.
Once again, phenomenal work in this chapter! Every chapter has been excellent, but I feel like the emotion in this one reached another level and in so many different ways!
[Report This]Date: October 12 2024 6:19 AM Title: Downfall: Part II
I usually just lurk but I made an account to say this is becoming one of my new favorite stories. This latest chapter is so well written. I love your writing.
[Report This]Date: October 12 2024 5:40 AM Title: Downfall: Part II
This was honestly my favorite chapter of the story. Lots of development to unpack but gotta say the real mvp of this chapter was Miguel. Dude suffered too much for too long. And I liked that downsizing movie reference but with a twist in the downsizer seeking the divorce rather than the human.
My favorite line was “he almost felt bad for Sofia and then he remembered all the things she did.” It kinda resonates with the readers when they see her whole world turn upside down and gain a pinch of sympathy until you remember.
Evie is awesome. I loved the twist she has against Sofia.
Liam is such a chill guy. Their bro talk with Miguel was a highlight.
Overall excellent chapter. Congrats on a great story.
[Report This]Date: October 11 2024 8:55 PM Title: Downfall: Part II
Fantastic as always i would love a strinky foot chapter in the futur if you want of course.
[Report This]Date: October 10 2024 11:52 PM Title: School Days
I am loving this series. Well done with the writing on this. It keeps a really put together idea and keeps you hooked in. Been a while since I read something that I actually followed the storyline, and not just the fetish parts. You keep a really good balance with both of those.
I really want everything to turn out a happy ending for all, but I am also very curious about what might happen when the baddies get their way. This last chapter where Liam calls Sofia just a roommate was awesome. Thinking she was in control and hot shit, just to be shot down for once. This is the kind of story that is perfect. Something that you wants to read more to see if Sofia has her way with Luna and Miguel when Liam isn't looking, or will Liam finally step in and help Miguel out. I want to know what will happen next. Plus the build up with what Tricia might do if she gets her way. Chef's kiss with the anticipation.
All in all, this story has been great. I hope you keep going with it for as long as you can. Keep up the great story telling and amazing work!
Author's Response:
Your comment means so much to me! Thank you for taking the time to write and provide feedback.
I don't want to spoil the ending, not that I can't since I don't know what will happen, but I think everyone will have a somewhat happy ending. All this bad stuff can't go unpunished. Karma will catch up. Like Liam referring to Sofia as a roommate! Hahah. I'm glad to hear the story has you hooked. I'm hooked writing it, and enjoying it along with everyone else.
I'll post part 2 soon. But yeah, I can't wait to see what's happening with Tricia. She's in for some explosive content.
Thank you again for the kind words!