Reviewer: suce57 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 12 2024 12:42 PM Title: Discipline: Part II

Wow excellent chapter. 

Reviewer: Jsmith20 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 11 2024 10:41 PM Title: School Days

I realized I came across as a bit rough in my review and I didn't want to be bashing you like that. I'm not calling this piece garbage, but there definitely were some misplaced expectations when I picked up this story and it's not necessarily meant for me, which is fine. (I think maybe you should consider expanding the story's description to make it more clear about some of the elements of the story.) 

Sofia does make sense for the most part, but what makes her feel wrong to me is how she just doesn't seem to consider how she's impacting Mateo. It would make more sense if she was jumping through hoops justifying her actions to herself and at least considering how much she ruined Mateo's life like this. He never wanted to be downsized in the first place and that should be in the background of everyone's minds at least. The reason why I have my opinion of her is that she forced her son to be downsized, kidnapped her son, and is definitely abusing Miguel. This is all just my thoughts: the best way I can characterize her is as a villian/person she is Umbridge not Voldemort. And that's cool, but part of the appeal (to me at least) of Umbridge style characters is how they'll get their comeuppance and it doesn't seem like that's the direction it's going. And again, that's fine but it's not for me. (I'll also admit I don't like overbearing mothers as a character in any story, that's again my personal preference. )

Author's Response:

Sofia may or may not understand the trauma she's imparting on Mateo. As someone who was raised by an immigrant mother, and has seen firsthand accounts of overbearing mothers treating their kids, the punishments she's inflicting on Mateo are realistic. Obviously, they're wrong. Sofia thinks her actions are best for her son, but I'm sure everyone reading the story understands it's not. She's permanently scarring Mateo and Miguel, and once those two survive this, they'll probably have lifelong PTSD.

I don't understand your Harry Potter reference, but I get the need to have the protagonist getting their comeuppance in the end. Will karma catch up with Sofia? I don't know. In real life, bad guys just get away with evil shit all the time because the world is a cruel place. And as someone who writes in the moment, I really don't know what will happen to Sofia. We'll see if her character changes for the better.

With all that said, you're probably right that this story isn't for you. It's going to remain gritty and probably get crueler as time moves on. I have written some endearing, heartfelt moments, but downsizers are going to get hurt before this story is finished.

I took your advice and updated the synopsis so that people are 'tricked' into reading a different kind of story. I've been meaning to do this, and this was the perfect opportunity to fix that.

Reviewer: Edoardo Signed [Report This]
Date: July 11 2024 5:35 PM Title: Discipline: Part II

I agree with Jsmith20. Too many violence focused garbage here on this website as if this is a gore sadistic fetish site and not giantess. Very few stories are original. The turn you are taking is gonna be the same as others unless you add some giantess heroes like Beth for Miguel. Like imagine a new adoptive family composed of females saving him. Keep in mind 99% of this website is like that turn with Sofia. fosmat, a creative story writer here, had opportunities but let down because he didn't ask for reviews and felt alone. 

Author's Response:

If I understand you correctly, you're saying this story is violence-focused? Let me just say that this story is more about Mateo navigating this universe which has its best intentions for downsizers, (from the MHIP and laws and such), but the extreme size difference and power imbalance will always cause issues. There will be a mixture of people from really gently to cruel. Sorry, not sorry. Sofia's character is acting as her character would: relishing as being the new matriarch and not having her full-sized husband to temper her emotions. I wrote a long explanation on my discord and will paste it here:

• In this chapter, Sofia didn't hit the start button on the microwave. (Just want to make that clear.)
• Sofia's temperament was always balanced by her husband (pre-downsizing). [redacted] picked up on this and is correct with his assessment.
• Sofia no longer has that 'check' to doling out punishment, thus the power 'balance' in the family is heavily skewed. Non-existant, if you will. Whether Sofia realizes it or not, she's falling into that 'absolute power corrupts absolutely' idiom.
• Sofia never got her downsizing training of MHIP! She's ignorant with her actions.
• If you don't think a woman would kill their partner after being cheated on—all I can say, is that you've lived either a sheltered life, or have a rosy, coddled view of the world. The majority of woman, I hope, would not kill after being betrayed. Sofia, however, does not fall in this group.
• I am uninterested in making characters likeable. The characters are, who they are. I don't follow archetypes when I write. That is to say, my characters are complicated and will have their own belief and morality systems that may clash with yours, and thus look erratic. This is fine. This is what makes reading stories fun.
• To add to this, I don't care if Sofia or Tricia win you back. Or undergo a redemption arc. The main focus on this story is how awful the power imbalance is when extreme size difference is involved. Everyone here, from the gov't to the characters, have good intentions. Despite the laws and safeguards there are, shit happens.
• I talked to my wife again about this, and she sees nothing wrong in Sofia's action. She admits her actions are mean, but despite this, my wife likes Sofia, lol.

Reviewer: Jsmith20 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 11 2024 4:50 PM Title: Discipline: Part II

To me, this story just jumped the shark and lost what made it interesting in the first place. It start off grounded with the life of Mateo in high school and that's where it seemed like it was going to stay, learning to live as tiny in a world where some already do and others don't while going through the growing pains of high school. Mateo and his story is what made this worth reading.

Sofia is reprehensible and deserves prison and to be abandoned by her family. I can't even see how she ever understands what she does is wrong. 

Author's Response:

Sorry if I misled you on the type of story this is (?) This is more of an adventure story for Mateo navigating the universe and not necessarily about school life. And it won't 100% be about him being stuck with his mother, neither. There will be future school scenes.

Sofia is who she is. I won't try to defend her or anything. I'm a big fan of show and not tell, and if you interpret her as a reprehensible person who deserves prison---cool. Doesn't make a difference to me. I'm not trying to write her as a likeable character, but more as a realistic person.

Reviewer: iiaxinus Signed [Report This]
Date: July 11 2024 5:21 AM Title: Discipline: Part II

bro this story is really good and sofia killing miguel was so unexpected keep up the good work man.

Author's Response:

Oh, Miguel is not dead. The chapter ended right before Sofia hit the button.

Reviewer: alriv225 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 08 2024 9:13 AM Title: Discipline: Part I

amazing story

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: July 08 2024 1:07 AM Title: Discipline: Part I

First off, I have to admit, I mistakenly expected there to be a mix up with Mateo and Kenneth by Liam in this chapter.

It seemed like all the elements were there: naked tiny Kenneth is dead, naked tiny Mateo isn't, Sofia assumed that he wouldn't be able to find his way down from the bathroom vanity (which I wrongfully assumed meant that he was absolutely going to find a way to do that), the near-accidental eating of Miguel last chapter (Mateo has no clothes and Liam wouldn't recognize his voice, which were the two things that saved Miguel), and we were given no indication that Liam and Luna knew that Mateo was in the house (they knew she was back from the school, but did they know why she went there in the first place?). Hell, even Miguel begging not to be caught was something I took to mean that he would be hidden somewhere and thus unable to see what the danger his son would face if found by the DPS officer.

So I don't know if these breadcrumbs were left to deliberately distract from what was really going to happen in this chapter or if I just read way too much into everything, but if it's the former, great job! You got me!

As for what did happen here, Sofia made me feel a lot of different ways this chapter. I've been going to bat for her for a while now, but I have to say that she's pretty indefensible with her actions for most of the chapter. She clearly doesn't realize what she's doing, but that doesn't excuse the physical and mental abuse she's putting Mateo through here. Between the beatings and the effort to strip him of his free will, she's filling the role of antagonist quite nicely, although I think, base on how she's been written to this point, that she'll only be doing so temporarily.

That's not to say that I don't understand how Sofia feels or that I think she's evil. Far from it. Her concern about humans makes total sense, especially after seeing first hand how easy it is for a human to squish a downsizer. I was wondering whether she'd see herself as a threat now or use this as an excuse to shut Mateo out from the rest of the big world. She certainly picked a direction on that front.

I also completely get her angst and even her anger at Mateo stepping out on the family in such a critical time I even said back then that while I got where he was coming from and couldn't blame him for leaving, he ultimately handled that situation poorly. But when he left, Sofia understood and didn't even try to stop him. Maybe part of her regretted that decision, but that she has gone from understanding to literally trying to beat those feelings out of him shows how far she's fallen.

I like that Mateo called her out a sizist, because he's exactly right. And I really like that Sofia's brand of sizism is so different from Tricia's. Sofia doesn't hate downsizers; she loves them, especially her family. But the mixture of stress and her enjoyment of the power she wields over the little people has devolved into her not really viewing them as people. She wants Mateo and Miguel to be happy and content, but she doesn't even consider their feelings when deciding what that looks like. She's pissed that Miguel left the box she put him in, quite literally yelling at him for not staying put away when she was done with him. And the fact that Mateo can't even talk about seeing his human friends, let alone his would-be girlfriend without risking a beating shows that she sees any thought Mateo has that she doesn't want him to have as something to be removed.

Basically, she sees downsizers as things rather than people, and she doesn't even realize it. Part of the problem is that her love of having unlimited authority over her family and her love for them in general are directly contradicting here, but she thinks that these two things align with one another. She thinks she knows what's best and what they need to be happy, and she's going to make sure they get it, whether they want it or not! They just don't understand or know any better, after all.

The saddest part is that she may well be irreparably damaging her relationship with her son, even though she thinks she's looking out for him.

I think this is where the silver lining is hidden. If Sofia truly understood what she was doing to Mateo, how much she actually hurt him and just what it is she's trying to take away from him, she would be horrified! I think the only way for Sofia to truly understand is either for her to go too far and realize that she's fucking up or another human shows up and explains the truth to her or their disgusted or horrified looks make her begin to realize what she's done. I've got some speculation in my head for how this might play out (assuming you plan on Sofia actually finding the path to redemption at some point), but given how absolutely wrong I was on the whole Mateo/Kenneth non-thing, I'll keep them to myself. Don't worry, I'll let you know if I was right, honest!

In any case, I think Sofia is going to spend a lot of time crying and lamenting her behavior if she ever gets around to starting the process of getting her proper permit. Although, to be fair, I imagine there's probably something in there about exactly what she's doing being a common mistake when interacting with downsizers for the first time. I imagine this very behavior was pretty common in the early days of downsizing, assuming it took time for the proper laws and organizations to form.

But aside from the frustration and sadness I felt reading about Sofia's unwitting self-implosion, she was also hot as fuck throughout the chapter. That insertion scene in the shower was incredibly well done, capturing a very complex set of emotions perfectly while also displaying just how easily her pussy was having its way with little Miguel. Caring about her husband but caring more about how he felt inside her, throwing caution to the wind and not worrying about his safety (even dismissing the notion that he even can be safe while fucking her) was as sexy as it was illustrative of the shift in her thinking on her tiny family.

And that Downsize Ninja Warrior bit, with her acting as the obstacle course, just awesome! I really enjoyed how much she got into it, sweeping them off her thighs and shaking them into her cleavage. And that insight into how having two littles using her body as an obstacle course made her feel just made the scene.

I love that Mateo is fighting for Beth in his own way. He knows he can get his mom's beatings to stop if only he stopped bringing her up, but he flat out refuses to let go of her. Now that he realizes how he feels about her, how he's always felt about her, he's not going to give that up without a fight!

And as frustrated as I felt about Sofia throughout the chapter, I felt just as bad for poor Mateo. That part where he straight up asks her why she's doing this to him, no cursing or anger, was just heartbreaking! You know, I can justify Sofia "kidnapping" him from school because he "ran away," but what he went through this chapter (and what he's likely to go through in the next half of it) is so far beyond anything he deserves for that mistake.

I also have a newfound respect for Miguel after reading this chapter. I like that he keeps standing up for his son, and the way the guilt of fucking Luna is eating away at him shows that he's a good man who did something bad for reasons he doesn't understand and isn't fully responsible for. Beyond that, seeing how Sofia has handled having power versus the glimpse we saw when he was the "dominant" one in the family draws a pretty stark contrast. Rather than try to control his wife, he would try to calm her down (or rile her up, which I took to mean that he did that because that fire in her turned him on), but it's clear that he would listen to her and that her opinion mattered to him. He was also big on Mateo respecting her as well as him, which is pretty different from Sofia getting angry at him for telling her how to parent her kid.

She doesn't even recognize him as a legit parent anymore. I can't imagine Miguel ever doing that to her, even if their roles as human and downsizer were reversed.

Overall, this was a spectacular chapter, filled with plenty of sexual and emotional beats that came out really well. And as of when I started writing this, there were 32 total reviews for the story already, so I'm looking forward to seeing that back half of this chapter on Wednesday!

Reviewer: 7inch peepee Signed [Report This]
Date: July 07 2024 1:21 PM Title: School Days

Man the dynamic between Sofia and her family is really damn good!

Keep on the good work

Author's Response:

Thank you! It's gonna get more intense in the next chapter. I'm really proud where the story is going!

Reviewer: kingkong89 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 07 2024 12:09 PM Title: Discipline: Part I

Sofia has taken over the role of head of the family for sure

and the way she is raising Mateo is really impressive

Reviewer: Truelyb386 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 07 2024 9:48 AM Title: School Days

Wow !! This last part is completely insane !! I love how  Sofia take pleasure of the situation when the tinies climb her, it’s just trilling to imagine herself take pleasure while they are on her most sensitive part…

Couldn’t wait to see more of that and most of all what will going on with principal Sullivan … 

I am wondering if the tinies could become even tinier .. I am pretty sure Sofia and Principal Sullivan live the idea of being even more gigantic and dominant ! 

Congrats for the work, it’s really great !

Author's Response:

Thanks for your comment! Tinies getting tinier, huh? I would be lying if I said I didn't think about that before, heh. Micros/nanos are one of my favorites sub-genres, so we'll see what happens.