Reviewer: jfgts2022 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2024 3:41 PM Title: Kurwa Mać

Love the Chapter.

I really hope Beth gets shrunk and Mateo and Beth both become sex slaves of Tricia.

Author's Response:

Haha, that would be hot, not gonna lie. But I'll be real with you, I don't think it'll happen.

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: September 10 2024 2:17 AM Title: Detention and a Date

Despite Carol sneaking in at the end of the last chapter, I figured the date was happening in this one. So I had some pretty high expectations going into it.

And you completely and totally smashed them!

Before I get too deep into all that, though, I wanted to call attention to something really small that you did that I think really set the tone for most of the chapter. That little line about Mateo pulling down Beth's finger when they were walking back to the apartment was the epitome of what makes gentle great, I think. Not only was the fact that she let him control her finger for his comfort and sense of security a really, really sweet moment but that this was following up him acknowledging that those fingers could crush him with almost no effort just one paragraph back was brilliantly done. Those two paragraphs conveyed the power she has over Mateo and that she cared about him so much as to relinquish that power and control to him when he needs her to (yeah, need is a strong word in this example, but metaphorically, I think it fits). 

That little moment, to me at least, helped frame everything that came after and made it all feel that much more special.

And holy fuck was pretty much all of that special! There were so many great moments between Beth and Mateo from the moment they reached the apartment to that last line of the chapter.

That moment she made Mateo come in her whey by teasing him about eating him? Fuck! That was incredible, so hot and she didn't even touch him! Also, I love that line about her not realizing that she could like him even more, as I felt like she hinted at being into vore, too, way back in chapter one when she taunted Emma about ending up in her stomach, I believe. It almost felt like a nice little callback to that.

We've been building to the date for quite some time now, and the payoff for it was spectacular. From the moment Beth's earthshaking steps brought her in front of Mateo to see her in her "little" black dress and heels to that emotional conversation at the restaurant, everything felt just right. Seeing Beth be vulnerable around Mateo, showing how self-conscious she actually is when everybody stares at her, judging her, was a nice moment. She doesn't just like and love Mateo, but she truly trusts him, and that's huge!

I knew there was some trouble at home for Beth (I've been calling it since chapter one or two), but damn, being abandoned by her irresponsible parents who just wanted to downsize and avoid being her mom and dad was a kind of fucked up I wasn't expecting. That Beth was willing to downsize with them surprised me a little bit, given how much she loves the feeling of being big, but it makes sense given that she wanted to be with her parents. It's a miracle that she came out of that still loving downsizers! But yeah, this certainly fits that sense of loneliness she always has and helps explain why Mateo paying attention to her drew her to him in the first place, even if she wasn't the best at expressing herself at the time.

I do wonder if Beth will get to confront her parents at some point in this story. I could see this just being a thing that has affected her and not being a plot point that's revisited, but part of me hopes she gets that closure before the story ends.

Also Mateo was such a good boyfriend her. He knew just what to say (because it was the truth!), and he made her feel like she truly wasn't alone for the first time in a long time. The biggest person in her world, indeed!

Also, I kind of glossed over it, but I love that it looks like you're moving forward with the unregistered downsized shelter idea. There's a lot of potential with that idea ...

And then there's the fucking! Good lord, did it really take me this long to get to the fucking?! (Not the first time I've said that!) Everything about this was perfect! Reminding us that this has been Beth's exact fantasy since he first offered to do her homework (not exactly what you said, but close enough and probably also true!) for her helped highlight how big a moment this was for her. You also captured Mateo's timidness at this being his first time having sex at any size wonderfully.

Mateo deciding to ignore Beth in the same way he had ignored most of the downsizer rules and go "too deep" inside her like that? God damn! Also, him using her clit as a sort of joystick for her was a nice visual. I just picture him testing it by putting pressure on different spots and watching her reactions. It's as hilarious as it is intoxicating to picture.

That mouthplay scene was (fuck, I'm already running out of adjectives) ... hot as fuck! Yeah, that works. It was hot as fuck! The way she teases him about eating him is absolutely perfect (yeah, I used it again, so what?). She intimidates him enough for his fear instincts to kick in but he trusts her enough to know that he's safe on a conscious level. That's really tricky to balance, but you did it well with the whey (after Beth found out about his new kink), and you did so even better here at the end. And the rest of that scene, from the way she tossed Mateo in to the laundry drier simile to the climax itself, was phenomenal (there we go, found another one!).

But you hit on a couple of things in that sex scene beyond the sex itself that I loved. First, the way Beth stopped and asked for consent despite being so into it that she literally ripped her dress off (poor dress, it was so pretty in my head!) was great! It shows how much she respects and values Mateo, as did her determination to get him to make decisions for himself throughout the sex itself.

Which leads me to the other thing that really stood out to me here: Mateo's trauma. You had a nice moment with the whey were you brought it up fairly blatantly, with him being afraid of being punished by Beth for getting off in her whey, much like how Sofia would punish him for lesser shit. I liked that you called attention to his experience with Sofia there. It as a nice reminder of what he had to go through to get to the paradise he's in now.

But I thought it was much more subtle and clever to have Mateo be so indecisive and focused on what Beth wants rather than his own desires at times. That's how Sofia was with him regarding everything, so it makes sense that he would struggle with some decision-making for some time after that nightmare. And again, I love how Beth gently pushed him to make those decisions anyway. She was patient and wanted to make him happy just as much he did for her.

Backtracking quite a bit, Tricia's segment was small but meaningful. I suspected that it was Tricia's mom who had done that to Steve's leg and that Tricia had found him after her mom had left him for dead somewhere. To read that Tricia did that to him herself was incredibly sad. I also don't fully blame her for this.

I think trusting a 14-year-old (she amputated his leg at 15, a year after finding and keeping him, right?) with the kind of power a human has over a downsizer, especially without any of the safeguards in place, is extremely dangerous. It sounds like Tricia had anger issues before all this, so of course a young, immature girl is going to flip out at some point and hurt her tiny father. That she was so nice to him for months afterwards shows how shitty she felt about the whole thing.

And I've said it before, but between the way she was raised (most likely by her mom) to think about downsizers and having Steve right there at her disposal, it only makes sense that she torments him the way she does. She gets so frustrated so easily, and it's easy to blame Steve for her problems. If only he hadn't downsized, right? Of course, if she wasn't raised to think of downsizers as pests and mom were more accepting (I know I'm speculating a lot here, but this seems to be what's being hinted at), they could all be happy together without any of this shit. But Tricia is trapped in this cycle because of the hate that was passed down to her and all the difficulties in her life because her dad is a downsizer in a household that hates downsizers. It's really, really sad.

And Kamila sees none of that because how could she? I completely understand where she's coming from in her thinking on Tricia, but I'm glad that Tricia still treats her well. Even after that shitty day at school, she still thought to bring Kamila her coffee and wasn't a jerk about giving it to her, either. That has to count for something, right? RIGHT?

Oh, and hearing Steve explain that Tricia's bad moods became more frequent after she broke up with Mateo sure was interesting. She really did/does care about our main character. But again, her social programming won't let her acknowledge it. I speculated back in chapter two that the way she ditched Mateo didn't necessarily mean that she didn't care about him anymore. Maybe she was too mad at the situation to stick around. Or maybe she left in tears. We don't really know, because we didn't see it. We were just left to guess that she didn't care about him and abandoned him when he needed her most. It's kind of nice to see that this wasn't exactly the case and that something more complex was going on in her heart.

Finally, those Principal Sullivan segments were awesome! The way she sat back and basked in Mateo's begging fits how I pictured her personality perfectly, as did the way she put those downsized parents in their place! But I was a little surprised to see Carol take Mateo's feelings into consideration a little bit here. I get that she didn't just do what she planned because he "killed the mood," but that she went through the trouble of finding a way to have her fun without Mateo feeling like a cheater was a more considerate than I had given her credit for. Maybe I judged her character a little too harshly before (she was always super hot, though!).

I mean, she could have easily just put him in the detention box after she decided not to put him in her tits. And that she called him her favorite downsizer wasn't insignificant, I would think.

I already mentioned the downsized parents stuff was great, especially that part where she walked up to them when they were halfway up the ladders. Holy fuck! They were 40 feet up and only at her knees? What a power move by her. Also, you're use of the word "splatter" here got me both times, especially the second time. That she barely thought to look and make sure she didn't splatter those downsizers under her heels? Jesus fuck!

I do still wonder if there will come a time when Mateo's parents will want to have a chat with the good principal. I'd love to see her face when she tells her secretary to send them in, ready to put them in their place, only for a full-sized Sofia to stomp in super pissed about something. And if she's a DPS agent at that point? Oh man, that could be fun.

Then again, maybe Mateo will keep being her favorite and it won't come to that. Who knows?

So, summing all those words above up, this chapter was pretty okay, I guess.

Author's Response:

Aww, you liked the finger blanket scene? I was so happy when I wrote that! That blend of comfort and strength with Beth’s mere finger was so fun to visualize. I’m stoked that you picked up on what I was trying to convey. Her hand has the power to end him with little effort, but she allowed her little love to pull on her finger and use it as a seatbelt, was such an endearing mental image for me.

The vore thing. In my mind, vore isn’t something Beth yearns for or even thought about. Like, it’s more of a tease … something you’d see in cartoons and movies, and never think about it real life. Her teasing Emma and then Mateo was just harmless fun. But you can see in this chapter, the gears are turning in her head. I don’t know if she’s made the connection between vore and power, but she can obviously see Mateo enjoying it, so she’ll lean into it. I’m glad you found that exchange between Beth and Mateo hot, haha.

As for Beth and her parents. I her appeal to downsizers and her enjoy being big came after her parents abandoned her. She wants to take care of tiny people, the way she wants her parents to take care of her. That void her parents left manifested in this obsession with downsizers. It’s tragic really.

Thanks for all the kudos on the smut! Haha. I won’t get into details, but I’m ecstatic that you said it was ‘perfect’ because I was nervous writing it. I wanted to show how excited Beth was to have her way with Mateo, while also making sure he was cool with sex. Also, it was funny to imagine Beth storming into her apartment like a tornado, causing all this destruction because she was eager to have sex with her two-inch boyfriend, haha.

I love Tricia and Kamila’s arc so much. Yes, Trish was responsible for her father’s injury because of her anger. And it looks like she hasn’t really learned from that.

Principal Sullivan! Yes, I loved writing that part about the parents being so high up, and only being halfway up the length of her legs. Really illustrates the size difference!

Thanks again ‘It Was Me’ for your in-depth review. I hope I hit all your major points!

Reviewer: GiantessLover21 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01 2024 12:06 AM Title: Detention and a Date

This story is so good i was a bit scared to start since it's already a long one but damn what a mistake i almost make. It's pure gold 

Author's Response: Yoooooo, I'm glad you made the leap to read it!!!  Thank you, thank you for your comment! It means a lot to me <3

Reviewer: meereten01 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 26 2024 11:26 PM Title: So Happy Together

Thank you for writing this chapter! It was such a nice interaction with Beth.

But at the end, it seemed like Beth simply wasn’t big and strong enough to protect Mateo. Principal Sullivan still isn’t phased by Beth and thinks she can do as she pleases.

Author's Response:

You'll see in the next chapter. Beth and Mateo don't want to piss off the Principal, unless they want her to ruin their lives.

Reviewer: Senital2011 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 18 2024 7:20 AM Title: Rescue Me

I loved this chapter. Finally some retribution and justice for Mateo. My brain had a glitch because of the shit his mother pulled. The rest of this story has been great though.  I absolutely love what you're doing with it.

Wait... there was a movie?!?!‽, (I know there was) it was trash., I watched, and minus the some of the story bits, it was just *rages* I'm better now.

I hope you keep writing it, I sold my soul a long time ago to some shady corporation or some shit, but I hope your deal turns our better. I have long lost ambitions of writing stories for this site again but it's not on the foreseeable docket at the moment.  

I'll do my best to share this. But I don't have anyone to share this with. Apologies about that. Keep up the great work, the Downsizers everywhere need you. Also Hollywood,

If you're listening this is how you do a proper story ffs.

Author's Response:

Thank you for your comment! I'm sorry Sofia pissed you off! She doesn't know what she's doing, and is coming down as a heavy-handed mother. We'll see if she learns how trauma-inducing she's been.

Thank you for the stars, it'll help me in hell, lol.

Reviewer: rrclover Signed [Report This]
Date: August 17 2024 5:34 AM Title: School Days

Holy c*** I really do like your story. The world been building. Please do not end it any time soon. I hope that you keep writing more. Happy fun times too I like how you mix it in and tell other stories too I love how not all characters are evil one-dimensional characters too like the main character's mom. I understand why she was very possessive.  It's very easy to see why I don't like how you didn't clear up. The fact that he was partially at fault like he never contacted her when he was with his friends until she picked him up. I would at least text and call her and let her know. She was fine. She was in the right there, but the brain washing was too far and with her husband she should never have been mad with him if she knew her breast milk. I'm assuming she'll find out later.  Had a effect on him.Maybe she doesn't think bodies.What does the interesting to see what happens, especially with Luna if she brings it up and says yeah, he was pretty much high when that happened.Will she feel guilty?Will they make up?I can understand why she was angry at the moment.She just doesn't understand

Author's Response:

Regarding Sofia, I'm a fan of show and don't tell. I'm showing you her actions and it's up to you whether you like her or not. I don't mind if she's unlikeable or even hated. She is who she is. And Mateo and her Miguel just have to deal with it. She kinda understands her milk makes downsizers cling to her, but she doesn't fully understand what's going on. It will be cleared up soon.

Thank you for your comment and I'm happy to hear you're enjoying. The world building has been fun and I wouldn't mind living there myself, haha.

Reviewer: darkone Signed [Report This]
Date: August 17 2024 12:36 AM Title: School Days

I almost did not read this story based on the description, but I am certainly glad I did. I've enjoyed it very much and am definitely interested in how Sofia and her husband end up. Keep up the great work! (BTW your request to comment motivated me and you have the honor of being my first comment here. I've been in the shadows for many years here :)

Author's Response:

Well, I do feel honored anytime a lurker gives me their first comment! Thank you for taking the time to let me know what you think. It means a lot to me. I'm curious about how I can improve the story description. I've been fiddling with it for so long, trying to capture the essence of the story. If you have any suggestions, I'm all ears. Thank you again for commenting!

Reviewer: TinyGuyyyy Signed [Report This]
Date: July 29 2024 9:51 PM Title: Tricia

We need more! Pleaseeee

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: July 21 2024 11:49 PM Title: Tricia

I want to be annoyed that the story diverged from the epic cliffhanger, but I can't be. This chapter was beautifully written, and finally getting some insight to Tricia's backstory was so eye-opening. So I suppose I can keep hanging until we find out Miguel's fate. Maybe Sofia just hit the "HOLD" button instead?

But yeah, Tricia is such a delightfully complicated character, even moreso than Sofia. I feel a bit validated in my assumption that the excuses Tricia initially gave for hating downsizers amounted to talk at the sizist dinner table. I mean, Tricia's not paying taxes!

But I was so distracted by this thought that I didn't even stop to considering a deeper underlying reason serving as the real source of her anger. In some ways, I came away from this chapter feeling sorry for Tricia. Her life was upended and her family was destroyed by what happened to her father. Of course she's going to be resentful about that.

But her anger is misplaced, likely (based on the fact that Tricia has to hide him from her mother and stepfather) from the way the rest of her family feels about downsizers. It seems clear that her current parental units wouldn't consider him a person, and Tricia's friends certainly wouldn't, and that's what guides her frustrations. It's not her mom's fault for being closeminded about her dad's downsizing (if she even knows about it; there's still a lot of questions around exactly what happened with him, including his leg). It's not the fault of a seemingly decent-sized pocket of society looking down on downsizers.

No, it's her dad's fault for being duped and becoming downsized. It's the fault of downsizing in general and, therefore, all downsizers.

From the start, I got a sort of "illusory crime" vibe from Tricia, like she was the victim of a sort of social conditioning to hate downsizers. While that's true, I think, this is so much worse than that. That illusory crime by those around her has altered the way she views her own father and dashed her hopes of having a happy family (there are ways she could be happy with her dad, even if her mom just wanted a normal-sized husband and wasn't a full-blown sizist, which it sounds like she might be).

We see the results of this play out in a couple ways here. First, it's obvious that Tricia loves her father. She's clearly not keeping him out of some sense of obligation or a refusal to let go of the past or even because it's cool or fun to her to have a downsized pet. She likes comforting him. She gets pissed when he's too scared to tell her when something is wrong and chooses to suffer instead. She even kept him with her when she slept for comfort once. She loves him even now that he's a downsizer.

However, that love actually seems to make that resentment even worse, as we saw in his latest round of punishment in the chapter. His mistake destroyed her family and, in some ways, took her father away from her, as he's now a downsizer and not a person. So she cruelly punishes him for it, truly feeling as though he deserves it. But even then, when she goes too far and is worried that she actually hurts him, we see that her love for him is still there. It's an internal struggle between what her heart is telling her and what she has been raised to believe, and it's so intriguing to watch it play out.

Then there's how Tricia vents her general frustrations from school, with her dad having to take the brunt of her anger from that as well. And that ... that doesn't subside so quickly. It's much more aggressive and cruel, too. He just happens to be a downsizer she has access to, someone she can punish for no reason and without consequence, so he just has to deal with it.

I like how Tricia becomes super sweet toward him after that venting subsides, though, even if it takes a month or so sometimes. It's not stated in the chapter, but I get the feeling this is because she realizes that the things she does to him when she gets like that are wrong and feels shitty about it, but at the same, she won't lower herself to apologize to a downsizer. So she pretends it never happened and treats him especially well as a way to make up for it. Or that's my theory, at least.

I do want to note here that I think it's a bit ironic that it seems as though everyone else in Tricia's life is so judgmental, that she needs to have certain standards (hating downsizers the appropriate amount, for example) in order to feel accepted, but her dad clearly still loves her even after dealing with all of this horrible shit from her. Despite everything, it's a downsizer who truly accepts her no matter what.

I also love that Tricia is so self-centered. Yeah, I feel like everything I said above is true and that, in some ways, she's a tragic victim of that social conditioning, but her way of thinking is also very selfish and short-term. She wants to punish her dad for what she did to him, even though he was scammed into being downsized. And now Mateo has to pay for her losing her boyfriend, even though he didn't want to downsize and it's her choice not to date him. So while I can feel sympathy for her at times, she has really good villain traits like this at the same time.

And while we're on the subject of Mateo, I was a bit surprised to see that Tricia actually misses him. And we got to see that there were things about him that she really liked; she wasn't with him for status or just because she thought he was hot. He actually made her feel good about herself, and a part of her regrets not having that anymore. This completely changes the type of threat I view her as toward Mateo going forward. I thought she was just going to try to kill or torture him out of anger before, but now it seems like she wants to keep him under her bed and under her feet because she has similar mixed feelings about him as she does her father. I don't think she loves Mateo, as the things she mentioned about him were all about how he made her feel (there's that self-centeredness again), but I do think she feels something for him.

I also believed her when she said she wouldn't have flushed Emma and him down the toilet if Beth hadn't shown up. I wasn't sure at first, but between her reflection on their relationship and what happened at the end of the chapter, I think her trying to stomp Emma and him in the bathroom was blind rage and that pissing on them was just teaching them a lesson. I don't think a calm, rational Tricia would have purposefully killed a downsizer then.

Things are certainly different now, though.

Tricia stepped over one of those proverbial lines with what happened with the unregistered downsizers (I could say a lot about them as well, but this is obviously already pretty long, so I'll just say , "Man, that's fucked up," concerning their living arrangement). I feel as though Tricia's hatred of downsizers is different from Lin's, as Lin came off to me as just a normal sizist who hates downsizers just because they're different. I say this largely because of the way in which Lin taunts downsizers throughout the chapter.

I also feel like it was peer pressure that drove Tricia to warm-bellied murder. Based on what we saw from her earlier in the chapter, the way she reacted to Lin squishing the first downsizer, how quickly and without tasting him she ate the Mateo lookalike, and the admission later that she initially only ate him to impress/one-up Lin all convinced me that, despite her hate for downsizers, she wouldn't have killed one without someone there to add pressure. Of course, that mantra that downsizers aren't really people surely helped as well, but this was Tricia acting well beyond her norm, I think.

But then she felt the tiny moving around inside her and everything changed. She liked it, and it would be shocking if she didn't eat one again! And that bit with the X-Acto knife and the tape, I found myself wondering if she would have done that before. There has clearly been a shift in her. Whereas before it was hate guiding how she felt about downsizers, she's starting to truly enjoy treating them cruelly. This doesn't bode well for Steve and probably not for Mateo as well!

Finishing up on Tricia (finally, I know), I found another bit of irony here. She hates downsizing and the people who choose to downsize, but it seems like the only people she's punishing for it are those who didn't have a choice. It seems like Steve got scammed, Mateo didn't have a choice, and poor Kamilla got fucked over hard as well, not to mention the other unregistered. It's tragically funny that she's taking out her frustrations on the downsizers who have it so well on those who are struggling or didn't want to downsize in the first place.

Lastly, it was nice to see Hazel and Beth again! It's been a while, but I think that's not necessarily a bad thing. For me, I was really happy to see them mentioned, even if it was mostly background stuff. Having them out of the story for so long has built some anticipation for when we see them again. Hazel and Emma seeing Mateo again is going to be a huge feel-good moment. Mateo reuniting with Beth is going to be a major one as well. And when Beth is finally able to make good on some of those things she said she wanted to do to Mateo, that scene is going to be so much more effective after all this buildup and delicious frustration.

I was also glad to see Hazel tell Beth happened to Mateo, even if we didn't get to see it firsthand. It also makes sense why she chose then to do it. Seeing Beth so worked up about him being missing, any doubt Hazel might have about Beth's feelings toward Mateo were erased. It's clear now that she cares about him, and that was why she stepped in to tell Beth what happened.

It sure as shit wasn't to save that "sizist cunt." I loved that line coming from sweet, innocent Hazel. It was so perfect for that moment, the first time she saw Tricia after the incident that never happened.

Reviewer: jfgts2022 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 20 2024 1:14 PM Title: School Days

Anticipating the next chapter, I hope it isn't to far away.