[Report This]Date: February 03 2025 8:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Expedition
Velasco, my man, the long-awaited review is here and I'm ready to disappoint. Let's get right into it, shall we?
First thoughts are that I love your commitment to a fantasy setting that truly feels like it was tenderly crafted by a true D&D diehard dungeon master. Your world feels lived-in and provides a stable backdrop for the events of the story.
While I fully admit I'm not crazy about orcs and other non-humans in my size smut, your writing is solid and I still enjoyed it despite that. You characterize your cast of players well. They each feel unique and purposeful in the narrative, even if they do somewhat adhere to stock types (fantasy is built on that, after all) to some extent. You address the topic of sexism in fantasy head-on which I thought was particularly worthy of recognition.
You've constructed a rich meal here, and while I mat not have been personally titillated by your work as much as others might, your craft was strong enough to keep me engaged and interested in seeing more. Well done!
[Report This]Date: January 28 2025 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 3 - The Ashen Peak
I enjoyed this!
I'm not the biggest traditional fantasy reader, but your style of descriptive writing managed to set up this world nicely in a short amount of time. This goes for the smut as well, which is descriptive without being excessive. And the way you mixed in the emotions provided some nice contrast to highlight the sex.
I also quite enjoyed the character dynamics, Daniel being able to see past Zevna's "tough" facade, yet still accepting her for it, is really cute and a good way to have them get closer.
The only criticisms I have is that A) While I understand they need to be there for the quest, aside from Andrew, the side characters feel a bit pointless, and idk if it would be worth taking time away from the main couple to develop them.
And B) Some of the dialogue reads a bit odd, I think it may be the colloquialisms in this deeply fantasy setting, though that may be a personal thing.
Overall, I would definitely say the story is worth continuing if you want. The two plotlines(the quest and Daniel/Zevna's relationship) are both interesting, and you already have me thinking about where they could go next.