Date: August 15 2024 8:07 PM Title: Duncan vs. the Shy Slaver
Every chapter of this story is a treat. I love the dynamic the roommates have and it's just cute. I look forward to reading every time there's an update
Author's Response:
Thank you for saying that! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story, Callie and Duncan's dynamic in particular, as that's the driving force of the story!
Date: August 15 2024 3:49 PM Title: Callie vs. the Minimalist Mini
Great chapter, glad Duncan's already reunited with best girl Callie.
Here's hoping she won't find out what Ada actually did to Duncan, though she probably wouldn't hold a grudge for long.
Author's Response:
I'm loving the best girl designation for Callie!
And I do wonder what her reaction would be if she knew what went on in that dorm room. She's normally pretty forgiving and seems to have taken a liking to Ada right away, but she does get rather ... defensive when it comes to Duncan, doesn't she?
Thanks for letting me know your thoughts on the chapter!
Date: August 14 2024 2:29 AM Title: Callie vs. the Esoteric Executive
Loved this chapter. Monica seems to have a very odd relationship with her employee, she does genuinely seem to want to help him, which is a nice change, and she seems to have some protective feelings that predate his shrinking, which is always nice when one finds themselves at a few inches tall.
It seems that our characters impressed her enough that they'll have access to some of her resources, while they might not be the exact thing they need, I'm sure they're better than nothing. At the very least, better to be tiny with a rich friend than tiny without one.
The only downside is that while Monica is the more ruthless and task oriented help they could probably use, she's got other responsibilities, so she's off to Japan for a while... Here's hoping she's back before the story climax!
Author's Response:
Monica rose to the top of the business world at a pretty young age (she's a 28-year-old CEO of a Fortune 50 company), and Duncan, who's a little younger than her, is in a pretty high position for his age as well, so she's felt the need to look out for him in that hostile environment for a while. I'm kind of going for a big sister type vibe with Duncan and her (hence the interrogation of Callie in the car scene and Monica mentally giving her approval). But she has that veil of cold professionalism that worked maybe a little too well in the case of Duncan, and that's part of the reason why she's starting to open up now that she's realized he had no idea how she really viewed him.
Tiny with access to money is definitely better than tiny and broke! And Duncan can actually earn his keep now! I'm working my way through We Help Each Other Get By now, and Duncan was wondering if he could maybe borrow Jake's tiny computer. Maybe at least on those days when he's too small to use it?
The next chapter actually jumps ahead by a few weeks, so Monica was already back. Her actually going to Japan was more for me to put a little exclamation point on that bit about her getting her feet treated by a bunch of Japanese businessmen. She'll be around, to say the least.
And I'm glad to hear you loved chapter three. From reading a good chunk of your work, I have a feeling you'll love chapter four even more! My only regret looking back is that I didn't work in the word "Goodbye" (if this doesn't make sense now, I think it will if/when you read the chapter).
Thanks for the generous review!
Date: August 11 2024 10:23 AM Title: Callie vs. the Minimalist Mini
Great story. A ray of light in a dark kingdom. Just continue like that.
Author's Response:
Thanks, web100! A ray of light in a dark kingdom. I kind of like that.
I hope you enjoy the rest of the story!
Date: August 11 2024 1:26 AM Title: Callie vs. the Titillating Test
I was not expecting you to post another chapter so soon, so that was a pleasant surprise! Now, please ignore how late I am in posting this review...
I would like to say that you made some very valid points regarding Alyssia and Monica in your response to my last review. While they weren't quite as gentle as Callie, I would have to agree with you that they didn't do anything too bad and that no boundaries were crossed, especially since they've known Duncan for some time. I mean, you know these characters better than I do. It has to do with my bias as a reader. If I want the two main characters to get together, in this case Callie and Duncan, I'll be wary of anything that might come between them! That applies to Monica getting the opportunity to be more intimate with Duncan before Callie did :(
On that note, this chapter made me very nervous, especially the ending. Something was bound to go wrong at some point, and this seemed like the right time in the story, after three chapters of relative peace. I just knew bringing Duncan to the test would backfire. And then for them to narrowly avoid danger until the very end of the chapter—you know how to write tension!
Mixed in with the tension is a lot of good smut in this chapter. Breastplay, and cleavage entrapment specifically, is something I really like to see in this fetish, and the execution here is just superb. The smut here has really benefitted from the story being more of a slow burn; nothing is taken for granted, and every sexual interaction hits harder when we are attached to the characters. Which we very much are. But honestly every interaction between Callie and Duncan is so sweet that it doesn't matter what they're doing, it's always great. I particularly like the differences in what the characters are thinking and what they're actually saying out loud. Like Duncan saying it was fine to ride in Callie's purse even though he didn't actually like it, and Callie knowing Duncan is only saying it's fine because he doesn't want her to worry, yet she doesn't say she knows that, she just appreciates what he is doing. Perfect stuff.
So all in all a great chapter in a great story. I'm eagerly looking forward to the next one. No pressure though!
Author's Response:
Yeah, I wasn't expecting to get it out so soon, either. And at the rate I'm going on the next chapter, that might just come out even sooner! What's gotten into me?!
I completely understand what you're saying about Alyssia and Monica. And just because I created these characters doesn't mean you can't observe some things I may have missed or maybe slipped in there subconsciously. I think the fact that we can have different takes on stuff like this is not only part of what makes this fun, but it can also motivate or even generate ideas in some cases. So feel free to keep speaking your mind, and don't let me speaking on behalf of the characters deter you in the least!
As for being wary about things or people coming between Duncan and Callie (i.e. Monica having fun with Duncan), I will say that finding a balance between where I want to go with the story and keeping things "entertaining," all while making sure these characters are all being true to themselves (someone has to keep them in line) can be a bit tricky from time to time. Overall, though, I think you'll be okay with where things ultimately go ...
Thank you for that compliment about writing tension. It's always hard to tell if things are building up and being taken the way you want them to be, so it's always great to get confirmation like this!
The same goes with your slow burn compliment. Building Callie and Duncan's relationship side-by-side with the sexual tension between them, all wrapped up in a nice, slow burn, is something that I'm hoping will pay off exponentially in the chapters ahead. So I'm excited to see someone say that this is exactly how they're feeling about the story.
And I love the example you brought up about Duncan and Callie's interactions. That purse scene was such a small thing, but I feel like it encapsulates the characters and their relationship with each other so well.
Date: August 10 2024 9:57 PM Title: Callie vs. the Persuasive Professor
Pretty cool adventure story so far. Getting a glimpse into Duncan's past with his ex was eye-opening. I didn't really care for her, which I assume was the goal. Poor dude is traumatized. And it appears Callie is also going through her own battles with the professor, which I also didn't care for, haha. Honestly, Callie is my fav right now. And her curiosity about Duncan's height, measuring him while he had a nightmare, was oddly cute to me.
Oh, and I got to give you props on your grammar and style. I don't think many people do ellipsis (...) correctly, myself included. Only a few months ago did I sit down and read the rules and started unfucking myself when I write. I noticed that you actually do them correctly, by placing a space between the last word and the first dot. Kudos!
Anyway, I'm off to the next chapter. I'm unsure how to feel about Duncan's old boss. Something tells me I won't like her, but I'll go in with an open mind. Also, there's this mystery of how Duncan shrunk. I'm curious if that'll come up.
Author's Response:
And kudos back to you for unfucking your grammar when you write! Although, to be fair, I never really noticed anything too glaring in your work, but it's admirable to always strive to improve!
I have to admit, I never expected to be complimented on my use of ellipsis, and this made me way happier than it probably should have. Seeing them used wrong is actually a big pet peeve of mine, but I never say anything because everyone seems to connect the last word and first dot and I don't want to be a grammar nazi. So thank you for mentioning this and giving me an excuse to rant a bit!
Color me shocked that you found the rapist of the chapter unlikable! Shocked, I say!
But seriously, yeah, Kristie and Stillwell were supposed to come off as pretty despicable, and, based on these reviews, that seems to be the general consensus. And I'm glad you're still liking Callie. Yeah, she wanted to calm Duncan down, but she had to get those measurements so she could try making those clothes. Dude's sleeping in dirty boxers at this point!
I'm really curious what you'll think of Monica. I'm going to guess the opposite, actually. I think you will like her.
And yeah, the mystery of how and why Duncan shrunk isn't going away. It's not the central focus of this story, but stuff relating to it is going to come up here and there.
Date: August 09 2024 3:05 PM Title: Callie vs. the Minimalist Mini
I just wanted to let you know I'm among many who have really enjoyed this so far. Of course, I've only made it through the first chapter, but it's been an absolute treasure to read so far. It's a one-two sucker punch of cuteness around every corner. There's much I could gush about, but I'll try not to waste words. I can feel the passion you've got for gentle interactions, at least between Callie and Duncan. I really hope they continue to get along. Callie's thoughtfulness and desperation to feel needed by someone is bittersweet to see unfold, because I'm sure many of us could feel ourselves in her position. Life is hard, and yet, if we were in a position to help someone at no cost to ourselves, would we jump at that chance?
She's been fairly observant of Duncan's reactions and constantly second-guesses how she's coming across to him. Being seen as someone to run away from seems to make her physically sick to her stomach, and yet Duncan doesn't even see what's wrong with his survival situation. Arguably, his life has been a hard one. I could only hope if I turn into a "Borrower" through some arcane glitch in the matrix mishap, that I'd end up reaching out to a Callie of some sort. She frets for his validation, and he constantly gets to have the debatably fun experience of being helpless around a cinnamon roll type character who can't even walk down a hallway without knocking his ass over.
This has truly been a love letter to "Gentle" as a concept, and your work is deeply appreciated by myself and others as well. Please take care of yourself and don't burn yourself out from writing, because this looked like a lot to write thus far. You are an exceptional storyteller and I wish I could emulate it.
Also, I'm gonna sit around and imagine Daniel Radcliffe riding Bigsby as some sort of mount for tinies, seeing as he's canonically a real life Tiny.
Author's Response:
That bastard Radcliffe would team up with Bigsby! I really should have seen this coming!
But on a more serious not, that you've found Callie so relatable so far makes me really happy, and I hope you continue to feel that way if you keep reading!
As for the question of whether we'd jump at the chance to help someone despite our own difficulties in life, I'd like to think the answer is yes. I tend to believe that people are mostly well-intentioned (with some obvious exceptions) and empathetic, even if they don't always show it through their actions. Maybe that's a bit naïve on my part, but it's a comforting thought. And this is a big part of the appeal that the gentler side of this fetish has for me, so I'm glad I was able to at least somewhat convey that through Callie, who, as you noted, is extremely considerate and hates the idea that someone like Duncan is afraid of her.
Duncan has a lot of reasons for being in the place he's in mentally when we first meet him. Some of those are mentioned by him during that first conversation with Callie, while others will become more clear as the story progresses. He's been through a lot, and he has the trauma to show for it.
I have to wonder which side of that "fun" debate he would fall on?
Oh, and a glitch in the matrix? I may have to change up the origin of Duncan's tininess now!
I really appreciate that comment about this story being a love letter to gentle. That made me smile when I read it.
However, I will call attention to that warning I put in the chapter notes of the first chapter and point out that there will be a couple scenes in the story that are certainly not gentle in nature (although I'd argue they're important to the plot, rather than just random acts of cruelty). I don't know where you fall on this, but I know there are some people that love gentle content but become disturbed when things veer the other way a bit. I'll also note that what I consider to be the worst of these is at the start of chapter two (I included a warning in the chapter notes as well), so if that kind of thing bothers you, it's easy enough to skip to the second segment and avoid it altogether (you should be able to piece together what happened without having to read the details).
I just wanted to reiterate this point here, as you put a lot of emphasis on how much you love the gentle aspects of the story, and I absolutely want the people who love that to be able to enjoy the story without feeling as though they've been somehow misled, if that makes any sense.
Lastly, it means a lot that you think so highly of my storytelling. As I've mentioned before, I'm a big fan of your work (and I've been lucky enough to have received feedback from several authors whose work I admire).
Thank you for all the compliments and kind words!
Date: August 07 2024 12:43 AM Title: Callie vs. the Titillating Test
I really like the pacing of the story and how you're slowly unraveling the plot. I've just spent the last hour reading it and it's really good. Perfect blend of sarcasm, genuine puns, and a little bit of the spice. Which makes it a lovely read. I will not comment on the cliffhanger as a writer myself i know what it's like to consistently release, take your time, I'm saving this story and I'll check back soon on it
Author's Response:
Hey Senital! Damn, you read all that in an hour? You're a much faster reader than I am!
Thanks for the complimentary words, particularly about the pacing! That was a bit of concern for me going into the story. I wanted the story to move at a slower rate, but I didn't want to move too slowly and have it come off as boring. So you singling this out and pointing out that you're enjoying the slow unraveling of the plot feels really good to hear!
I could say the same for the style of humor I'm trying to work in, and you mentioned that, too! Sometimes it's hard to tell if my admittedly quirky sense of humor is landing with the reader, so thanks for letting me know that its working for you!
And thanks for the encouragement on taking my time to release chapters. I appreciate people's understanding on that. I've found a bit of a writing rhythm here of late, so I'm going to try and ride that for as long as I can. So hopefully the next chapter will be out relatively soon, but it still feels nice to see that multiple people are okay with waiting if it's not.
Date: August 05 2024 9:17 PM Title: Callie vs. the Minimalist Mini
Really cute start! Sorry it's taken me forever to read your story. I will review as I get through the chapters.
I'm liking Callie a lot. Duncan seems weary in this chapter. I see him embracing Callie over time if she remains this kind. I'm really curious about his encounters with the previous giantesses. Anyway, fun start!
Author's Response:
Hey MXP! No worries on "taking forever" to read the story. It's not going anywhere. And I look forward to seeing what you think of each chapter!
Yeah, based on these reviews, it seems like it's really hard to not like Callie, so I'm happy that you feel the same way. As for Duncan, there are a lot of reasons for him being the way he is, both from his time as a tiny and also well before.
Funny you should mention your curiosity about Duncan's time with the other giant women he's met. You should find the beginning of chapter two pretty interesting then.
Date: August 04 2024 10:11 PM Title: Callie vs. the Titillating Test
I love this story! I first saw it when chapter 3 came out and gladly read those 3 together and now I've been lucky to read chapter 4 so soon. Don't beat yourself up on taking so long to post, the average of my last 3 postings is about 1 per year(hopefully, that changes, but you know how life is).
I can't wait to see how things progress.
I have to applaud you! Chapter 4 has the greatest interaction with breasts I've ever read in a giantess story. Seriously, it was perfect and I can tell I'll be re-reading this chapter many times in the future whenever I need inspiration on what to do when writing breasts.
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks for the extremely kind words about my writing, particularly about the breast scenes. I tried to put in as much detail as I could, so it's nice to know that someone thinks so highly of how they turned out!
And I was more just poking fun at myself for taking so long to get that third chapter out (it was like five or six months) than beating myself up over it. I'd like to get these chapters out faster (and I'm working on it), but I'm not losing any sleep over it or anything. I just enjoy those stupid little rambles I put in the chapter notes.
Thanks again for the review, and I hope you like how things turn out!
Date: August 04 2024 2:45 PM Title: Callie vs. the Minimalist Mini
This story is really well done. I love love love Callie's personality. The differences between her and Duncan mixed with their situation could be the premise of a romantic comedy. I especially love Callie's urges towards him that she is mostly repressing, for now.
Great work!
Author's Response:
Hey saltavio! Congrats on wrapping up Growing Closer! I look forward to sitting down and reading how you wrapped it up when I get a chance to sit down and really enjoy it.
I'm thrilled that you love Callie so much. I hope you enjoy reading her half as much as I've enjoyed reading Trish.
And romantic comedy? I'll take it!
Thanks for letting me know your thoughts!
Date: August 04 2024 2:27 PM Title: Callie vs. the Titillating Test
Can't believe we got another chapter so soon! What a wonderful surprise. And this one is packed with great moments.
My biggest takeaway is that I'm loving the increased sexual tension between our leads. Seeing them ogle one another is hot enough, the two becoming more familiar with their power dynamic and letting themselves revel in it sends me over the moon. I love the part where Callie realizes she could have helped Duncan move through her cleavage, but is mesmerized that such an intimate part of her body can be so effortlessly overwhelming to the tiny. The development of her confidence throughout the chapter was a sight to behold, and it only makes the chapter's ending more devastating and impactful.
I for one, was (and really, still am) on the edge of my seat from the moment he fell out from between her breasts. I was briefly distracted by how pleasurable the thought of Duncan landing on her thigh was, but then I was throttled back by the thrilling tension. Callie's concern, the apathy of those around her, and Duncan's helplessness all come together to create some perilous stakes that beautifully contrast the overarching gentle narrative. It's because I'm so invested in these characters that Duncan being tossed in harm's way can be so impactful, and it's knowing how dangerous his current situation is that truly enhances the moments he's safe and sound in the loving care of his kindhearted roommate. I think the ebb and flow of that makes for a really compelling narrative and leads to ever more satisfying payoffs. Also, I've read enough of this story to determine you're too great a writer to ruin what you've been building up for some cheap thrills, and I trust wherever this story is heading (and whoever those sneakers belong to) will continue to impress, excite, and thoroughly entertain.
As always, I love the little details strewn about, like Duncan feeling Callie's pulse behind her neck. The whole helping her cheat was a fun scenario, made more fun by sneezes sending tinies where they belong. I loved how they adapted to the situation with Duncan smacking her boob to communicate the answers. That whole section was just filled with too many enjoyable moments. I could list them all, but then I'd just be reposting the chapter in your reviews lol.
And I'd be remiss not to mention, my favorite moment in this entire chapter is when Duncan is plummeting through the air, unsure if he'll survive the landing, his thoughts are only towards how his death would affect Callie. He's more concerned with her emotional well-being than his physical well-being in the face of death itself and that is so goddamn heartwarming! It makes me melt as I think about it, well done and kudos!
Just a heads up: there were quite a few instances where a character was thinking to themselves that weren't denoted by any punctuation or stylization (i.e. Holy shit, Callie thought. I can't believe that worked.). I'm guessing you probably had those bits italicized and then the site erased your formatting when you uploaded it, so I figured I should make you aware of that.
Author's Response:
First off, thanks for the heads up about the site not keeping my italicized parts. That's the first time it's done that to me, so I didn't even think to check it this time.
I love that the first thing you brought up was the sexual tension between our two leads, as I was obviously trying to ramp that up here in a couple ways. Given that we jumped three weeks ahead and there was (hopefully) some of that between them in the first few chapters, I felt like it would only build as they continue to get to know each other. The intrusive thoughts (especially from Callie) come naturally enough, but the power dynamic stuff is a bit tricky to balance out. Having Callie learn to enjoy the power she has over Duncan without having her act out of character has been so much fun! And Duncan taking it in stride rather than being offended or frightened is something that I hope shows just how strong the bond between them has grown even in such a short amount of time.
I'm also so glad that you were devastated by that little cliffhanger at the end! It's good to punish the reader every once in a while!
Seriously though, you hit on pretty much everything I tried to do to give that twist some punch. Callie's building confidence, from her interactions with both Duncan and Stillwell (for different reasons, obviously), the tease of the mounting sexual tension between Callie and Duncan, and the whole stage around the climactic scene itself were all things that I hoped would make people really feel a sense of dread and concern in that moment, so it was so good to see that this all came together for you exactly how I wanted it to. And I absolutely agree that its scenes like this one that help give more meaning to those gentler interactions and lead to more satisfying payoffs.
Also, thanks for the confidence that I know what I'm doing with this story. And yeah, it would seem like a waste if I just tossed away everything the story has built up just for some "unsavory" giantess fun, wouldn't it? On the other hand, cheap thrills do sound pretty hot ...
I'm also really happy to see that you enjoyed the entirety of that test-taking scene. I really wanted to come up with a scenario that felt unique within these fetish stories, and I ended up being pretty happy with how it turned out. And for you to have found multiple moments within that scene that you enjoyed feels so rewarding to hear!
Lastly, yeah, Duncan's thoughts in his most perilous moments are with Callie, which I also found to be pretty heartwarming and even a bit gut-wrenching as I was writing it. I'll also just say that Duncan's reactions to near-death situations appear to be showing a bit of trend, aren't they?
As always, thanks for sharing your thoughts!
Date: August 04 2024 4:54 AM Title: Callie vs. the Minimalist Mini
I think EchoofZen that you are over reaching. We don't know who this new person is, or what her intentions are yet. Obviously everyone loves Callie so much in this story, so it would be a lot of buildup to have Callie disappear from the narrative.
I think unexpected events are a cool part of stories that can expand people's relationships, perspectives, and depth of character. So have some faith that this will be an interesting turn of events!
Author's Response:
I agree with that point on unexpected events. I personally love it when I think I know where a story is going, only for a seemingly random thing to throw me for a loop. It opens up so many new possibilities and keeps me guessing.
Date: August 04 2024 4:42 AM Title: Callie vs. the Titillating Test
Oh, come on. It was all going so well, and now it's gonna dissolve into an abuse/lost arc?
Author's Response:
I was joking in that bit about complaints in the end notes, but I had to laugh that it backfired on me and the first review for the new chapter was a complaint. So thanks for that!
Look, I could tell that everything is going to be fine. That Duncan is currently being picked up by a horny supermodel tiny-loving nun carrying the cure for teeniness who's only goal in life is to help those smaller than herself however she can. Or I could even just assure you that no abuse will take place or that this story will "dissolve" (I think you meant devolve?) into a "lost tiny" arc.
But I'm not going to do any of that. I'm not going to say whether or not things are going to go well for Duncan. I'm not going to confirm or deny your fears regarding the direction that the story is going.
I think having tension in a story is important. If everything goes according to plan and the characters never face any challenges, a story gets boring rather quickly. And if you know whether or not they're going to overcome those challenges right away, that's even more boring still. So I'm going to write the story in a way that I hope will be interesting, and I'll even go so far as to take your uneasiness with this new development that it's a step in the direction that I want to go with the story.
I will say that if you look at what this story has been so far, I don't think it's reasonable to assume that I'm going to drift too far from what I've set this story up to be.
Date: July 22 2024 7:55 PM Title: Callie vs. the Esoteric Executive
This was absolutely worth the wait! I think I like this chapter slightly better than the previous one, although they have all been great so far. I assume we can expect more of Alyssia in the next chapter. She seems nice, but what this chapter really makes clear to me is that Callie is the only one who treats shrunken people with the necessary caution and care. Sorry to all the new Monica fans, but when you've just found out your employee has shrunk, you should probably not immediately jump to making jokes, or teasing him about his foot fetish! Ah well, it ended up working out for now. And it was still hot, don't get me wrong.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I appreciate both the kind words and that you felt like this was worth the wait, especially after going several months before getting this chapter out!
We'll see more of Alyssia soon enough, but it actually won't be next chapter. I know she was mentioned at the end there, but we're going to jump a few weeks ahead in chapter four rather than continue on that same day. Don't worry, though. She'll get to have her fun before the end of the story.
I do like that she stuck out enough for you to mention, though!
I can't blame you for feeling that way about how Monica and Alyssia versus Callie, and you may have a bit of a point. In their defense, I do want to point a few things out, though.
First, I think Duncan handled his introduction to Monica quite composed, acting mostly like his old self even when she knew he was scared of her. I really think they would have handled things vey differently if he had acted in the timid, openly terrified ways a lot of tinies do in these stories. So he kind of set the tone for them to be a bit more playful and relaxed around him, whether that was his intention or not.
Second, unlike with Callie, he's known both Monica and Alyssia for quite some time, so, to me, it kind of makes sense that they would fall into their old routines with him (or, in Monica's case, change that routine and open up a bit more) even now. Again, if he's going to try and act normal, I think it's only natural that they would do the same, simply incorporating his size into how they would treat him anyway rather than drastically changing their behavior.
Lastly, specifically in Alyssia's case, she didn't actually see him in this chapter. She heard his story (and was touched by it, if those puffy red eyes are any indication) and knows he's in Callie's purse, but I think it's fair to at least wonder if she might have dialed back her teasing just a bit if she was staring at his tiny body. Also, she's probably a little upset that it looked as though they were going to keep her out of the loop despite the fact that she was worried about him, too, so her teasing may have come off just a tad more hostile than she meant to in that scene.
But despite all that, I'm actually quite glad you feel that Callie's treatment of Duncan stood out more after seeing others interact with him. That someone is comparing and contrasting how the three giantess's are treating Duncan means I was at least able to make each of them noticeably different from one another rather than having three characters who are basically interchangeable with each other. So thanks for bring it up!
Date: July 20 2024 10:44 PM Title: Callie vs. the Esoteric Executive
I was pleasantly surprised by Monica's demeanor towards Duncan. What I remember from the end of last chapter, she gave me (or at least Duncan's view of her gave me) the impression that she'd be the type to try and take advantage of the tiny, to try to exploit his current condition in some way to her benefit. From what I saw this chapter, that couldn't be further from the truth. Her concern seemed just as genuine as Callie's, if perhaps a bit more... mischievous? Scheming? Like, she absolutely means well, but she's willing to have some fun with it at the expense of Duncan's pride. After what he's been through, it's nice that Duncan finally has some caring women in his life to look after him (I mean, I guess Monica was already looking after him, but he's in much more dire need of that protection now that everyone can pose an actual threat to him).
Speaking of threat, the brief interaction the group had with Alyssia really drove home to me how scary being tiny is (when you look past all the super hot parts). I don't know why, but Alyssia's threat, as harmless as it was, unsettled me. Like, it reminded me anyone can do anything to Duncan as he is now, and it's only by the grace of his friends that he's safe at the moment and that the worst thing they want to do to him is give him a humiliating nickname and in Monica's case, make him oust his newly found fetish and rub her feet (that part was really hot btw, and Callie's reaction to the whole thing was hilarious).
Each chapter of this story is always worth the wait because it means more Callie. She's seriously becoming one of my favorite characters on this site; just cute and loveable to an incredible degree, and seeing how her thoughts and interactions with Duncan continue to develop is a balm for the heart. I loved the whole scene in the car, and the mutual gratification they got when she held him against her vibrating vocal chords. Always fun to see unorthodox size interactions like that.
And yeah, Callie's parents suck, her dad especially. She just can't catch a break with authority figures. At least her hero turned out to be cool. Gotta update the idiom: "Never meet your heroes, unless they're boss of the shrunken guy you found in your apartment."
Author's Response:
Ha! I'll get in touch with the idiom people and get that update through right away!
It looks like people had some reservations about Monica going into this chapter, which is good, as that's what I wanted. I was concerned that the second of real concern she showed over the phone when she thought he was calling her would have been a bit too much of a giveaway, but I'm glad it wasn't! But yeah, Duncan's trust issues kept him from realizing that she really cares about him. Ironically enough, when Kristie threatened to send him to Monica in chapter two, that would have been the best outcome for him, but he just couldn't see it (that and I doubt Kristie would have actually taken him to her if he had went with that option). Of course, Monica's not entirely blameless here, as her "professional" demeanor can make her seem a little cold at times, and letting people in and showing vulnerability are two things she generally doesn't do.
Which is why that foot scene at the end was so important for her. Not only was she getting him to realize his fetish, but she was opening up as well (if it wasn't clear, she also has a foot fetish).His vulnerability and her regret over Duncan initially fearing her helped push her to show some vulnerability herself (in an admittedly dominating fashion, but still!).
Hey! Somebody mentioned Alyssia! She wasn't around much this chapter, but I was hoping she would stick out. And I'm really intrigued by your reaction to her threat. I did want to mix an ominous sense with her playful nature, but I have to admit that I didn't expect your interpretation of it. It makes sense, though, and I like that it made you feel that way, honestly. Duncan was given a lot of agency this chapter, what with getting his job back, being able to roam the apartment freely, and they're even building a gym! But you're right, at the end of the day, he's still a vulnerable tiny living free at the grace of his friends (I really like the way you worded that, by the way).
Callie's parents certainly did come off poorly here. I think they do want what's best for her, but they (especially her dad) are very traditional people who are a bit too blunt from time to time. I was hoping to show with them a bit of Callie's background and why she thought certain things about why professor Stillwell approached her in the first place.
But most of all, I love how much you love Callie! You've been a pretty vocal supporter of her from the start, and it makes me feel good to know that one of my characters has made that much of an impression on you. And thanks for mentioning the vocal cord scene. I wasn't sure if that was going to work out coming from her perspective, but I liked how it turned out and it's good to hear that someone else feels the same!
Date: July 16 2024 11:07 PM Title: Callie vs. the Esoteric Executive
Wow! Amazing story so far! The slow build is great while also exploring his background. I was REALLY worried Monica would end up being cruel and taking him or something. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I'm thrilled you're enjoying things so far, especially that slow build, as I mentioned with the reviewer right below you!
I'm also happy to see that you weren't sure what to expect from Monica going in, as I wasn't sure if I hinted too strongly about what she really thinks of Duncan at the end of chapter two. I was hoping this would create a bit of tension with the reader going in, and it sounds like that worked in your case!
And yeah, I'll see what I can do about getting these chapters out faster. I know me, though, so still no promises!
Date: July 16 2024 4:28 AM Title: Callie vs. the Minimalist Mini
This is some seriously spectacular stuff. You know how to handle a slow burn like the best of them, my friend. That last little bit of actual foot action we got in chapter three was truly worth the wait. Hope there’s more in store and can’t wait to see how this develops!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I appreciate you saying that about the slow burn specifically, because it's going to be a while before we get into the really good smut (I'm a big believer in building things up), so pacing and concerns about not having enough action are always a thing. So yeah, thanks for letting me know that those things are working for you so far!
And yeah, there will be more fun stuff in store for Duncan even before he visits the promised land!
Date: July 14 2024 10:13 PM Title: Callie vs. the Minimalist Mini
Writing this review again because this site had an error uploading my first one. Agony.
After years of browsing this site I registered an account to write a review. Can't believe I didn't see this story till now.
The
character development is really nice, all the characters seem really
fleshed out. I really like their personalities and imperfections. Callie
is so wholesome and its really nice for her to treat Duncan like a
normal person but to still have subconscious actions like grabbing and
squeezing him as well as her intrusive thoughts. Its also funny how
Duncan's attraction to Callie and his general desire for human
interaction can get in the way of his basic survival instincts. Wonder
if he'll get a bit too comfortable having free reign of the house and
get himself caught in a situation he shouldn't be in. I like Monica too
so far, really funny how Callie bought that excuse lmao. The whole Ice
queen dynamic is fun, you can really tell Monica has a deep fondness for
Duncan. I also really like the fun and playful dynamic between Callie
and Duncan and how he has gradually became more comfortable with his new
size. Duncan helping Callie with her schoolwork is super wholesome and
adorable, hope we see more on that, its a nice role reversal.
You also have a way with your details. The way you describe things from Duncan's perspective is really amazing and mesmerizing. It really helps paint a vivid picture of whats going on and puts us in Duncan's shoes from his minuscule perspective. The color of Callie's eyes, her snores, the movement of Monica's foot, its like I'm standing there in front of them. It's breathtaking.
Really good story so far, it's lewd and exciting but it's not too much, and its not weird, at least not by this community's standards... Can't wait for the next chapter. I cannot stress how good this story is, so excited to see where it goes.Author's Response:
As someone who writes ridiculously long reviews on this site, I've had that happen to me before, too. If you take too long to type it out, the site might log you out automatically, and then when you go back to the page that review box is blank. Agony is a good word for it! I started copying my reviews when I finish typing them and make sure I'm still logged in before I hit submit, and I haven't had that problem since!
That being said, thank you for the incredibly kind words regarding my story!
You actually touched on several things that I was hoping were coming through in my writing, so I was pretty happy to read this. That comment about his basic survival instincts is actually pretty important, and I thought, if anything, someone would rip me by thinking that Duncan wasn't acting realistically in some of those situations when there's actually a reason for this. So I was pretty stoked that you mentioned this!
The dynamic between Callie and Duncan and particularly Duncan's comfort level being tiny around her was something I really wanted to emphasize with this last chapter. The first two chapters saw these two come together and form a bond but still be a bit raw and reserved in how they act around one another. But now, after spending a couple of days together without the shock and stress of figuring things out, they've quickly gotten a lot more comfortable with each other and their natural personalities are starting to come out in their interactions together.
This happened a bit quicker between Duncan and Monica because they've known each other for a while, and once Duncan realized that any reservations he had about her were misplaced, he was able to relax almost immediately. And yeah, she really cares about Duncan. I was kind of going for a big sister/little brother dynamic between them. It was also pretty fun building up her ice queen credentials at the end of chapter two and the start of this one only to have the vulnerability of Duncan at his new size help prompt her to open up (in her own way) as well.
And don't worry, Duncan helping Callie with her class will be a big focus of the next chapter, though that help will be a bit ... unconventional.
Your comment on character development in general is much appreciated! I tried to put a lot of thought into these characters, so it feels good to hear that they feel fleshed out! The same goes for your generous words on my detailing. Seeing the words mesmerizing and breathtaking associated with my work is really satisfying, so thanks for that!
Finally, I'm glad that you think this story is coming off semi-believable with it's lewdness and actions. That's nice little tightrope to walk, balancing things people with our little fetish might find interesting or alluring without making the story or its characters seem weird or implausible. That line about community standards here certainly holds true, too; this story would most certainly read differently if it was put in front of a mainstream audience, wouldn't it?
Thanks again for the review, and I encourage you to leave more as you find other stories you're into. This one was pretty motivating, especially given how expressive it is, and I'm sure other writers would feel the same!
Date: March 22 2024 5:19 PM Title: Callie vs. the Persuasive Professor
Wow, what a fantastic start! I especially enjoyed the depth of these characters.
I appreciate Duncan's resourcefulness and caution. I imagine if I were in his situation I'd react similarly--however I doubt I'd survive the fight with Bigsby! I feel he has a longing for human connection, but has difficulties trusting--I sincerely hope that Callie turns out to be someone he can trust.
Speaking of Callie, I especially love her character. She's a great gentle giantess. Well-meaning, but sometimes says or does the wrong things.
Meanwhile, Kristie is just as I imagined her based on your foreshadowing. I'm sure this was just the tip of the iceberg for the trauma she inflicted on Duncan.
I love the diverse set of characters so far, looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Hey sizeaddled!
I think you should give yourself some more credit. I'm sure you would have found a way to take on Bigsby!
You're dead on about Duncan. He had some trust issues even before shrinking, so those have obviously gotten worse since falling below three inches tall. It's really hard to not trust Callie, though, as much as he tries not to. We'll see next chapter (whenever I get around to finishing it) whether or not a some people from his old life are trustworthy (and if his previous judgment of those relationships was accurate or not).
I'm really glad Callie has been so well received so far! I like your description of her.
I tried to put a lot of thought into foreshadowing various things in the first couple of chapters, so it's great to hear that you already had an idea of who Kristie is based on the brief mention of her in chapter one. He was able to escape from Kristie not too long after the events of that dream sequence, but her impact on his psyche is pretty significant.
And hopefully I can keep up that diverse set of characters next chapter (which I'm hoping to get out relatively soon). I really don't want my characters to overlap and cover the same ground.
Thanks for taking the time to review my little story! Maybe you'll beat me and get the next chapter of Delta Phun out first!