Reviews For Elf Problems
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Reviewer: gtsfan91 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 23 2023 1:26 PM Title: Chapter 1

Great story would had love if they would have shrunk even way smaller but great idea. Santa needs to get some new workers soon.

Reviewer: breastclimber Signed [Report This]
Date: December 23 2023 4:07 AM Title: Chapter 1

Some free editing for you.   It's good to read over your work at least once or twice before posting to catch obvious mistakes.

The past tense of hang is hung, not hanged

her mom scowled her / her mom scolded her

She seemed to continent / She seemed so content

The girn on / grin

in Luan’s ass. / Luna's

As Jolly explored or more  / As Jolly explored, or more

taking her pre-meal nape / nap

No no, wait! Dno’t, I’m / Don't

broke the giant panicle / pencil

Reviewer: arselover Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 22 2023 6:47 PM Title: Chapter 1

really great story could have seen it even more cruel at some points especially with the dog which was my favorite part too. have some great holidays!! those elfs wont lol

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