[Report This]Date: October 26 2023 2:51 PM Title: Ch 1. Lost
This story is very well written akin to any NYTimes best seller and very enjoyable at that. Thank You!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the high praise! I'll have to speak to someone at the Times to get my smut in the running lol.
[Report This]Date: October 15 2023 2:55 PM Title: Ch 4. Taking What Can Never Be Returned
The bit about Myriam's eyes was genius, imo
Author's Response:
Thank you! Yeah, that was a fun idea I thought of when I first described Lanz's eyes back in chapter 1. Seemed like a good parallel to draw lol.
[Report This]Date: October 15 2023 10:04 AM Title: Ch 4. Taking What Can Never Be Returned
Damn this was one hell of a read, just discovered this story and loved every second of it. You’re writing skills are immaculate.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! That's really nice of you to say.
[Report This]Date: October 11 2023 8:17 AM Title: Ch 1. Lost
Really hope this story isn't abandoned. It’s really great.
Author's Response:
It's not, I swear! I'm sorry for the long wait. I'm more than halfway through writing chapter 4 and hope to have it up sometime this weekend.
[Report This]Date: September 10 2023 12:28 PM Title: Ch 3. Tropical Storm
Processed nutrient bricks? I thought I was reading survival romance, not survival horror! *shiver*
Thanks for bringing us another solid chapter. This was a good glimpse into the pasts for the MC's. It got a bit heavy there, but the best way to unburden the weight of the past is to share the load. Excellent use of the storm as emphasis. I'm looking forward to seeing Miriam tease out more of Lanz's past. And the opposite as well, but Lanz definitely has some serious secrets. Thanks again!
Author's Response:
Thank you. I like the term "survival romance," makes it sound so dire. Like, your trapped in Silent Hill and a bunch of cute monster girls based on your past traumas are trying to date you lol.
It's funny, I thought up the storm for the opening scene because I thought it'd be hot if they were exercising in the rain, but as I was thinking about where I wanted to go with this chapter, I realized "Wait, I can use this to serve the narrative too!"
Date: August 31 2023 3:33 PM Title: Ch 2. Hunting and Killing
Another solid chapter. I'm glad to see Lanz and Miriam working together, even if they aren't yet cooperating.
You're doing a great job of fleshing out these characters, though every development with Lanz seems to prompt a new question, or redorect an existing one. I'm more than happy to have this strung along, but I'm craving answers, especially where Lanz's scars are concerned. The one that might well be a slit throat or rope burn from a noose/garotte, and the one that could be from an autopsy / open chest proceedure are the most eye catching and intriguing, but the fact that they are far from his only scars suggests one HELL of a backstory.
I also have to comment on and approve of just how badly Lanz has caught the Horny. I look forward to the Horny landing him in increasingly boneheaded or compromising situations.
I didn't see quite as much from Miriam that I didn't see previously, though I'm disapponted that she knowingly and drastically misinterpreted the conditions of the bet. *raises index finger* Bad girl. You've been naughty, and should definitely be punished.
Ahem. Where was I? Oh, right.
You approached exposure to their respective cultures in a very interesting way. Propoganda is a very telling signal of where a society is at, and where it is heading. Learning that the tinies are culturally focused on inprovement, but weighed down by corruption adds a fair bit of context to their side of the war. The bigger society seems more emotionally driven, if the propoganda is spewing hate. It's also interesting to see one side terrified of the other, while from the opposite side of the battle lines, the opposition is seen as a nuisance well worth stomping out before they become a bigger problem.
Your pacing is great so far, and I'm looking forward to your next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you! I feel a bit like a sadist, but I'll be stringing you along for a bit. While details will come to the surface throughout the narrative, it'll be a hot minute before all the questions regarding Lanz are truly answered.
I'm glad you approve of the Horny. Lanz may be stoic and battle-hardened, but he's still a person with needs and urges (also it's a convenient device for getting more smut in this smut).
And Miriam was totally justified! It's a very reasonable misunderstanding to make, especially when she's so used to seeing him at her feet lol. Lanz should have been more specific! (I definitely don't have a boot weighing down on me as I type this)
I had fun coming up with the propaganda stuff, and I hope to continue delving deeper into each soldier's culture as they develop.
Keeping the pacing at the perfect speed is my biggest nightmare writing this story, considering how important character development is to it, so it makes me happy to know I'm handling it well so far. I think I've got it down for future chapters, but it's the big worry eating away at me at the moment. Thanks!
Date: August 27 2023 11:41 AM Title: Ch 2. Hunting and Killing
Just wanted to drop in to let you know how much I’m enjoying this story so far! I love the enemies-turned-friends/lovers trope and you write it so well! It’s really neat how you’ve fleshed out both Lanz and Miriam’s backstories a bit and how different their lives have been on opposite sides of the war. I’m so eager to see how their relationship develops but the ending of chap 2 has left me with so many questions! I wonder what secrets Lanz is hiding with his scar- my first thought was that his body has been enhanced somehow to withstand being attacked by a big (like super durability or strength) but seems a bit far fetched ^^’ Guess I’ll just have to wait and see!
Author's Response:
Thank you. The protags' pasts will continue to be expanded upon as the story goes on and will play into their developing relationship. Regarding Lanz, my aim with this chapter is to get readers asking themselves questions about him. All will be revealed in due time :)
[Report This]Date: August 27 2023 1:38 AM Title: Ch 1. Lost
This is a great start. I am really intrigued by this premise. Its very interesting to see a situation like this where 2 enemies have to work together to survive in spite of their differences in size and allegiance. I am loving the dominance and authority Miriam is projecting over Lanz. Even though the story is supposed progress into a gentle love story, I would still love to see Miriam in action against some tiny soldiers like if a tiny scouting party arrived on the island and Miriam had to dispatch them before they could radio for help or Lanz found out.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Glad you're enjoying it. To be honest, there won't be much in the way of Miriam or Lanz combatting enemy forces outside of flashbacks or references to the war in dialogue.
Date: August 20 2023 8:50 AM Title: Ch 1. Lost
Long time lurker here, this story have won my first ever review. I loved your last story and am grateful to have found an author that sticks to their stories until they have told the entire story they set out to tell. I have long since been searching for a semi-gentle story that has the backdrop of tiny-giant war. I only know of one that made it to a conclusion and that was Invasion by Size Master. Since then nothing have cropped up on my radar. I’m truly grateful you have taken this concept and ran with it, I know I can expect great things from you, great work on the first chapter, it’s very engaging already!
Author's Response:
Wow, I'm honored! Thanks for letting me be your first. I'm glad my story happens to fit exactly what you've been looking for. I already have the entire ending planned out, so I can assure you that this story will reach its conclusion. I'm doing some reorganizing regarding the middle chunk of the story, so I'm not sure yet how long it's going to end up being besides knowing it'll have seven chapters minimum. I'll do my best to live up to your expectations.
Date: August 20 2023 5:12 AM Title: Ch 1. Lost
Alright! I'm hooked!
A mutual survival story, with our main characters starting on opposite sides of a war, and suddenly forced to work together to survive.
I really like how well you describe Miriam's physicality. She is well established as the strong and capable one, but she's emotional, inexperienced, and cracks under pressure. On the flip side we have a durable, but physically unimposing man who would be extremely hard pressed to accomplish anything that requires heavy lifting, but he's calm, rational, and more intimidating than his height could suggest. Both characters have a ton of potential for development, both in terms of spinning the tales of their respective backstories (I'm really looking forward to learning more about Lanz), as well as their opinions, outlooks, and worldviews.
I fully expect to Lanz assume some sort of mentor role. Whether its keeping Miriam on task, improving her capabilities / efficiency, or even just scratching a certain itch, I expect to see him pushing his way through Miriam's obstinacy.
I'm not seeing quite how Miriam is going to impact Lanz. She's in a good position right now to be the strong back for his ideas, but I'm hoping to see her impact Lanz's outlook or worldview.
I'm loving the descriptions - both sensory descriptions of setting, events, etc. and how you've chosen to portray the MC's.
I did have something of a knee-jerk reaction to the paragraphs of exposition, but if I'm being honest, I would say you framed it well. You were succinct, you times it well with the post-crash blackout, and the information was important and presented in a succinct manner. It could have been teased out later, sure, but the brief info dump provided important context for what was about to come.
All-in-all, I would consider this a strong start to the tale. I look forward to seeing how events unfold, and how the MC's grow as people.
Author's Response:
Thank you! You've pretty much hit the nail on the head with understanding the characters, and that makes me really happy because that means I'm doing my job right so far. I'm really sorry for the two paragraphs of exposition. I didn't realize how bad it was. I was hoping that since I started in the middle of the action and had it follow afterward that it would relieve some of issues typical of exposition dumps, but I guess a lecture is still a lecture no matter how succinct it is. Fortunately, that problem shouldn't occur again because I really just needed it to introduce the world and context; I'll make the effort to make future exposition more seamless. For the characters, definitely expect their backstories to be more gradually eeked out (Lanz in particular since his will be a bit more involved than Miriam's). I'm excited to get these characters' journey written down and to see how people react to the story as it progresses.
Date: August 19 2023 8:49 PM Title: Ch 1. Lost
This is a fantastic premise, something that I've seen before in other arenas, but not here on this site. I quite enjoy the portrayal of giantesses in physically demanding occupations, particularly that of soldiers and warriors. It gives an extra edge to their already dominating lethality. You do well describing in just how much Miriam is a physical beast that possesses a massive advantage over Lanz.
Of course, it's going to be the evolving character conflict and relationship between the two that's going to carry this story. The confrontation is set up well, and you are able to effortlessly disseminate the prejudices and distrust each has for the other. I don't know how long this story is going to be, and, as such, my only criticism would have been, instead of inserting in two paragraphs of standard exposition in the middle, you gradually reveal reasons for the conflict through Lanz and Miriam.
Already, we've got some really good action, with Miriam dropping her ten-ton iron clad dumptruck atop Lanz as they crash, and smothering him in her armpit as she ties her shoes. It's a great way, not just for general giantess action, but to also establish her authority over an enemy prisoner.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I've been sitting on this premise for a while, and it feels great to finally get it started and written. Right now, this story is set to have seven chapters. I have the last three entirely planned out, it's the middle ones that I'm not certain of all the events and what order I present them in. Basically, this story's 80% figured out with some wiggle room left open in the middle. I do plan on expanding on the exposition, introducing it more naturally through dialogue and such. The two cutaway paragraphs were mainly to establish that this is a fantastical depiction of a world sort of based on reality (instead of taking place in an alternate history or straight and pure fantasy), but I understand that I could have introduced that stuff more seamlessly. I'm glad my characterization has pulled off since, as you said, that's going to be the driving force of this story.