"Thanks, Lilah. That was nice," she murdered.

I'm sorry, but this cracked me up. Given the length of this story, a few typos and such are to be expected, so don't take this as a complaint. I just found this to be really funny.

"Oh, that was nice." STAB! STAB!

But it was another line of dialogue just a bit further down that I felt encapsulated the core of this story in a nice bit of meta writing:

"Hey, no judgement! I like smut! I bet you're really good at writing smut! Like you take the time to really set up the characters so they feel like real people. And then you let things build up really slowly, so that the reader is super into the story once the sex finally happens, it's super fucking hot. That's like the best smut!"

You did a fantastic job setting up these characters, and I was invested in both of them from the very start of the story. Every line of dialogue and pretty much every piece of narrative gave us insight into Becca and Lilah, so much so that it felt like we got to know them pretty well by the end of the story.

And the source of the conflict between the two is handled really well, too. Early on, I kind of expected that Becca and Lilah never acted on their feelings because they didn't want to ruin the friendship, a tried and true trope that tends to work pretty well. I really like the way you went instead, with each of them feeling as though what they want from the other, at least sexually, would be seen so terribly by the other that they never considered acting on it.

For Becca, she makes pretty clear that she believes Lilah would hate to be viewed as a little-folk-eating sex goddess, given the big folk's naturally friendly personality and the effort she makes to look out for her tiny friend. Becks even goes so far as to say that she thought it was "disrespectful" to view Delilah like that, hence her strong effort to ignore her attraction to her roommate. This is a really good justification for a character to have never made a move on a longtime friend and potential love interest.

And Lilah is on the other side of that coin. She wants Becca to feel safe and loved, and that seems to make her feel ashamed about her deeper wants. Not only that, but Delilah was probably afraid that acting on her lust, even as a roleplay, could shatter her relationship with her beloved Becks, undoing the years of work she put in to make sure her friend was comfortable around her. Again, this makes a lot of sense.

Of course, as we move through the story, it becomes more and more obvious that their sexual desires compliment each other perfectly. It was only a matter of one of them realizing that to bring them together. This is kind of a unique angle to take on a classic theme (friends who secretly share a fetish), and it serves as a great vehicle for development of our two leading ladies.

But what really blew me away was how you "let things build up." From the beginning, this story was setting things up for later. Not only that, but there were "pieces" scattered throughout the story to let us know exactly what was going on (and at least one time to make it plausible to question Lilah's intentions). And none of it is explicitly spelled out, which I love as well. I enjoy inferring things, and this story is full of stuff to put together.

For example, it's never outright stated that Lilah planned the events of her evening with Becks (at least everything north of scrump muffin), but there are plenty of clues regarding her intentions, some obvious, others less so. There are some of the more obvious hints, such as Lilah's shady reaction about how convenient it was that she had the keyboard adapter handy, the story being open on her computer, her makeup, and the lollipop swallowing. But then there are some more obscure ones as well, such as Tifalover88 combining two things Becca clearly loves, Lilah's frustration when Becks says she's going to call it a night early, and the choice of movie for the creature feature, which again, is something Becca loves.

All of that points to Lilah trying to wow Becca both sexually and just on a personal level. She wanted Becks to see how perfect they are for each other, and she went through a good deal of effort and planning to do so.

Then there's how Lilah discovered their shared fetish in the first place. Lilah admits that Becca is one of her favorite writers on that site, but she didn't realize it until she read that last story. Sure the characters match Becca and her, but that could have easily been a coincidence, so that alone wouldn't have been enough to tip her off. But we're also told that she used to read Becca's work all the time, which ties everything together. Lilah was probably drawn to Becca's stories in the first place because she was unknowingly familiar with the writing style. Recognizing Becca and her in the strawberry shortcake story was just that last piece she needed to recognize who the author of those stories really was.

I even found myself reflecting on why exactly that dinner with Eve and Lilah turned out so terribly. At first, I just assumed it was just a case of Lilah being jealous, but honestly, it probably had more to do with her not knowing how to handle seeing someone she loved, someone she had convinced herself she couldn't truly be with, in a serious relationship with someone else. Also, Becca thought they would get along because of how considerate Lilah is toward littles, but, while I think Lilah respects littles in general and would treat them with respect, that effort to anticipate Becca's needs was really more about her feelings for her precious Becks than it was her going all out just to make a little feel comfortable. In other words, Becca didn't realize that Lilah was going out of her for her specifically, so it was surely weird for her to see Lilah not be like that for another little.

But, in terms of building, that ending was set up extremely well. The constant reference to the alcohol and glitterdust, the dialogue establishing a safeword, the way the narrative notes that Lilah probably would have regretted swallowing Becca too soon: All of this (and other little things) helps make it seem plausible that Lilah might actually eat (as in digest and all) her little friend. This adds an intensity and foreboding sense around the scene where Becca really does get swallowed. It makes sense that Becca, in her fear and intoxicated state, would forget the safeword before making the trip down her giant roommate's throat, just like it makes sense that Lilah, between the drugs, alcohol, and sexual euphoria, would forget that she didn't tell Becks that she couldn't be digested. The story kept its sweet, heartwarming core, yet still gives us that sense of darkness that comes with (at least seemingly) fatal vore. This was a really clever and unique balancing act.

Well, I've probably rambled too much already. I really appreciate how meticulously crafted this story is. It has elements in it that can make you think if you're into that, but it's really no less enjoyable if you're not looking for that sort of thing. This was really well written, and I plan to check out your other story when I get a chance.

Oh, and I saw in the other reviews that you haven't see a lot of other stories that share this particular style of nonfatal vore. I'm not sure if this quite fits your criteria, but have you read Back to Normal by Greenanon? I'm working my way through it now, and I feel like one of the characters in that story might at least approach what you're looking for.

Hot very hot. More please.

This is both really hot and really cute. Excellent job building up the tension. Lilah occasionally making sure Becca is still okay, despite having the green light to do what she wants to her, was very sweet.

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked it! I really like the idea of gentle domination, and this story and Anticipation were written from a particular frustration that I was having a hard time finding that sort of dynamic in giantess vore works. It's kind of a niche within in a niche, I suppose. It's heartening to find there appears to be an audience for it!