Date: January 10 2024 9:42 AM Title: Don’t Believe The Hype
This story is great! It's quite rare to see a black giantess rampaging through the countryside and even rarer for them to be at this size. I've been thoroughly enjoying this story and have been vivaciously waiting to see how it and your megas couple story progress.
Your descriptions are amazing, you do a great job of describing the size of things and I love the perspective switches allowing for plenty of time to get the viewpoints from those experiencing Sanctity's rampage first hand.
The only real big critique I have to offer at the moment is please split up your paragraphs more. In both this and 4,000 the paragraphs are just humongous. Almost as big as the individuals they are describing. It makes it incredibly difficult to read and is the one complaint I've constantly had throughout both tales. Other than that, very much enjoying these and looking forward to more updates.
Author's Response:
Thank you, progress stemming from the realities of 2024 make this 2018 fantasy ever challenging. Unfortunately as my titles go I am always stuck with the plays on words even after several better ones come to mind as I write along unsure if I had really come across many similar premises. This along with my over reliance on chekov's guns, macguffins and the inevitable ex machinas to come.
I have a way of writing, involving repeatedly banging the brim of my cap against the keyboard and then making sense of the gibberish and somehow I keep missing the Enter keys. I kid, I will try to break up some of these daunting dense dungheaps of text I keep enlarging from the outlines to scenarios to full on run on sentence bearing beasts. Oh, like that one. Thanks again for enjoying the stories and I will do my best to not get so carried away from the whole towering textual tomes as I relay future installments!
[Report This]Date: November 24 2023 3:58 PM Title: Don’t Believe The Hype
This is wonderfully descriptive and titillatingly detailed writing.
To expand upon what another reviewer mentioned, I find it difficult to follow paragraphs where the perspectives are muddled together. Conventionally, new paragraphs are useful when switching between 3rd person narration and an individual's 1st person perspective. Two different individuals expressing their own 1st person perspectives would each get their own paragraphs.
Looking forward to more of Sanctity's adventure!
Author's Response:
Thank you for enjoying the story.
Forgive the editing (er lack thereof) due to real world time constraints and additions sometime going a sentence at a time makes for the uneven style. Generally, I will just do one proofread/spell check before I post since I get distracted and risk losing interest if I spend too much time editing a single chapter once written. I try to give each mini scenario it's own dedicated paragraph, but I get a sloppy and forget perspectives on occasion. That combined with the concurrent mega couple story I am also writing adds to the confusion but helps if I get bogged down in one outline to skip to the other to get the creative juices flowing again, erm, so to speak.
Thanks again and I am a big fan of your stories as well, keep up the good work!
[Report This]Date: November 13 2023 12:09 AM Title: I Got 5 On It
Loving the story
[Report This]Date: October 23 2023 5:54 AM Title: Mind Playing Tricks on Me
Great story man. Been enjoying the buildup throughout the chapters, definitely in my favorites of stories.
My only critique however with the buildup is that at some parts, i personally think it’s a bit too long, And it somewhat disrupts the pacing of the story and i wanna read more of the meat and bones of the ebony giantess’ actions and the consequences of her arousal, though its great to see that stuff picking up from this chapter. I hope to read more, and seeing what happened so far from this chapter, I’m guessing it’s gonna be more intense from here on out.
But Overall, this has really great writing and I’m enjoying the story, rlly sexy things going on, definitely would love to read more with feet crushing and how her lust brings about the city and its people.
i see you got other stories, and ik you’ll prob release those in order, i hope to see this story continued/fleshed out/ & completed.
[Report This]Date: September 08 2023 12:31 PM Title: Don’t Believe The Hype
Great story, i like where its going from Ch2. Is there an eta for these chapter releases? Excited to read more soon
Author's Response:
Thx THE U. Since this is being released alongside a similar vein mega couple story, they might be a bit sporadic along with the scariest monster of all rearing its ugly head; the real world. I would say maybe every 2-3 weeks but with another journey upcoming it some may be delayed next month. Then again, I sometimes use these travels as inspiration for the stories, so double edged sword.
[Report This]Date: September 03 2023 7:20 AM Title: Let’s Get It Started
Great chapter. While I do wish some of the paragraphs were split up into a bit smaller ones, that is a personal preference. The description is on point and really a strong suit, and I’m excited to see where this may be going.
Author's Response:
Thank you, apologies for the big blocks of text as you have seen with my writing, they tend to become mini POV stories onto themselves skewing from the longer narrative or lack thereof. But I will do my best to keep things on track as the story goes off the rails.
Date: August 29 2023 1:25 PM Title: Don’t Believe The Hype
Alright, some cool stuff starting here from what I can gather. As per usual of your stories there is a lot of good detail, however I will point out that the first paragraph doesn’t feel that organic in how information is told. It feels like a checklist that needed to be recited as context. Perhaps that’s me taking nitpicks, but I do think that’s the only criticism I can think of for this chapter. It’s all very good so far besides that one point, am hoping to see more.
Author's Response:
Sorry, I am prone to falling victim to the exposition dump early on rather than sticking it in the outline as one should. The next chapters are a little more polished with the occasional run on sentence snafu, misplaced punctuation or spelling error. I am complicating these matters in my other story by purposefully switching between American and British English but that is (literally) another story.
Thx, Edg