[Report This]Date: November 16 2023 3:55 AM Title: Chapter 8
Great story so far; but mayonnaise? How about something more sweet or spicy such as Praline Sauce or Vanilla Hard Sauce, or Spicy Sweet Chili Sauce? There are a lot of condiments out there that a Dominatrix like Lena would probably enjoy more than simple mayonnaise.
Really enjoy how Laura use Rachel to pleasure herself at the beach, and the visuals of shrinking people and dropping them into a sand bucket.
Can't wait to read more, especially about Dominatrix Lena and her slave Laura's relationship. Perhaps Laura might be able to keep Rachel, or at least keep Rachel hidden away {would make quite the nice internal captive}.
Oh one question, exactly what is Laura's hair color? "Dark blonde"? "Dark brown hair in her face"? Her hair color seems mixed and quite confused, as in what the heck is "dark blonde"?
Author's Response:
Hey, thanks for your feedback, yes I see your point about the sauce, perhaps she has a more savory tooth :-)
Glad you like the varied scenes and the little snippets of detail like the sand bucket, I've got another quite different story with a sand bucket being used because I liked the concept.
Haha, dark blonde, we'll its all this season's rage. Its trending in 2023, its 'a soft, subtle shade in between natural blonde and light brown'; so there you go, you've learned something you probably never wanted to know :-)
Thank you for continuing to review my work, read/ review in detail and glad you continue to enjoy, I always appreciate reading your feedback which is honest and generally on point.
This is a prequel story to my 'Dawn of Giantess' series, check it out if you like the mixture of a Dominatrix character and a slightly more subdued and somewhat reluctant giantess https://subscribestar.adult/richardchdavies
Cheers
Rich
Date: August 28 2023 8:00 PM Title: Chapter 4
Great story.
But I think something happened when you posted chapter 4 as it repeats itself in the middle of the chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback and for identifying that issue, I've corrected Part 4 now.
Date: August 07 2023 12:35 AM Title: Chapter 1 - The Beach Part 1
Not a bad start at all. Lets see were it goes.
Author's Response:
thanks