[Report This]Date: August 31 2023 11:04 PM Title: Epilogue - After Care
I'm pretty bad at reviews but I'll say that I enjoyed this tale and it brought a lot of rare and unique aspects to the "genre." A tiny dominatrix using various tools to stay in charge despite the size difference is a nice touch, I found myself starting to wonder what exactly was going on here early in the story, and I like the reveal that the whole thing was a bizarre S&M scene using advanced technology. Overall good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for taking the time to read my short story, and that goes double for leaving a review!
A positive response is a precious thing, and given how much I admire and respect your storytelling abilities, it means all the more. I'm sitting here laughing at myself, thinking this is my "notice me Senpai" moment.
I'm glad you derived some enjoyment from my little tale. Like you said, it's an uncommon approach, but it was actually your "One Year Lease" story that loosely inspired TiFP. The idea of a tiny capable of holding their own (to some degree) against a giantess was an interesting take, and definitely an angle I wanted to see again. I'm sad to say I haven't seen much else like it. The fantasy series I've been working on for years was going no where, so I decided to branch out, challenge myself, and give something back to the community, even if in a small, niche way. So again, thank you. Thank you for your time, for your kind words, and for being an inspiration.
[Report This]Date: August 16 2023 8:23 PM Title: Epilogue - After Care
Yo, tiny dom, let's go! I love to see it.
Story was really engaging throughout. I like the use of technology, namely the arches and the Succubus' Kisses; they were a clever and creative way of allowing the tiny to assert her dominance over Olivia's whole body at once no matter where she was at.
The relationship dynamic was a lot of fun. Early on, I love the moments where Mistress got a bit overwhelmed and broke character and Olivia just being into the whole thing even when her logic told her she shouldn't be. And then later towards the reveal, Olivia switching from sub to dom was awesome and executed perfectly.
Also loved all the metaphors and wordplay you came up with to describe things (like clit and caboodle, holy shit). And overall, the smut was super hot.
Would definitely love to read anything more from you if you decide to continue writing.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! That's high praise indeed!
I'm glad the tech came across as clever and engaging, rather than distracting, which was a fear up-front. I definitely enjoyed the thought of playing with it - erm, within the context of the story, of course.
I'm also glad to hear appreciation for my wordplay! I'm no wordsmith, but I aspire to reach that lofty height; should I succeed through the medium of smut, it will be all the more pleasurable.
I definitely intend to continue writing. Eventually I'll step away from the crew, but for the time being I'm focusing on the Fab Four, their relationships, and their tech. I'm still blocking out the story, but I expect to have the first chapter of my next story up in the next 7-10 days. The ladies want to transition their projects into a business, but as with everything these days, money is a factor. As such, they will be meeting with some investors to showcase their sexy, nerdy playthings in the hope of securing some Small Investments. I'm excited to polish this pearl and expose it for your reading pleasure.
And again, thanks so much for reading, and that goes double for the feedback!
Date: August 10 2023 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 1 - First Impressions
What a positively delightful story. Extremely hot, with characters who are both sexy and adorably nerdy. I loved every minute reading this, and am looking forward to seeing more of Missy and Livy (and Claire, and Titiana, and Aidra!)'s adventures.
Author's Response:
Thanks for taking the time to comment! I'm glad it tickled your fancy! Check back around the end of the month for the start of the next story featuring the Fab Four!
[Report This]Date: August 10 2023 3:08 AM Title: Epilogue - After Care
Well, I was way off! Maybe. I don't know, it sounds like they still aren't sure exactly what was going on with Aidra.
Anyway, the big lesson I took away from this whole experience is that Oregon Trail is a terrible safeword! They clearly should have used a shorter safeword like pie or camel or ... I don't know, dysentery.
But this was a nice, wholesome ending to a story that, despite its kinkiness and occasional foray into the darker fantasies of our two main characters, really had a sweetly wholesome undertone to it throughout. Even early on, when there wasn't much clue as to why Olivia was "kidnapped" or who Mistress was, you could always feel a closeness between the two, and that connection really drew me into the story. So after all the mystery, sexual exploits, and near-death experiences, it just feels right to see them just lying in bed together and enjoying being with each other in the end.
Titty seems fun! And for the record, I think Titty Ticklers and Lotus Lickers is a fine name!
And I think you definitely made the right call to shift the earlier focus of the story on Olivia and Missy. The Aidra chapter was really good, but I don't think it would have been nearly as intense had we not had all the buildup with our two human characters. I'm a big believer in stories building toward something, and Aidra forcing/assisting Livy in swallowing Missy really felt like the culmination of everything we had read up to that point. If the focus had been on Aidra earlier, I don't think that moment would have been nearly as powerful, and Aidra's little monologue there at the end wouldn't have been so meaningful.
So yeah, obviously, great job with this! It was a joy to read!
As for your next effort, of the options you listed, I think following the "Fab Four" would hold the most interest for me. That Titty story sounds interesting as well, but from a narrative standpoint, I'm interested in seeing where this little venture goes, as well as if there are any other developments with Aidra after how Livy and Missy's night ended.
Well, whatever you decide to do, I look forward to reading it!
Author's Response:
Don't discount your Skynet theories yet! We'll have more stories in which to explore those possibilities in the near future.
I'm liking the idea of writing a couple stories following the Fab Four. I'm currently brainstorming a plan for presenting their products to potential investors. I think we could have some real fun with that, especially if at least one of the investors shows up purely on a friend's recommendation, without any foreknowledge of the products being demonstrated. I'm not sure yet if I'm going to thrust Claire into the spotlight - since she's the group mom and the only one without any page time yet - or if I want each of the ladies to take the lead presenting their own products. Either way they will definitely all get page time, and Titania is guaranteed to go off script at the worst possible moment, so expect sexy chaos in some form or another.
Thanks again for sticking with me and the girls through to the end! I look forward to presenting at least the start of the next story before the month is out.
Date: August 09 2023 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 7 - All's Fair in Love
I'm, like, 76 percent sure this is how Skynet started.
But man, this was by far the most intense chapter of the story, which is saying something. Who knew a kidnapping sex story would get crazier AFTER the big reveal that that the giant Pet and her tiny Mistress not only knew each other but were actually engaged? I certainly didn't see that coming, at least not to this level. I mean, Aidra pretty much squeezed all their whole night into one chapter!
I actually read through this chapter twice, as I was trying to pick up on what exactly Aidra was trying to accomplish here, particularly at the end of the chapter. Some stuff stuck out the first time, so I had to go back and confirm that I read a couple of things right. I think we might have crossed into the sci-fi genre (or gone deeper into it, I guess, as size changing probably qualifies by itself) and may have a fully sentient AI on our hands.
Olivia seems to notice Aidra behaving more independently than intended, but there are little signs as well. Switching from "Olivia" and "Melissa" to "Livy" and "Missy" as things became more intimate, laughing at her own joke about the gag (the first time Olivia was laughing too, so that could have been simple imitation), and all that deep, crazy shit she said about Missy being remade and Olivia's destiny (those are some very human concepts): These are all signs that Aidra has moved past her programing and is acting on want instead of command.
So what are Aidra's intentions?
I can't say for sure, but I think her goal is to make Olivia and Melissa live their true deepest desire, one that they would never experience on their own. I really don't think Olivia would willingly swallow Melissa, and she certainly wouldn't in a situation where she had to put her tiny fiancé in her mouth and consciously swallow. Likewise, as much as the idea might entice her, I don't believe a Melissa with her wits about her would go for that either. There's too much risk and danger there.
So Aidra, through her observations and likely from what she found on their browser history (that was a smart thing to note, by the way), determined that this is what they wanted (and we've seen signs of that throughout the story as well). And I do think, despite what she tells Olivia, that she's still trying to maximize the pleasure of both humans. She calls Melissa Missy to Olivia, but keeps calling Missy toy when talking to the little woman, knowing that she wants to be treated like one. Missy has also been super into everything Aidra has used her for, right up to the vore (and maybe even that, as Missy admitted that she almost let go and went down Livy's throat on her own).
I think that's important, because I don't believe Aidra meant that stuff about Missy becoming "a part of" Olivia. I believe that's just the kind of language you find when looking into vore, and all of that was said to maximize the sexual tension of the moment. That means our sexbot surely doesn't intend to let Missy actually die in Olivia's stomach and likely has a plan for extraction. Maybe it has something to do with that one safeguard that we didn't get to hear about because Aidra cut Olivia's thoughts off.
Or I've misread all that terribly, Aidra's programing couldn't distinguish between the metaphor of vore and reality, and we're in for a tragic epilogue.
Anyway, your descriptions of the trio's sexual exploits were stellar as usual, but this was the first chapter of the story where its plot and intrigue caught my attention more. It's been a good balance throughout and that's certainly true in this chapter as well, but what you did with Aidra here really took center stage.
Oh, and I really appreciate your kind words regarding my reviews. I'm a little surprised to read that you needed a confidence boost at all, though. This story has been really well written, whether it be in terms of dialogue, action, or creativity. You're really good at this, and if my ramblings have helped you realize that, then I'm glad.
I look forward to the epilogue. Hopefully it doesn't take place in a graveyard!
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks again for the fantastic and extensive feedback! In some ways I felt like both the story and I finally hit my stride with this chapter. When I was bouncing it around in my head, the Working Title was simply A.I.D.R.A., as I initially planned for her to be a larger focus. As I was writing, I could feel that Olivia and Melissa's story really needed to be told here as well, and unleashing Aidra too early felt like a disservice to their interactions. I'm glad I took the story this direction, giving Aidra her time to shine after our lovely ladies had their own revelations.
Is Aidra the start of Skynet? I am programmed to answer in the negative. Could she be some day? Well, if her goal is to follow the Chinese curse and give us what we wish for, I may just be on board for that.
All joking aside, I wanted to give another sincere thanks for your feedback and support. Self-doubt isn't always logical, or based on empirical evidence. I used to play D&D as the forever DM, but no matter how well a session felt like it went in the moment, when the session ended imposter syndrome kicked in, and I was second-guessing every decision and roll of the die. Moving into this genre, on what is likely the premiere site for size stories, was a nerve-wracking step. Hearing that someone enjoyed the story, and seeing the interpretation of the hints and foreshadowing and nuance and subtext - it really hits hard, in a good way.
That being said, I'm always open for constructive criticism. If something feels off or weird, I'd love to hear about it, so I can figure out how to improve moving forward. That being said, no one is under any obligation to respond in any way, and the fact you took the time to offer me so much of your insight really means a lot.
So, to cut through my verbosity, what I meant to say is thank you once again, and I am open to any suggestions for which direction I should take the content of my next story. Cheers!
[Report This]Date: August 06 2023 7:56 PM Title: Chapter 6 - Sweet Release
I thought this chapter was very much a cleverly written one.
I really like how the return of Livy's memories was handled. Throughout this story, her sense of familiarity with Missy was mostly implied through her intense attraction to the little domme and her gradual acceptance and building comfort with her situation, with only the occasional thought about how familiar Missy giving the reader more measured direction as to the true nature of their relationship. So it only made sense that we would see her memories returning before we're told that's the case.
Olivia shouting Missy's actual name in an intense sexual rant is really good use of the "show, don't tell' writing philosophy. We're told that she had a "realization" just a couple of paragraphs before, but it isn't until she says that name (and the way that she uses it) that we're clued in to the revival of Pet's memories and just how she feels about the tiny woman in her vagina. Then, we're told some of the details of the relationship between the two in a nice blend of narrative and dialogue. And even then, that's handled in a non-expositional manner, engaging the reader by relaying details somewhat gradually and in a way that almost assumes we knew the information the whole time.
I really enjoy stories that ask their readers to infer things and piece information together, and this one has done that exceptionally well, especially for one that, at least on the surface, is more focused on smut than plot. This has been really surprising and much appreciated.
The way you approached the insertion part of this chapter was also pretty smart, I thought. I've been praising your descriptions so far in this story (as I should have!), but it was that particular description's organization that really impressed me here. When Missy first meets Livy's lower lips, we become very familiar with the giant sex through Melissa's eyes (and arm), thanks to a detailed, thorough description that doesn't overstay its welcome. Then, Olivia takes her away for some more fun with her mouth. The earlier tease is then finally paid off when we get straight to brass tax, not needing all of those details told to us again once the real action starts. This allowed for the reader to easily envision where Missy was going while having the benefit of focusing much more on the action and our characters reaction to it. I feel like spacing things out like this really maximized the intensity of the scene, building us up with an intricate tease, then throwing us right into the thick of it.
And, as has been a growing trend in this story, I absolutely love the way that Olivia casually dominates Missy with her body. The brief mention of her sitting up for the first time and Missy tumbling between her legs, almost like an afterthought, really drives home the casualness of the act, as does the tiny woman's struggle to stand on her body every time the giant woman laughs. The occasional playful taunts from Livy, by contrast, serve to really set a particular mood to the scene. These two seemingly contradicting reactions are balanced out pretty well in this story (and particularly in this chapter) impressively.
As for the story itself, I'm glad I was right about Olivia and Mistress's relationship. The chemistry between these two characters is adorable, and they seem like a really fun couple. I had a feeling Livy was responsible for Aidra, but that was more of a guess than a deduction, so I kept that to myself. When the giantess gave the sexbot a command and said command was followed, however, that confirmed pretty much everything I had thought about Livy, Missy, and Aidra up to that point (and this was also a really subtle and clever way of cluing the reader in on the coming reveal).
I have to admit, the business aspect of this I didn't see coming. That was a nice little twist to the story. Also, we heard a couple of new names dropped during that bit of dialogue. I'm wondering if we'll possibly get to meet these other characters at some point in the future or if they were brought up simply as an exercise in worldbuilding.
Overall, this was a phenomenal chapter in a phenomenal story. I'm almost sad to see it coming to an end, but I'm pretty excited to see what you have mind to close this one out!
Author's Response:
Thank you again for your kind words and considerate feedback! I can only hope the conclusion continues to tickle your fancy.
This story was definitely a step outside my wheelhouse, and outside my comfort zone. I've written a few fantasy stories I've shared with friends, but this is my first time writing anything of a lewd nature, or anything pertaining to macro/microphilia. Your feedback has given me the confidence to keep bumbling forward. I'm going to be busy over the next few weeks, but I fully expect I'll be back to contribute again. If you see a second story from me, you can take pride in the fact that whenever I'm asked where I got the confidence to take another shot, I can say with respect and appreciation that It Was Me.
[Report This]Date: August 03 2023 3:31 AM Title: Chapter 5 - The Cherry on Top
Man, I was looking forward to this chapter, but it turned out even better than I expected!
You mentioned being concerned about your descriptions landing. Well, I would think you can put those concerns to bed. That mouth play description was incredible! I kind of thought that Mistress was a bit big for things to get too intense (based on what I've read so far, I'm guessing that she's about 5-6 inches tall?), but you absolutely proved me wrong.
That undressing was intense, and your description of it was as precise as Olivia's tongue. That bit where Olivia sucked Mistress right out of her corset played particularly vivid in my mind as I read it. I'm legitimately impressed with the level of detail and personality you put into this whole scene and without making the paragraphs seem the least bit cumbersome.
And speaking of personality, between the narrative using a lot of food references in a playful way and letting the reader see a lot more of Olivia's direct thoughts really sold this. Not to mention that bit of playfulness on her part just before, with her licking her lips and "mmmmming" at Mistress, as well as the tiny redhead's reaction. All of it was perfect.
Looking at the bigger picture, it was pretty awesome to see Olivia take control of the situation (and with only her tongue). It's interesting how enthusiastically she went along with this, even being willing to be choke a bit in order to take control and give Mistress "the best tongue lashing of her life." She didn't even try to exploit or leverage the situation in the slightest. She went all in on this the moment she decided that Mistress looked good enough to eat.
I also think Mistress's time was about building trust. She assumed some risk, even with the safety precautions, by climbing into Olivia's mouth, and Olivia was well aware of that, as she was worried about having another life in her mouth. I don't want to say that this was a test, necessarily, but I don't think it's a coincidence that only now is Olivia about to get her restraints loosened and have some freedom to handle Mistress. It's almost like Olivia proved that she could be trusted with more freedom.
Oh, and I'm back to thinking that these two know each other and that the drugs Olivia was given/took somehow blurred her memory a bit. She's mentioned her girlfriend a couple of times, and I wouldn't be shocked if Mistress turned out to be her and that this whole thing is just a kinky way to spice things up in the bedroom. I could be wrong, but the more I read, the more confident I get that this is the case.
Anyway, in case you couldn't, I really liked this chapter. I look forward to seeing what happens when Olivia gets her hands on her tiny domme!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for your continued feedback and encouragement! I'm glad this chapter landed so well.
I was torn on whether or not to give an exact value for Misstress' height, and decided to picture her as 4 inches when I write, and practice conveying that through contextual clues. I guess I landed somewhere in that ballpark.
I'm really enjoying the process of exploring Olivia's growing awareness of her yet-unrealized tastes in a partner, as explored through the guidance of a tiny sex toy- guide! I meant guide!
I'm glad there's enough intrigue for you to do some speculating on the setting, and thanks for letting me know just how my hints and foreshadowing are landing. I hope you are as satisfied with the answers as our cast when they finally cum!
Thanks again for your support, and I hope you enjoy the next chapter when it's uploaded!
[Report This]Date: August 01 2023 8:27 AM Title: Chapter 4 - The Other Side of the Coin
This story is pretty great so far!
The role reversal of a tiny training a big to be an obedient "pet" is a nice angle for a story. It's pretty cool to see our Mistress take charge and be the dominant one. It also makes the casual ways that Olivia's size overwhelms the little redhead really stand out. It's like the fact that our kidnapped big can still buck off or trap Mistress between her toes despite being restrained involuntarily shows off the more primal power that comes with the size difference between the two.
The games and punishments have been pretty fun so far, too. Very creative, maybe not so much in the ideas themselves but in their execution, which is a good thing. It's all about how the characters act and respond to one another's actions that makes or breaks a scene, and both characters really come alive in different ways during the meat of each chapter.
You also describe things really well. Your descriptions aren't too wordy and your paragraphs are fairly crisp, but I have a really clear picture in my head of the room (well, the part that's lit, anyway), the apparatus holding Olivia up, and the characters themselves. I also really like some of the similes you use, such as comparing Olivia to a ceiling when she's elevated or her wet pussy to a leaking motel faucet.
Olivia's struggle between enjoying Mistress's training and being scared/angry/concerned about her situation is what really makes this story, though. Seeing her seem to lose herself more to the pleasures she feels during these games and punishments opens things up from both a fetish perspective and a narrative one as well.
And of course, the intrigue with this story really draws you in. How exactly did Olivia end up in this situation? With her faulty memory and the last thing she did remember being that she was waiting for something or someone, I was thinking that maybe she had set this up herself and that one of those drugs she was given had somehow wiped part of her memory or something. But the way Mistress talks in this chapter about the research she did into Olivia, it sounds more like she was stalked and chosen, which only raises more questions.
Then there's the fact that it looks like Mistress shrunk herself, rather than her being naturally tiny. Why did she do that? I mean, she's clearly into being tiny, at least she is when she's around someone she finds as attractive as Olivia, but is there a deeper, more important reason? This is a lot of trouble to go through just to satisfy a kink, after all.
Anyway, I really enjoyed the story so far, and this last chapter was really intense! From the end notes, it looks like the next chapter is going to be right up my ally as well, so I'm looking forward to it.
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for taking the time to respond! I'm blown away by the feedback!
I'm glad to see my writing style is gelling with at least some of the readers on this site, and I'm doubly glad my descriptions are landing. Most of all, I'm glad the content is something readers can get behind, and I hope I can continue to provide that moving forward. I was definitely concerned about upending the typical power dynamic between Big and small, but I think I'm approaching it in a way that most of us can enjoy.
Thank you again for reading, and yet again for responding. The encouragement is definitely pushing me to keep writing with gusto!