[Report This]Date: August 06 2023 5:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
I read the story in one night, and it was very enjoyable. I liked how the chapters would end with "Spin spin spin" setting up the next chapter.
I loved the thorough description of what the characters were wearing, even down to how the make up was done. That was so nice to read, and it showed real caring about the world that you are creating. I liked the detail of the girls having to attend all those school meetings of what not to do to an individual with ARSD. It felt very relatable as we've all had to attend those antibullying assemblies though there weren't bullies in my school.
In the beginning, the forgiveness and quickness to trust his tormenters felt a bit unrealistic. It might've been better if they met one week, he was shrunk around them next week, and nothing happened, then trusted them, only for them to be descieving him the whole time.
All in all, a great story!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for your review! I agree, the speed of going from meeting them again to trusting them does read a little weird, I should've done more to specify that it wasn't exactly that he forgave them in full, moreso that he wasn't trying to upset Luke and cause drama. He's a little bit of a pushover lol. But I agree, and if I return to this story to improve things a little, I'll be sure to touch on some of that!
[Report This]Date: August 03 2023 3:46 AM Title: Chapter 1
I just wanted to say that this was a great story, and I'm saying that as someone that generally isn't super into the whole torment thing. However, your descriptions were on point and the way you write characters gives them a personal feel, and that kept me invested throughout the story.
I know there were people who were hoping that Kyle didn't make it through the night (and I think those people should be able to read stories that satisfy them as well), but I really liked the way you handled the ending. Throughout the story, I found myself really wanting Kyle to find some happiness (usually in these kinds of stories I'm not too interested in the tiny character and kind of tune out) and hoping for some karma to strike the titular mean girls. I think you nailed the more important half of that and in a really gratifying way, especially after I went back and read the first part of this series. This dude went through A LOT, and the payoff at the end of this one was that much sweeter because of it.
I also think mixing up happy and unhappy endings is a good way to keep your stories interesting. If every main character meets a brutal end, well, that just gets redundant. I've read some of you unaware stories, and based on those endings, I kind of expected Kyle to meet an unfortunate end. Heather gave me some hope, though I wasn't sure if she would stay nice or give into peer pressure and her inner desires to become the worst of them. I think you found a happy medium there, by the way.
Anyway, I figured I should let you know that I liked this story and share a few thoughts. I look forward to seeing more from you!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the super in depth review. I definitely want to subvert some expectations, as considering the nature of the website, most of the more violent and torturous stories on here are purely for smut and don't necessarily intend on keeping the tiny alive. I wrestled with the idea of ending the story on a negative note, but it just felt like seeing someone like Kyle make it through such experiences and come out alive would be a unique touch that was oddly endearing. Won't be the typical ending for my stories since I write on the more violent side, but it was really refreshing to end such a torturous series on such a positive note.
Again, thank you so much for the review and the depth you put in. Thank you for reading my stories!
[Report This]Date: August 02 2023 9:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
Outstanding! you are rapidly becoming one of my favorite authors. I can't offer any constructive criticism as how do you critique perfection?
You are very good at painting a scene, describing situations and putting the reader in the stories. I wish my own stories were as well written as yours.
It is evident you either put a lot of time into editing or you are a natural writer as your work is always well polished.
Plot wise I've very much enjoyed this series. Certain touches and details lead me to believe we have similar tastes. I will continue to follow and encourage your work and I look forward to seeing more in the future!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the review! I wouldn't say my work is perfection but it means a lot that you consider it so. I hope I can continue to live up to that description.
Date: August 01 2023 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
In response to your reply to my review since I can't directly respond: No worries haha. I have an alternate ending in my head already that is kinda fun and feels like it fits with the characters anyway lol so I can enjoy that plus your continuation
Date: August 01 2023 4:03 PM Title: Chapter 10
Loved it! Kinda wish he wasn't being rescued haha. Excellent chapter and build up to the swallow
Author's Response:
I know, such is the problem with wanting to leave a series open for continuation haha. Thank you so much for the review!
[Report This]Date: July 29 2023 10:44 AM Title: Chapter 8
I’m almost impressed he survived Synthia, I’m intrigued what the other girls have planned.
Date: July 29 2023 5:42 AM Title: Chapter 1
I feel like this is gonna.end with Luke having sex with Heather after she eats him and none of them remember cause they're all drunk
Date: July 26 2023 5:50 AM Title: Chapter 7
I just noticed the vore tag. It's over for him huh
Author's Response:
You'll have to wait and see... anything can happen!
[Report This]Date: July 26 2023 5:45 AM Title: Chapter 7
Am I tripping or did they get much worse lol they seemed to actually feel a lil bit sorry for him by the time they were done with him before
Author's Response:
Seems like being in college changed them for the worse. Or maybe Cynthia was more concerned with saving her own hide back then. Thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: July 25 2023 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 7
I thought this was just gonna be porn but it turned out to be porn with a plot. The scenarios Kyle is being put into are so hot too, I can't get the foot chapter out of my head prob my favorite so far. Love the story but I hate the girls so damn much like wow they are such terrible people bravo to you and your writing skills Arthur. Heather seems alright but I'll have to wait to see if that remains the case she seems to flip-flop between her sympathy for Kyle and her desires and with the girl's manipulation I don't have much hope. And finally Kyle, my god I feel bad for the dude but fuck me if the situations he's put through aren't hot. He already seems like he has some PTSD and has trust issues now, I can't imagine his mental state will be all that put together by the end of this. Luke seems like a real one tho wish he wasn't such a shit judge of character, can't imagine kyle putting much trust in him after this. No idea where you're gonna take this story but I look forward to it.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the in depth review! Really appreciate the effort you put into this. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story.
Date: July 19 2023 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
Man I feel bad for poor Kyle lmao, but great story. Hope my man gets some happiness
Author's Response:
Lol thank you for the review, Kyle's fate is a wait and see ;)
[Report This]Date: July 18 2023 10:04 PM Title: Chapter 1
Okay, chapters are awesome!! This is a perfect sequel, but I still am home for that giantess teacher “in between quel” lol hope it’s full of Ms Johnson’s phat ass 🥵🍑🔥… and this current story has a lot of booty too 😁
Author's Response: There's going to be a lot of it in a future chapter, maybe even too much lol. Thank you so much for your review!
[Report This]Date: July 18 2023 2:01 AM Title: Chapter 6
Glad this story was continued :) loved the first story and enjoying this one so far as well. Wondering what Kyle's chances of surviving the night are.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. We'll have to see what the girls have in store for him.