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Reviewer: 2inch Signed [Report This]
Date: August 06 2023 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 1

I read this story after the college one, You've really improved as a writer, not to say that this story is bad, because it's great.  But there is so much more detail in the college one.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much! I've been refreshing my stories to post on DeviantArt and I agree, there's a sharp difference lol. I appreciate the review!

Reviewer: Peterparker Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 11 2023 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 1

Okay… Cynthia and her large and in charge ass was amazing. Now.. we need a spin off with Ms. Johnson and her phat teacher ass. Maybe the teachers share him next? 



Author's Response:

I've got a potential sequel for this piece on the long-term docket, so wait and see, just might happen!

Reviewer: Qwajuu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 10 2023 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 1

Chapters 7 and 8 were my fav. Your story is very well done. I had a great time reading it. 



Author's Response:

I really appreciate the kind words!

Reviewer: Aimtriton Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 10 2023 11:07 PM Title: Chapter 1

Outstanding story! 10/10

I love how playful and sadistic the "mean girls" were as well as how creative they were in torturing the tiny.

I really hope Kyle ends up at their mercy again.

It was very well written, structured and paced.

I don't have any negative criticism, just some suggestions/ideas. 

1. Verbal Degradation: I felt the story could have used more verbal cruelty. The Mean girls could have bullied Kyle more, made more jokes at his expense and laughed at his suffering more. 

2. Don't be afraid to kill a tiny:  I expected this story to end with Ms. Johnson making sure Kyle was alive and awake, thanking Cynthia, taking a long drag off her cigarette, winking at Cynthia and then casually swallowing Kyle whole to Cynthia's shock and amusement. You are so good at writing tiny torment, I'd love to see what you do with a couple dozen, hundred or even thousand ASD victims at the mercy of your sadistic characters.

3. Public Humiliation: A quick selfie of Kyle plastered to the bottom of a breast or in a pool of cum on Vic tongue and posted to insta would have ensured Kyles total humiliation. Or maybe have Vic flash her tongue at Cynthia to show of Kyle soaked in cum. Maybe they run into another group of girls and they all share a laugh at Kyle's fate and maybe exchange torment ideas.



Author's Response:

First off, wow, I really appreciate such detailed feedback. It helps a lot for writing future stories.

Secondly, you're right about all those things, and I intend to improve upon those details as much as I can. Intending on making a sequel to this piece in the long-term, so your feedback is invaluable.

Thank you so much for the review.

Reviewer: DrTritium Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 10 2023 6:20 PM Title: Chapter 5

This is a fun romp. Each chapter has a fun arc.

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