Date: July 15 2023 12:33 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
I personally am satisfied so far you have brought a story that is very intriguing and can keep me interested for the next chapter. Great job with doing this as it is a great story with vore and sadistic tendencies intertwined within. There are some writers that only get to the vore without the build up which there is a place for those in our community there is also a place for writers such as yourself that brings a story. Don't get discouraged as you are one of the great writers we have here.
Author's Response:
Well I really appreciate that :)
On a positive note, I'm literally posting the next chapter right now lmao. Just finished it!
[Report This]Date: July 14 2023 4:36 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Dilemma
This is very interesting to read into Blaire’s family and her actions when she left. Although she tries to come across as innocent, she most definitely has a past she is hiding. I’m sure we will be reading more about her family and their enterprise. I can just imagine who their connections are and if they intertwine with Avaramix and his dark organization.
Although Jacob is an evil character in his own right, he does show a little humanity for Blaire. Normally individuals with a narcissistic personality such as Jacob would not show empathy toward anyone. I can understand he may also have a protective attribute toward Blaire that is hard for him to overcome.
During their initial argument between Blaire and Charles at the food wagon I sensed Jacob would utilize his ability to eliminate the threat Charles made about contacting her family. I just wonder what he would do with the Charles after, maybe give him to Blaire without her knowledge. Maybe place him in her food or something that would have her eating him. There could be some ramifications for doing something like that though as there has to be some form of paper trail of him being in Valdez and none of him leaving.
It will be interesting to see how he plans to handle the situation.
Although in a perverse sort of way it is nice to see Jinshin and Deita making amends.
Ben’s request totally caught me off guard, I was not expecting this. Now I am intrigued as to how Jinshin handles this dilemma, will she hold to her promise earlier and kill him or will she find a way to keep him? Interesting turn of events to say the least. I guess we will see how she really feels about him as it seems she has been put on the spot.
As always you have brought another great chapter that keeps the reader on edge.
Looking forward to the next chapter and where this journey takes us.
Author's Response:
As I get closer to chapter 13 I become increasingly excited. While my first story ever, I'm really hoping the story shows to be on par. I'm hoping my readers are satisfied so far, it's hard to tell sometimes.
[Report This]Date: July 13 2023 1:52 AM Title: Chapter 9 - Transition
This was a great transition piece,
Jinshin and Ben are becoming my favorite so far among the characters in this story. Although we are early in the story, I feel they are creating a connection. Looking forward to seeing this evolve.
You can feel the tension in the room between Deita and Jinshin. You can since there is some history, we are not fully aware of yet. Hopefully we can delve into that later as we move through the story. I get the feeling there may be more to Jinshin just cherishing Ben because he was a gift. This shows how she defends him when Deita portrays her perverted side and asks for him to be given to her.
Jinshin Defends Ben in a manner you would not expect for someone who just cherishes something just because of it being a gift. I sense he is more than a gift to her hopefully, we can see how this manifests itself through the upcoming chapters.
It is interesting to see the two side by side interacting with Avaramix Jinshin is most definitely more respectful in her tone calling him “Master” (possibly her culture) than Deita is by her calling him by his name. Although they both are respectful in their demeanor towards Avaramix Jinshin just comes across as meeker.
I was pleasantly enlightened by the mention of experiments resuming. This is a turn in the story I was not expecting but am excited for.
Deita’s reaction to the news was what I was expecting due to her personality and there seems to be a rift forming there between her and Jinshin if the apology is not accepted as I don’t expect it to be.
Taking her anger out on Liz just solidifies the Sadistic personality Deita has and why I don’t think there will be any forgiveness toward Jinshin anytime soon. Deita is a self-centered individual and will try anything in her power to take control and punish those she feels has wronged her.
I get the feeling we may see Ben and Liz meeting up in the future. I’m just hoping he takes the kindness Jinshin is showing him to heart and allows there to be a relationship and not ruin it in any way. We will see how this works out.
Great chapter and looking forward to the next one.
Author's Response:
"I was pleasantly enlightened by the mention of experiments resuming. This is a turn in the story I was not expecting but am excited for."
I'm glad to hear it. The story will be taking necessary evolutions because I want to start expanding on the premises established in this first volume. I've spent time meticulously deciding how to push forward each character, and what sorts of personalities would be most intriguing as a reader. I'm trying very hard to take this story seriously, despite some of my ideas for later on potentially being a bit out of the realm of realism, there's so much I look forward to unveiling as the story resumes.
I've chosen to highlight more scenes to expand on Deita and Jinshin, and feel as if I've accomplished this well for the first volume. Now we will be shifting back to Blaire and Jacob, to get their side of things. I'm very much looking forward to releasing the last chapter of the first volume.
Date: July 12 2023 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Benjamin
Finally got around to reading this chapter! Honestly the only kind of gentle content I like is when a cruel giantess is gentle to only one tiny man (which also makes it really the only F/m stuff I like lol) so this definitely fit right into that!
Author's Response:
Agreed, which is why Jinahin is my favorite character personally lol. I love a gentle, cruel woman. :)
[Report This]Date: July 12 2023 4:02 AM Title: Chapter 8 - Assimilation
What a great chapter, I enjoyed learning about Jinshin’s past.
I was at first thinking Ben, why are you going to try and run? Then it occurred to me that he needed to at least try once. I also got the feeling she was prepared and expecting him to run at least once. This gave her the opportunity to show mercy and earn just a little trust from Ben. She is a smart woman and understands that even though she may not know what she will do with him now, but she knows that there will be a time she can use him to her advantage in the future.
I got shivers when I was reading the portion of his discovery on the floor and how she circled him with her legs as she sat down enlightening him with a glimpse of her past. I am immensely enjoying the way the chapters in this story are flowing such as harshness coupled with bouts of calming. This seems to not overwhelm the reader with constant harsh behavior.
I am catching myself wanting to know more about each character. This I know is because of how you are interspersing each character’s story into the chapters.
The transition to Deita and Liz was one of those moments where while reading the author changes tone and you are taken to another world altogether. This is a great experience for the reader as you are left with wanting more from Jinshin and Ben I recall many great books and or movies that do that as well, you are like wait a minute I want to know more about their story and then you get wrapped up in Deita and Liz’s story quickly. This, I must say, is a great feature in your story writing as the reader doesn’t get wrapped up in just one aspect of the story and forget or lose interest in the other characters. It keeps you focused on the greater story rather than just the individual characters.
You can see how Liz is blaming herself for the situation she has been thrown into. This is a sad mechanism, a victim trying to understand why they are in the situation they are in. It seems people first blame themselves thinking that it must have been something they did or something they should have done differently that got them here. We all know that there is evil in this world, and it isn’t necessarily the victim the one to blame.
Although we already knew Deita was perverted and sadistic this chapter shows the reader the stark difference between Deita and Jinshin. How callous and uncaring she is with Liz shows her true feelings toward the victims she is dealing with.
This is a great set up for the next time we read about Deita and Liz as neither knows that they are destined to be together however long Deita determines.
Great chapter to this story, I like the soft then stark difference between characters it keeps the reader wanting more.
Author's Response:
Yeah the difference between Jinshin and Deitas personalities is immense. Very much 2 separate people in entirely different ways.
Poor Liz, she'll be receiving some unfortunate news once Deita learns that Liz is indeed hers now lol.
As we draw closer to the end of volume 1, a lot of changes will be settling into the lives of my characters.
Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: July 11 2023 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 7 - Benjamin
Again, very well written chapter. There is a lot of depth to work through in this story that makes the reader stay engaged.
I am pleased that you are giving us an insight if not just a glimpse into the life of Jinshin. I am also pleasantly surprised to see her stern but somewhat respectful attitude toward Ben, although she is not a pushover but will not harm him unnecessarily.
There were multiple teasers through other chapters as to what her personality would be although those were in social situations. Her interactions with others seemed to be more calming in nature. As we know there are those individuals in life that may come across as calm and respectful in social situations but in private, they are evil straight to the core of their being. I am happy to see she doesn't disappoint and is calm although firm with Ben.
Jinshin comes across as a realist and I like how she set the ground rules at the start. It is nice to have a character that is somewhat amiable toward their victim.
Life threw Ben a Soup Sandwich, and he deserves to be angry, but I'm rooting for him to be the smart guy Jinshin thinks he is and take this as an opportunity to make this horrible situation he was thrust into and make the best of it. I really would like to see him create a relationship that is livable with Jinshin.
I'm looking forward to following their story in upcoming chapters and to see if there may be new characters that are even more kind to their victims.
I like stories where you have dimension in the characters and their environment rather than just short and to the point although those kinds of stories do have their place this story carries you through an immersive world you can look forward to reading multiple times.
I am not the type of person that watches movies or read books more than once as I seem to pick up on the plot early and lose interest after the movie or book is done. I would say at this point you have not disappointed and have brought a story that can hold its reader captivated for the next chapter. There are only five writers including yourself in all the sites I am members of that have piqued my interest to anticipate your next upload of a new chapter. Kudos to you for that!! 😊
As always I am looking forward to reading the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Wow. Words can't describe how much that compliment means to me. Thank you!
Your breakdown couldn't be more perfect. It makes me feel my writing abilities have panned out how I was hoping they would.
I'll have to try even harder to write a story that will exceed the expectations of my writers. This story is important to me, and I'll do everything in my power to deliver the best.
Thank you so much for reading, it's been a joy to entertain my audience!
[Report This]Date: July 10 2023 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Jacob's Nightmares: Camilla's Cupcake
Yes, must agree this chapter took a dark turn although I was expecting it from the teasing in the previous chapters. And this gives us a better understanding of what is to come in future chapters.
It is very interesting learning about the characters in each of the chapters. I really admire how you keep the victims human although they are not necessarily treated as such. Understanding their life prior to shrinking and their hopes and dreams thwarted by these evil individuals who either purchased or gifted them is very important for the reader to have empathy for the victim and I personally feel is what helps set the story apart and makes it more relatable. I feel it is important as a reader to relate in some small way with the characters even if it is just their hopes and dreams and life throwing roadblocks their way. Some in Alicia's case and others I assuming in upcoming chapters the roadblocks were more crashes that ended their life.
The nightmare Jacob seems to have definitely is teasing us to his ability of see what his victims fate has become. If I'm correct we were also teased as to possibly finding out how and who cursed him with these powers. With the mass shrinking of individuals it would be hard for Jacob to actually dream about each of his victims so not sure how that would flush out in a story setting. I'm sure it would actually drive a person crazy or in this case more crazy than he already is. I'm wondering if it is only characters he relates to more closely that he would dream about their fate and if this is the case then that would help with the hundreds and potencial thousands that will become victims of this human tracking world we find ourselves in.
I'm interested to see who will be more of a forgiving and caring owner of the victim in future chapters. I'm assuming there has to be at least one that will show sympathy toward their shrunken person.
I could go on and on with how this story brings multiple emotions into play that keeps the reader engaged and looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Probably my favorite review now. Great breakdown. This has made me more confident that I can express a story element and a reader is able to notice it.
That being said, I will spare any more details. I want to avoid spoilers, and I have very grand plans for this story.
Thank you so much for your input! I'm starting to look forward to your feedback quite a bit lol.
[Report This]Date: July 09 2023 7:55 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
I've caught up with the story and do have to say I am very much liking it so far. The characters don't just feel like they're placed there for plots sake, they have their own interests and agendas; points of self satisfaction in Deita's case. Safe to say, thus far, she's actually my favorite character. In the case of Jacob however, those thoughts have been shown in previous reviews. A true piece of work that, while being a main character, has no pleasant future in store for them. At least in my eyes. He's well past that point of return even if he tries to do right. Several millions of dollars too late as it were.
Very much looking forward to future chapters!
Author's Response:
At this point I may like to reveal that my inspiration for Jacob and this story came from Better Call Saul and Breaking Bad lol. Jacob has a long, arduous road ahead of him.
Your comment about my characters have their own plots and agendas, that's a big compliment, thank you so much. I'm very much aiming for a world where the characters feel real with their goals, livelihood and outcomes. Nobody is safe, not in a world like this.
Liz for instance, there was no reason Jacob had to shrunk her, but he did it anyways. The same goes for future characters down the road as you'll soon seen.
[Report This]Date: July 09 2023 5:39 AM Title: Chapter 5 - 6:00PM
Great Story and plotlines. I was curious if we were going to learn more about Avaramix. I'm glad we were able to peak in on their world if just a little. Now we have three victims to follow and and looking forward to understanding the dynamic of Jinshin's personality and how she will treat our newest victim. This new development definitely hints of some possible concerns between Jinshin and Deita and how she will react to the knowledge she was betrayed by Jinshin telling Avaramix about her escapades with Liz. The dynamics between the characters are intriguing as we move forward through the story. There is so much potential in developing each character and their personalities and past that it keeps you interested moving forward. Great job on how you continue to develop ambience of the area surrounding our current characters.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
It's early still, but Jinshin and Deita do have a past. I really love seeing these breakdowns from you guys because it lets me know if my writing abilities are going in the right direction or not, and I think in this case it is! I still have a few more main characters to introduce, but at this time, it may not be until the second volume of this series. I am planning to have 12-13 chapters per volume, each volume progressing the storyline in different ways. While Blaire is the first character introduced, her actual purpose in this story may not showcase itself until the later end of the second volume, same for Deita and Jinshin.
I'm trying to finish the next chapter before I leave for camping, it's half done already I should make it in time. It's a full chapter to showcase the fate of Alicia after being purchased by Camilla. While I had fun with Deita and Liz, this coming chapter will take a different turn, which for spoilers I'll keep to myself.
Thanks for the great feedback, it's very appreciated!
[Report This]Date: July 08 2023 9:27 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
And I hope the video I linked in the first one was interesting. And what were your thought on it? If you have discord we could have a full conversation on the server.
Author's Response:
It was pretty interesting, I skimmed through the whole thing at different parts. Admittedly I'm more into flip-flops or barefeet, or anything that shows most of the foot. Not as into footwear, unless its entrapment, in which I usually prefer flats with no socks. Though I know heels are immensely popular in the community so I fitted Deita with such. It'll be an important detail in a future chapter.
[Report This]Date: July 08 2023 7:24 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Deita's Desires
Considering about the crowd thing, and with how cruel things could be getting, some cult or club or rich couple could ask instead fir the shrinking as a service, they bring some set people and have them shrunk. The cult could set up a comparably small compound for the shrunken followers, with tiers of tinies, while the nomral/big leaders get to enjoy them. They might even be delusional enough to think their in legit heaven or paradise(plus with the right setup they could still do some real work and bring in money). Or in a terrarium. Or just straining them out in some garden or forest, then hunt or have an enter tiny tribe/village setup that worships them, mostly normal hiking/woods cloths combined with Sorel Cate the Great Wedges is a good aesthetic.
And in the couple(s) idea, one wants so be small, or got tricked by one or twi others into thinking/agreeing to it, and they now have the shrunken person. Maybe it also to permanently disappear, maybe it so they are permanently disappeared.
Author's Response:
This reminds me of a game with a similar system, it's given me some ideas for later in the story. Thank you!
And thanks for reading :)
[Report This]Date: July 08 2023 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Deita's Desires
Now we are starting to see the action. Deita sure has an evil streak in her and this allows us to delve into her mind and understand her much better. I really enjoy how you bring out each character's personality. I'm interested in following Liz through her journey of the underworld. I am interested in where we are at with Alicia & Camilla and flushing out their world and where they are at. You have a great concept here and I'm intrigued.
Author's Response:
I'm really happy you liked it! I also love this concept and I have many ideas in mind. Liz will be a recurring character unlike most of the victims in this story, she serves a purpose later in the story.
Next chapter will be brief filler and context, and the 6th chapter will shift back to Alicia's fate in the hands of beatty Camilla, very excited!
[Report This]Date: July 07 2023 7:02 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Aw man, I feel bad for Liz, she was too sweet to be done like that.
With that being said, you've really nailed the cruel side of things if you have me feeling that way about a character, especially since I've developed a special hatred for Jacob too. He's irredeemable in my eyes, he's only just met Blaire but he gets angrier at the thought of her getting trafficked than the cook he's been with for a while, what a scumbag. So I hope Blaire at the very least has a satisfying reaction when/if she finds out about his line of work, though I imagine they'll stick together in the grand scheme.
Really excited to see where you take this story, it's a cool concept with lots of room for interesting developments. The organization is cool too, we've only been introduced to two of the members so far, but I hardly believe that's all of them, so I'm looking forward to what other characters come from there too.
And best of all its going to be cruel! Though I am glad you're going to include gentle stuff too, sometimes my brain needs a getaway from all the tragedy ;-;
Author's Response:
Yeah Liz really has an unfortunate position... Chapter 4 will showcase that firsthand.
I have 2 specific chapters in mind that will really drive the horror aspect of this story home, I hope. I look forward to getting there.
Jacob is definitely a pos. That's my absolute intention so glad it's working lol. I'll admit there's more to unveil but for now it's time to finally get a peak and the good shit.
Chapter 4: Deita's Desires ;)
Date: July 07 2023 2:40 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Delivery
Oh boy can’t wait to see where it goes now that we’re past chapter 3! I have a feeling Camilla is gonna be one of my favorite characters ever lol (although I’m sure there’ll be many new favorite characters from this story as we meet more of the owners). Also just now that the more gruesome death and torture in this story the better it’ll be lol (in my opinion, of course)!
Also this story kind of reminds me of the movie Fresh on Hulu lol. Although that movie was more on the disturbing side for me since it didn’t include giantess/shrinking elements 😂
I absolutely cannot wait for the next chapter to this story!! Definitely gonna be one that I’m going to be anxiously waiting for each new chapter!
Author's Response:
Oh my freaking GOSH thank you! I can't believe this, I haven't even written any actual smut yet and you guys are giving me insane positive feedback lol.
Anyways, you can bet there will be some fucked up shit in this story. I will have a threshold, I'll have victims to gentle owners to horny owners to abusive owners and to downright sadistic owners MWUA HA HA HA. Camilla is more like the abusive category, you'll see. But I have a certain four female friends that will appear later on in the story and holy fuck if you don't like torture and gore you'd seriously reconsider reading THAT chapter when it comes out. I ain't fuckin' kidding I'm going all out baby.
Anyways not to spoil, sorry, I just love this idea and can't wait to write more.
Also I have not seen Fresh, I'll have to check it out now.
[Report This]Date: July 07 2023 2:37 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Delivery
Very captivating in deed. Looking forward to the next episode and reading more about the fate of our victims. Becoming addicted to the story and liking how you bring the world together.
Author's Response:
Oh gosh! Well I'm glad to hear that! I'm very excited to write the next chapter, it's titled "Deita's Desires" hehehe.
[Report This]Date: July 07 2023 12:37 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
My vibe is more like giantess torturing little ones with their feet, but I admit I'm loving it so far! The world you are creating is intriguing to say the least. Hope it continues soon, good job.
Author's Response:
Thank the heavens, because I'll absolutely assure you that torturing with feet is COMING SOON! Deita will likely be the first character to be used for giantess/tiny interactions. I was going for Camilla and Alicia first, but the story adapted differently. I'm almost done setting the stage with the MC's and the world building, so after chapter three we should start diving into the sadistic pleasures of the tiny victims at the hands of their cruel slaveowners.
While I personally enjoy gruesome deaths and torture, I'm going to play it safe at first because I want this story to be enjoyable for all. As I progress, I'll be releasing side chapters that involve the main story but from an alternate perspective to appease certain kinks in the giantess fetish to make sure everyone gets their slice of cake :)
Chapter three should be released very soon! Tonight!
[Report This]Date: July 06 2023 9:30 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Continuing to go well so far!
And while some people and stories do have M/f, even if its not the name of the sit or whats common, thats pretty much entirely up ot you if you want it. But F/f and F/m are all good (plus of course F/ff,F/fm, FF/f, FF/m,FF/fm, and FF/ff).
Personaly recommend wedge shoes for shrunk/tiny dealing, containment/transport (wedge heels give the space to out them in and can act just as much as a wall as non high heels), a large sole/surface area for crushing (like cities or the crowds) which also allows far much better walking stability then most heels (bonus of interest: https://youtu.be/igYwEFN19og).
Plus will have to learn if Jacob’s power worked on inanimate objects, or what other rules apply to it, the shrunken durability, such as range, size control(as in it is a set size or can he make someone 3 inch or one inch if he wanted), undoing it, or even trying the opposite. We shall have to see.
And the only feedback is just formatting, having it double spaced every line can make some sentence kinda janky, like a whole new sentence is starting but its still the last sentence. Easy enough its just to have the sentences or immediately related on clumped more together, the paragraphs can be separated. Almost the opposite problem of the wall of text, its spread out. After that its whatever formatting feels/looks good to you. But that’s literally the only complaint, and there are fare greater formatting and writing errors that can happen.
Could recomend 3 Youtube channels that might be interesting for writing, get into s mental framework to help organize and write, but this is already a long review (thought I have made longer) and it also doesn’t allow hyperlink outside of the site (understandable setup) so if you want just say and I’ll writ up another one with the direct youtube links).
Your the wordsmith and this is your story, keep it up!👍
Author's Response:
Regarding the formatting, I am already quite annoyed that this website doesn't copy over the format as well as in my docs. The format I am using is double spaced, single indentation as recommended by expert novelists after some studying. My transitions (the horizontal lines) was an idea I got from a great series that used such a method to transition character perspectives in a single chapter.
However, I quickly learned that copying/pasting the format over to giantessworld makes it look like a wall of text and very clunky, so rest assured I've already decided to remedy this issue in further chapters. I'll probably fix the first two chapters this weekend, but for now I want to keep grinding the chapters out because I have a very clear direction with the story.
I had a feeling someone was going to say something, I was right, so please be happy to know I was definitely aware of the problem! This website is definitely not keen with the formatting and it shows, so I'll be double spacing my paragraphs in addition to double line spacing to make sure the readers don't get a headache trying to read my content with fluidity.
Thank you for the feedback and I'm glad you are enjoying it! The next chapter is aimed to be released today actually and will finally host some 1on1 F/f content. The following chapter is planned to be the continuation of the fate of Alicia in the hands of Camilla. I'm very excited.
Date: July 06 2023 5:57 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Well, so far you have done very well at creating a world and brining us along in the journey. I think there is so much potential in your story and look forward to seeing how you build the world.
[Report This]Date: July 06 2023 5:00 PM Title: Chapter 2 - No Hard Feelings
Okay, my interest is piqued. This has become an intriguing story. I'm looking forward to following the path of each individual and seeing where you take us on this journey.
I like how you take us on a journey and create a believable world that we as readers could relate to.
Looking forward to the next story
Author's Response:
I'm happy to hear it! I plan on writing more tonight so hopefully I'll have chapter 3 posted, with some finally needed smut content no doubt. Thanks for the rating, I hope I prove to earn it. This is my first attempt at a story so far and I'm very nervous lol.
Date: July 06 2023 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 2 - No Hard Feelings
Ok yeah I can already tell this has potential to become one of my favorites!! I definitely can’t wait to see more about Alicia and the other victims! It’s sad that there won’t be any M/f but I like F/f practically just as much so I’m not complaining lol (and excited for the possibility for a trans tag). Honestly I’m really excited for pretty much all the tags that are there, including the possible ones (especially the feet, vore, mouth play, and crush ones). Can’t wait for more!
Author's Response:
All I needed to hear to consider M/f, I just assumed nobody on this site would be interested. Perhaps later on, I'll include a side story with a M/f scenario. Admittedly, I'm hoping this story will truly unfold into a great tale. I have enormous plans for the main characters Jacob and Blaire. I think the dynamic and the style I have in mind will heavily appease both those interested in a compelling story, but also those who are in it for the smut. I can't wait to start writing more chapters! Thanks for the feedback :)