Date: March 29 2014 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Please continue this story
Date: January 06 2014 9:56 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
continue this story plz
Date: December 25 2012 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Awesome
Date: December 25 2012 10:24 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
Awesome
[Report This]Date: November 07 2009 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 16 Enough Is Enough
If it's meant to be 1st-person p.o.v. narration, all the way through, then you shouldn't suddenly shift over to 3rd-party p.o.v. It's very distracting!
You also need a few commas, here and there, to make some of your sentences less run-on. Other than that, this installment wasn't bad.
[Report This]Date: November 01 2009 8:45 AM Title: Chapter 15 Whose Ready For Some Soccer
I meant to ask: is "trainer" a slang term for a specific kind of athletic sneaker? Because, I initially suspected a reference to (ahem!) upper-chest protectors for young ladies just entering adolescence.
Author's Response: yes
[Report This]Date: October 30 2009 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 14 It's Sticky
Well, could be worse. It could've been the girls' volleyball team!
Author's Response: Here is a imprtant briefing i have added 2 chapters on this site and 2 have them have been somehow deleted You wont know them as they got deleted just as i added them and in response i am adding 3 final chapters to end it all !!!!!!!!!!!
[Report This]Date: October 30 2009 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 13 Safe At Last ?
Uhm! Let me get this straight. Ms. French handed her purse to Kyle's aunt?
Why? And, even if the purse's zipper was open enough that he could spring from the nail polish cap to the lip of the purse to the floor, why run away from his aunt? Was he worried about being forced to stay shrunk as punishment for cutting school in such an unorthodox manner?
Ah, well! Let's hope that sneaker belongs to some cheerleading hottie, at least.
[Report This]Date: October 28 2009 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 12 Just A Scratch ?
They say it's a sign of love and affection when a pet cat brings you his/her hunting trophies. Let's see if Ms. French gives Our Hero the same kind of love and affection.
[Report This]Date: October 27 2009 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 11 Man Vs Cat Round 1
Well, with my luck, this prediction will probably jinx it. But, I'll say...he survives!
I shall tune into chapter 12 to see whether or not I'm right.
[Report This]Date: October 27 2009 2:32 PM Title: Chapter 10 Freefalling For Beginners
Well, if I had bet money there wasn't going to be a tenth chapter, then I obviously would have lost.
Ms. French's cat, however, now _increases_ the odds in my pessimistic favor! ;-)
Date: October 27 2009 11:09 AM Title: Chapter 9 IT'S LIKE GODAMN JAWS
I just don't think there's any way the little guy can get out of this one!
So, I'm anticipating that there won't be any chapter 10.
Date: October 26 2009 5:31 PM Title: Chapter 9 IT'S LIKE GODAMN JAWS
Adieu, M'sieur Petite. Adieu! :-(
Author's Response: ?
[Report This]Date: October 26 2009 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 8 A LONG PHONE CALL
I'm indifferent to the previews. As to the chapter, itself? Briefer than usual. Yet, still entertaining, if one imagines the receptionist as being played by Pamela Anderson.
[Report This]Date: October 23 2009 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 7 Rollin Rollin Rollin
Whoa! Looks like HE'S the one about to be French-fried!!*
*Bada-bing-bang-boom!!!
[Report This]Date: October 23 2009 11:22 AM Title: Chapter 6 Changing Teachers
Mickey D's, to get some French fries?*
*Sorry! Couldn't resist. :-)
[Report This]Date: October 23 2009 11:08 AM Title: Chapter 1 Kicking Things Off
It's well-done, but a bit choppy -- each chapter reads more like part of a choose-your-own-adventure story than a full-blown chapter. You've got a good plot, and your ideas are intriguing; take some time and expand them a bit, and you'll really have something.
[Report This]Date: October 23 2009 10:33 AM Title: Chapter 5 Luck On My Side
At his present size, there's _no way_ she'll "hear him, now." ;-)
Good job (as usual)!
[Report This]Date: October 21 2009 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 4 What A Ordeal
Heh! He must have been hit by a spit ball reinforced with spent chewing gum.
Rest in peace, little dude!
Author's Response: lol don't count him out just yet and you have been keeping track daily havent you ill add 3 more chapters by sunday i promise
Date: October 20 2009 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 1 Kicking Things Off
yeah no biggy thoug