Date: May 03 2023 10:23 PM Title: Chapter 1 Story building part 1
Discord link doesn't work, also keep up the absolutely fantastic work, you're one of the main series I check back on everyday for updates here
Author's Response:
I appreciate the compliments😁. https://discord.gg/s6Ez8bV3. Hopefully, the discord works out now. There are only two people who are active in the community. And I think there are more good stories out there. Well most of them are no longer with us. But joins and we can start talking about how the story will go from here on out.
[Report This]Date: April 10 2023 12:50 PM Title: Chapter 3 Its Time.
I see you are trying multiple different perspectives which is interesting as it adds an insight into each character's mindset.
I wonder if Maliyah actually thought Kevin was an ant
[Report This]Date: April 03 2023 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 1 Story building part 1
I really like this setup! I hope we will soon have the chapter 3 and more, your story is really fun to read :D
Author's Response:
Thanks. I might make a discard to help build the story more and I finished the first part if chapter 3 when I started learning how to make a game.
Date: March 16 2023 2:14 PM Title: Chapter 2
This chapter was fantastic. And once Arron shrinks, I'd love to read him being lovingly attacked by Michelle's or Maliyah's feet. But what I would also like to read is Arron shrinking down on her sofa, waiting for Maliyah's or Michelle's butt to settle on top of his little lap. And he gets an erection under her butt.
Author's Response:
I love the ideas. I plan on doing the next chapter in three parts 1, Kevin’s deathpov( the time man from chapter 2) 2, Arron using the watch right after he witness Maliyah kill Kevin. 3. either Aaron goes over to Michelle‘s apartment to babysit Malia while she’s in school or Michelle sends Maliyah to Arron's apartment so she can do her online classes. Additionally, I don't know if I am going to do a four-year time skip yet. Arron fetishs will corrupt himto be sexually attached to the unaware giantesses and jerk off while being stomped on
[Report This]Date: March 16 2023 2:20 AM Title: Chapter 2
Nice story; but who will make the first association between Kevin with the shrinking tech and Michelle or Arron?
Does Maliyah know about the shrinking tech, and that Kevin is the bug sized man she just chewed and swallowed?
Arron has yet to utilize his shrinking watch, could Maliyah already know he has it? Could she have tracked the size watch's' recipient while studying at home for a year?
Author's Response:
I see where your coming from. I had keveins part included but i accidently delete this chapter a few days ago. Kevin’s pov will be the start of the next chapter and then it will transition to Aaron sing the watch for the first time. But to answer some of your questions 1, Maliyah does not know about the shrinking tech. 2, Kevin was the big sized man she chewed. 3, Only Michelle is some what aware of Arrons watch. But ahea not 100% sure
[Report This]Date: March 11 2023 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 1 Story building part 1
Almost exactly one year later from me publishing my very first story 'It's just a bug' you decide to publish your very first story. Congrats! 😀
I feel compelled to review your first story since you regularly review my Antopia story.
This is shaping to be a very interesting concept with the bratty tween girl who fantasises about dominating all things small and the babysitter. I can't wait to the dynamic between them. Also, I loved the Honey we shrunk ourselves reference.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I really appreciate it. This is my first ever story too. I want to expand this into a likable story for a certain group of people. Nothing to wild but to show how ones fetish can take control of a person. I really glad you review this chapter and I’m currently working on the second chapter as we “speak” it should be done by tomorrow or Sunday.👍🏾
Author's Response:
Thanks. I really appreciate it. This is my first ever story too. I want to expand this into a likable story for a certain group of people. Nothing to wild but to show how ones fetish can take control of a person. I really glad you review this chapter and I’m currently working on the second chapter as we “speak” it should be done by tomorrow or Sunday.👍🏾
Date: March 10 2023 8:09 PM Title: Chapter 1 Story building part 1
If you like this then check out the challenges because I have some story suggestions there.
Author's Response:
Ok👍🏾. Right now I'm trying to explain how the watch works and how to explain that Arron and Michelle are living on an apartment building with randomly throwing that information out therea60;a039;
Date: March 10 2023 6:34 PM Title: Chapter 1 Story building part 1
Nice start I hope to read more. And I hope Arron and Michelle get together as a couple and Maliyah becomes his stepdaughter. And if Arron has shrunk small then Michelle Arron should take away his shrinking watch and then leave him small forever. And then Michelle should either tuck her little man in her bra or tuck him in her panties day and night or she could let him snuggle on top of her tummy and Maliyah could then play with her little stepdad and cuddle him too. And as for Arron's foot fetish, Michelle and Maliyah could put little Arron on the ground and stomp around him without hurting him of course and they could give Arron the opportunity to climb on top of their feet. But still i really enjoyed the beginning of your story keep it up and i'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Wow nice detail. I trying to make a first person size fetish story like Alan misadventures and Watch what you're doing. I love those stories but sadly they stopped making them. I might focus mostly on unaware/ or people think he a bug or doll. I want to see how I could do mouth play, foot fetish and body exploration. I'll see if u can make more characters to keep it interesting but I love messages like this. I can expand and think👍🏾
Author's Response:
Wow nice detail. I trying to make a first person size fetish story like Alan misadventures and Watch what you're doing. I love those stories but sadly they stopped making them. I might focus mostly on unaware/ or people think he a bug or doll. I want to see how I could do mouth play, foot fetish and body exploration. I'll see if u can make more characters to keep it interesting but I love messages like this. I can expand and think👍🏾
[Report This]Date: March 10 2023 9:53 AM Title: Chapter 1 Story building part 1
Enjoying the start of the story so far. Had a few moments where it felt like I was being taken out of the story when it would shift between third person and first person. Looking forward to the next chapter
Author's Response:
Ok thank you for this response. I’m not a good writer so I wrote the story like I did in highschool. I use the mic and start talking to try to push out information to have the reader know the detail.
[Report This]Date: March 10 2023 1:17 AM Title: Chapter 1 Story building part 1
Can't wait for more. Love the honey we shrunk references
Author's Response:
Thank you. I’m already planing the next chapter. It will be the second part to the first chapter. Therefore leading to him using the watch.