Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: June 10 2023 6:59 AM Title: First Impressions

I really like the duality between Brooke and Jazmin on display in this chapter. We see that, in a way, they've got a whole two sides of the same coin thing going on.

I started to take more interest in Jazmin as a character in the last chapter, as her threat against Claire at the end of it made me look at her behavior throughout the story in a new light and realize that the only difference Jazmin sees between the residents and regular-sized people are the methods she can use to dominate them. It seemed to me that Jazmin doesn't see Claire or Alia as equal to her anymore than she does Justin (more useful, maybe, but really they're the same to her in terms of their worth as people). That attitude was on full display in her conversation with Claire at the start of this chapter.

Jazmin doesn't care if Claire enjoys herself when they hit the bar scene and chase guys. She just wants someone there with her, and Claire just happens to be the person she's used to having with her. That's made clear when Jazmin doesn't skip a beat when Claire asks if Jazmin just expects her to hang out after being threatened with shrinking. She does, and if Claire doesn't do it, she's no longer useful and will find herself shrunk, too. Honestly, if Claire caves and hangs out with her unwillingly, it would probably make it a little more fun for Jazmin, I think.

Digging a little deeper, Jazmin's obsession with domination seems to have made her awfully lonely. Throughout the story, she's dressed sluttily, talked about the dicks of people she's slept with, and mentioned times she's kidnapped residents of Micro Cities Inc. for her own amusement (she even has her own collection at home, apparently). But she's got no real friends and certainly no lover to show for it. Going out to the bar and waking up hung over or bragging about temporary conquests covers up a sad existence, with her evil, domineering ways trying vainly to fill a void created by her false sense of superiority over everyone else.

Brooke, on the other hand, has gone from concerned about the size difference between Justin and her to optimistic to curiously lustful to fully embracing it. She confesses that she loves dominating Justin; she admits that it excites her in a way that she's never felt before. Teasing and playfully threatening him really does it for her.

At the same time, however, we see that Justin really cares for Justin and definitely views him as a person. She cares about his comfort during the drive to her place, worries that those playful threats might make Justin think that she really would do something as crazy as eating him, is saddened when she hears that Justin is terrified while in this giant world with her, and makes clear that she would never forgive herself if something happened to him under her care.

Brooke seems to get as much pleasure out of dominating Justin and Jazmin gets out of dominating everyone. However, because Brooke sees Justin as a relative equal despite his tiny size, that pleasure is much more filling for her than Jazmin's. In the case of Brooke and Justin, while she's in control, they're doing things together. When Jazmin dominates everyone else, she's doing it at their expense. That proves to be the difference between real happiness and fleeting pleasure.

Apologies for the book report there, but I just found the contrast between heroine and villain here to be really interesting.

Oh, and I also love that Brooke, who was almost embarrassed at the thought of trying to give Justin scraps off her plate at their first date back when she first found out he was tiny, ended up doing exactly that and loving it in this chapter. And in the next chapter, it seems we'll get the answer to her question of just how Justin can perform in the bedroom at that size as well.

Claire continues to be one of my favorite characters in this story. I love how defiant she was against Jazmin even after the threat in the last chapter. Then, with Brooke around, she even made a joke at Jazmin's expense. Really, the fact that she could seem so casual during that conversation with Brooke after Jazmin reaffirmed her threat just beforehand is pretty impressive. I also like how Claire takes up for the residents, both one confronting Jazmin and when encouraging Brooke to go into the city barefoot so as not to intimidate them.

Now, if only there was someone with a recently invented communications device that could answer her question about the new instant-shrinking method. Hmmm.

And seeing Justin discover that he enjoys the Brooke's actual power over him as much as he does her teasing about it during their nightly talks was a lot of fun as well. The combination of trust, fear, and lust can be a powerful thing.

I look forward to the next chapter, as this one built up the coming smut quite well. Also, I love body exploration, so seeing that mentioned was great as well. But I also suspect that we'll see some plot movement as well, as some elements seem to be coming together.

Also, I wonder who's stocking Micropolis during the night that Justin is staying at Brooke's.

Author's Response:

Thank you! I really appreciate these thorough write-ups. It's a good feeling to have someone care about the story this much!

I actually hadn't considered why Jazmin acts the way she does, but I think you're right. In my notes I wrote that she was an only child and 'always got what she wanted'. I agree, she's definitely lonely.

I'm amazed at your attention to detail!

Thanks again for this amazing, well-written feedback!

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: May 27 2023 7:19 AM Title: Shrinking into a New Job

I just caught up with this story, and I wanted to say how much I've enjoyed it so far. Also, a heads up, this is going to be long (I like to overthink stuff).

I really like the pacing and casualness of the worldbuilding so far. I mean, we learn the basic details of the various tiny cities and the shrinking technology through a fun and flirty conversation between Justin and Natasha at the start, more about the company and Dr. Perkins through Jazmin's rudeness and her co-workers reaction to it early on, and, most recently, that there are classes that have to be taken in order to handle a resident that's below a certain size (or is that class needed to handle residents of all sizes?) through Brooke's flirty teasing.

These are all valuable plot points (at least, I'm assuming Dr. Perkins will become relevant later on), but they're spread throughout the story in a way that flows naturally with the conversations in which they're revealed and spread out in a way that doesn't overwhelm the reader with too much information too soon. I think the hardest part of worldbuilding is the urge to infodump everything at the start to get it out of the way, but you avoided that intimidating clunckiness masterfully.

The characters are all also really engaging and easy to invest in. Man, when Justin had that "all is lost" chapter, where he found out about his size difference with Brooke and realized he was trapped tiny back-to-back, I really felt for him. He's been a pretty likable main character so far, and the personality he's displayed, whether he's lightheartedly teasing Natasha about her height in chapter 1 or navigating being tinier than the other residents in the shrinking room, really gives him a voice, so to speak. It's easy for characters, especially main characters, to fall into generic troupes and dialog, but, again, you avoid that quite well.

The harem style love life Justin has embraced so far has worked especially well in this story, as it allows the reader to enjoy sex scenarios on different size scales a bit, taking advantage of the size variations offered by the cities. Also, all three of the women in Justin's life bring something different to the table.

Natasha has an infectious personality and fun loving attitude that really draws the reader to her from the start, and Ally seems a more laid back, down to earth person looking for a bit of fun. Looking through some of the other reviews, I can see why so many people want Justin to end up with one of them.

But, personally, I prefer the slow burn, and, if this last chapter is any indication, that long game is about to pay off with Brooke. Granted, a lot of the chemistry between them happens "off stage" early on, as we're told that they're vibing without seeing it like we do with the other two girls (I don't think this is a bad thing, as the story would have been bogged down with mundane conversation, but it did give the other two girls an "advantage" with the reader early on, I think).

But then, after the size difference is discovered, that tension makes the relationship more interesting, as does Brooke's struggle with how tiny Justin is. This makes it all the more rewarding when she decides that her feelings for him are strong enough to overcome that doubt, and the anticipation built through the interactions between them from that point on are golden, at least to me. I don't know, there's something about how Brooke can tease Justin with something that's his size by stuffing it in her tits are panties and look him in the eye as though they're the same size at the same time that I really enjoy. But it's that build, that slow burn between them that sets up those scenes and gives them a different, more intense feel.

That slow burn also comes in the form of her concerns regarding Justin's size. At first, she seems deterred and doubtful that anything can happen between them because of it, but that's built into excitement over the prospect of sex with him, which will make that likely coming sex scene between them all the more rewarding. Also, the concern she shows for Justin's safety from what could easily be dismissed as a minor inconvenience in the internet outages during Jazmin's restocking nights, shows that her newfound lust hasn't overtaken her nature as a caring girlfriend and that she's really invested in the relationship.

'm really looking forward to where things go in the next chapter, from a plot standpoint as well as a smut one, as I think we're nearing the time that Brooke finds out the truth about Justin's situation.

Finally, we have Claire and Jazmin as two regularly seen characters. I really like what you've done with Claire. There's a bit of airheadedness to her, but it doesn't define her, another trap you've managed to avoid. She's not only good-natured but brave, has good instincts and able to navigate most of Jazmin's shit as well. And honestly, I'm willing to bet that her moments of being airheaded in Micropolis probably don't happen as often in the other cities and that they would happen less frequently there if the residents had a way to communicate with her, as she really seems to care about the residents and would be quick to fix any issues (such as accidently trapping a group of them in the park with her feet or using a thimble to deliver a drink to someone too small to use it) if she only knew about it. Also, I'm eager to see what her next move is after Jazmin's threat.

And that threat really heightened my opinion of Jazmin as a villain. I thought she was a solid giantess story villain with some personality but kind of typical in the sense that she just seemed to view the residents as less than people because of their size. But after threatening to shrink and kidnap Claire, her best friend as far as we know to this point, the imply that she likes having her as a friend (as though they're still friends after that), It now seems clear to me that she just thinks of everyone as lesser than her and that the only real difference between the residents and regular sized people in her eyes is what she can get away with. This also made me reevaluate some of her earlier interactions with her co-workers in which I initially thought she was being crude because she just didn't care, but now I think this was intentional on her part in order to enjoy their shocked, angered, and embarrassed reactions, as well as the fact that they couldn't do anything about it. Maybe I'm overthinking things, but this added a bit more depth to the character for me.

Well, if you're still reading after all of that, I do have a bit of constructive criticism for you. I kind of feel like the post-rape interaction between Justin and Natasha could have been handled a bit better. Natasha being remorseful after drunkenly taking advantage of Justin was done pretty well, but I think Justin not even really addressing it was a bit of an issue. This didn't even have to be him confronting her about it; maybe he has an internal struggle in which his anger/shame/insecurity/whatever he's feeling is met with his need to comfort his close friend. Maybe seeing her cry had an effect on him, maybe his guilt over her being a resident at all overrides any negative feelings he has about the rape, or maybe there's another reason he's able to move past it.

My (admittedly long-winded) point is that Justin doesn't deal with it at all. Also, he doesn't feel inadequate when he's forced into being a sex toy by his former co-worker whom he used to tower over, yet he's dejected that he couldn't use a soap dispenser? I don't know, I just feel as though there needed to be something like that there.

But, to be fair, this story has a good bit of smut in it, and I understand that there are times in which that smut is going to skirt these issues but not deal with them for the sake of the reader enjoying said smut. I honestly wouldn't have even brought the point up, but the detail and character development throughout the story are so good that an omission like this is noticeable, and I thought maybe this feedback might help in the future if you do a similar scene in a different story.

But yeah, overall, this story is great, and I'm really enjoying it so far.

Author's Response:

I really appreciate you taking the time to write this up!

First, I want to say I'm happy you're enjoying the story so far. I put a lot of effort into weaving the characters, story, world-building, and smut together and reading this review makes that effort feel validated. Comments like this is what keeps me actively invested in my writing.

In regards to your criticisms--I wholeheartedly agree. I didn't focus on Brooke's and Justin's relationship early on as I didn't want to bog down the pacing of the story. However, I think this was a mistake in hindsight. If I had given the story a little more room to breathe, I'm confident I could've found a way to make it interesting.

As far as the interactions with Natasha--you hit the nail on the head. I was so focused on the following two scenes that I completely failed to consider how Justin would've felt at that point. Truly, this was a missed opportunity that would've added more depth to his character. This is the kind of feedback that helps me get better as a writer!

Thank you again for your in-depth and thoughtful feedback!

Reviewer: ittybittyman Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08 2023 7:07 PM Title: A Wild Weekend

Awesome chapter. I dunno about you, but I would definitely pick Natasha and Ally over Brooke. 

Author's Response: Yeah, at this point I'd agree! They definitely seem like more fun. Perhaps Brooke will come around?

Reviewer: ittybittyman Signed [Report This]
Date: April 05 2023 7:33 PM Title: In a World of Giants

The plot thickens! Will he just surrender? Or come up with a new plan to fight back?

Reviewer: DcZ Signed [Report This]
Date: April 02 2023 2:38 PM Title: Shrinking into a New Job

Of course, story com first, ‘safety’ and ‘cost’ and video can come latter. 

I most certainly will be eager to see what comes next!

Reviewer: DcZ Signed [Report This]
Date: April 01 2023 2:34 PM Title: Life in the Tiny City

Great to see this again!

Justin is definitely recommending cameras be put in, could be excused as crowd behaviour analysis, too small for normal people to see. Secret of course, and record a couple of instances of this. 

And if this city has been undergoing this for a while, thats more then enough witnesses. And thats is sexual, that gets several other chapters of the law involved. Could see Jazmine being force to be shrunk as a part of the settlement or end of court case. 

And might mean the adjustment is to have the city on a table with everything delivered from underneath, and under some keyed dome/container to prevent mishandling. 

Eventually. 

So great chapter! Hope the Not Just Bikes helped! 

Can’t wait for the next one! 

Author's Response:

The videos definitely helped! I had to balance the ideas I liked against what I wanted to happen story-wise. In any case I really enjoyed them for my own purpose.

Having an underground delivery system would be the safest choice! I suspect there's some corruption higher-up that chooses "what is cheaper" over "what is safer".

I hope to get the next chapter out faster than the last two, so here's to hoping!

Reviewer: titantonic Signed [Report This]
Date: February 27 2023 2:37 AM Title: Moving to the Small City

Great stuff man, I really like where this story is going. I can't wait for more!

Author's Response:

Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: tinyguy Signed [Report This]
Date: February 23 2023 11:07 PM Title: Moving to the Small City

Loving the story so far!

Curious to see if something develops between Justin and Claire going forward. She seems like she could be interested in him, and as a fan of gentle giantesses, I’m kind of hoping that’s the case. Given the massive size difference between the two, I’m not sure if such a relationship could actually work, but at the very least, an attempt to make it work would counterbalance all the hijinks that Jazmin (and maybe later Natasha?) are sure to get up to.

Author's Response:

Thank you! I also love a good gentle giantess!

I just looked at my notes and realized I am severely lacking in gentle giantess scenes... I'll have to fix that!

Reviewer: barabba9000 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 14 2023 5:27 AM Title: Shrinking into a New Job

Tell us this story is not already dead :O

Author's Response:

Sorry to worry you! I unfortunately had some things come up in my personal life that kept me away from writing. I hope you enjoy the new chapter!

Reviewer: DcZ Signed [Report This]
Date: January 13 2023 11:35 PM Title: Shrinking into a New Job

Could also totally talk about any incidents and ‘incidents’ that happend because of the excitement like Natasha’s (possibly to a greater, smarter, or more prepared degree).

Thought it could also be good world-building for Natasha to get a corporate scolding, like what Alia was trying to be professional about, if shes still to insistent to tries to go to far, talking about genuine accidents or thing people tired to do that got serious. You know now safety regulations are made once someone gets injured or died, that sort of thing. 

So just real interesting stuff that could come. 

Author's Response:

Sadly, Natasha doesn't work for Micro Cities, inc... but there are some new characters we'll meet that I think will fit the bill!

(Also, don't worry, this isn't the last we see of Natasha!)