[Report This]Date: October 20 2023 1:54 AM Title: Shrinking
Just wanted to pop in and say that I can't wait for the rollercoaster that will be season 2! Hope 2023 has been treating you well :)
[Report This]Date: November 04 2022 3:56 PM Title: The Runaway
Chapters 4 and 5 are solid erotica. The action was richly detailed and flowed well from scene to scene. You did a great job using details like the exact smell of their breath and glimpses of giant bodies through parted lips to create a chaotic, claustrophobic scene. Details like the comparison of the violent tongue and mouth movements to waves also helped connect the characters to the scene. Imo, the time spent in previous chapters painstakingly rendering the characters and setting made for a satisfying payoff.
Chapters 6-9 do a decent job expanding on the characterization you’ve already laid out, but I think this section suffers a bit due to the reliance on scene breaks. I would have moved the flashbacks to separate chapters. Overall though, the content was good. Trev’s tendency to be abrasive and double-down when confronted combined with his general adolescent inability to think critically makes for a haunting descent into madness. Natalie is reasonably outraged for being, you know, raped, but for a variety of reasons she cannot drop the self-reliant attitude long enough to get the help she needs.
It’s all building up to chapter 10. I look forward to seeing how that goes.
Author's Response:
Oooh my, Chapters 4 and 5... Those were fun times. I'm glad Brittany wasn't the only one who found the payoff satisfying 😝
I appreciate the feedback on the flashbacks. There are ~quite~ a few more in the future so I'll keep this in mind and perhaps I'll just cut the nonsense and give the longer ones their own chapters. And yes, they both have their coping mechanisms that unfortunately clash violently with each other's.
Strap in for Chapter 10. It's gonna knock your socks off 😏
[Report This]Date: October 18 2022 12:55 AM Title: Double Negative
This right here is what we in the business like to call "the good shit". I can tell by the precise way you described their clothing and physiques that you put a lot of thought into these characters. You said you wrote a draft for this a while ago, so that doesn't surprise me. When I read that Brittany wore jeggings, and that they were "ridiculously tight", I chuckled. I thought, Oh yeah, of course this girl of all people is wearing jeggings.
I was able to have thoughts like that because you also did a great job building up the characters through dialogue. It's tough writing naturalistic dialogue that's also vibrant, and I think you did a good job at that, and at capturing the cadence of characters who go to a rough HS. The slang and 90s references struck me as a little dated at first; more 2012 than 2022, but it grew on me.
Love the relationships you've set up. Trevor is this mischievous shit talker who doubles down. Brittany is your usual combative, controlling girlfriend with tons of rumors swirling around her. Natalie is stubborn, but has to be because life constantly assaults her from all sides. Good chemistry between them. Looking forward to seeing where it goes.
Author's Response:
Oh dang, “the good shit”, I’m using that for my blurbs! (Just kidding, I don’t have blurbs, but now I feel like I should lol.) I truly appreciate your observation, because, yes, I put a shit ton of time and energy into developing these characters and their clothing choices was definitely a part of it. And believe it or not I actually have a whole rational for their outdated slang and 90’s references that I doubt will every actually make it into the story but, yeah, it exists haha.
You really nailed their characters, it brings me immense joy to know people get them. Thank you so much for the comment, I hope it lives up to the build up! Let me know what you think I’m honestly very excited for you to get caught up :) :) :)
Date: October 17 2022 11:42 PM Title: Shrinking
> The author begins with a spiel about how it started out as X but turned into Y
> The author knows how to use line spacing and indentation
> The dialogue didn't make me immediately close the tab
I have high hopes for this.
Author's Response:
Improper line spacing and indentation is a pet peeve I've learned to deal with it on this site but refuse to succumb to lol
[Report This]Date: October 14 2022 4:07 PM Title: Sole Crushing
Damn, this story is intense. It's nice to have some believable justification for people acting like psychos to each other. Hopefully they can come to some sort of understanding by the end of the story, but it's definitely gonna be a turbulent ride regardless of which direction this is going.
Author's Response:
Yeah, you know, it's like your classic Will-They-Won't-They... if both parties are completely bonkers and rather than falling in love the question is whether or not they'll will kill each other. So please remain seated with seatbelts securely fastened and make sure your seat backs and tray tables are in their full upright position, cause this plane's hurtling directly into a freakin' hurricane :)
[Report This]Date: October 14 2022 4:56 AM Title: Sole Crushing
Dayuuuum okay, this chapter really solidified that Trev's a crazy bastard---with abusive daddy trauma, of course. Abuse really can be a cycle and looks like Trev is unconsciously repeating it. Thought you were better than that bro 😔
Wonder who the mystery guest is going to be!
And the funeral trilogy was so real yet heartbreaking. They were so isolated from that part of their family and the mother they grew up with was completely different from her asshole family's depiction of her. No wonder she left (or was kicked out/shunned). And I'm sorry to hear about your father's passing. You really never get over the loss of a loved one, but you just have to keep on going, one day at a time.
Author's Response:
Trev we’re all very disappointed in you. Get it together, old boy.
Low key reading this in the middle of the night but the ‘mystery guest’ line really got me lmao. Def imagining a 50’s sitcom entrance with a live studio audience. If only it was in the budget.
Her mom’s family are such dicks, making sweet little baby Natalie cry. They’re the worst.
And thank you so much, yeah, grief is lousy. It comes and it goes but you learn to live with it. 🖤
Date: October 11 2022 6:28 PM Title: The Runaway
Kinda just reading this for Trevor and Natalie just making up and becoming an unstable couple .__. hopefully it happens... Oh, I would also like to see the giantess brutally and tragically die. Hopefully by shrinking and having Natalie biting her head off... She deserves that.
Author's Response: Honestly can’t think of a better, more justifiable ending than Natalie biting Brittany’s head off. As for Natalie and Trevor… strap in, yo, it’s gonna be one hell of a bumpy ride
[Report This]Date: September 30 2022 11:36 PM Title: The Cardstock Stranger and the Big Stupid Box
Woooow, no giant content? 0/10 chapter, would definitely not recommend this to anyone interested in g/t lmao.
Jokes!!! Nah, character exploration and flashbacks >>>> giants. (For real though, this is like one of the few G/T stories that actually focuses on the characters and their lives outside of y'know, being big/being small. It's refreshing).
But! Now we get the long-awaited Brittany and Natalie flashback! Super excited to see what an absolute sweetheart Brittany was as a tween(?).
And regarding the salaciously delicious vorish oneshot, I can't wait <3
Author's Response:
Banter!!! Lol, thaaaank you. Yes I've also noticed a supreme lack of depth to most G/t tales, which is why it took me a while to post this because I was like, this crowd's not gonna wanna read about this girl's messed up relationship with her grandparents.
But, yeah, honestly the flashback chapters are some of my favorites, I always enjoy writing Natalie and Trev in various stages of their ruffian childhood, they're both such complex youths. I also love getting into more than just their relationship with each other; Natalie also has a complicated relationship with her brothers, and definitely with Frank the Tank, and, you know, she can be a bit of a dick sometimes, but you can kind of start to see why.
And Brittany is just such a gem, in all stages of life (^^)
[Report This]Date: September 23 2022 1:14 PM Title: Sardonic Retribution
Bruh, you just deafened your ex. Major L for you. But Natalie has cool healing powers now, does this mean she's invincible to Trev's abuse/mishandling? Would he use this to his advantage? 🤔 He's such a nice, understanding guy, so probably not :)
Is he planning on keeping his word about taking her to the hospital? Or it's just her still clinging to an empty promise?
But loved the dialogue and Trev's messed up vore fantasies alluding to his need for complete control that he really should be talking to a therapist about. (But loved your hypothetical vore descriptions and Trev spiraling from remorse to anger while completely unaware that Natalie's ~temporarily~ deaf)
Btw, have you thought about cross-posting this to ao3? They have a pretty decent sized collection of macro/micro stories that aren't fandom related.
Author's Response:
But it’s also like… who hasn’t at some point wished for deafness as a temporary relief from an ex’s incessant rambling, you know? And Trev would NEVER see the benefit of being able to further mishandle and abuse her without the burden of inflicting long term physical damage, how dare you even suggest it!
Do you suppose hypothetical Vore counts as Vore? I was sitting here staring at the tags, like, well he didn’t TECHNICALLY eat her… but he sure did think about it a lot and his morbid attention to detail certainly paints a picture 😂
I will check out ao3, thanks for the suggestion! I’m cross-posting a ~slightly~ edited down version on Wattpad (mostly just cut out all the juicy bits in the hamster loving scene lol) and I feel like it’s slowwwly gaining traction. I’m now up to SIX engaged readers (although I think one of them might be me) and somehow it’s number one in their macro category… I have literally no idea how their algorithms work to have made that happen but I’m pretty stoked 🤩
[Report This]Date: September 17 2022 3:12 AM Title: Hamster Fucker
Lmao gotta love the chapter tags! They both need massive amounts of therapy, like physical abuse isn't ok, Trev! Even if your girlfriend was being a cunt by shoving your ex into her cunt (without your permission), that's still not cool >:( Loved the chapter though and can’t wait to see what happens next week :)
And to answer your funky lil questions lol—I think Trev’s taking her to his apartment. He’ll probably act all cold and quiet, maybe slightly remorseful about technically playing a part in Natalie’s ~sticky~ situation, but he’d never admit any of it aloud. Once Natalie’s back to herself (figuratively haha), he’d probably resort to verbal taunts once again. He also seems to be a bit of a controlling dude (understatement of the year), so I can definitely see him thinking about keeping pocket!Natalie and not actually helping her get back to normal—-maybe rationalizing it by thinking that she’s much easier to deal with now (plus she can’t physically hurt him when she’s polly pocket sized and emotional abuse only goes so far when you're tiny and have to rely on your ex for everything).
Author's Response:
I'm dying right now that is entirely too accurate lol! Trev, you cunt, quit smackin' around your bitches and go find a more constructive outlet for your pent up aggression! ...Like tennis or something. (But first take Natalie to the damn hospital already, she's got lady jizz in her tooth wound (xx))
[Report This]Date: September 16 2022 8:05 PM Title: Shrinking
Really enjoying it so far, you're really good at writing the characters in a way that make them feel real and fleshed out. Natalie's actions in making things worse for herself all the time can actually be frustrating at times but that's only because she acts the same way a typical teenage girl would in these situations.
Author's Response:
Haha yes she certainly has a knack for instigating. Let’s be real, teenage girls in general are basically insane. Natalie, in particular. Honestly they all need therapy 😂
[Report This]Date: September 14 2022 1:34 AM Title: Shrinking
Natalie is a cool character and I love how the story fits into the real world. The constant tension is harrowing. great job
Author's Response:
Ooh, I'm glad you think so, I just love her, I think she's super cool. I debated whether adding too much of the real world and backstory would drive readers away, but I personally enjoy getting to know the characters and their messed up relationships; I feel like it adds so much more depth when they're all tormenting the shit out of each other 😌
[Report This]Date: September 10 2022 1:54 AM Title: Chronic Crashing Crushing Current
I love how worried Trev was in that flashback completely juxtaposes his current actions and the mouthplay scene was excellent~~
I don't want to pry, but I was just wondering how many chapters you're planning on making this? It's really good, and I can't prepare myself for an eventual ending haha
Author's Response:
Aha I LOVE the juxtaposition. I love delving into their past with each other and getting into how it’s led to their present status of sheer spite and toxicity for each other.
And since you asked and I appreciate your comments, I will say that I have a good twenty chapters written and fleshed out that are essentially the first ‘season’, and a few random chapters after for where the story goes and how it ends. There are a lot more flashbacks delving into their past and their relationship, as well as the events that led to their breakup and the chaostrophic events that followed, and a lot about each of their personal traumas. Plus plenty of fucked up giant content of course >:)
[Report This]Date: September 02 2022 4:32 PM Title: Double Negative
Ahhh your dialogue is amazing as always! Love the banter between Trev and Natalie 👌. They’re both pretty toxic to each other, but they also play off each other pretty well (if that makes any sense ^^;)
Author's Response:
Sooo much more where that came from, my lovely! Toxic is definitely the word I'd use to describe their relationship haha
[Report This]Date: September 02 2022 7:27 AM Title: Double Negative
Love the dialogue, it's like watching a real Netflix show!
Author's Response:
Still waiting on my Netflix deal lol. Glad you like the dialogue! I always have to spend a good half hour re-italicizing all the italics whenever I post anything, the whole time thinking to myself, “Man they talk a lot.” I’m glad to know my efforts are not in vain haha
Date: August 31 2022 12:10 AM Title: Shrinking
I created an account (been a longtime lurker haha) just to say that I absolutely ADORE the dialogue and your style of writing. You can really feel the characters come to life! I can’t wait to read more on Friday :)
Author's Response:
Ooooh thank you so much!! Dialogue is most definitely one of my favorite parts of writing. I was a bit worried people would be reading through it on here, like, "Quit yammering and get to the action, already," so I'm glad to know it's appreciated.
As a fellow longtime lurker, let me just say I am grateful and honored that you created an account just to comment. I'm super excited to post the next chapter :) :) :)
Date: August 26 2022 8:37 PM Title: Shrinking
Great story! I love it so far. There really needs to be more M/f stories
Author's Response:
Agreeeed! That is my mission. Thanks, glad you like it!
[Report This]Date: August 26 2022 5:03 AM Title: Shrunk
Great story, excited to see the direction you're heading!
Author's Response:
Thank yooou!! :) :) :)