[Report This]Date: August 04 2022 4:09 AM Title: Aces and Eights
For someone who’s never written M/f stuff, you did a damn good job for your first attempt!
The whole thing fit seamlessly into the rest of the story, added some nice variety, and was detailed and well-written as always.
While it’s not everyone’s cup of tea, I personally wouldn’t mind if you found more opportunities to slip some M/f content into your future stories if it’s as well-crafted as this ;)
Author's Response: M/f isn't my usual thing but I don't really mind it, in this case it seemed right for where the story was in that moment. I might do other scenes like it in future stories but giant girls is probably always going to be my focus.
[Report This]Date: August 04 2022 3:39 AM Title: Aces and Eights
Another well done chapter. And you did a good job on the big male tiny girl.
Oh and what things would be done by Jolene at her colony, like she said its doesn’t need to be the best one.
Author's Response: There are a number of things she could do with even a less than ideal world, mostly she would want to plop herself down in a huge mansion with her pet Zetans and be left alone, but she could set up a trading post and refueling station for ships going into deeper space, she could do resource extraction, she could use the climate for specialist agriculture, the possibilities are really endless. Of course most of that boring stuff is the kind of thing she'll probably recruit some settlers to do while she fills her days with sport and leisure.
[Report This]Date: August 03 2022 5:28 AM Title: Alliance Day Preparations
Oh.
Someone so made a control setup to pilot power armour like a mecha. Possibly, say, a large control ball with life the life support system the person goes into and is then shrunk to fit in some tiny armoured black box spot deep inside. (besides the actual attempts at making mechs, grav and scifi materials and all).
Whoch then made me realize the power armour based sex androids that have been made. And all the size related stuff. Probably one of the few legal ways to truly abuse and toy with shrunken things, besides VR.
Author's Response: Big war mechs are probably a novelty in this setting, Zetans and humans both like their tanks, fighters, and starships. Still, I'm sure there are recreational uses of power armor technology, for those who can afford it anyway.
Date: August 03 2022 4:46 AM Title: Triumph Stolen
Oh no, if only there was a bunch of humans and large contingent of Zetan military ships nearby! Then there might be a fighting chance! But alas even if there were such a combination getting them to work together in such a situation would be damn near impossible; they'd also need an inspiring story to unify behind such as one mirroring what led to Nea's grandmother's ascension and the original alliance between Zetans and humans, but alas where could such a politically convenient coupling be found on short notice?! I mean if they were to pull it off it would make them all the kind of war heroes who could get showered in rewards and/or lenient sentencing for numerous heinous crimes. But alas such miracles can't possibly appear in some sci-fi romance and space adventure story, that's just not how things work at all.
Sarcasm aside this story is a lot of fun, just hope there's enough time left for an epic climax, big romantic payoff, and settling of the political drama built up so far all in the last few chapters. It seems like it might get a little tight tying up all the loose ends in just three more chapters.
Author's Response:
Yeah you're probably right lol, everyone's doomed, the story ends with the Cephalos eating everyone, there's nothing that could save the day now!
If things are getting too cramped we can always stretch the story out a bit, it's 15 chapters in my outline but that's hardly set in stone, and I'm thinking I'll probably add an epilogue, not a full length chapter, but something to cap the story off if that makes sense.
[Report This]Date: August 03 2022 4:21 AM Title: Alliance Day Preparations
Makes sense about the mass usage (besides the expense) of shrinking to decrease resources would not be popular idea. The robot tabletop farm could still go, needs only some simpler terraforming shelf/table terraforming to make work and get a good amount of shrunken seeds without needing more shrink ray. Then unshrink the food. So there probably some labs working on that specific thing in the background, and when everyone’s the tech will be there. And maybe shrink ray tech in general, for science and tech’s sake and no other reason. Maybe there some proposed plan somewhere for an emergency shrink storage to save the civilization, not that implementing it would have been a priority or method liked.
Fair about the armour compensating itself for the balance and posture. What kinds of things would Jolene want but hasn’t been able to get so far, both for practical and fashion.
Wonder what would be considered truly ridiculous for the power armour fashion circles.
And I probably should have said it in an earlier review, but you did a great job giving Jolene a cowgirl/old-west ascent without even accessing the spelling and grammar, somehow. Thats just an achievement.
Author's Response:
Power armor for the military is probably sleek and professional, same for law enforcement. Jolene's power armor is built slim because she wears it under her clothing a lot, it's comparatively pretty weak to more professional models, but it works well for what she does. Armors worn by royalty and rich people probably look like something out of Fire Emblem, huge obnoxious shoulder pads and capes included.
I'm glad Jolene's accent translates well, apart from a few select instances I don't like to lay it on too thick, mostly it's her choice of slang (to the point where Zetan translation software gets confused) and fashion that hopefully tells the reader what she probably sounds like.
Date: August 03 2022 3:54 AM Title: Triumph Stolen
@Greenanon Understandable if a role reversal between the two isn’t in the cards… but The current situation seems like a perfect setup to explore something along those lines based on Nea’s earlier comments
Either way, keep up the excellent work. Dying to find out how this story wraps up over these next few chapters!
[Report This]Date: August 03 2022 2:32 AM Title: Triumph Stolen
Great chapter, can’t wait to see where things go!
Any chance we’ll see some interactions between Nea and Kurt at their new respective sizes? Remember something like that being hinted at during their chat in chapter 10
Author's Response:
I don't usually write giant guy tiny girl scenes, but I can't rule it out! Nea definitely would want Kurt to take the lead from her, at least once.
[Report This]Date: August 03 2022 2:14 AM Title: Alliance Day Preparations
Sorry for clogging the reviews by the way.
Could talk on the discord server.
Author's Response:
It's fine, I don't really use discord so you can just toss ideas in the reviews
[Report This]Date: August 03 2022 2:13 AM Title: Alliance Day Preparations
Other shrunken comparison, since the crumbs worked (this shrink tech does break so many bits of reality) for eating at that size, would shrunken seeds and plats use normal dirt. Then a whole biosphere could be made in a room at the scale of the mansion (or terrarium), use normal nano or microdots to harvest and process (like wood for lumber), and use some other nanites that or some other performing tech (possibly also shrunk) to accelerate growth.
And why stop at table top or a small room. Cargo ships are cheep, relatively. similar maybe abandoned station or asteroid outposts.
Or otherwise just use to make food. Kiloacres of land from selves, smaller water usage, just a few bags of fertilizer, more controlled environment, all in a small warehouse, feed tens of thousands at the bare minimum. Have animals and insects too, like bees. It has to at least be used by some preper or ultra isolated types, or was at least considered by the gov to feed everyone. Whatever reasons for not if its didn’t.
Author's Response:
Shrinking bigger stuff requires more power, more advanced equipment, etc, the cannon Jolene had was a specialized piece of military equipment for example. Another thing to consider is that given the history with the shrink rays, a lot of people just don't want to be shrunk, like they fought a huge war with the Zetans to get to stay full sized having the government say "let's all shrink to end world hunger!" wouldn't go over well. The existence of additional planets to settle has taken a lot of the resource pressure off Earth anyway, that said yeah there's almost certainly a prepper colony somewhere in a shoebox with a sustained ecosystem.
[Report This]Date: August 03 2022 1:50 AM Title: Triumph Stolen
Well, this it a truly fucked situation. Thought I can probably the way out…
Hope Jolene walked enough in heeled to start running in them for this situation. This is where some kind of tech comes to negate all the issues with high heeled walking somehow. Wether gyro, gravity/weight alteration, or maybe use the nano-materials for the sole and heels to flex and assist walking, some other think, or a combo of them all. Besides also what extra could be given for power armoured ones, like rockets or a gravity generator powerful enough for flight(or ship grade shrunk to fit), and mag boots.
I do think thought that the existing town will have some successor with and even smaller scale, what with the cannon and the taste of the mansion.
Author's Response:
Power armor probably is great for your balance already, Jolene can probably get some additional accessories tailored in since hers is all custom anyways.
[Report This]Date: August 02 2022 11:51 PM Title: Alliance Day Preparations
INB4 chap.
Depending on how the party goes, Jolene’s crew could go and get the other yachts and spacecraft on the docs, get more evidence of Zeta forever, sell for more money, maybe a souvenir or two for her desk or quarters, or obviously use in some of the ‘activities’ with her crew.
But thats gong to be a lot of money from selling all those other yachts.
Author's Response:
Jolene's already cleaning up, the most valuable assets are the prisoners themselves.
[Report This]Date: August 02 2022 4:52 PM Title: The Plunge
Final act already and here I was hoping that this would reach "conquest of earth" levels of potential episodes with other sagas. Since unlike Conquest of Earth I like most if not all side characters in this one and I just wanted to see more of Kurt/Nea and Joey/Telma having to deal with further conflicts or in alien worlds. But I guess all good things must come to an end. I will be looking forward to the final half regardless of what you choose to do with this "franchise" going forward. Godspeed
Author's Response:
Conquest of Earth is more a collection of episodic adventures while this one is a novel style story with one narrative. The ending of this story isn't necessarily closing the book permanently on these characters or settings.
Glad you like it! I put a lot of work into planning the cast of this one, glad to see it was worth it!
Date: August 02 2022 9:47 AM Title: The Plunge
My plot reading sense is telling me the next Empress will be Jolene
Author's Response:
She's going to be asserting some authority sure
Date: August 02 2022 5:18 AM Title: The Plunge
I forgot to mention, does Zeta Forever really think they can replace an Empress by assassinating her and placing another on the throne just like that? Won't others think she's illegitimate or a usurper and see this as a coup?
Author's Response:
You might say Zeta Forever is not only unaware of how much Earth has changed, they're unaware of how much their own society has changed. Before the Cephalos and the invasion of Earth royal coups were common, routine even, so in that political climate yeah crowning Nea and storming the capital might have been effective, for a time. Today though? No way, not a chance in hell does the modern Zetan just shrug and go back to work.
Date: August 02 2022 5:06 AM Title: The Plunge
After Abduction is finished, will you do other stories in this universe? I would like to see a spin-off of Adam and Kira or Tayla, Craig and/or Liana.
Author's Response:
I usually like to take a break on a setting after a long story in it, but there is probably room for more stories in this universe.
[Report This]Date: August 02 2022 2:45 AM Title: Alliance Day Preparations
Unity, unity must be our watchword. You know that you cannot be free and slave at the same time. Simon Bolivar.
Zeta Forever... they are too crazy. If they achieve their goal, the Cephalos will destroy them. They will be like the unwitting avengers of the human race. It is a good example of what fanaticism can entail
Author's Response: Zeta Forever would tell you they'll just enslave those humans and use them as cannon fodder against the squids, a task which they believe would be easy because as Zetans they're so naturally superior to weak and cowardly humans. Would it work? Not a chance in hell, and definitely not in time to turn around and fight the squids.
Date: August 02 2022 1:28 AM Title: The Plunge
I'm gonna bet Tetra survived the attack and Lenais is fucked, even more fucked than she is anyway given what's pointed at her party right now I mean. Of course that does put Nea in just as bad of a position but it's hard to say she doesn't deserve to get fucked over after her little stunt and she'd probably prefer her mother alive than herself out of the firing line anyway. Still got to wonder how well Telma's just following orders defense is going to work at this point, humans are probably not going to give it much stock even if the Zetan miraculously adhere to that bit of legal shenanigans after all this.
Also typo: "admiring the site of" should be "admiring the sight of".
Author's Response:
The position for everyone is rapidly getting worse, except the Cephalos, those guys are on a roll. As for Telma, the whole thing is that the bodyguards are supposed to have the absolute confidence of the princess they're sworn to, so she probably wouldn't have been punished if things had ended back in Chapter 3. At this point, with terrorists, a coup, and military losses in the picture, Telma is kind of roped to Nea's fate for her part in things, there's a reason Telma's plan is run for the hills and hope for the best, and that's just the Zetan side of things, the humans as you noted probably wouldn't be too sympathetic to any defenses she would offer.
also typo fixed.
[Report This]Date: August 02 2022 1:14 AM Title: Alliance Day Preparations
Just realized Nea not liking qet but trying to like it was symbolism lol
Author's Response:
Yep! And like her eyes she's embarrassed about it.
[Report This]Date: August 01 2022 11:45 PM Title: The Plunge
Well, the terrorists so immediately dealt with after their assassination, morso if it was unsuccessful, by a human bounty hunter. And then everyone knowing that it happened removing tons of long readability, with anyone coming out of the woodwork being more easily targetable. The lack of leadership is also gong to cause enough chaos for these terrorists.
Author's Response:
Yeah shit's about to hit the fan for all factions, but Zeta Forever is about to have a very uhh... big problem on their hands.
[Report This]Date: August 01 2022 1:47 PM Title: Party Invitations
Actually, with the whole thing of Zetans trying out heels or wedges on their armour, Jolene’s crew had to have proposed to her to try some of them out while looking thorough that community for armour upgrades and were to get stuff. Obviously shrink rays gave a whole new angle and set of accessories. So whatever her opinion of them is and wether she’ll take up her crew ideas/recommendations, I guess we will have to see.
Author's Response:
I'm sure her crew will have "suggestions" when they see all the ways humans are used at the party