Reviews For Ember and Lazarus
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Reviewer: Maximus Signed [Report This]
Date: August 25 2022 4:44 AM Title: Chapter 1 -- Secrets and Lies

Wow, just caught up on this, fantastic stuff!




Author's Response:

Thank you! Really glad you like it

Reviewer: Gerbo Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: August 02 2022 1:59 AM Title: Chapter 1 -- Secrets and Lies

I think you do an excellent job writing out and describing the smutty scenes. Top tier stuff. 

If I can offer one piece of feedback, the scenes from Laz’s perspective need a little bit of work. Lax is described as being angry, enraged that he’s being ignored by his wife and/or advantage of, but then he immediately forgives her or it’s brushed off. So there’s a confrontation being set up, but there’s no payoff. So there’s just some tonal inconsistency there. 



Author's Response:

Thanks so much for your compliments and critiques. I always enjoy hearing from my readers! Regarding the emotional disconnect, the client that is commissioning these chapters has very specific ideas in mind for how he’d like the male protagonist to feel and react to what he’s experiencing. Perhaps I could do a better job of making these disparate ideas flow more smoothly and naturally 

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