Date: May 26 2022 4:41 AM Title: Chapter 1: Extending the Olive Branch
Following up that sweet ... sweet leaf story, its good to see you tackle a favored scenario of mine, the giantess bully who ends up becoming enamored with her target, or at least, that's how I think this story will go. I do have an affinity for girls named Katelyn, and she actually seems pretty sweet on the onset. I do like that you give us a taste of what her bullying was like, with that comment about Finn's mother, I hope she maintains that, even if she's trying to be nice. It's just consistent characterization, and it will be either something she gradually grows out of, or Finn discovers that he likes a little teasing now and then.
One critique I have is that the reason Katelyn becomes nice is sort of laid out for us to see all at the beginning. I believe a better choice would have been to gradually reveal the reason why she decided to be nice to Finn. We were told, not shown, the method behind her change of heart. Simply excluding her explanation, and leaving Finn to speculate that she's attempting some cruel prank I believe would have provided better characterization, and Finn would gradually learn to trust her later on.
But, I love me some cutsey romance between former enemies. It's a fun time, so I'll be sticking around.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your feedback! I understand that I need to work on showing, not telling, for future chapters. Hope you continue to enjoy!
Date: May 26 2022 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 1: Extending the Olive Branch
This story is a very fun cute little scenario, I like the idea and am interested in where this particular story could go. It seems there's a lot of potential with the relationship dynamic between Finn and Kate, and also with her being bigger than most buildings, it could very well lead to some interesting scenarios for the story and whatever happens in the next chapter.
I'm very interested in what happens next, though can't rate it much as we don't have the full picture. Keep up the good work, Anon!