[Report This]Date: December 26 2022 6:53 AM Title: Part One
Surprised I hadn't stumbled on this one before, but it's really good! I think you do a great job writing bratty characters, Dva has a really entertaining characterization, and my only wish in the first two was a bit more description of the toy's perspective, but I think the final chapter really nails it! Lu- I mean, poor gal. Really great. I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future!
Author's Response:
Honestly, cause I don't tend to do long-running stories that get updated, most of my stuff gets buried too fast for people to find it lol, but I'm glad you enjoyed!
I'll admit, writing bratty characters doesn't come all that naturally to me, but I do think D.va came across pretty well here. And I think the hope was to really build up the suspense and torment till that last chapter, so it's good to hear the final part lived up to that at the very least! And I know... so very luc-- unlucky, yes that. Definitely that.
And hope you enjoy more of what's to come down the line!
Date: April 18 2022 9:51 PM Title: Part One
I don't know the characters and I have no idea how much I'm missing because of that; as of chapter one, my preliminary review is - good job!!!
Author's Response:
Glad to hear you’re enjoying, mate, and thanks so much for the review! And hopefully that enjoyment continues through to the other two parts as well!
I’m sure it helps to be familiar with the D.va, but I tried to write it in a way where that wasn’t a necessary requirement, so you shouldn’t be missing much. Plus, there’s always the comic panels I’ve linked which should be able to fill you in on some of the visuals tied to the story!