[Report This]Date: March 01 2023 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Pretty good story. I'm not big into the anal play or the hard vore ending, but it was well written with a good setup.
Date: January 27 2015 4:20 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Dear P.Eddie, are you still with us? Do you still step along the Primrose Path? Yes, I'm still "watching my back" as you kindly advised. I shall not be anticipating your reply but it'll be a great pleasure to find a response from you.
[Report This]Date: January 05 2015 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Awesome !
Date: September 24 2011 10:08 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Great story, thanks for writing it.
Date: December 21 2010 6:42 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
I say fair enough
Age of shrinker/captor, etc - around 16-40
Age of shrinkee - around 15-20
Author's Response: Ah, yes, Sil; perfect ages. I still dream of being diminished to 4" plus and being used and abused - especially by a 14 plus girl. It's a pity I cannot send you some of my yarns that are not on site. I'm sure you'd like them. Did I not send you my email address?
Date: December 21 2010 4:03 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
The thesaurus thing was just an expression
i meant that i think you're being to formal,
and you're using a lot of big words i don't think are necessary.
Might just be me, but i think it just needs to be a bit simpler
(Sil is fine by the way)
Author's Response: Well, Sil, it's because I am a formal type. That's due to my job I was going to say 'profession' but I shall use the simpler word as you suggest. Anyway, I'm so glad you enjoyed my yarns. I do not write much nowadays but I do still imagine exciting scenes and have the notion of writing them for this site. However, as my description says: I much prefer such scenes with fully-grown subjects which are more realistic. What say you, my friend?
Date: December 20 2010 8:04 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
The plot is all well and good
and everything that happens is written clearly
overall very good
but some parts of this seems more like a report than a story
i think you need to ease up on the thesaurus :)
Author's Response: Well, Sil (excuse abreviation), I must thank you for your comment. I am rather puzzled how you came across this particular yarn. Was it the test piece or the story proper? Now why should I ease up on the thesaurus...is it the wording? I'd love to know because I do not use the thesaurus.
[Report This]Date: November 17 2009 10:18 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Hello Banfield i read this a while back only now have i made the connection with you,i really did enjoy this tale...i notice that her skin colour is your favorite.And her Afrcan lineage very clever,a most enjoyable story.
Amanda.
[Report This]Date: June 05 2009 10:49 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
I like your story
Author's Response: Well, larogei (strange title) thanks for your compliment although short - but better than none at all.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2009 7:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Apologies for not reviewing/rating earlier! I'm another of those who reads and then forgets to do the important things like feedback!
Banfield, I've said it before but I'll say it again: I LOVE your stories! You have an excellent way of using the English language to perfectly describe events and situations.
Thanks again for another superb story (and of course thanks to PE for posting the original!)
Author's Response:
Hello Big Al, it's a long time since you kindly posted your favourable comment. Does seem a pity that you dropped off. Like so many others, our mutual interest could reward you with further yarns...some different but of the same ilk. But there again, you may have lost all interest in the subject matter, or even deserted this site? Would like to know either way. Cheerio! Tony
Date: May 24 2009 3:09 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Thank you Stanley for your review/comments. It seems nobody else apart from perhaps Pope Eddie, has enjoyed my sequel - which is all rather disheartening. However, I enjoyed writing it and am enjoying the 2nd sequel.
Reason for the lower-casing of my name 'Banfield' is merely to keep in with the general usage of the computer - rather like that detestable expression "slash" instead of 'stroke' or 'oblique.' Another meaning for the word 'slash' is to take a pee as well as cut something to shreds with a sharp blade; hence my dislike of it.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2009 10:02 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
I enjoyed the suspense part of this, and the drama leading up to his insertion into Anna's anus and her vagina. I wish it were me, but not the parrt about being eaten alive --- unless I were to be regurgitated, then I would like it.
The story is well written.
Thank you, banfield. By the way, shouldn't banfield be capatalized? :)
I know many businesses have taken to eliminating capital letters, such as dairy mart, but that is incorrect. It should be Dairy Mart.
Date: May 22 2009 5:44 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Well, P.E; I've almost finished the 2nd sequel of Three Wishes and, like the victim, am in a dilemma; i.e.which choice to make? It's a pity I can't send you the piece to see which choice the victim/prey will choose. His protagonist is awaiting with increasing impatience. I know what you will say: Go ahead because I am just as impatient.
Date: May 22 2009 3:15 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
Quite honestly, Pope Eddie, I can't think of a better way to go. I'm writing another sequel. It's called "Three Wishes" I bet you can't guess what they are.....
Date: May 21 2009 5:30 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Prey
I thought I knew Anna quite well but it seems she has a VERY dark side. Nice story Tony.
Better watch your back my friend, I think she'll be out to get you!
Author's Response:
My dear Pope Eddie, this may come as a surprise after so long. My reason for contacting you is:- I have a short yarn that I am trying to post onto site but, for some unfathomable reason I cannot. I follow the right requisites but without success. I wonder, therefore, whether you would help me? I agreeable, let me know and I shall send you the story. I think you'd like it.
Banfield