[Report This]Date: May 08 2023 1:37 AM Title: Melony's Musk
Trippy, but very enjoyable. Said trippy-ness made this story very unique.
Date: March 20 2022 2:22 AM Title: Akari's Expedition
Cute story. A little hard to follow because of two reasons.
First, you need to divide up your paragraphs according to subject.
Second, the two girls names are almost identical, making it a bit confusing who is saying or doing what.
Otherwise a very entertaining story. Love how Aruze is so focused upon Akari's feet with her complete devotion and attention. A true foot worshiper's point of view, very nice indeed.
[Report This]Date: March 20 2022 1:57 AM Title: Maya's Massive Mishap
Good story, but you need to work on your paragraphs. Your story is a little bit hard to follow because you combine statements and subjects into one paragraph rather than dividing them into separate paragraphs which would clarify who is saying what and what action is going on.
Other than that, an interesting story.
[Report This]Date: February 26 2022 9:11 PM Title: Guilty Gear Giant Game
Top tier shit, my guy. I seriously think this is your best work, and I'm really really happy with how it turned out. Keep up the good shit.