[Report This]Date: March 03 2022 3:31 PM Title: Chapter 4
I would love a continuation of this one.
Author's Response:
Thank you. I will add to it when I find the time.
[Report This]Date: February 28 2022 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 1
Love the whole storyu just read the 3 chapters really good. The pace is nice and eveything is well written absolutely loving it cannot wait for chapter 4.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words. I appreciate it. -Arcovion.
[Report This]Date: February 25 2022 8:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
The story concept is great.
however; I don’t know if it’s this site that’s causing it tho but there seems to be a few issues with formatting on your piece. E.g dialogue not being in seperate paragraphs.
Other then that it’s a good start.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I appreciate it. I am glad you think the story concept is great. The formatting issues are my fault !
-Arcovion.
[Report This]Date: February 24 2022 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 2
Wow, I just read both chapters, and I just love Cindy’s playful banter as she warms up to Tom.
I’m also, loving the height difference to indirectly showcase that she has so much more physical power over him.
Even the simple moments such as boosting her up are quite sexy since she is much taller than him.
This final scene in the bed seems like a great setup for the next chapter. I love how she just rolled on top of him, trapping him, and keeping him close to her. I could easily imagine her rolling on top of him while they sleep and Tom is struggling to lift Cindy off him.
Anyways, I love this story so far and I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words. Glad you liked the story. Arcovion.