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Reviewer: kbDArt Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 21 2023 4:15 AM Title: An Unwise Investment

Good setup for a potentially great story, but the execution of the story down the stretch left a bit to be desired.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: April 30 2012 2:01 PM Title: An Unwise Investment

This story is intriguing. I don't think I've ever read a story in the second person before. I was expecting a constant "you did this" and "you did that" but actually it was decently written.

 

Reviewer: 101 Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 14 2011 8:53 PM Title: An Unwise Investment

a great story but by the M night shayamalan ending i was like: huh??

Reviewer: bellylover Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 22 2009 8:06 PM Title: An Unwise Investment

I liked this story, and was originally going to give it a 6/10 but...

...That hollywood ending bumped it up to a 9/10. That was so funny!

Reviewer: zol Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 06 2009 12:42 PM Title: An Unwise Investment

Already told you^^

Thanks for writing a new unaware story again :) Just wanted to rate it too of course^^

Reviewer: Stylesrj Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 05 2009 11:32 PM Title: An Unwise Investment

You know, if the shrink ray only lasts an hour, all you have to do is stay alive for that hour while being slowly digested and either you get yourself covered in guts, or the stomach streches to accomodate you :D

Either way, good story

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