[Report This]Date: December 02 2021 5:56 AM Title: In the Cinema Alone
I'd love to read more
Author's Response:
Thanks; this was a one-off but it does lean towards the style of my Sensus Supra series.
Date: December 02 2021 2:37 AM Title: In the Cinema Alone
Very, VERY nice story!
I love your lack of personal information regarding the story's subject. You left your point of view so ambiguous that anybody could be the subject.
I use a somewhat similar style, leaving out names, so that any guy could imagine himself being the subject. I usually, though not always, prefer shrunken males as the subject. You however, took it a step beyond, leaving any man or woman open to being the subject. BRAVO! Well done. Actually, quite incredible.
The story itself is pretty well written, with minimal grammatical errors {e.g. "The previews came to an end there was still no one else there" could be either "...to an end yet there was..." or "...to and end and there was..."}. That minute and readily dismissable complaint of mine takes nothing away from your terrific story. I am simply pointing it out. Hey, you can find twice as many mistakes in my stories, so do not take it to heart. You did great.
Your final paragraph is fantastic. It outshines the rest of your really good story. You could always continue this story; but for me, you left it perfectly for the reader's imagination to take it forward.
Again, BRAVO!
Author's Response:
Thanks, I appreciate the feedback - always good to point out errors as I can only catch so many myself! Glad you liked the ambiguity; I think it works alright on a story this length, it would be tricky to do a story much longer in the same way. Indeed it is fairly open-ended, I don't have plans to come back to it right now, but who knows maybe one day...
Really makes it worthwhile to hear such positive comments though, again, thanks!
[Report This]Date: December 01 2021 6:32 PM Title: In the Cinema Alone
This was great. A simple concept executed flawlessly, and the character is a lot of fun. I don't know if you're planning any follow-ups, but I'd love to hear from more of the folks she's toyed with.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm not planning a follow-up for this one right now, but it's always possible in future. It's quite similar in style to my Sensus Supra series, though; I did consider writing this as part of that series, but ultimately chose to go with the standalone route!