Reviewer: 1CoolDude Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2021 11:07 AM Title: Chapter 1

Your story has good potential if you were to maybe extend it and flesh it out with more detail and describe scenarios more thoroughly. Like go into detail about how the charge look or feel and their inner thoughts. Also it ne good to give your stories a once over before posting since right before the last paragraph there’s a huge gap that takes a good chunk of space.