Date: June 07 2022 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 20: Status Report
Maria Lancelot is actually alive here?
Interesting detail.
Author's Response:
Given that this is a fanfiction and not the original Freezing (obviously), there will be a LOT of tweaking here and there with certain characters throughout this little project of mine. Technically, Maria IS alive, in a state of suspended animation within the Ravensborne Nucleotide at West Genetics (though admittedly, she's not exactly "out and about" like others within the Freezing universe). I've decided to have her alive and physically active in this story, though she'll be largely behind the scenes for now, more-or-less like Gengo by comparison. Anyway, glad you're intrigued.
Date: May 27 2022 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 18: Classroom Follow-ups, New Info, & the Campus Honeypot
Miyabi's portrayal is actually pretty accurate.
Liking the story so far.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the input. She basically comes off as the "town bike" of West Genetics from what I've seen, always trying to play the extremely overt seductress and all that.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2022 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 17: New Faces, Both Good and Bad
Hello, my fellow Readers, my Esteemed Author.
I enjoy seeing yet again another chapter of this story. I’m curious as to who might the Pandoras of Michael are inspired by. One character that comes to mind is Lora Croft, but the others are a mystery to me.
Good descriptions all around. Shame what happened to Michael, but I hope we get to see more of him and his partners. Interested to see what this young man’s personality is like.
Honestly, I thought we were going to see Miyabi here, given her actions in canon, but call me surprised.
I’m definitely with Satellizer on the danger of the three bullies. Something ain’t right about them, and I’m getting the vibe of the psychopath assassins sent by Chevalier to ‘deal’ with Gengo later in canon. Going to want to keep an eye on them. What is especially concerning is that the three were confident enough in either their strength, usefulness, ignorance of others, or a combination of the three to attempt something like this. Given their overall abilities, a Pandora’s body alone is classifiable as a lethal weapon from every conceivable angle, (ignoring their Volt Weapons, Volt Texture, and Pandora Mode) so Petty and her backup could reasonably be charged with Assault with a Deadly Weapon, along with the Intimidation with a Deadly Weapon/ Unlawful Use of Force. And if a fight actually broke out, and Michael was hurt, or worse killed in the crossfire regardless of who did it, there is a chance that (depending on the laws that govern West Genetics) the three could even be charged with some variation of Manslaughter or 3rd Degree Murder.
This raises some serious red flags, both about the nature of the Pandoran system and Chevalier ranks, and how well humanity is actually fairing against the Nova if people like Petty are allowed to remain in the system, given that over half of the world’s female population is capable of undergoing the transformation.
More importantly, we have our first overt display of supernatural ability! Was that merely as basic Accel, or perhaps a more advanced one, given that Kazuya wouldn’t have the ability to even perceive their movements right now? From what I remember, Illusion Turn is, in a practical sense, outright teleportation, and thus instant, but is an extremely rare High-End Skill even for Third Years. If a simple Accel that any Third Year can get her hands on can pull off what was shown, then wow. That would radically changed quite a few professions once Pandora start entering public sphere.
A thought just occurred to me. As mentioned above, 50% (at minimum) of the world can make the change but is this ALL women, or simply girls being born after the introduction of the Pandora system. Is it even possible to introduce Stigmata to an already adult woman and have her successfully become a Pandora?
That is all I can say for now. Curious to see what their next class will be, and who the next group of Pandora Transfers are.
Good Day.
Author's Response:
Once again, I'm a little taken back by how lengthy and detailed this review is (though certainly pleased that my story has kept your attention thus far). Here are some answers/explanations for your inquiries:
Regarding the new Pandoras I've inserted thus far (and their Limiter), there will be more about them in the next chapter. I don't want to give too much away, other than saying that this latest batch of Pandoras are basically video game characters that I've re-imagined and inserted into the Freezing universe. I'll leave on this one hint they all have in common: Ubisoft.
Sorry about there being no Miyabi. My mind twists and turns with what I plan to write about (usually on a whim), so I figured that I'd give her some quality character introduction on the next chapter, given how much I gave to these new characters.
You're definitely onto Petty and the other two. I basically decided to rehash their backgrounds so that they're students at West Genetics upon Kazuya's arrival. I'm still considering how big a role I'll have for them in the chapters to come (wanna leave myself some wiggle room on where to go with them).
On the matter of the new transfers, it'll still be a little bit until they show up (though I'll try to speed up time so that they show up sooner rather than later).
As to the broader questions, I'll confess that I've yet to set more detailed parameters as to how the world operates with Pandoras and Chevalier fit into the equation. For now, my supposition is largely thus (unless I elaborate with more detail in future chapters): Unless Pandoras are basically kept under lock and key by the apparatus of Chevalier and Genetics, then they're bound to interact as they do with the broader public from time to time (as shown here and there in the anime/manga). The only real difference here is their size, which I admit would probably have a lot of normal-sized people getting pretty nervous at the thought of living in a world with several amazons averaging between 10 and 12 feet in height. The general assumption I'm riding with is that most Pandora are generally good and law-abiding (with exceptions here and there embodied in those like Petty and her cohorts, of course).
I'll admit that you have me stymied on the topic of variations of Acceleration. I'll have to revisit the Freezing wiki to re-educate myself on the finer points and elaborate on that in future chapters. And as for compatibility of women who can become Pandora, I'll try to have something more conclusive elaborated on that as well, though it probably won't be for few chapters I confess. I'm still focused largely on character development and emotional connections between Kazuya and his harem (which isn't even at its full capacity yet...I know, I'm being greedy, but the title does have the words "Big Harem" in it, in my defense.
Hope that answers some questions, and looking forward to your own fanfiction whenever you're ready to put it out there for everyone to read.
Date: May 10 2022 3:12 AM Title: Chapter 16: First Group Lunch
Hello, my fellow readers, my Esteemed Author.
Is it me, or is our Esteemed Author accelerating his pace?
Yes, Chiffon definitely speed-ate just so she could snuggle. That or she Illusioned Turned it into a different dimension. Regardless of the choice, the answer, Kazuya, is yes.
So, now we have Kaho in the spotlight, and Chiffon getting some time in. Chiffon is Chiffon, and that playfulness certainly helps to separate her from the fact that she is, unless something has changed in-universe, the most powerful and dangerous Pandora at that table. “The Smiling Monster” indeed. Kaho’s innocence and cuteness is also pretty good, though I don’t have much to say about her in particular.
The first time that I’ve seen the Pandoras act in a militaristic fashion in the story since up to this point it has been nothing but romance. Bit jarring, but it's to be expected given that they are Super Soldiers at a military academy. Though Ingrid is certainly the one I would expect to pull rank from what I remember of her canon personality.
Something tells me Miyabi is about to make an appearance, but who would the other female and the man be? Could this potentially be a normal-sized woman, since if it was two Pandoras, things would have most likely gone rather loud from the first few seconds? The cliff-hanger draws me in further, especially now that we’re going to get an OC character. I can only wonder who the OC will be.
Good Day.
Author's Response:
Hello once more. Here's my response.
With regards to Kaho, from what I've seen in the Freezing anime, Kaho seemed to have something of a soft spot for Kazuya in my opinion. So the notion of breaking the ice with him and having a tender moment with him was an amusing concept to entertain, though she might feel nervous being both a first-year student and in the presence of Pandoras who are senior in rank to her.
As for Chiffon, given that she's the top-ranked Pandora at West Genetics and Student Council President, it's not too farfetched in my opinion for her to pull rank and exploit an opening when it presents itself. The idea of Chiffon having a relationship that goes from friendly to romantic with regards to Kazuya is another hypothetical that I personally consider plausible and very entertaining.
About Miyabi, I actually do have a planned appearance for her in the next chapter, though perhaps not what you're expecting. I don't want to give away too many surprises, but she'll get some screen with our main character and his lovely ladies, that much is sure.
As for the OC, its probably the one that makes me the most nervous in this whole thing. Inserting a brand new character gives a lot of room for possibility, but it's a gamble in my opinion. Hopefully, this person I've created will be amusing in one way or another. As things stand right now, this OC is going to be mainly a side character, popping in and out throughout this fanfiction.
Glad you're enjoying this so far, and I hope to see more of your fanfiction in the future as well. Until then...
Date: May 10 2022 3:11 AM Title: Chapter 15: New Classes, Familiar Faces
Hello, my fellow readers, my Esteemed Author.
I certainly enjoyed the rather light-hearted nature of this chapter, seeing further interactions between the characters. It is good to see Kazuya’s other partners get some screen time with our Limiter Protag. I remember Ganessa, since she was one of the first introduced in the manga (Poor Arthur bro), I vaguely remember Ingrid from her first duel with Satellizer, and I completely forgot about Creo. The serious brigade has arrived and watching their defenses crumble to the gentlemanly aura of Kazuya, their subsequent melting warms my heart. I honestly was awwing a little at Ganessa’s reaction.
That does bring up a point. What happened to the canon Limiter partners for Kazuya’s group? Perhaps they’ll end up being the dude-bro friends of our lucky Limiter and be simply friends with their AU Pandora counterparts in the future?
Good to see that they have a course that teaches them how to interact with the rest of the world and develop themselves as people. The war isn’t destined to drag on forever, and once the fight and the stabbing finally stops, the Pandoras, especially the ones born into the generations where Pandoras had already shaped the world, need to be able to fit into society, not simply serve as soldiers their entire lives.
Currently, the whole desperate fight for survival has unified all of mankind, but how long will that last until old grudges, ideological differences, or just plain desires for conquest, glory, or hatred rear their heads up? And the knowledge of how to create Pandora has been made widespread, so each country would have the ability to create their own Pandora to fight in wars. Gengo and Maria gave the world a sword and shield to fight the Nova, but they also opened ‘Pandora’s Box’ (Title Drop: Roll Credits). Even if he has kept the secrets on how to create Pandoras totally to himself, the fact that they are possible means that sooner or later, others will figure it out as well, if not outright stealing samples or information from Gengo.
Allegiance to humanity is one thing, but that can only really work if something overwhelming in danger is there to justify it, otherwise, Pandoras and Limiters will still have love and loyalty to their own people, their homes, their countries, their faiths. The Genetics facilities and Chevalier, despite being world-spanning organizations, will be influenced by their home countries, and are still staffed by people, not unflinchingly loyal automatons.
How effective it will be in the long run is unknown, but it's a good precaution.
Good Day
Author's Response:
Appreciate the details in these reviews, as always. Here goes my response:
I'm glad you're enjoying the interaction between Kazuya and the lovely ladies of his harem. It gets kind of tricky trying to juggle the interaction and dialogue choices between the characters, especially when they end up being in large groups like I've laid out. I'll most likely end up breaking them into smaller groups in subsequent chapters down the line so as to give them more enriching moments between them and Kazuya so the little casanova with a heart of gold can win them over one-by-one.
I'm glad you like how I've tried to diversify the curriculum at Genetics facilities. It's tricky trying to find that balance between being a formal school and being a military installation for people who are in their high school years. The Pandoras and Limiters are both soldiers and students, at least the way I've perceived it anyway, not to mention that they are coming of age and learning about themselves and interacting with each other as teenagers, with all the emotional baggage that can come with.
Regarding the other Limiters in the series, I have an idea on getting them some face time within the broader story (Arthur in particular), though admittedly it will be limited (pardon the pun) compared to that of Kazuya and his lovely ladies.
I must confess, you've delved into the specifics of the world I've conceptualized even more than I have when I started this. I might try to dedicate a chapter here or there on the broader global geopolitics and power struggles between Gengol Aoi and elements in both Cheavalier and the broader world. But for now, most of my efforts will be on Kazuya and his flower garden of women.
Thanks for the review. It gives me perspective on what direction I take the story, and as such, it is appreciated. Until then...
Date: May 07 2022 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 15: New Classes, Familiar Faces
More Pandora are going to come? Interesting. I wonder who they'll be.
Author's Response:
I don't wanna give it away (keeps the suspense and excitement going and all that). One hint I'll give is that they are characters within the Freezing franchise, not ones I've created. So if you've read the manga or seen the anime, they should be familiar.
[Report This]Date: May 05 2022 3:43 AM Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
Im really enjoying this i would recommend doing the anime hxh ( cant think of name fully just know its about weak mc who can fight buts weak how can charge up fighting girls with cuddling) or infinte stratos or sammuri girls with yamito
Know back to my review love the world building but got to ask the bedroom is it 1 massive bed or 1 massiblve bed with small beds in room two? Also how can a man take that much teasing in 1 day and not relive himself no mater how much of a gentleman he is its torture yet he falls asleep?!!!
Author's Response:
Glad you're enjoying this. A funny thing about the suggestions you made is that I've considered doing a similar story with Infinite Stratos (which I might assuming I bring one of my current projects to an end). And if you're talking about Majikoi Oh Samurai Girls, that's an anime that I've enjoyed but didn't consider turning into a GTS-themed fanfic, though it would be an interesting challenge to take on.
As for the other part, while my descriptive powers regarding the bedroom might leave some confusion, I intended it to be a colossal bedroom with a bed big enough to fit several dozens of Pandoras, so that there would be plenty of space for all of them to lay about without feeling cramped. Basically that means that everyone has their own pillow and blanket, should they have need of them.
Now for the last part: As for the teasing which Kazuya is undergoing, I love the sexual angst in a story like this, where one man is surrounded by a flower garden (or perhaps in this case, a forest) of towering, powerful beauties who don't mind sharing him. And while a lot of men would probably let their baser instincts take hold and start deflowering these lovely ladies (or at the very least rub one out), I prefer Kazuya to stay a gentleman as much as possible and be considerate to these women, preferring to see them as people and not as sexual trophies.
Anyway, glad you liked this enough to post a review.
[Report This]Date: May 01 2022 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 14: Getting to Know You
Greetings, my fellow Readers and esteemed Author.
I Wouldn’t call it prudish to be concerned over being unable to wrap thine head around the idea that in less then a week, more a day, you now have about a dozen Amazonian Supersoldiers practically smothering you with love and affection from out of nowhere. And the concern about not being able to fully provide a loving relationship to each is something to consider. Favorites will naturally form and there will be fallouts between Kazuya and one of the girls, or between the girls themselves. It is inevitable in any relationship for problems to arise, and this Kazuya certainly comes off as someone who doesn’t want to break their hearts or hurt them emotionally. (Let’s just ignore what the potential danger of jilting a PANDORA could entail for later…)
Saying that situation would take getting used to is an understatement, especially if Kazuya wants to maintain that standard of being a gentleman while still working with his Pandoran partner’s desires. That each woman wants to be there is sure to put some relief in Kazuya. Though given that they are still technically military personnel/assets and Gengo in the background up to something no doubt, there’s always going to be a bit of ambiguity whether their choice was “I volunteered” or “I got Volunteered” would put that worry right back.
Good to see that the girls, while certainly very open with Kazuya, are trying to pump the breaks and not go full hog on our poor little limiter. There definitely are going to have to keep an eye on each other so they don’t try to pull too quickly ahead, if Satellizers reactions are anything to go by. Though I would find it chuckle worthy if it was one the serious girls like Ingrid who cracks first and tries to move past Third base and straight to home.
Looking forward to seeing how the school works.
A humble request would be that Kazuya has a dude friend, or two. Every Harem Protag-kun needs a fellow bro to commiserate with when not with their love interests on occasion. It’ll let Kazuya (and the viewer) get a breath of fresh air, before getting back to real meat of the story.
My apologies for grammar mistakes uncaught.
That’s all for now. Stay safe Jim.
Good Day.
Author's Response:
Once again, I'm a bit knocked over by the level of detail in this review. Here's my response to at least some of it:
I'll confess that when I started this project, I sort of aimed high in giving Kazuya a rather large harem (of which it's not even yet complete). The risk in taking that route is somewhat limited character development and interaction between Kazuya and his many, many partners. Without giving too much away, I kind of planned things out where Kazuya ends up being shared and the Pandoras "take turns" with him both in and out of the bedroom to make a somewhat level playing field. Some might see that as taking an easy way out in terms of storytelling, but I've seen that route done in other harem-themed works of fanfiction (successfully, in my opinion).
I appreciate your take on analyzing the emotional conundrum Kazuya finds himself in. While a lot of guys would probably be jumping like a kid on Christmas Day being surrounded by so many presents, I'm trying to present Kazuya as a guy who doesn't just think with his lower member. From what I've seen of the Freezing manga/anime series, Kazuya is a gentleman at heart, so I'm trying to have him act as such in this fanfiction and pursue meaningful relationships with his partners and care about their feelings as women and not simply proverbial notches to add to his belt, so to speak.
Glad you're enjoying the interactions and playful competition I have going on between the Pandoras. Sometimes it's tricky on whom I want the spotlight to be on between the women in each chapter. It usually ends up being big group outings and me determining which Pandora is going to speak as the scene plays out in my head as I'm typing it out. I'll try to remedy that in the future by having smaller numbers of characters per chapter, for the sake of further character development and meaningful interaction between Kazuya and each of his partners on an individual basis.
As for having a male friend in the midst of all of this, I have an idea cooking up on that end to help Kazuya get some perspective and how Limiters see things from their end.
Anyways, I'm glad that this story is getting such rich and detailed reviews from you. Hopefully, I'll keep your attention with this project of mine. Thanks again for reading.
[Report This]Date: April 30 2022 10:08 AM Title: Chapter 13: New Home
I’m enjoying the story so far. While I’m not too much a fan of Harem or Steamy, certainly not Incest, the premise alone has drawn me in, Hook, line, sinker, similar to the original manga. The execution has been on point, beginning to end.
Keep at it, I would hate to see this story get the same treatment like the Manga.
One thing I would note is to refrain from repetition. Especially when talking about the characters looks and such. By now, we know that they could give Aphrodite a run for her money. It also pops up in a couple other areas, though I can’t immediately recall where. Just a thought/critique.
Beyond that, I would like to see more world-building of this now more matriarchal society, plus some fight scenes where Kazuya finally has the truly “Super Human” part of the the Super Soldier of a Pandora reinforced.
Two last thoughts before I go.
With E-Pandora being an apparent success, what’s the current Pandora viability? Originally, it was about 50% of women can become Pandoras, but the E-Pandora should be able to drive up that number.
Second, Kazuya feels a bit…, young let’s say, being at 15 with this kind of attention. 18+ with everyone aged further to match would fit better, in my opinion. Or maybe it’s Gengoi up to his antics again.
Good Day.
Author's Response:
Wow. This is a lot to take in. Here goes....
I'm glad this story has gotten your attention. I know I tend to get repetitive at times with appearance of female beauties. It's an Achilles heel of mine, in a way. I'll try to refrain from it with the current characters, thought I plan on bringing more characters into this project over time.
As for action scenes, I'll try to have something cooked up once Kazuya becomes acclimated to life on campus. I've got something in the works on that end.
I didn't give too much thought on elaborating further about the matriarchal society as far as percentage of women who are Pandora on a global scale. I'll see if I can come up with something to address that in further chapters.
While Kazuya is a bit young, given that Pandoras generally pair up with Limiters who are junior to them in age, I figured that this wasn't too much of a stretch. Plus, I perceive Kazuya as having significant mental maturity for his age, so a gap of a few years doesn't come off as too odd in my opinion.
Hope this addresses some things. Again, I'm glad you're intrigued by this story. Thanks for reading.
Date: April 04 2022 2:39 PM Title: Chapter 12: More New Faces
Is Miyabi Kannazuki going to play a role in this story? Just curious.
Author's Response:
I've considered adding her into this, but not necessarily as a member of Kazuya's harem. My apologies if that's somewhat of a letdown.
Date: March 27 2022 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
I've never been a big anime fan but this take catch my attention.
Author's Response:
I can't promise or guarantee anything, but I hope you'll find it amusing here and there. I'd recommend either watching the anime or viewing the manga to get a better understanding of the Freezing backstory.
[Report This]Date: February 06 2022 3:52 AM Title: Chapter 9: First Day of Class
Come on man :" this just so unfair for us male readers....at this rate all of the top female even the teachers will love him. Tbh i want to rate this with 1 since im so jealous but yeah cant deny this chapter is too good for me so 10/10 for sure
Author's Response:
In my defense, the story's title has "big harem" in it, so yeah, Kazuya is going to end up being quite the ladies man throughout this story. Anyway, glad you enjoyed this chapter.
[Report This]Date: January 16 2022 6:34 AM Title: Chapter 8: Breakfast and New Faces
All the top chicks are now his friends...cant wait for all of them to gather at 1 place
Author's Response:
And the harem isn't even complete yet :)
[Report This]Date: January 03 2022 1:58 AM Title: Chapter 7: Sweet Dreams, Kazuya
Finally kazuya having the best time in his life for now, more girls will come for him so he better be prepared.
Happy new year mate, wish you all the best for 2022.
Cant wait for keitaro days too :)
Author's Response:
Glad you're enjoying things so far. Rest assured, there are plenty other Pandora who I have in mind for later chapters. For me, the trick is gauging how many Pandora I can fit in a chapter while giving them adequate time to get hot and heavy with Kazuya.
As for the Love Hina fanfic I'm working on, I should have another chapter out in the next few days. Hope it'll amuse you in equal measure.
Date: December 06 2021 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 6: A Quick Bite and Quicker Confessions
I like where this is going so far.
Author's Response:
Glad that you're enjoying it. Hopefully, I'll hold your attention to this story for a while longer.
Date: December 06 2021 12:43 PM Title: Chapter 6: A Quick Bite and Quicker Confessions
First day and look what he got lol
Author's Response:
Given the title of this project, Kazuya is going to become something of a "ladies man" pretty quickly as the story progresses. Glad you're enjoying things so far.
Date: December 06 2021 8:54 AM Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
So that Maria barly talks at all even ignores being worshiped but is then mating some rich tech nerd all of a sudden? *shrugs* thats a pretty 180 degree turn in personal behaivor.
Author's Response:
I don't want to give away the broader Freezing plot line and spoil it for others in this response. If you want to know more about specific characters, feel free to visit the Freezing fandom web page. Here's the link.
https://freezing.fandom.com/wiki/Freezing_Wiki
Date: November 22 2021 10:58 AM Title: Chapter 5: Cherry Blossoms, Pairing Up, and Forwardness
2 at a time dude...lucky bastard lol.
Great job, i love the development you put in into this.
Cant wait for more
Author's Response:
Glad that you're enjoying it so far.
Date: October 29 2021 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 4: Carnival
Thx for the update and i hope you're ok by now.
No surprise kazuya "friends" are the best of the best pandora available and i think this kaho and ganesha will join his harem in the future.
Btw im just asking when you said "by the end of november" you mean that you're gonna continue keitaro for the next few weeks? Just asking :v
Author's Response:
Glad that you're enjoying this fanfic of mine. I'm in between jobs right now, so I'm still in a bit of a funk, but I appreciate the concern.
You're pretty much spot-on with where I've planned things regarding this Freezing fanfiction. I don't want to give much away, but chances are good that the more a Pandora is mentioned in this fanction, then chances are good that she's going to end up being in the harem at some point.
As for my Love Hina fanfic, I'll try to keep that one alive, but I've hit a case of writer's block on that piece. Hopefully I'll find the drive to help motivate me into continuing that story in the coming weeks, but I can't promise anything on that just yet.
Date: October 23 2021 11:09 AM Title: Chapter 3: Kazuya's Family
Dont push yourself too hard....have some rest to clear your mind.
For the story i think kazuya has the same personality like keitaro, he is smooth af and likeable for most(maybe all) of the girls...so im guessing that the every top level pandora will be fighting to get his attenttion.
Thx for the update
Author's Response:
I'm glad this story has caught your eye as well. And yeah, Kazuya has a sort of "Mr. Nice Guy" persona like Keitaro in some ways, so that's why I figured I'd take a crack at a fanfiction in the Freezing universe as well as the Love Hina universe.
Thanks for the concern regarding my mental state too. I'm in between jobs right now, so I'm kind of in a mental/emotional funk at the moment. I write on this site at times to get my mind off that sort of thing; it's just a matter of having available time when I'm not doing job searches and all that.