Reviewer: Avid Reader Signed [Report This]
Date: May 24 2021 4:26 PM Title: Alice from Wonderland

Your writing has a very interesting quirk:

Why do you use a tiny capital "ɢ" instead of "g"?

"[...], when he realized straiɢhtaway that all the crows had flapped their winɢs[...]"

"[...]that’s why she’s a balloon now…"

How Alice briefly recounted her Adventures in Wonderland and behind the Mirror was really reminiscent of Lewis Carroll's complicated writing style, well done.

"He felt her blue eye lustinɢ motionless on him, the warm and soft breath on top of his head, the ɢlossy mouth ɢettinɢ closer and closer. She licked her lips hunɢrily and soon he realized he was in her hands.

””Just one more try, Sir”” "

And try she did. Double unfortunately it did change Alice this time. She didn't shrink neither grew, but she realized that she didn't dislike the taste of human meat... Rather it was... delicious... This simple realization would've a ripple effect which would unleash a unknown gargantuan horror to the World. Being a "biggie meanie giantess" for the rest of her life suddenly didn't seem too unappealing to the young girl turned ginormous anymore. Not if it meant that she could've people on her menu every day... Alice's mouth watered by the thought alone... - That the end of the Story made me immediately think of no less than eight lines of outro shows how well made it is.

Also it's surprsing and commendable that you managed to make Alice a voracious giantess without her acting too OoC.

All in all a great outing that deserves a full 10 points rating.

Author's Response:

Thank you for your 5 star evaluation. Did I imitate Lewis Carroll's style? :) I actually went on my own because I haven't read his books, besides the fact that the italian translation would be different, but I'm glad I've given you true Alice in Wonderland vibes.

About letter G... that's a mystery! ... I have an obsessive-compulsive disorder against tiny letter "g", it makes me nervous writing that tiny "g", so it's an obstacle to my writing.