Date: July 31 2022 1:17 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Surveying the Scene
A nice ode to Lovecraft. But, you HAVE to pay better attention to the gender-based pronouns! Too many cases of the girl being called "he." Unless you're ultimately planning to reveal that "she" is actually hermaphroditic.
Author's Response:
Oh jeeze I gotta go back and do some edits of some of these chapters, my autocorrect on word loves to slaughter sentence structure and pronouns in a way that seemingly eludes me. But no, I assume they're just word cutting the s off a she in this case. Pain in the ass, but meaning to go back and edit for sentence structure and errors like that again anyways so I guess it gives me a good reason. XD
[Report This]Date: November 10 2021 9:26 AM Title: Chapter 10 - Cram Session
I just love how erotic these last few chapters have been. Also, I like how detailed this specific bedroom scene is.
Usually, these moments last just a few paragraphs, but you got good dialogue, amazing reactions, and a phone call to go along with it.
It’s just great to see a creative yet fun way for a giantess to toy with a tiny person. Also, he’s punishing him too so I don’t even feel bad for him. In fact, I love it. As she said, it was a perfect form of punishment for Dylan and I hope she in fact does take him to school and keeps him inside all day. Haha!
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: November 02 2021 7:13 AM Title: Chapter 5 - The Missing Detective
Great read. Really emersive storytelling. I look forward to the next chapter.