[Report This]Date: March 15 2021 5:30 AM Title: Part 5
Amazing story!
I just love the ending! The prison wordplay and how this assignment for her became very beneficial for her.
The shower scene was also very exciting, just the different positions they did and how she dominated him throughout the story.
I like how she was acting in the beginning and once the guy messed up, she became her true self and took advantage of the situation.
Once again, great story and I can't wait for the next one!
Date: March 11 2021 2:03 AM Title: Part 5
Great ending to a terrific story. Very well done my friend.
My only criticism, an occasional spelling error or misused word {e.g. "sinks" instead of "syncs"}.
That said, your story had incredible content. As I noted in a previous post, your description of him shrinking against Agent Aurora's skin.
The fact that all that happened was a dirrect result of the drug lords own actions; pretty much absolving Agent Aurora of anything she did.
The reverse timelime, leading Aurora to try to piece together ther previous nights events. Who hasn't woke up after a night of partying trying to remember the events of the night before? {worse words in the world to hear: "Do you remember what you did last night?" Stil sends shivers down my spine.}
The ending itself, leaving much for the reader to ponder about. Biological needs for air, food, bathroom use aside; do those needs even still exist for someone shrunken. Being imprisoned, either for life or just for an unknown period of time, inside Agent Aurora's womb as she simply walks away from the scene of the crime is pretty hot.
Please keep up writing such great stories.
The drug lord
[Report This]Date: March 10 2021 7:29 PM Title: Part 5
Excellent story!
I know what you mean by your observation that telling the story from a woman's perspective is difficult. So - good effort!
Date: February 25 2021 2:29 AM Title: Part 3
Ok, this chapter fills in a gap in size change now that you posted it in correct order.
Love the way Aurora uses him as her sextoy even though he is in physical size too smalle to satisfy her; yet his small size all the more stimulating to her.
If you would not mind, I'd like to go back to a paragraph from Chapter 2: "And I could feel it. Every so slowly, his skin sliding across mine. Where it stuck, the tension would build up, and then it would slide all at once, a fraction of an inch. With every second, every rise and fall of my chest, I felt like I was covering more and more of him."
That is such an important and erotic description of the shrinking process that I must commend you for it. What a wonderful, detailed, and beautiful decription of someone shrinking while against somebody else. BRAVO!!!!! Well done and exceptionally well written.
I notice very few reviews for your story. This is a shame. You have one of the best stories going.
If I were to offer any suggestion, even though you seperate present recollections from past memories by noting * paragraphs; you may want to consider a different font / italizied used to disguinguish present from past more difinitively.
Can't wait for Chapter 5!
Date: February 21 2021 3:08 AM Title: Part 4
Uugh!!! I was so looking forward to the next chapter; but you accidentally reposted chapter 3 for chapter 4.
Please kindly repost with the next chapter 4.
Such a great story.
Author's Response:
Goodness! You're half right; I misposted a chapter. But the one that was wrong was that I misposted chapter 3 with chater 4, not chapter 4 with chapter 3. Regardless, that's still a missing chapter's worth of content, so I'll fix it now.
I made this error because I'm trying to upload my stories a chapter ahead on DeviantArt. Whoops. Thanks for pointing it out.
[Report This]Date: February 07 2021 10:03 PM Title: Part 3
Fantastic story GrinWin!!
Date: February 07 2021 3:29 AM Title: Part 3
I really like how you combine the tantalizing build up with Aurora slowly regaining her memories of the previous night's events.
You have a very gratifying writing style. You keep the subject matter going, not bogged down on endless descriptions; yet you tell enough for the reader to get a vivid image of what is transpiring.
Side note. Question: What are the worst 8 words to ever hear after a night of partying? Answer: "Do you remember what you did last night?"
Author's Response:
That's great! It's good to know that the story came out sounding the way I wanted. This story was a weird for me in many ways, so I honestly had no idea how it was going to fare.
Date: January 26 2021 3:28 AM Title: Part 2
Fantastic story!!! I love the turn about regarding who is shrinking.
Agent Aurora's use of the drug lord as her sex toy is pretty hot. The way she looses control and forgets her training in responce to her own sexual lust is described quite well.
I also like how you move the story along, not bogged down on to much description of any particular incident {a major failing of my own writing}.
Please continue this story.
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks! I'll keep it up until it's over, that's for sure.