I just wanted to mention that I loved the cliffhanger and the tension present on the last scene, as well as the possible emotional implications for Aubreigh - the chapter was written to seem like she feels bad for the way she treated them and wad ready to apologize herself, only to find out that her mother has denied her that right for one or two of them. Excited for the next chapter and I'm all for pushing the stakes here.

Boy, I hate to see Aubreigh doubling back. She was shaping up so nicely. Try not to get cornered in a back-and-forth kind of situation, because it's really annoying to keep the story going from that point on. I know what I'm talking about there, sadly.

I think in total, this chapter (Family Drama) was a bit lackluster and overloaded at the same time. There's so much going on, things changing really fast and very little development. The crushing at the end didn't feel like it actually served a purpose.

Just leaving this here as some constructive (and real) criticism. I still love this story a lot and I've been checking practically every hour since your last upload if there's been an update. I mean, this story has so much potential: the family life, the company (oh my god the company!), general society and so on.

Natalie works because she is manipulative, callous, selfish and a number of other awesome things. When she starts to care, second-guess herself or generally show weakness, a large part of her character becomes lost. To me it feels like this was the case here. Remember how she killed those three people in "The Drive Back Home". Two were murdered out of annoyance or convenience and the third just as a sort of prank. In one or two paragraphs, you encapsuled pages of character building, putting the crown on everything you built her up to. This time, she panics, she can't control herself, she cries, she kills someone accidentally and then someone else without even looking who it is - all to teach some lesson to Thomas? It doesn't make sense to me.

When she wanted to kill Brian, that was SHE in the flesh, although she would probably have made sure his family can see her kill him, just out of spite. She chickened out of that one on some really weird pretext, wanting him to tell lies on her behalf that would have accomplished...what exactly? And why would she eat somebody that's been drenched in her own foot sweat for several hours? That's disgusting.

My criticism always sounds harsher than I mean it. Really, no hard feelings. I just love this story so much. Please do with this critique what you will.

Cheers

Ok (takes a deep breath and exhales) a lot to unpack here.

Andrew selling a portion of the company to a competitor, really should have let Natalie know with such an important decision.

And his actions and decisions hurting Natalie like that, I hope this fuels her putting him underfoot and subjegating him like the others.

Brian XD He surely had a long day under her foot, loved Natalie once again intimidating him.

I loved Aubreigh putting her feet in the tank and her teasing them, she's slowly coming over to being more controlling and less caring about the Tinies, and I am loving her transformation.

I'm hoping she doesn't keep up her internal battle with herself (in the shower) and fully goes to the Dark Side XD

Andrew and Natalie's sex scene was so hot, and very well written. I have a feeling Natalie was just buttering him up before more domination comes later.

I loved Natalaie's outburst after accidentally stepping on one of them. Her anger and letting her frustration out about having "always watch her step" in her own home is understandable, and they shouldn't have been trying to escape anyway.

I wonder who she killed XD

And I hope, so so so so  so much that Aubreigh doesn't turn against Natalie (we need this mother daughter pair rulling/dominating/killing tinies) 

Please don't let this be some "aubreigh goes back to supporting tinies" moment XD

Please let Natalie sway Aubreigh to her side (I mean the tinies did try and escape)

Natalie can win Aubreigh over (I hope) and I hope the whole living situation finally starts making Aubreigh go darker/more Natalie-esque.

(Thomas breaking down was so fun to read, he fucked up and shouldn't have disobeyed her)

It's only a matter of time till either Natalie or Aubreigh kills one of the twins (either on purpose, finally being pushed too far, or accidentally)

Or maybe Natalie could "arange" one of the kids deaths, so while she can clear her concious of not being the one to do it, she still has them out of the way.

Though I'd say Andrew being killed might be better (Natalie assuming full control of the company, and maybe rejecting the deal/renegging on it, so the tiny city development is stalled/falls through)

XD Now I'm rambling again, but I just loved this full chapter so much.

But am hoping and wishing that Aubreigh and Natalie get through this with a stronger mother/daughter bond (and of course, putting Tinies in their proper place, beneath them)

Can't wait to read the next chapter!! I'm on the edge of my seat. 

I am loving your vore scenarios 

Amazing work as always Carnage 😁👍

Loving this more and more.

Oh, I really liked this one...... i loved how Mrs. Beaumont just stepped on those people. They deserved it! I also enjoyed the touch of Aubreigh not wanting to be like her mom but still doing the same things to the tinies. Great work, can't wait to see what happens to her dad.

Oh this chapter was another golden one! (well they all are XD)

I love Aubreigh's behaviour here, the fact that she's now more comfortable putting the tinies in their place so easily.

Her anger at Ben was understandable, I mean come on, he outright chose her mother over her, of course she's gonna be pissed.

Putting Thomas in her shoe under her toes was so fun to read, as well as his reaction to her feet and the smell, every time she was driving and putting her foot on the accelorator I kept thinking about how he would be down there XD Great work.

Aubreigh getting some sexy masturbation/tiny insertion was also a great read, it's fun seeing her branch out now more as she comes to the realization that she too doesn't have to be constrained by societal pressure to accept Tinies rights. 

She can be in charge, she can be the one making the decisions, and she can have fun with them at her leisure. 

Natalie continues being Best GTS Mom XD I love her report with Aubreigh, and the tiny man in the slurpee was a great touch. 

I can't wait for Natalie and Aubreigh to take control of their household and put Andrew in his place at their feet!

Things are going to change in the Beaumont household, and the Tinies better accept it, or face the wrath of the true matriarch's of the family. 

A wonderful chapter again!

Author's Response:

Thank you!

Nat is truly kind

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