Date: August 19 2021 4:24 PM Title: Chapter 8 Final: A CATastrophic tale
Well, it was a pretty good chapter.
Wish we got to see more of the new world Amber had created, istead of just seeing Alex still trying to reerse it.
A little sad Alex got eaten (not really a fan of vore), but guess in the end, he was a little too smart for his own good, wish Amber had made maybe used the nanobots to make him a little dumber, but gland he at least got a second chance.
Also a little disapointed we got so little Amber or that we only got a 100 ft tall cat girl action at the end, but the interaction with the daughters was more than worth it.
Really, was expecting a more of Alex got no options left, and ended as a toy/slave/lover of the gigantic cat girls, which I guess in a way it happened, just sad that the girls might not ever realize that that little mouseboy is their father.
Despite all this, I still gotta say, I was pretty satisfied with the chapter, despite everythig, loved the twist you gave it, and that open ending was so good, with him now being a newborn mouseboy, and just wish you give us a continuation of this in the future.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the response. I could have made Alex dumber but I thought that Amber was showing him some kindness in keeping him normal in her new world. Also, I think that dumb Alex would still try to stop them. Amber's idea was to reset him to be a part of the new world.
For the girls to see him as their father, it would possibly take time. Alex could explain thing to them when he got older. For the moment, he is too young to communicate it, having to depend on them.
Sorry that the 100ft tall Catgirl came at the end. I couldn't see quite how to get them to that size without bringing the sheer dominance the catgirls had.
For story continuation, if I go down this world. I would focus more on Amber. The relationship the world would have with her. She would start to use the Nanobots and her size even more. She would make larger catgirls and we would have more interactions with them above a 100ft.
Date: August 19 2021 9:42 AM Title: Chapter 8 Final: A CATastrophic tale
Damn, it took a while for this to come out. Yeah, still massively prefer the alternative ending for the wholesomeness.
Author's Response:
Yes. This took a while. I am wanted to finish this story so I can spend more time on other projects. The time also had to do with trying to get where I wanted it to be. I also had to look at inputs. People wanted Alex to live and have a happy ending and I also wanted to have story where Amber remains a Catgirl. Alex wouldn't have it if she was. I tried to create a scenario where they could coincide.
The other storyline is for the happy ending for Alex where he restores his family but there are remaining catgirls. The two endings are the two sides of the coin. Amber wins or Alex wins but there will be catgirls forever. If I continue with happy ending for Alex, we will see more of a world where Lola lives
Date: June 13 2021 12:21 AM Title: Chapter 7: Alternate ending
Honestly, I don't see how you can top this ending. You can build off of this ending far more easily if you ever return and write more chapters than the bad ending route, it's also wholesome.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. I am glad that this ending was good. I am working on the true ending and tweeking some things based on reviewers reviews. I don't know about returning to this story once it is done. I want to complete some stories so I can work on other stories.
Date: June 12 2021 6:27 AM Title: Chapter 7: Alternate ending
Pretty good chapter. Been waiting it for a while, but after reading it, it was worth it.
Looking foward to the real ending, and while I know it is suppossed to be the "bad end", like Petite Soeur said in his comment, hopping for a more wholesome, or at least a gentle ending, and not going for the classic ending where they stoped seeing the mouse as nothing more than pests to be killed. He being loved and played (either as lover, a pet or a toy) by his huge cat mistresses, maybe even acepting his new role as a mouse boy.
Also hopping for more gigantic cat girls, we barely had anything with his huge mom, hope the rest grow as big, or even bigger.
Well, whatever you choose to do, I know it will be great.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. I am listening to these reviews and seeing that people want more of a happy ending to the true ending. I am changing the story's ending to not be so much the "bad end" but more of "Amber wins." I am using this feedback to view this ending as "Alex wins." where Alex creates the catgirl society to be as human as possible while Amber's world has the catgirls be more like cats, they are in charge of everything. The true ending will still have some "bad ending" feels but I am trying to create a more wholesome ending. You will have to wait and see how the relationship between Alex and Amber will become.
For the huge mom, I will try to get her involved but I cannot make any promises. The catgirls will definitely be getting bigger than their previous sizes.
Date: June 12 2021 4:06 AM Title: Chapter 7: Alternate ending
Yay! I'm glad you've returned to this series and are working on the actual ending. Alex 'marrying' the family cat Mabel in this wholesome alternate ending is something I didn't expect. Hopefully the real ending is as 'wholesome' as this one, even if it may be considered a bad ending; I want the colossal catgirls and micro-mouseboys to also live happily ever after.
While I understand the need to maintain suspension of disbelief, hopefully the true ending satisfies the other reviewers and my hopes and dreams for even bigger catgirls in the continuation. Though, I'm not sure how big of a size difference the other reviewers were hoping for or how big you can manage to write within the limitations of your own imagination in regards to the catgirl's biology in relation to the new world society. Since they're based on cats, they'll surely have better eyesight and hearing than a regular human, and their cat-like dexterity and sensitivity would allow them to interact and play with significantly smaller objects and creatures.
There isn't much size-fetish fiction with catgirls over the last two decades, so congratulations on contributing to the handful of existing stories. Kari by Kamaria was one of the first English stories I read when I discovered size-fetish fiction on the internet over a decade and a half ago (it also has the best growth sequence I've read until now). Kamaria decided to go with a catgirl from a different planet who shrinks down to visit Earth before growing back to her true height of 52 miles tall, though the single reviewer back then said 52 miles is TOO DAMN BIG, which might be a sentiment that persists even to this day among western reviewers. In comparison, the OG webhost for the Japanese community, Yunzo, has an original character, Eliza, that is often depicted as being tera sized and gentle, and I don't believe I've ever seen any reviews or comments in the Japanese community complaining about such vast sizes and how it's impossible to interact or whatnot, since the ability to interact is entirely left to the whims of the author and what they want to do with the character in their story.
In any case, thank you for returning to this story. Looking forward to what you have planned for Alex and his titanic titty kitty daughters in the midst of their growth and heat period. When I read this alternate chapter, I kept imagining what things would be like in the alternate reality where the emergency signal failed (i.e. Alex still marrying catgirl Mabel and having cute and affectionate kitten-daughters).
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review and the constant reading. I am glad that I was able to expaned a limited explored area. I hope that it inspires more people to write or look into it. I didn't see much in this area so I decided to test the waters in this subject and it turned out pretty good. I will have to read Kari and see about that story. I do have to say that 52 miles is massive, nearly eight times the height of Mt. Everest, but in some cases that is fine. it is all how you get there and what everyone can do.
As I am working on the true ending of the story, the catgirls will become bigger than before as Amber has more control of what catgirls actually become. I cannot promise colossal size catgirls but they will definitely have a larger presence. The catgirls have better eyesight and hearing than humans, I don't know how it will play in the true ending but I know that cat-like dexterity and sensitivity will play a part in playing with little objects.
In this final chapter, Alex will interact with his kitten daughters again, this time with bigger growths and heat periods. For Mabel, I will try to get a cameo or the sort of her catgirl form in the chapter but I cannot promise if it will be big or not.
I am currently rethinking and writing the true ending as I am getting more reviews of what people want. I know what I am aiming for but I can change some stuff how it is supposed to get to that point.
Date: March 26 2021 6:04 AM Title: Chapter 7: Meowving On.
The last two chapters felt like they underwent a tonal shift with Alex dining in rubbish bins. Thinking back on it, the plot feels like a movie that has been edited in a way where certain scenes and plot points don't make sense until a director's cut with the removed and alternate scenes is later released.
It's hard for me to understand the time lapse and distance Alex travelled when he escaped from his mother. I would have to reread that particular chapter if I want to fully and accurately articulate my feelings. You introduced the nano-treats that cause growth, and had the kittens partake in them, making me believe they would experience a growth spurt similar in intensity to their grandmother, but the results were far tamer than what I expected, and makes Amber feel like she was frozen in time with her daughters despite her friend migrating away and Amber converted her and Alex's father. When Alex was brought into the bedroom with the computer, I thought his daughter was going to grow until she filled up the entire bedroom like Alice in Wonderland, and I thought Alex's blanking out when entering the commands into the computer were the result of Amber's punishment. So most of this 7th chapter felt like a big question mark when Alex believed he succeeded in changing things back to normal, like you wanted to push back the results of Alex blanking out to the chapter after this one with filler that might've worked better if the reader was more emotionally invested in Alex succeeding to symphasise with the sense of despair at having the rug pulled out from under him, but it's still hard for me to even wrap my head around the idea he was on a long, exhausting journey eating garbage.
In any case, I'm hoping the final chapter makes up for what I was hoping was going to happen in this chapter. The idea of the catgirls having multiple breasts opened up a scenario in my head of what it would be like for someone tiny to traverse their bellies and reach the breast valley crossroad. Like one fetish fantasy with multiple breasts is that it's possible for horizontal Paizuri between the top and bottom sets of boobs and Paizuri between all four sets of breasts. With size fetish, there's something called a fullbody Paizuri, and with multiple boobs, I'm curious how different this play experience could be described with additional rows of breasts.
Maybe once this is finished, I'll go back and reread this story to determine if my above issues were due to my short term memory and the long lapse of time between chapters.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. I believe from this sort of review I see that I missed to put some key details and connect things correctly. I will need to go over things and do some editing so that the story is as clear as possible.
Hopefully I can answer some of the questions here and clirfy some things.
From the time Alex escapes his mother to getting home is around two-half weeks to three weeks. his mother was located faraway from people so she could unbirth people and tranform them in secert. I needed some time to show the great distance Alex had to travel while hitchhiking. he had to eat garbage along the way to avoid being seen by people. He was small at three feet and he had mouse ears and mouse tail. That draws weird attention that he did not want. He had to live low.
For the kittens, there growth was going to limited at the beginning. the four kittens shared one muffin while each of the other girls ate an enitre muffin, there is not the same amount of Nanobots inside the kittens. The Nanobots needed time and energy to create more Nanobots for themselves. The mother also overdosed on the energy bars to allow her to grow really big. I am trying to keep the law of conservation of mass and energy as best I can, I will bend that rule but I try to keep it. We will see the kittens become bigger now that Amber is in complete control of Nanobots.
The reason Alex blacked out was because he was so tired of having sex with Lola. He was at the point of complete exhaustion when he attempt the computer. I will have to make it clear during the edits that he is passing out from being tired than a mental attack from Amber for using the computer.
Hopefully I can get the sense of hope pulled from underneath him right in the edits.
For the Paizuiri idea, I like it and hope to put it in the story.
Date: March 24 2021 10:45 PM Title: Chapter 7: Meowving On.
Since you suggested it, I wouldn't mind an alternative ending if it's not too much of a pain. Throw a bone to Alex as his suffering is quite honestly not amusing nor deserved. Reversing the mental changes, some physical ones and having the ending be a bit open ended would be my suggestion.
Also thanks for the chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your review. Yes, I agree that Alex does not deserve this. I originally had the story as only three chapters with it open ended. That story is more of an accident happened and we have to live with it. The additional chapters makes the story into a new world order with Alex trying to stop it. With him failling every step of the way, making it worse the more he tries. Those are kind of the themes of each section. I hope that clarifies some stuff. I appreciate honest answers so I can make better stories.
The alternative ending will see more of the emergency signal working properly and have everything return more to normal. I know that the original ending might not be everyone's taste but I do want to create a scenario that pleases readers as well.
[Report This]Date: March 01 2021 9:06 AM Title: Chapter 6: A Hissterical Place To Be
Enjoying the story so far. Can't wait to see what happens from the emergency protocol.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. We are seeing what the emergency protocol did.
Date: February 27 2021 10:25 AM Title: Chapter 6: A Hissterical Place To Be
Alex should make his moms so huge and sexy ;)
Author's Response:
His mom is going to remain huge and sexy.
Date: February 11 2021 5:05 PM Title: Chapter 5: Some Cats-ing up to do
I like the idea there's going to be a sexual dimorphism between the converted men and women. Having the men shrink into mouseboys would allow for a great size difference without requiring that the catgirls grow too colossally big to function as a society on planet Earth. Curious if it's going to be a multi-size tier society where there's various mouseboys and catgirls winding up at different static heights, or if it's going to be progressive, where all mouseboys progressively grow smaller while the catgirls grow bigger through some means. The latter feels more appealing to me, especially if there's a trigger; mouseboy gets caught by horny catgirl, and winds up smaller after the lovey-dovey kitten making process, thus making Alex's journey to fix things ever more difficult the more he fails and becomes closer to a real mouse in size.
In any case, since you already worked out what's going to happen in the future, I'll be looking forward to what you actually have planned for this story
Author's Response:
thank you for the review. I am aiming for the sort of world were human, catgirls and mouseboys are trying to figure out how to live together with one normal size, another small and exploitable, and the last one is big and horny. I look over the reviews and look over ideas and suggestions that people review and see if I can put it into the story, I am tweaking the story a little bit already because of some reviews and like the ideas. I am looking over your ideas and seeing if I can add it to the story. I have the ending planned out but that doesn't mean I can't change it, tweak it, or create alternate endings. I do say though that as Alex tries to fix things, he will be more of a mouse in comparision.
Date: January 27 2021 4:54 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Cat is Out
Nice. I hope Alex is becoming a catgirl as well. (I like male to female stories). Womder what's next. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. I hope you like the transformation that Alex went through. I could say that it is possible for another person to turn from male to female in Ava, like one of the two catgirls that she had already given birth too, but I don't think that would be right for where I want Alex to go to.
[Report This]Date: January 26 2021 11:06 PM Title: Chapter 4: The Cat is Out
Absolutely amazing addition. Love the whole thing. can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. I hope you enjoy the next chapter
[Report This]Date: January 04 2021 3:50 PM Title: Chapter 3: A Cat's Tail
Great Story. I loved how they began to enjoy the transformation as it went on to the point that Amber would not change them back. I wonder what will happen since the nanobots are offfline if you continue the story. Will the little catgirls get bigger or the parents? There are a lot of possibilities. I hope there is more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your response. I plan to continue the story but do not have schedule for when. There are more things that will happen with the catkittens and the parents. I can promise that there will be bigger catgirls.
[Report This]Date: January 04 2021 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 3: A Cat's Tail
Alright, this was awesome. Definitely a unique story (in the best way), and I found myself enjoying Amber and Maria's changes far more than I thought I would.
A few things I'm curious about if you were to continue, which you definitely should!
Now that the nanobots are disconnected from Alex's control, they've reverted to an autonomous mode, right? Will they make changes themselves? Maybe even fall under the subconcious or conscious control of the girls?
And what about Maria's children? Have they inherited their own nanobots? Or will they just naturally grow into catgirls of that caliber on their own?
I'd love to see what happens as the catgirls unleash themselves upon the world, and maybe, hopefully, get even bigger!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your response. I plan to continue but it might be a little while before another chapter. for some of your questions, I will try to answer some the best I can and leave some blank for imagination. the nanobots run on an autonomous mode when they are disconnected. I like you questions about their autonomous mode and what they do in that state but I am going to leave it blank on that subject for what I have planned. For Maria's children, they did not inherit their own nanobots but we will see them grow. The catgirls will definitly get bigger.
[Report This]Date: January 04 2021 1:30 PM Title: Chapter 3: A Cat's Tail
The third chapter was interesting and opened many possibilities for a continuation that I can only guess what you have in mind. Especially regarding the kittens; their presence makes me wonder if there's going to be a montage or time skip for when they're somewhat older and how Alex deals with the widening size difference between him and his cat-hybrid pseudo-family. You had a nice blend of maintaining the erotic nature of the story while explaining things typical of a fantasy or science fiction story where we're learning about the habits and biology of fantastical creatures.
Hopefully the 'Furry' tag on the story doesn't deter any potential readers that would've been interested in reading and reviewing this. Rarely does a writer tread these sorts of waters, and sometimes for a unique story, it takes a while before its potential target audience finally discovers it.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your response. I do hope the 'furry' tag does not discourage readers. I think this is some of my greatest writings yet. I can not go into much detail about the story's future but there will be a larger size gap between Alex and has cat-hybrid pseudo-family.
[Report This]Date: January 04 2021 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 3: A Cat's Tail
Amazong chapter. Loved the fact that the sister found the phone and forced the impregnation of subjects as well as speeding up of her friends pregnancy. Would have liked if she sped hers up as well before breaking the phone. Also love the way the phone signal and nanobots are tied together making changes permanent with the phones destruction. Curious if the offspring will have the nanites in them and if so would the female offspring have the same pre-programmed feelings towards the brother? Hope you add more, but if not, it was a great story as it sits. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your response. I enjoy going through reviews and reading what people said. I plan to continue the story because of readers reviews. I am busy with stuff and other things so updates might be slow.
[Report This]Date: January 02 2021 12:18 AM Title: Chapter 2: A cat's body
Really enjoyable read so far. I like transformation stories. Also like how he is using his invention for healing and helping his cat and at same time unaware of changes in other unknown subjects. Can't wait to read how the affection for him part pf story plays out with his sister and her friend.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. I do like how that alex is unware of what he is doing and will face the consequences for it. I hope you enjoy the affection for him setting to the girls plays out.
Date: December 29 2020 7:55 PM Title: Chapter 2: A cat's body
This story caught my eye, since I enjoy anime-style catgirls, breast expansion, and giantess growth. There's hardly any GTS-themed stories with catgirls, and I'm pleasantly surprised you included multiple breast transformation as well. Cats generally have eight nipples, so the idea of 8 similarly head-sized boobs jostling and jiggling on bi~ig and playful catgirls frolicking around makes for an erotic mental image. Only thing that could make it better is if they lactated titty kitty milk as well.
I'm going to be a little sad when this one ends with Amber and Maria at amazon-size in the third chapter, since I'm a fan of continued growth up to the giga-size range. It's a waste to have catgirls without at least a cat and mouse size difference. Cats are also notorious for being extra affectionate when their brains are flooded with oxytocin when they're expressing milk, and tend to mother the nearest tiny and cute creature (mothering even puppies, birdies, mousies, and tinies).
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review. I do enjoy some anime style catgirls and have that as the basis of their transformation. I went with four boobs on each girl to keep it closer to that anima cat girl vibe but still trying to get close to a real cat as much as possible. I liked the idea of them lactating and becoming affectionate in that way so I added it to the story.
I do have idea, if I continue the story, that the catgirls will become bigger.
[Report This]Date: December 28 2020 3:42 PM Title: Chapter 2: A cat's body
Good story. will be interesting to see how this ends
Author's Response:
Thank your very much for the comment. The story is now complete unless readers ask for more.