Reviewer: shadowguy015 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 11 2025 2:31 PM Title: Daughter of three

This story managed to deliver one final twist, I was convinced I had the situation with the children figured out, but I was mistaken. Of course, there is nothing wrong with the way it was done.

A notable achievement of this story is the fact, from the moment the first chapter was posted until the conclusion, it never lost the "New" tag. For a story spanning 26 chapters, that is truly impressive.

In a previous review I wrote, I shared an idea involving alternative timelines. I mean no disrespect, as I fully recognize that this is your story. but I have never reviewed a story as extensively as I have reviewed this one. so I am sharing four alternative timelines for this story that I have thought about. 

The first is simply What if julia never attempted To rape Ashley. So when the Registration Act happened They were still friends, or maybe even lovers. How would they tackle the changes that the ACT would bring while already having a healthy relationship.

The second is what if Barbera Was the one to find Ashley in the Club and become her owner? This, I think would be really fun idea to explore. 

The third idea is: What if Ashleys coma had lasted for 10 years? To me, this would be another fun idea to explore. 

The 4th is What if Ashlynn was only in a coma for 10 days? And this one I have an additional idea to combine it with, that being that Instead of Julia killing the Girl that put Ashley in a coma. Say some deal was stuck to Not go to trial. And the end result would basically be that Julia abuses the girl into becoming Ashley's Slave. 

but To finish this review. I want to say many, many thank you for sharing this amazing story With us readers. you're a really talented writer And I am really looking forward to reading more of your work.

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review, as always !

I'm not sure how I feel about the alternative timelines, I think I'd like to write more a story about Isley in the future !

Meanwhile, you can find some new stories or microfictions of mine on SizeFiction : https://sizefiction.net/author/profile/28

I'll probably start porting them here sooner or later but if you don't want to wait...

Reviewer: MothMist Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08 2025 7:29 PM Title: Daughter of three

Damn, I wasn’t expecting an ending. Sad to see it’s over, but this was one hell of a story. I’ve been reading this since January and while I had doubts about whether I’d wanna continue at points, you proved your merit as a writer every single time. Cheers

Author's Response:

Oh, thanks for the review !

I felt a few chapters ago that I finally had the ending nailed. I know I could have added more stuff, but it'd have felt superfluous to me. So rather than overstay its welcome, I decided to end the story on what I felt was its natural point.

Also, congeatulation, you have read a novel-sized story as it came out, and you and others have helped it get better than it deserved to be !