Date: March 15 2025 4:48 PM Title: Welcoming Isley
You continue to produce excellent chapters of this story. Ashley's childbirth scene was beautifully written. I appreciate the world-building you have put into this story. The defanging procedures sound absolutely horrifying, but that made me think that perhaps one or two adjustments could be made that would be worth checking out for Ashley. It makes sense to me that at least some of them could be beneficial without being too intrusive. It would be a good way to show this world's level of science, as we have really only seen that in the most recent chapter with the nanobot scene.
It does feel like Ashley should have more confidence now after giving birth.
I also hope we will see more of Julia and Ashley's parents. I was surprised when they were not there for the wedding, and that the wedding only involved signing a bunch of papers.
I also hope that Ashley's eggs remain a plot point and I am wondering if Ashley is going to mention what Nelson was doing to her or rather, what she was not doing.
Another review mentioned a harem, and I would love to read the story go that route, especially if the other members of the harem would be different sizes compared to Barbara and Julia, and that Ashley would be the second in command, so to speak.
Two things I would like to mention. The first is that I would love to have a scene where Ashley is breastfeeding Barbara. And the 2nd is that this story deserves the FF/f tag.
This really is an amazing story, and I hope there are many more chapters to come :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review !
As I said to another comment, I don't think I want to go the harem road - at least not yet. Also, don't know about the parents, they really are minor characters and not sure we'll see them again, I want to focus on Ashley and her situation, really.
I'll continue the egg plot, yeah, at least for a time. We shall see where it goes.
Thanks again and stay tuned ^^
[Report This]Date: March 14 2025 10:01 PM Title: Welcoming Isley
I really liked the cockvore scene! Ashley being the one to push for it was a fun power inversion, and it was really hot to read how aroused it made Julia. I also love love love muscular, smelly Julia! More abs! More biceps! More thighs!
Julia needing to spend time away from the family from work is an interesting twist to the dynamic, and a good way to get Ashley and Barbara closer together. I wonder how Julia is dealing with her urges while she is away?
Speaking of Julia's urges, we haven't seen her truly violent side in a while. It's something she may have been working on with Barbara while Ashley was in the coma, but I think it's still an important part of her character. I want Ashley to witness Julia inflicting severe, bone-breaking pain on Barbara. Will this frighten Ashley, or arouse her, or both?
I think another comment brought up the idea of Julia expanding her harem of partners. I am not opposed to this, if you introduce new characters slowly enough for us to get to know them. It would be interesting to see Ashley take a role in this. Maybe Julia could have Ashley and Barbara interview candidates to bring into their relationship in some capacity. Just don't give us too many new names at once.
The birthing chapter had a lot of good tension! Barbara's frantic rush and powerful footsteps (I love how strong she is!) were great at setting the scene. The world-building with the collar salesfuta was a nice touch, and it was great to see Barbara get so angry about it. And of course Dr. Nelson was a good twist, especially the way she starts to acknowledge Ashley's strength by the end.
I wonder how Isley having a tiny mother will affect her growing up. It seems to impact her legal status a bit, in that she has less right to own Ashley than Samantha does. Will she face discrimination or bullying growing up? Will this make her resentful of Ashley or push them closer together?
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review !
I don't think we'll see Isley beyond her current age (or close to) in this story... but who knows, I have sort of an idea for a sequel. We're not there yet however.
Regarding Julia's libido and needs, they'll be explored next chapter but I don't think I'll go the harem route. May change my mind however, when in front of the screen actually writting XD
I wanted to show a six meters tall futa entirely unleashed with Barbara, who went full mother hend mode and simply couldn't contain her own strength to normal levels... and Julia's been working out, so the effect would be even crazier !
We shall see a little more of Doctor Nelson next chapter, I think.
Stay tuned for more, in any case ^^
Date: March 13 2025 2:17 PM Title: Welcoming Isley
Yeah, this world keeps on getting worse. Now we are at forced body modification (after it was already established that they can't even hurt them). Especially, considering doing that to the babies, it's really gotten dark here.
Shows also the hypocrisy of discrimination: "I'm a better person, more civilized, and as any civilized person, I'll torture you and your babies to death."
I really hope it's going to get better. That finally some positive changes will be implemented.
Not sure how much more my fragile heart can endure.
This world really needs a purge. Either something that deactivates the virus or kills everyone with it off.
Or something worse (I know measures for worlds beyond saving).
Author's Response:
You can blame sanguine tangerine and the other crazies of the discord server for that. They put those dieas in my mind and, well, here we are.
But I do plan things to get better, first at a personnal level, and then going up. Basically, this chapter was it in a microcosm, with the interaction between Ashley and Doctor Nelson.
Thanks for the review, as always by the way :) !